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读后续写:Ilearnedtobemyself讲义阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。MybrotherJackwassosmartthatheearnedafullscholarshiptoHarvard.Ioftenwishedhewasn’tsoperfectbecauseitmademefeellikeIhadtoworktwiceashardjusttoprovemyselftoothers.Ononehand,hissuccesswasachallengethatIenjoyed,butontheotherhand,itwasanimmensepressurethatIstruggledtocopewith.Tobalancehisrecordinhighschool,IfeltlikeIwasconstantlyrunningonatreadmill(跑步机),dedicatingeverymomenttoanon-stoprace.TherewasnoroomforrelaxationasIpursuedthatperfectrecord.Mylifeseemedtobecompressedintoaseriesofendlesstasksanddeadlines.“IneededanA,”Irepeatedtomyselfbeforethebiologytest,sothatIwouldmaintainmyperfectrecordandsecureaplaceonthehonorroll.Istudiedtillthelastminuteoflunchandrushedtoclass.IfeltasenseofconfidenceasIglancedoverthefirstpageofthetest,quicklyfillingintheanswerswithasmile.However,asIturnedtothelastpage,mymindwentblank.Timetickedby,andsoon,theclassroombegantoemptyasstudentsfinishedtheirtestsandleft,exceptme.“Lara,classended.Ineedyoutohandinyourtest,”Mrs.Phloemsaid,stretchingoutherhand.Reluctantly,Ihandedherthetestpaper.Thenextday,Ireceivedmytestback.Istareddumbfoundedattheredmark:76.NotevenaBminus,mymindscreamed.Justaverage.It’sover.Noperfectrecord.Ifeltanunprecedented(前所未有的)senseoffrustrationanddisappointment.Afterschool,Idraggedmyheavyfeetbackhome.WhenIpushedopenthedoor,Jackwassittingonthecouch,reading.Seeinghisleisurelystate,Icried,hardtocontainthejealousyandsadnessinmyheart.Jackimmediatelynoticedthedepressiononmyface.Heaskedwithconcern,“What’swrong,Lara?”Blindedbyfrustrationmixedwithatouchofjealousy,Ishoutedathim“HowIwishyouwerenotsoperfect!”注意:续写词数应为150个左右;请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:Withahintofhurtandsurpriseinhiseyes,Jackgentlyapproachedme.Paragraph2:Hiswordswerelikeawarmbreeze,blowingmydepressionawayandchangingmymindset.解题思路与步骤续写思路大致可以分为以下两步:1.第一段:构建情感冲突,展现Lara情绪爆发与Jack的回应。通过情感描写、动作链和冲突铺垫,深化情节发展,表现两人关系的初步缓和。2.第二段:情感升华与主题点明。通过Jack的开导、环境渲染、情感总结,展现Lara逐渐释怀的过程,点明故事的核心主题——成长与接纳。第一段:构思与情节发展开头句:Withahintofhurtandsurpriseinhiseyes,Jackgentlyapproachedme.1.情感描写(固定第1句)Awaveofguiltandfrustrationwelledupinmyheart,makingmeunabletomeethisgaze.设置情感基调,表现Lara内心的愧疚和压抑。2.细节描写(非固定句)Jackpaused,hiseyessoftbutconcerned,ashekneltslightlytomeetmyloweredgaze.细节化Jack的动作,体现他的理解与温柔。3.动作链推进(固定第3句)Uponhearingmyoutburst,hesethisbookaside,camecloser,andplacedahandgentlyonmyshoulder.连续动作推动情节发展,表现Jack的主动安抚。4.冲突铺垫(非固定句)“YouthinkI’mperfect?I’vefailedtoo,Lara,”hesaidsoftly,hisvoicebreakingthesilence.Jack开口回应,为情节转折做好铺垫。5.情感推进(非固定句)TearsstreameddownmyfaceasIwhispered,“Butyoualwaysmakeitlooksoeasy,andIfeelsosmallnexttoyou.”通过Lara的自我剖白,深化情感冲突。第二段:情节转折与情感升华开头句:Hiswordswerelikeawarmbreeze,blowingmydepressionawayandchangingmymindset.6.情节转折(固定第5句)图片“Lara,perfectionisn’treal.It’sokaytostruggle—it’showwegrowstronger,”Jacksaid,hisvoicecalmandsteady.Jack的话语带来情节的转折点,直击Lara内心的痛点。7.细节描写(非固定句)Hesmiledfaintly,hishandstillrestingonmyshoulder,asthesunlightspilledthroughthewindowanddancedacrosshisface.细节刻画Jack的神态与环境,渲染温暖氛围。8.情感升华(固定第9句)Hearinghiswords,Ifeltawaveofreliefwashoverme,realizingthatit’sokaynottobeperfectallthetime.Lara领悟并释怀,表现情感的升华。9.动作与情感结合(非固定句)Inoddedslightly,atearfulsmilespreadingacrossmyfaceasIwhispered,“Thanks,Jack.IthinkIunderstandnow.”动作与情感结合,展现Lara逐渐恢复自信。10.主题点睛(固定第10句)Thisexperiencetaughtmethatsuccessisn’taboutbeingflawless,butaboutlearning,growing,andacceptingmyselfalongtheway.点明故事主旨,升华主题,传递正能量。示例范文:Withahintofhurtandsurpriseinhiseyes,Jackgentlyapproachedme.Awaveofguiltandfrustrationwelledupinmyheart,makingmeunabletomeethisgaze.Jackpaused,hiseyessoftbutconcerned,ashekneltslightlytomeetmyloweredgaze.Uponhearingmyoutburst,hesethisbookaside,camecloser,andplacedahandgentlyonmyshoulder.“YouthinkI’mperfect?I’vefailedtoo,Lara,”hesaidsoftly,hisvoicebreakingthesilence.TearsstreameddownmyfaceasIwhispered,“Butyoualwaysmakeitlooksoeasy,andIfeelsosmallnexttoyou.”Hiswordswerelikeawarmbreeze,blowingmydepressionawayandchangingmymindset.“Lara,perfectionisn’treal.It’sokaytostruggle—it’showwegrowstronger,”Jacksaid,hisvoicecalmandsteady.Hesmiledfaintly,hishandstillrestingonmyshoulder,asthesunlightspilledthroughthewindowanddancedacrosshisface.Hearinghiswords,Ifeltawaveofreliefwashoverme,realizingthatit’sokaynottobeperfecta
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