2025届高考英语二轮复习书面表达跟着名师学写作含逐句点评解析学案

PAGEPAGE1跟着名师学写作（含逐句点评解析）虽然我有太多的话题想说，但是每周能抽时间写成的只有两三篇。本期的话题是基于始终以来有人问我如何学习，却迟迟不愿付出行动。我想说的是，方法其实不重要，重要的是行动。学问的积累无非就是多读，多练，无它。所谓大道至简。昨天的时间略微足够一点，所以，这篇我加上了批注。自己给自己写的文章加评注和分析，也不是多见的吧，好像有点高调了。不管怎么说，但愿对您有点用。ActionandMeaningHowdoImakemystudyplan?Whatisthepointofmydecisioniftheresultseemscarvedinstone?...评析：开头用疑问句用来设置悬念，也是点名主旨。这也是争论文的一种行文常规手段。What’sthepointofdoing…，用来询问做某事的意义何在。Becarvedinstone，英文说明：Ifasuggestion,plan,rule,etc.iscarvedinstone,itcannotbechanged。一般否定句更常用，用来表明并非一成不变。Iwasaskedthesequestionsrecentlybyoneofmystudents.Hecouldrecitemanyso-calledgoldenrulesinEnglishlearningbutfearedhiseffortwouldbeinvainifhemadeaninsensibledecisionortheactionwouldgethimnowherebecausenopay-offwasinsighttemporarily.Hetoldmethathefeltoverwhelmedanddemotivated,unabletomakeevensmalldecisions.评析：详细说明上段疑问句产生的背景。这位同学患得患失，既想做出安排，又担忧安排没有意义，从而始终不敢去行动，或者浅尝辄止。Goldenrule,英文说明：averyimportantprinciple,wayofbehavingetcthatshouldberemembered。当然，这里也可以用recipe，secret等词。invain徒劳的；getsbnowhere让某人一无所获；pay-off回报，比benefit更简单理解；overwhelmed必知所措的；demotivated消极的，失去动力的。这两个词连用，用来突出茫然的状态，当然也可以选用ataloss，我原来运用havenottheslightestideaof…，但是为了简洁，就弃用了。Forafewsecondsitstumpedme,mainlybecauseI’veneverviewedEnglishlearningasacollectionforahamoments.It’sacontinuum,alifelongawakeningtothediversityofforeigncultures.Butitisnotthecasewiththepoorboy.Hispatiencewasalmostexhuasted.Themoretimespentinvalidatinghisideasorplans,themoredoubtsarousedaboutthemeaning.评析：此段承接上段，从我对英语学习的感受谈到这个学生的逆境的详细状况，为下段深化剖析缘由做伏笔。stump:tobeunabletoansweraquestionorsolveaproblembecauseitistoodifficult。我原来用corner，但stump这个词是特地针对无法回答别人的问题，更精确。Ahamoments顿悟时刻；alifelongawakeningto...对……的终身的领悟（这个词块是我借用的，表示对学问的如饥似渴地接收）；itisnotthecasewith...某人状况并非如此；validate证明……的有效。Therootoftheproblemsliesintheindecisioncausedbytoomanychoices.Themorechoiceswe’regiven,thelessablewearetomakeadecision.Ourindecisioninturnpushesustojustifythenextmove--tofigureoutwherethemeaningisdirected.Weworryaboutdoingthewrongthingandobsessoverinconsequentialdetails.Andsadly,weendupsquanderingthemostimportantmomentsofourlives.JustasYangJiang,awell-knownwriter,putinherresponsetoayoungbewilderedreader,allhisproblemscanbesummrizedasthinkingtoomuchandreadingtoolittle.Similarly,theboy’sproblemislackofstrongandswiftaction,whichisthesteppingstonetoamoreaware,thoughtfulexistence.Actually,thereisnoknownformulatosuccess.Themostefficientwayisalwaysthesimplestone.评析：本段剖析了迟疑不决的两个主要缘由：选择太多导致无所适从；患得患失导致在次要细微环节上奢侈时间。最终得出结论：大道至简。获得的学问的途径并不重要，关键是快速行动起来。therootof...问题的根源；indecision迟疑不决；justify证明……是合理的，这个词是争论文中常用词，可以替换thereasonfor;squander奢侈；bewildered困惑的；strongandswiftaction坚决和快速的行动，原来我用的是actionwithstrongbeliefandfastspeed，这样修改后，就简洁有力了,并且strong和swift形成头韵的修辞效果；steppingstone垫脚石，这里是比方；formula途径，事实上这个词和recipe等是同义的。Lifeisajourney,notabusinessplan.Wherewe’regoingdoesn’tmatterasmuchaswethinkitdoes.Moreoftenthannot,wejustneedtomoveinadirectionwithoutanyregretinsteadofhesitatingaboutgainsorloss.Aswebuildmomentum,wecanlearntosteer.Thisisthewaylifeworks.Justaswithridingabike,wecansteermoreeasilythefasterwe'regoing.Andconversely,ifwe'renotmovingandwetrytosteer,we'llprobablyfalldown.Isn'titinterestingthatfailureiswhathappensnotwhenwemovetooquickly,buttooslowly?Mostofusaretryingcarefullytoplanthefuture.However,theoppositeistrue.Theimpedimenttobeginningourlifeisthebeliefthatwecancontrolourfuture.Whatwecandoisparticipateinit.评析：此段是上一段段意的延长，说明行动的重要性：行动而非安排导致胜利，因为将来不行预料，且行且珍惜，并且通过比方来诠释。（本段的比方也是借用名家手笔下的文字，读者可以积累）Aswebuildmomentum,wecanlearntosteer.一旦势头有了，你就能学着操控全局。momentum动力，势头；steer指导，操纵，下面的steer意为“驾驶，操纵方向”；conversely相反地；theoppositeistrue事实恰好相反，和theotherwayaround同义；impediment障碍。Meaningcanonlybefoundonthewaytothedestinationratherthaninmakingtheplan.Onthejourney,wecannotonlyfindmoreworthyofpursuit,butalsoexperienceasenseoffulfillmentinsolvingnewproblems.Takewritingforexample.Manyofusfocusonreadingandcollectingwritingmaterials,butseldomfeelitistheripetimeforpractice.Infact,onlyintheprocessofwritingcanwelearntoorganizeourideasandputwhatwehavepreparedtogooduse.Meanwhile,wecanseeknewinsightintothetopicandinstillinspirationinit.评析：此段从另一个角度说明行动行动大于意义，意义在行动中产生。theripetimefor...的合适时机；seekinsight寻求新的见解；instillinspiration注入灵感。However,wehavetobearinmindthatactionalonecannotwork.Actionshouldbemarriedwithperseverance.Itwilltaketimetoreapthebenefitofyourlong-timeaction.Effortsmadeandopportunitiesmaximized,youwillseethepointineachmomentofyourlife.Let'slearntolaborandtowaitwithaheartforanyfate.评析：此段为总结，也是对第一段的问题作出进一步回答。行动应当和恒心结合起来。最终一句我引用了朗费罗的诗句，稍加改编。我时常告知自己：但行好事，莫问前程；不忘初心，方得始终。marry...with...相当于combine...with...；reapthebenefitof收获；effortsmadeandopportunitiesmxaimized是独立主格结构，表示条件。maximize最大程度利用。最终一句改编自美国诗人Longfellow的诗句：Stillachieving,stillpursuing/Learntolaborandtowait.不断进取，不断追求/擅长劳动，擅长等待。DisciplinewithouttrustItisnotuncommonthathighschoolstudentsareconfinedtotheirschoolslikecagedbirds.Ironically,thesamehasbeentrueoftheirteachers.Someheadmasters,orrather,theBigBrother,liketokeepalltheteachersinthepalmoftheirhandsandsupervisetheiractionanytimeandanywhere.Itcanboildowntodiscipline,awordoneveryone'slips.Unfortunately,disciplinehasbeenabusedtosuchadegreethatmanyhypocritesdisguisethemselveswithit.Theyneverkeepanotherword—trust—inmind.Nodisciplineintheabsenceoftrustcanwork.Aschooldiffersfromafactoryinthattheteacherisnottheworkerstandingontheassemblylinemechanically.Itisnotindoubtthatthereisnoknownwaytogeneratecreativegeniuses,ortogetstudentstoproducenovel,ground-breakingideasiftheyarechainedtothedesksthewholeday.Itisthesamewithteachers.Toteachproductively,ateacherneedstointernalizeanduseintellectualstandardstoassesshisteaching.Theycomefromthefreedomtothink,planandact.Mostimportantly,hemustlovehisteaching,hisstudents,hisschoolfromthebottomofhisheart.Anydoubtontheteacher’sdiligenceandintelligencewilldomoreharmthangoodandthusfrustratethegreateffortsmadeinthedaysandnights.Forexample,thefactthatstudents’academicperformanceinseniorhighschoolisdeclininghasbeengnawingatthewholesocietyofnorthJiangsuprovince,especiallythelocalgovernments.Theresultisthatteachingreforms,reasonableonlytheoreticallythoughkindofwell-intentioned,arestrictlyenforcedintheend.Whoknowswhatisinstoreforthereformwhichisindifferenttothegrowingcomplaintsfromtheteachers?Anotherreasoniscultural,resultinglargelyfromthemassmedia’sportrayalofteachers.Themediafrequentlyrepresentsthehighschoolteacherasacousintosomesaint,spontaneous,asourceofoff-beatideas,butoftenoutoftouchwitheverydayreality.LiZhenxi,acelebratedChineseteacher,yesterdaypointedoutthatweteachersarenot,asadmittedgenerally,theengineerofhumanbeings’soul.Whenweunderstandtrustanddisciplinetrulyanddeeply,werecognizethemasinseparable,integrated,andunitary.Weneednotappealtotheesoteric,therecondite,orthearcane.Trustanddisciplinefunctionbestintandem,liketherightandleftlegsinwalkingorrunning.Relianceoneitheroneseparatelyonlyensuresthatbothramainfutile,or,justasunfortunate,arereducedtostereotypeandcaricature序言学了这么年，你可能并不知道什么是真正的思索？我们每天在劳碌，我们每天在思索……我们好像很充溢，我们好像又很无聊。这一切都是怎么了？写篇英语文章着实不易，正应了那句话：如人饮水，冷暖自知。不过，我已经准备把英语写作变成一个习惯。Someelegantandinsightfulreadingsofmyfriendsreallyinspiremetopickupmypen.Youneverknowyoucanalsowritesuccessfullyandhappilyuntilyougiveitashot.Especiallyintheprocess,thosewordswithjustanodacquaintancewithmepopupunexpectedly,smilingagentlesmileandgiggling,"Doyourememeberme?"Dearreaders,Itrytomakesurethestyleisappropriate.Idon'tallowanychunksusedinmyessaystocomefromnowhere.Actually,almostallofthembelongtovariouswriters.OnpurposefulthinkingOnestudentaskedmewhyhecouldnotfindanopensesametoEnglishafterrackinghisbrainsdayafterday.Actually,hisquestionhasbeenhauntingmanypeople.Mytwelveyears’teachingconvincesmethatbothstudentsandteachersdon’tknowasmuchaboutthinkingastheythink.Theytakeitforgrantedthattheproblemswillbesettledforgoodafterbeingfiguredout.Butitistheotherwayaround.Solet’sgettothebottomofthething.Ifwecontinuallymonitorandassesshowourthinkingisgoingandwhetheritisontherighttrack,thenwefindthekeyliesinpurposefulthinkingwhichinvolvesaims,creativityandcriticality.Thinkwithanendinviewratherthanforthesakeofasolutiontotheproblemathand.RobertFritzclaimsthattheattempttosolvejustaproblemcandonothingbutinviteanotherone.Thatis,weshouldlearntobearabigblueprintinmind.Thinkingthatisrandom,thatmeanderswithoutanorganizinggoal,isdoomedtofailure.Forexample,manystudentsaretorturedbythemostpuzzlingquestionsabouttheattributiveclause.Itisfarfromnecessarybecausewelearngrammarinordertograsptheframeworkanduseitforcommunicationandwriting.Itdoesn’tdeserveitiftimeiswastedonsuchcrosswordpuzzles.Thinkoutofthebox.Whenthinkingtakesonachallengingtask,themindmustcomealive,readyitselfforintellectuallabor,engagetheintellectinthinkingaboutthreepoints:whatthetaskis,howmuchIk