中考专题School+life复习-书面表达修改课课件

书面表达评改课内容

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市模英语书面表达存在问题请以“Myschoollifetodayandinthefuture”为题，用英语写一篇短文。内容提示：（可选择表格内容中的一项）schoollifetodayinthefutureschoolhoursschoolactivities……内容，人称，时态---中心突出审审列连改内容人称时态内容结构内容语言逻辑列structurebeginningendingtodaytomorrow直入话题，简明扼要.围绕主题，叙述清楚呼应主题，强调观点列structurebeginningbodyendingtodaytomorrow直入话题，简明扼要.围绕主题，叙述清楚呼应主题，强调观点schoollifehoursactivitiesbuildingsmealsuniforms???schoolhourslessonsstart/begin…finishfrom…tolasttoolonglunchbreakinterestingrelaxingschooldaybusymeaningful…1.At11:40wehavealunchbreak.It’sthemostinterestingandrelaxingpartofmyschoolday.2.TodayIspendmorethan9hourseverydaystudyingatschool,Iwishschoolhourswillbelessthan6hoursinthefuturesothatIcanhavemoresparetimetodoanythingthatIaminterestedin.佳句推荐schoolactivitiestripssportsinterestclubs???佳句推荐

Inthefuture,wewillhavemoreactivities.Forfun,wecantaketripstosomeplacesofinterestinourcountry.Toprotecttheenvironment,wecanplantmoretrees,pickuprubbishandsoon.Inthisway,wecanrelaxourselvesatthesametimewecandosomethinggoodforourcity.schoolmeals/clothestodayfuturelesstastybuthealthy…?schooluniforms?mealsclothes佳作赏析内容：完整，连贯语言：合理，地道逻辑：清晰，流畅

Talkingofschoollife,Ican’thelpthinkingaboutthedifferencebetweentheschoollifetodayandinthefuture.Today,Istudyforabout10hoursaday.IhavenotimetodoanythingthatIaminterestedin.ButIstillthinkI’mlucky,becauseIcanspendalldaywithmyclassmateswhosharehappinessandsadnesswithmetogetherWhatabouttheschoollifeinthefuture?Maybethereisnoneedformetogotoschool,becauseIwillbetaughtontheInternet.Inaddition,therewillbelotsofclubswhichIcanchoosetotakepartin.Mylifewillbemorecolorful,butI’mafraidmyfriendshipwon’tbeasgoodasthatoftoday.Inaword,myschoollifetodayandinthefuturebothhaveitsownadvantages.TheonlythingthatIcandoistovalueeverysecondtoenjoymyschoollife.美文欣赏内容：完整，连贯语言：合理，地道逻辑：清晰,流