2025浙江首考高分应用文和续写

浙江首考高分应用文和续写你将参加英语课上的“一分钟演讲”活动。请你针对部分同学在校园内用手机拍摄短视频的现象写一篇演讲稿，内容包括：(1)陈述看法;(2)提出建议。注意：(1)

写作词数应为80左右；(2)

请按如下格式在答题纸的相应位置作答。

MyViewsonFilmingShortVideosonCampus学生高分作文（回忆版）：MyViewsonFilmingShortVideosonCampusToday,Iamthrilledtosharewithyoumyopinionaboutanincreasinglyprevalentsightofstudentsusingmobilephonestosnapshortvideosoncampus.Itisevidentthattheyareinclinedtorecordfleetingyetpreciousmoments,suchasthevibrantdiscussionsinclass,thehauntinglybeautifulcampussceneryandthehustleandbustleofdailystudylife.Nevertheless,ifstudentsshootshortvideoswithoutrestraint,thiswillapparentlybringannoyancetoothers,interferewithlearningefficiencyandevenaffectacademicperformance.Hence,Idosuggeststudentsfilmthemafterclassesorduringbreaks,whichwon'tsacrificetheirstudytime.

Furthermore,itisofparticularimportancetoensurethattheydon'tinvadeothers'privacy.Inaword,let'susetechnologyproperly!Thanksforlistening!作文分析：1.结构清晰，逻辑连贯

-引入自然：开篇用“Today,Iamthrilledtoshare...”直接点明主题，简洁有力，符合演讲稿的互动性要求。

-观点对比：通过“Itisevidentthat...Nevertheless...”先肯定现象积极面（记录珍贵瞬间），再转折指出问题（干扰学习、侵犯隐私），体现辩证思维。

-建议具体：用“Hence...Furthermore...”分层提出解决方案（课后拍摄、保护隐私），逻辑递进，紧扣题干要求。

2.语言丰富，表达精准

-高级词汇：

-现象描述：prevalent,fleeting,vibrantdiscussions,hauntinglybeautiful（生动展现校园生活多样性）

-问题分析：restraint,annoyance,interferewithacademicperformance（准确点明负面影响）

-句式多样：

-复合句：“ifstudentsshoot...thiswillapparentlybring...”（条件状语从句增强说服力）

-非谓语结构：“filmingthemafterclasses...whichwon’tsacrificestudytime”（which引导非限制性定语从句补充说明）

-修辞技巧：

-三列排比：“vibrantdiscussions...scenery...hustleandbustle”（增强画面感）

-强调呼吁：“let’susetechnologyproperly!”（祈使句强化号召力）

3.格式规范，交际得体

-文体意识强：开头用“Dearfellowstudents”拉近距离，结尾“Thanksforlistening!”符合演讲场景礼仪。

-字数控制：全文约120词（含格式），略超题干要求但内容精炼无冗余，符合高分作文“适当拓展”原则。

-对象贴合：针对学生群体，用“学习效率（learningefficiency）”“课后时间（afterclasses）”等贴合校园语境。

4.内容深度与批判性思维

-辩证视角：不否定拍摄行为本身，而是批判“无节制（withoutrestraint）”，体现理性思考。

-问题具体化：将抽象影响具象为“干扰他人（bringannoyance）”“侵犯隐私（invadeprivacy）”，增强说服力。

-解决方案可行：建议“课后拍摄”“保护隐私”易于操作，符合学生实际，而非空泛口号。

读后续写：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Kevinwasprettybored.Hismotherwasatwork,andhisfatherhadbeenawayonbusiness.Therefore,hewasleftinthecareofMrs.Hill,anoldladywholivednextdoor.Hisparentshadraisedthe12-year-oldtobeagoodboy.Henevergotintotrouble,thoughsometimeshewantedtodoriskythings.Mrs.Hillwasasleep.Kevinsighed(叹息)andhopedsomethingexcitingwouldhappen.Suddenly,amovementoutsidecaughthiseye.Mrs.Hill’sfrontwindowfacedMr.andMrs.Green’shouseacrossthestreet.Thecouplehadbothgonetowork,soitwasstrangethatsomeonewasoverthere.Kevinstaredatthemanattheirfrontdoor.Suddenly,themanjumpedthroughanopenwindowintothehouse.Withhisheartinhismouth,KevingrabbedMrs.Hill’shomephoneandcalledthepolice.

Thinkingthatthemanmightgetawaywithwhateverhewantedbeforethepolicearrived,Kevindecidedtodosomething.HerushedoutofMrs.Hill’shouseandcrossedthestreetquickly.Grabbingabranchfromacut-downtree,hejumpedinthroughthewindow.

“Stoprightthere!Youmustleaverightnow!”

hecalledout,holdingthebranchwithbothhands.Themanfrozeforasecond,butwhenhesawtheskinnyboyhebreathedasighofrelief.

“Hey,kid,putthatdown.Itwasmyhome.Myparentsusedtolivehereandmyfather’swatchwashere,”

heexplained,tryingtoliftafloorboard.

Atthatmoment,thesoundsofapolicecarechoed(回响)intheair.Themanstoodupinapanic,thenranthroughthehousetowardthewindowandjumpedout.Kevinfollowedoutandtoldthearrivingpoliceofficerswhathadhappened.Theypursuedandarrestedtheman.KevinwentbacktoMrs.Hill’shouse.Somehowhewasn’tsurehehaddonetherightthing.

“Whatifhehastoldthetruth?”

hethoughttohimself.Theman’swordssoundedprettyconvincing.注意：（1）

续写词数应为150左右；（2）

请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

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WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,Kevinwenttotalktothem.Paragraph2:

KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.（第五档作文：23分）WhenMr.andMrs.Greengothome,Kevinwenttotalktothem.

He

elaboratedonhowhenoticedthestranger,howheassistedthepoliceinarrestinghimandhowheworriednowthatitwasamistake.Mr.Green’scountenancewascloudedwithconfusion.“Butwherecouldthewatchbe?"Hemurmured.Kevinrackedhisbrain,andeventually,theman'slastmovementemergedinhismind.“Beneaththefloorboard!”Heexclaimed.Sotheretheywere,rummagingthroughthefloor,flippingopenalltheboardsontheirway.Mrs.Green'samazedcryconcludedtheirsearch.“It’sreallyhere!”Asshefishedthewatchout,KevinexchangedaknowingwinkwiththeGreens—nowheknewtherightthingtodo.

KevinandMr.Greentookthewatchtheyhadfoundtothepolicestation.

Thepoormanwasstilltherebehindthebars,hiseyesred-rimmed,hislipsdown-curved.Wearinganapologeticbeam,Kevinapproachedtheman,stuffedthewatchintohispalmsandclarifiedthetruthtotheofficerbeside.Itdidn'ttakelongbeforethepolicesearchedtheman'snameinthereal-estatesystemandreportedtheresult—trueashehadclaimed,hisparentsWEREtheformerresidentsofthathouse.Onhisrelease,themanpattedKevin,whowasalittleembarrassed.“You'reagoodboyandyou'vedoneright.It'smyfaulttoactlikeathief!”Hejoked.Andamidstlaughter,arelievedsmileeventuallyblossomedonKevin'sface.作文分析：1.情节逻辑严密，呼应前文-合理延续冲突：精准承接原文中凯文的内心矛盾（“Whatifhehastoldthetruth?”），通过“找到手表”与“警察局澄清”两段完整解决悬念，形成“发现误会→纠正错误→人物成长”的闭环结构。

-细节伏笔回收：利用前文“地板下找手表”的关键动作（“tryingtoliftafloorboard”），在续写中设计“翻找地板”的情节，实现线索呼应，增强故事可信度。

-主题升华自然：通过“误会与真相”的对比，传递“正义需理性判断”的价值观，避免说教感，符合高考“立德树人”命题导向。

2.语言表达丰富，表现力强

-高级词汇精准：

-动作描写：rummagingthrough,flippedopen,fishedout（生动展现搜寻过程）

-情感刻画：countenancecloudedwithconfusion,apologeticbeam,red-rimmedeyes（多维度呈现人物心理）

-句式灵活多变：

-复合句：“Kevinapproachedtheman,stuffedthewatchintohispalmsandclarifiedthetruthtotheofficerbeside...”（非谓语连动句增强画面感）

-修辞手法巧妙：

-隐喻：“arelievedsmileblossomed”（以“花朵绽放”隐喻情绪释放）

-对比：“behindthebars”与“onhisrelease”（场景对比强化戏剧张力）

3.人物塑造立体，情感真实

-凯文的成长弧光：

-初始状态：冲动行动后的自我怀疑（“wasn’tsurehehaddonetherightthing”）

-行动转变：主动求证真相（“rackedhisbrain”回忆细节）

-最终升华：从“尴尬”（emb