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阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。ItwasabrightMayafternoonalongtheMarylandcoast,andJonathanBauer,51,atechnologyexecutiveatahospital,andhis13-year-olddaughter,Ava,weretakingfulladvantageofit.Theyweredrivingwiththewindowsdownastheyheadedhomeonthe14-mile-long,two-laneRoute90bridge,whichspanstheshallowwatersofAssawomanBay.Suddenly,thecalmwasdisturbedbythesquealoftires.Notfaraheadofthem,ablackpickupwasslidingfromonelanetotheother.TotheBauers’horroritcrashedintoaconcretebarrierovertheSUVdirectlyaheadofthem,andcametoresthangingovertherailingofthebridge.Bauerhitthebrakesintimetoavoidthevehiclesinhispath,butaBMWcarthathadsmashedintotheguardrailontherightcameslidingbackwardtowardhim.Heturnedleft,buttoolatetheBMWstruckhisVolvo’sfenderbeforecrashingintothevehiclebehindhim.Bauerstoppedthecar.“Ava,areyouOK?heasked,Shewasshaken,butotherwiseunhurt.
HerantotheBMW.“AreyouOK?”heaskedthedriver.Shenodded,tooshockedtospeak.Itcamefromthepickup,whichhadcometorestonitsrightside.Thepassengeratthebackofthepickupandtruckbedhungoutpasttheguardrail,30ormorefeetabovethewatersofthebay.Thedriver’sdoorthrewopenandamanclimbedout.Hedroppedtotheground.Bauerranupbesidehim.Themanpointeddown,sayingsomethinginSpanish.Inthewaterwasacarseat.Movingnexttoit,agirl,abouttwoyearsold.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Amomentlater,ThelittlegirlwaslessthantenfeetawayfromBauer.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意51岁的乔纳森・鲍尔和他13岁的女儿艾娃在马里兰州沿海的一座桥上开车回家。突然,平静被打破,前方一辆黑色皮卡失控撞上一辆SUV并卡在桥栏杆上,随后一辆宝马撞上护栏后向后滑向鲍尔的车,鲍尔停车确认女儿没事后,发现皮卡事故中有更严重的情况。皮卡侧翻,后排乘客悬在桥外30多英尺的水面上方,而且水里还有一个汽车座椅和一个约两岁的小女孩。五要素分析人物:乔纳森・鲍尔、艾娃、皮卡司机、宝马司机、落水小女孩等。时间:五月一个晴朗的下午。地点:马里兰州沿海的90号公路桥。起因:一系列交通事故。经过:车辆碰撞,皮卡侧翻,发现小女孩落水。结果:鲍尔准备营救小女孩。几处伏笔及续写中的回应伏笔:小女孩在水中危险。回应:第一段续写鲍尔爬下桥去救小女孩,展现水中救援过程和他的勇敢。伏笔:鲍尔靠近小女孩。回应:第二段续写鲍尔抱住小女孩,带着她往岸边返回,体现对小女孩的保护。续写要点第一段情感线:紧张、急切,鲍尔看到小女孩危险后毫不犹豫地行动,情况危急令人揪心。故事线:描述鲍尔下水救小女孩的过程,包括他克服困难和安抚小女孩。第二段情感线:安心,鲍尔抱住小女孩,让读者悬着的心放下。故事线:鲍尔带着小女孩往岸边走,有旁人协助,凸显救援成功在望。主旨升华句Inthefaceofdanger,humankindnessandcourageshinebrightlylikealighthouse.Aheroicactinacrisismomentcanbethemostbeautifulmelodyofhumanity.Whendisasterstrikes,theinstincttosavealiferevealsthenoblesideofournature.Everylifeisprecious,andarescuerisanangelinthedarkesthour.Inthechaosofanaccident,ahelpinghandholdsthehopeoflifeandlove.写作示范第一篇Inthewaterwasacarseat.Movingnexttoit,agirl,abouttwoyearsold.Bauer'sheartracedasheassessedthesituation.Withoutasecondthought,heshedhisshoesanddoveintothewater.Thewaveswerestrongerthanheexpected,buthefoughtthroughthem.Hereachedoutforthegirlasshebobbedupanddown,hercriesfuelinghisdetermination.Thecoldwaternumbedhislimbs,buthekeptgoing,inchingclosertotheterrifiedchild.
Amomentlater,thelittlegirlwaslessthantenfeetawayfromBauer.Withaburstofenergy,helungedforwardandgrabbedher.Sheclungtohim,hertinyhandsgrippinghisshirt.Bauerheldherclose,feelinghershiveringbody.Hewhisperedwordsofcomfortashebegantoswimback,theonlookersabovecheeringhimon.第二篇Inthewaterwasacarseat.Movingnexttoit,agirl,abouttwoyearsold.Bauerfeltasenseofurgencywashoverhim.Hequicklymadehiswaydownthebridge,ignoringthescrapesandbruises.Asheenteredthewater,itwasastruggleagainstthecurrent.Heusednearbydebristosteadyhimselfandreachedtowardsthegirl.Hecalledouttohergently,tryingtogetherattention.
Amomentlater,thelittlegirlwaslessthantenfeetawayfromBauer.Bauerstretchedhisarmasfarashecould.Whenhefinallygotholdofher,hefeltahugerelief.Hewrappedhisarmsaroundherprotectively.Thewaterseemedlesscoldandthetasklessdauntingwiththegirlinhisarms.Hestartedmakinghiswayback,followingtheguidanceofthepeopleonthebridge.第三篇Inthewaterwasacarseat.Movingnexttoit,agirl,abouttwoyearsold.Bauer'smindwentblankexceptforthethoughtofsavingher.Heclambereddownthebridgestructure,hishandsgettingscratched.Onceinthewater,hehadtobattletheswirlingcurrent.Hefocusedonthegirl,herlittlefigureinthebigexpanseofwater.Heswamwithallhismight,hiseyesneverleavingher.
Amomentlater,thelittlegirlwaslessthantenfeetawayfromBauer.Bauermusteredallhisstrengthandswamthelastfewfeet.Hegraspedthegirlfirmly.Shewascryinghysterically,andBauerheldhertighter.Hetoldheritwouldbeokay.Withnewfoundenergy,hestartedbacktowardstheshore,theshoutsofencouragementfromabovegivinghimmorestrength.参考答案Inthewaterwasacarseat.Movingnexttoit,agirl,abouttwoyearsold.Bauer'sheartlurchedatthesight.Withouthesitation,heclamberedoverthebridgerailing,ignoringtheheightandthedanger.Thesaltywindwhippedathisclothesashecarefullymadehiswaydowntheroughsurfaceofthebridgesupporttowardsthewater.Ashegotcloser,thewaterlookedevenmoremenacing,buthecouldn'tturnback.Hecalledouttothelittlegirlinagentlevoice,tryingtoreassureher.Somebystandersjoinedin,tryingtokeepthegirlcalmfromabove.Bauerfinallyreachedt
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