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22、,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,红日：吴强所著红色经典小说，描写在解放战争时期，中国人民解放军华东野战军在山东歼灭国民党部队整编74师的故事。故事以军长沈振新、政委丁元善所率领的一支部队为主线，环绕着山东战场上著名的莱芜、孟良崮两大战役，描绘了波澜壮阔的战斗场面和可歌可泣的英勇事迹。,铁道游击队由刘知侠所著，是一部描写在抗日时期，鲁南地区确有这样一支游击队，开始在临（城）枣（庄）支线，以后发展到津浦干线上活动。在广大的革命根据地中，由共产党人领导的一支特殊的游击小分队，以打击日伪军的交通线为目的而与日伪势力进行游击斗争的英雄故事

23、。,青春之歌是当代文学史上第一部描写学生运动、塑造革命知识分子形象和成长命运的优秀长篇小说。作者杨沫，出生于北京一个没落的官僚地主家庭，曾在河北省定县等地教书，后又在北京做过家庭教师和书店店员，在此期间接触了马列主义思想，并加入了共产党。这种个人的生活经历对她的小说创作有很大的影响。,口语交际习作三,口语交际,词典上说，是对未来事物的想象或希望（多指有根据的、合理的，跟空想、幻想不同）。,理想是什么,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元

24、成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元

25、成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,俄国作家列夫托尔斯泰说：“理想是指路明灯。没有理想，就没有坚定的方向；而没有方向，就没有生活。”正值花样年华的我们，该怎样用理想做挂天征帆，驾长风破巨浪；以一柄木桨，引领生命之舟驶入金色港湾？今天

26、我们一起来讨论一下有关理想的话题。,化学家诺贝尔为减轻工地上挖土工人的繁重劳动，决心发明炸药。废寝忘食，四年里做了几百次试验。最后一次试验时，他聚精会神地盯着燃烧的导火线。一声巨响，在旁的人们惊叫：“诺贝尔完了！”诺贝尔却从浓烟中跳出来，面孔乌黑身上还带着血，兴奋地狂呼：“成功了！”那些杰出的人物正是被一种崇高的目标所鼓舞，才产生了惊人的毅力与忘我的精神,是理想的浪涛激励着他们去刻苦奋斗。,交际内容 理想是人生导航的灯塔，我们每个人都应该有自己的理想，这次口语交际的话题就是“我的理想”。请大家谈谈自己的理想是什么，为什么有这样的理想，准备怎样为实现理想而努力。,我的理想,状元成才路,状元成才路

27、,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路

28、,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,交际指导 1.确定理想

29、。仔细思考：自己的理想是什么？为什么有这个理想？这个理想对于自己来说有什么重要的意义？实现自己的理想需要从哪些方面做起？ 2.列出提纲。把自己的想法列成提纲，尽量分条细致，每一步都要考虑周到。,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路

30、,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路

31、,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,3.小组交流。首先在小组内召开“放飞理想”交流会，每个小组成员都要畅谈自己的理想。同学们要学会倾听，尊重他人的理想和愿望。在小组交流的基础上，选出代表，在班级内交流。 4.评议。同学之间要敞开心扉，既要畅谈自己的理想，又要对他人的理想进行评价。评价时要多肯定，让每个人都得到成功的体验。还要注意立足现实，讨论怎样为实现理想而努力。,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状

32、元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状

33、元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,小冰：我的理想是长大后成为一名宇航员，遨游太空，探索宇宙的奥秘。因为我在电

34、视转播中目睹了“神舟十号”飞船与“天宫一号”成功交会的情景，那一刻是全中国人的自豪与骄傲。从那时起，当一名宇航员的梦想就深深地刻在了我的心里。,小红：从小我就想当一名女交警，穿上漂亮的警服，站在马路中央指挥交通，多么英姿飒爽。这个工作可能会很累，但是可以让城市的交通更顺畅！,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,

35、状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,

36、状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,小刚：当一名画家是我的理想。现在我利用课余时间上美术班，有了专业老师的指导，我的绘画水平有了很大提高。我相信，只要努力，我定能实现我的理想。,在未来，我想成为一位赫赫有名的环保卫士，为城市的环保工作尽一份力量。 长大了我想做一名律师，为那些蒙冤的人、不平的事伸张正义，洗脱罪名。 我要成为一名大画家，把祖国的山山水水都描绘在

37、我的画中。 我以后想开一间环境优雅的咖啡书屋，让人们在休闲阅读的同时能品尝到美味的咖啡。 我的理想是成为一名外交官，让世界更加了解中国，为世界的和平发展做出自己的贡献。 ,习作内容 本次习作是口语交际的自然延伸，题目就是我的理想。要写清楚自己的理想是什么，为什么有这样的理想，以及准备怎样去实现自己的理想。注意运用从其他学科学到的知识来组成写作素材，以丰富习作的内容。,习 作,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成

38、才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成

39、才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,第一步：审题 要写清楚自己的理想是什么，为什么有这样的理想，以及准备怎样去实现自己的理想。 第二步：立意 表达出自己对实现理想的无限渴望之情。 第三步：选材 确定了自己的理想是什么之后，选择的材料可以是这个理想产生的过程，

40、这个理想具体的样子，这个理想该如何实现等。,写法指导：,第四步：思路,1、用设问、排比的句式或引用名言开门见山点出理想是什么。,理想，多么美好的字眼！每个人都有自己的理想，有人想当科学家，有人想当发明家，有人想当歌星，还有人想当演员。你知道我的理想是什么吗？来，把耳朵凑过来，让我悄悄告诉你吧，我的理想是当一名服装设计师！,2、习作的主体部分，抓住为什么有这个理想，准备怎样去实现这个理想来叙述。,想要实现理想，你会遇到哪些困难？准备怎样克服呢？,3、习作的结尾，可以用排比句式或用号召式呼应开头。,为了实现我的理想，我会努力学习知识，不断充实、丰富自己，让自己成为一个知识渊博的人。我相信：在我的努

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