专题08读后续写描写练习教师版

课前检测Inhighschool.Dadgotmetoplayfootballinthefirstplace.IenjoyedthrowingtheballaroundwithmyfriendsbutIdidn'tthinkIhadwhatittooktoplayonateam.“I’mnofootballplayer,”Itoldmydad.“You’llneverknowwhatyou’recapableofunlessyougiveitatry,Adam,’’hetoldme.So,Idid.Itwouldgivemeamuchneededsenseofbelongingandsomeconfidence.IrememberhowproudhewaswhenIwonsomeawardsandthehughegavemeafterIreceivedmycongratulationletter.TherewasrarelyagamewhereDadwasn’tonthesidelines,cheeringmeon.Fouryearsofhardpreseasonfootballcampscamedowntomylastgame.Iurgedmydadtobringourvideocamera.Iwavedatmyparentsbeforetheopeningkickoffandputonmygameface.MypadsbrokeasImadecontactwiththeoffensiveplayers.Igrabbedattheclothesoftheirrunningbackanddraggedhimtothefield.Aloudcheercamefromthesidelines.TherewasDadwiththecamera,cheeringlikecrazy.Bytheendofthegame,Ihadstoppedsevenplayersandasacking（擒杀）—mybestperformanceever,aperfectendtomycareer.Iranintomydad’sarms.Iwassweatyandsmelly,buthehuggedmeanyway.Icouldn'twaittowatchthetape—experienceeverymomentagain.Assoonaswegotinthehouse,Itookthetapeoutofthecameraandputitintheplayer.Mydad,mom,sisterandIsatdowninthelivingroominfrontofthebigscreenTV.IpressedPlay.Thevideostarted.Thetwoteams,linedupbeforethegame,thentherunningbacktakingthehandoff.runninguptotheline,mereachingout,andthen...theskyandclouds!Icouldhearmydadscreaming"Waytogo,Adam!"asimagesoftheskyshookupanddownonscreen.分析材料，找出材料中运用的描写，并说出各自对应的作用。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：语言描写1.“I’mnofootballplayer,”Itoldmydad.表现主人公的不自信。2.“You’llneverknowwhatyou’recapableofunlessyougiveitatry,Adam,’’hetoldme.体现爸爸对于“我”的鼓励，为下文“我”尝试并取得对自己的信心进行铺垫。环境描写1.Aloudcheercamefromthesidelines.反映出爸爸当时激动的心情，侧面表现“我”的表现非常棒。动作描写1.Igrabbedattheclothesoftheirrunningbackanddraggedhimtothefield.体现“我”非常优秀的表现，铺垫爸爸后面站起来为“我”欢呼而忘记录像这个情节。2.Iranintomydad’sarms.表现父子之间非常亲近的关系，以及“我”赢了比赛之后的那种激动。3.Hehuggedmeanyway.同第2句作用除了上述材料所分析的描写，其它还有哪些描写呢？它们的作用分别是什么？________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：情绪描写：揭示人物的内心世界，表现人物的思想感情；塑造人物形象刻画人物性格。发表感悟：升华主题、深化文章中心。课中讲解Inhighschool.Dadgotmetoplayfootballinthefirstplace.IenjoyedthrowingtheballaroundwithmyfriendsbutIdidn'tthinkIhadwhatittooktoplayonateam.“I’mnofootballplayer,”Itoldmydad.“You’llneverknowwhatyou’recapableofunlessyougiveitatry,Adam,’’hetoldme.So,Idid.Itwouldgivemeamuchneededsenseofbelongingandsomeconfidence.IrememberhowproudhewaswhenIwonsomeawardsandthehughegavemeafterIreceivedmycongratulationletter.TherewasrarelyagamewhereDadwasn’tonthesidelines,cheeringmeon.Fouryearsofhardpreseasonfootballcampscamedowntomylastgame.Iurgedmydadtobringourvideocamera.Iwavedatmyparentsbeforetheopeningkickoffandputonmygameface.MypadsbrokeasImadecontactwiththeoffensiveplayers.Igrabbedattheclothesoftheirrunningbackanddraggedhimtothefield.Aloudcheercamefromthesidelines.TherewasDadwiththecamera,cheeringlikecrazy.Bytheendofthegame,Ihadstoppedsevenplayersandasacking（擒杀）—mybestperformanceever,aperfectendtomycareer.Iranintomydad’sarms.Iwassweatyandsmelly,buthehuggedmeanyway.Icouldn'twaittowatchthetape—experienceeverymomentagain.Assoonaswegotinthehouse,Itookthetapeoutofthecameraandputitintheplayer.Mydad,mom,sisterandIsatdowninthelivingroominfrontofthebigscreenTV.IpressedPlay.Thevideostarted.Thetwoteams,linedupbeforethegame,thentherunningbacktakingthehandoff.runninguptotheline,mereachingout,andthen...theskyandclouds!Icouldhearmydadscreaming"Waytogo,Adam!"asimagesoftheskyshookupanddownonscreen.阅读材料，并梳理材料的主要情节。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：1.我喜欢踢足球但是无意于成为足球运动员，但是爸爸鼓励我参加了足球集训营去踢足球并获得了很多奖。2.儿子让爸爸录下四年足球集训营的最后一场比赛。3.爸爸在欣赏比赛时候性喜若狂以至于扔下录像机根本没有录像。4.当全家准备坐在一起观看录像。根据段首语、给出的情节以及提示的描写形式、词汇、句式完成相关的续写内容。Paragraph1Ileanedforwardtoseethenextbigplay.Paragraph2ThetapeendedandDadwasquiet.情节一：镜头一直对着天空和白云，但是能够听到我爸爸的欢呼声。提示：动作描写、环境描写词汇：动词keeprooted/flashthrough/wave/jump/drop 副词continuously/crazily/heavily/silently 形容词thrilled句式：动作：主句，ing短语;with+sth./sb.+ing,主句；独立主格结构________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：Ileanedforwardtoseethenextbigplay.Strangelytheskyandcloudskeptrootedonthescreen,butthenoiseonthefieldandthecheeringshoutsfrommyDadcontinuouslyoccupiedmyears.Withthetapegoing,apictureflashedthroughmymindmymind.Wavingcrazilyhishandsandjumpingwithjoy,sothrilledwashethathemusthavedroppedthevideocameratotheground.Thevoiceonthescreenrangedfrom“Goodjob,Adam!”to“eon,getup!”andfinally“Yahoo!”ashegavemeabighug.Watchingtheskyandcloudsasthebackdrop,Ijustsilentlylistened.情节二：家人陷入沉默，我感到非常得失望。提示：环境描写词汇：名词silence/depression 动词spread/envelope________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：ThetapeendedandDadwasquiet.Thesilencespreadoverthewholeroom.Ahugesurgeofdepressionenvelopedme.情节三：爸爸跟我道歉，我原谅了爸爸。提示：语言描写、动作描写词汇：动词beetchedwith/fuel/smile 副词suddenly/firmly/hard 形容词precious/inplete/everhaunting句式：动作：主句，ing短语;with+sth./sb.+ing,主句；独立主格结构________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：Suddenly,“I’msorry,”Dadsaid,whosefacewasetchedwithendlessguilty.“Ifailedtorecordyouthewholegame.”“No.”Ifirmlyanswered,“itwasyourcheersthatfueledmycourageinthatfiercefootballgame.Forme,it’sthemostpreciouspartofthevideo.”Hearingmywords,hesmiledharderthaneverbefore.Duringtheinpletetape,Ifoundtheeverhauntingmelodyofthefootballgameandmyentirelife.过关检测“Willyouewithus,Susan?”criedseveralgirlstoaschoolmate.“Wearegoingtothewoods;doe,too.”“Ishouldliketogowithyouverymuch,”repliedSusan,withasigh,“butIcan’tfinishthetaskgrandmothersetmetodo.”“Howtiresomeitmustbetostayathometoworkonaholiday!”saidRose,oneofthegirls,shakingherhead.“Susan’sgrandmotheristoostrict.”Susanheardtheremark,and,asshebentherhead,shewipedawayatear,andthoughtofthepleasantafternoonthegirlswouldspendgatheringwildflowersinthewoods.Soonshesaidtoherself,“Whatharmcantherebeinmovingthemarkgrandmotherputinthestocking?Thewoodsmustbeverybeautifultoday,andhowIshouldliketobeinthem!”“Grandmother,”saidshe,afewminutesafterwards,“I’mreadynow.”“What,sosoon,Susan?”Hergrandmothertooktheworkandlookedatitveryclosely.“True,Susan,”saidshe,layinggreatstressoneachword,“true,Icounttwentyturnsfromthemark;and,asyouhavenevercheatedme,youmaygoandamuseyourselfasyouliketherestoftheday.”Susan’scheekswerered,andshedidnotsay“Thankyou.”Assheleftthecottage,shewalkedslowlyaway,notsingingasusual.“Why,hereisSusan!”thegirlscried,whenshejoinedtheirpany;“butwhatisthematter?Whyhaveyouleftyourdear,oldgrandmother?”theyasked.“Thereisnothingthematter.”AsSusanrepeatedthesewords,shefeltthatshewastryingtocheatherself.Shehadactedalie.Atthesametime,sherememberedhergrandmother’swords,“Youhavenevercheatedme.”“Yes,Ihavecheatedher,”saidshetoherself.“Ifsheknewall,shewouldnevertrustmeagain.”阅读材料，并梳理材料的主要情节。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：1.同伴邀请苏珊去开满山花的山野里玩耍，但是苏珊不能去，因为她没有完成奶奶交代的任务。2.苏珊更改了记号欺骗了奶奶。3.奶奶允许苏珊出去玩，但是苏珊却感到很愧疚。根据段首语推断出了可能的情节，请运用提示的描写形式、词汇、句式完成相关的续写内容。Paragraph1:Whenthelittlepartyhadreachedanopenspaceinthewoods,Paragraph2:“Now,Susan,”saidRose,“Putonthecrownofflowers,foryouaretobeourqueen.”情节一：其他女孩开心地玩耍，而苏珊却不开心。她的伙伴们都在到处跑着，自我娱乐，课苏珊却独自坐在草坪上，希望此刻她能在家中，奶奶诉说自己的过错。提示：动作描写、情绪描写词汇：动词runabout/chase/pick/withone’sheaddrooping句式：动作：主句，ing短语;with+sth./sb.+ing,主句；独立主格结构 情绪：so+情绪adj.+部分倒装+that从句;with+情绪n.;Toone’s+情绪n.，主句;what+情绪v.+sb.+is/was+that从句________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：Whenthelittlepartyhadreachedanopenedspaceinthewoods,herpanionsranabout,chasingbutterfliesandpickingflowers.Atthesametime,however,Susansatonthegrasswithherheaddrooping,wishingshewereathomethismomenttellingherfaulttohergrandmother.Struckbythescene,however,Susanwasseizedwithahugesurgeofguilty,sittingonthegrassalonewithherheaddrooping.Atthesametime,howeagershewastogohometoconfessherfaulttohergrandmother.情节二：她们为苏珊做了个花冠。提示：语言描写词汇：名词acrownofflowers 动词cryout________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：AfterawhileRosecriedout,“Letusmakeacrownofflowers,andputitontheheadofthebestgirlhere.”Soonthecrownwasfinished.AllthegirlsagreedSusanwasthebestgirlbothinschoolandathome,sotheydecidedshewastowearit.情节三：苏珊拒绝戴花冠。她把花冠扔到了地上，说：“不要给我花冠，我不配！我欺骗了我的奶奶。”当她说这些的时候，泪水滑过了她的脸颊。提示：语言描写、动作描写词汇：动词takeoff/throw/deserve/cheat/flowdown 形容词astonished句式：动作：主句，ing短语;with+sth./sb.+ing,主句；独立主格结构________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：“Now,Susan,”saidRose,“Putonthecrownofflowers,foryouaretobeourqueen.”Asthesewordswerespoken,thecrownwasplacedonherhead.Inamomentshetookitoff,andthrewitontheground,saying,“Nocrownforme;Idonotdeserveit.”Thegirlslookedatherwithinanastonishment“Ihavecheatedmygrandmother,”saidshe,tearsflowingdownhercheeks.情节四：苏珊返回家中去向奶奶道歉，奶奶原谅了苏珊。提示：语言描写、动作描写词汇：动词apologize/realizeone’sfault句式：动作：主句，ing短语;with+sth./sb.+ing,主句；独立主格结构________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：QuicklySusanlefttheothergirls,wentbackhomeandapologizedtohergrandmother.“Susan,”saidhergrandmother,“Iamsohappyyouhaverealizedyourfault,andyouarestillmyownlittlegirl!”

课后练习补救练习Ifthere’sonethingIcan’tstandpeoplesaying,it’s,“I’mnotgoodatanything.Idon’thaveanytalent.”Ijustdon’tbearthatatall.Tome,everyonehasatleastonetalent,andwhileitsomethingtakesyoualifetimetofind,itdoesexist.TherewasatimewhenIdidn’tbelievethat.Whatchangedmymindwasaseeminglysmalleventthattookplacein1953.AtthattimeIwasahighschoolstudent.IwasafunnylookingskinnyboynamedEugeneOrowitzwhoweightedbarely100pounds.Iwasagoodstudent,butasfarasIwasconcerned,injustabouteveryotherdepartmentIwasaloser.Iwantedtofitin,tobesomeoneanddosomethingwell.ButIhadn’tfoundanythingIwasgoodat.Onesunnyafternoon,ourgymclasswentouttotheschool’srunningtrack.Theteachertaughtusallvarioustrackandfieldevents.Iwasaloserinallofthem.Thencamethejavelin(标枪).Suddenlysomethinginsidemebegansaying,“Tryit!Tryit!”Ihadtowaitmyturn,though,becauseseveralotherswantedabreaktoo.Shyandscared,Iwatchedthem,tryingnottolooktooeager.Finally,wheneverythinghadhadachancetothrow…thebestthrowgoingabout30yards…heasked.Embarrassed,Ilookeddown,butmanagedtonodmyhead.“well,eonthen,”hesaidimpatiently,andhandedmethejavelin.BehindmeIcouldhearsomeofmyclassmateslaughing.AsIgraspedthejavelininmyhand,Iwasseizedwithastrangefeeling…anewfoundexcitement.Forsomecrazyreason,IwasrelaxedoverwhatIwasabouttodo,eventhoughI’dneverdoneitbefore.Iraisedthejavelinovermyhead,tooksixquickstepsandletthethinggo.Thesamevoicethathadurgedmeintothrowingit,nowtoldmeitwasagoodthrow.分析材料，找出材料中运用的描写，并说出各自对应的作用。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：心理情绪描写1.Iwasaloserinallofthem.表现主人公失败的不自信。2.Suddenlysomethinginsidemebegansaying,“Tryit!Tryit!”发现自己对于标枪的兴趣与热情，慢慢找回自己的自信。3.Shyandscared,Iwatchedthem,tryingnottolooktooeager.反映出“我”骨子里的那种内向，正是由于极度不自信导致的。环境描写1.BehindmeIcouldhearsomeofmyclassmateslaughing.反映出“我”当时内心感到很窘迫，不过与后面同学们的声音的对比，说明“我”取得了很好的成绩。动作描写1.Iraisedthejavelinovermyhead,tooksixquickstepsandletthethinggo.与前面的“我”不知道该怎么操作对比，说明“我”对于这项运动独特的天赋，照应上面的“兴奋”。阅读材料，并梳理材料的主要情节。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：1.我过去觉得自己不擅长任何事情直到一件小事改变了我的想法。2.一次体育课上，我发现自己对仍标枪充满兴奋不已。3.我克制住自己的兴奋之情等待着，这期间最好的成绩是30码。4.老师要我去试一下，而同学们都笑了。巩固练习Ifthere’sonethingIcan’tstandpeoplesaying,it’s,“I’mnotgoodatanything.Idon’thaveanytalent.”Ijustdon’tbearthatatall.Tome,everyonehasatleastonetalent,andwhileitsomethingtakesyoualifetimetofind,itdoesexist.TherewasatimewhenIdidn’tbelievethat.Whatchangedmymindwasaseeminglysmalleventthattookplacein1953.AtthattimeIwasahighschoolstudent.IwasafunnylookingskinnyboynamedEugeneOrowitzwhoweightedbarely100pounds.Iwasagoodstudent,butasfarasIwasconcerned,injustabouteveryotherdepartmentIwasaloser.Iwantedtofitin,tobesomeoneanddosomethingwell.ButIhadn’tfoundanythingIwasgoodat.Onesunnyafternoon,ourgymclasswentouttotheschool’srunningtrack.Theteachertaughtusallvarioustrackandfieldevents.Iwasaloserinallofthem.Thencamethejavelin（标枪）.Suddenlysomethinginsidemebegansaying,“Tryit!Tryit!”Ihadtowaitmyturn,though,becauseseveralotherswantedabreaktoo.Shyandscared,Iwatchedthem,tryingnottolooktooeager.Finally,wheneverythinghadhadachancetothrow…thebestthrowgoingabout30yards…heasked.Embarrassed,Ilookeddown,butmanagedtonodmyhead.“well,eonthen,”hesaidimpatiently,andhandedmethejavelin.BehindmeIcouldhearsomeofmyclassmateslaughing.AsIgraspedthejavelininmyhand,Iwasseizedwithastrangefeeling…anewfoundexcitement.Forsomecrazyreason,IwasrelaxedoverwhatIwasabouttodo,eventhoughI’dneverdoneitbefore.Iraisedthejavelinovermyhead,tooksixquickstepsandletthethinggo.Thesamevoicethathadurgedmeintothrowingit,nowtoldmeitwasagoodthrow.Paragraph1:Iwatchedasthespear(矛，枪)tookoff.Myheartbeatfaster,Paragraph2:ThatnightItookthejavelinhomewithme.分析材料以及段首语，推断相应的可能的续写情节。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：（仅供参考）1.我将标枪扔出30码之外的距离，同学们都感到很惊讶。2.老师让我留下这杆标枪。3.我重拾勇气，刻苦练习，最终在仍标枪领域取得成功，找到了自己的天赋。根据上面推断的续写情节以及规定的描写，完成续写。1.我将标枪扔出30码之外的距离，同学们都感到很惊讶。（动作描写、情绪描写）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：Iwatchedasthespeartookoff.Myheartbeatfaster,asIsawitcontinuedtofly,30yardsout,then40anditwasstillgoing.Myheartbeatfaster,andwithitflyingcontinually,itdroppedfarbeyond30yards.Suddenly,someoneexclaimed,“50yards.It’s50yards.”Soastonishedweremyclassmatesthattheyallbegantoclaptheirhands.Hearingthemcheeringforme,IfeltasifIhadbeendreaming.2.老师让我留下这杆标枪。（语言描写、情绪描写）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：Still,Itookthejavelinbacktothegymteacher.“EugeneOrowitz,”withawidesmilespreadonhisface,hesaid,“Iwantyoutokeepthejavelin,hopingitwillremindyouthatyouareverytalent/gifted.3.我重拾勇气，刻苦练习，最终在扔标枪领域取得成功，找到了自己的天赋。（动作描写、发表感悟）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：EverytimeIsawit,Ican’thelprememberingthewordsmygymteachersaidtome.Sincethen,Ipracticeddiligentandmadeittotheschoolteam.Inthesameyear,Ithrewthejavelin211feet,thebestthrowbyanyhighschoolboyinthecountry.Haditnotbeenforthesmallevent,Iwouldn’thavefoundandthenfulfilledmypotential.Eventoday,Iamconstantlyremindedoftheexperience,whereIwastaughtthelessonthateveryonehasatalentandyouareabletofinditandmadeuseofit.拔高练习Onceuponatime,therewasabeautifultownandacoupleofloverswhowouldoftenstayonthetopofthemountainbythesea,enjoyingthesunriseandappreciatingthesunset.Everyonewhoknewthemcouldn'thelpenvyingthemfortheirhappylove.Oneday,themanwasseriouslyinjuredandlyinginhospitalformanydayswithoutanyconsciousness.Thewomanguardedhimbythebedinthedaytime,callinghisnamenonstopatnight.ShewouldgotothechurchandpraytoGoduntilhertearsranout.Amonthpassedandthemanwasstillsleeping.Finally,Godwassomovedbyherpersistencethathedecidedtodoheraspecialfavor.Godsaid,“Icanhelpyourloverrecoverontheconditionthatyoushouldpromisetobeabutterflyforthreeyears.Doyouagreetothisdeal?”shesaidexcitedlyandfirmly,“Yes,Ido!NeverwillIregretdoingthat.”Thenextday,thewomantransformedintoabutterfly,flyinghurriedlytothehospital.Itturnedoutthatthemancametohisconsciousnessandwokeup,talkingwithadoctor.Shecouldnothearwhattheyweretalkingaboutbecauseshecouldn'tflyintothehouse.Whatshecoulddowastowatchherbelovedthroughthewindowshelplessly.Anotherspringcameandthebutterflywasinahurrytoflybacktoseetheman,onlytofindthattherewasaprettyladystanding