【学案】读后续写微技巧(四条主线深挖续写基点)

、四条主线深挖续写基点【真题再现】 (2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplaywhereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【解题策略】第一步浏览前文,弄清楚关键要素并归纳主旨要素描述主旨whenWhenIwasinmiddleschool我作为一个来自巴西、英语为第二语言的孩子,英语写作特别困难,但在老师的鼓励下,通过自己的努力获得了写作的乐趣whereinmiddleschoolwhoI;myteacherwhatenterawritingcontestwhymysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest第二步梳理四条线索,预测续写内容文段线索文脉走向前文时间线WhenIwasinmiddleschool空间线inmiddleschool情感线puzzled→encouraged→tired;doubts→theenjoymentofwriting情节线Myteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.→Atfirst,Irefused.→Iwasencouragedbymyteacher.→Ipreparedthewriting.→Igottiredandhaddoubts.→Iinsistedonwriting.→Ihandedintheessay.续写预测1.Iwonthefirstplace.Iwasthankfulformyteacher’sencouragement.2.Ishowedmythankstomyteacheragain.Andheinspiredmetocontinuewriting.第三步借助开头,确定续写段落梗概段落第一段开头Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.梗概Iwonthefirstplace.Myclassmatescongratulatedmeonmysuccess.Myteacherhandedmeanawardcup.Ithankedhimforhisencouragement.段落第二段开头Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.梗概Ithankedmyteacheragain.HeinspiredmetocontinuewritinginEnglish.Ipromisedtoliveuptohisexpectation.第四步丰富语言,前呼后应考场高分续写评卷老师点评Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.①Iwonthefirstplace.Whenmyteacherannouncedthegoodnewswithdelightintheclassroom,IwassosurprisedthatIfeltithardtobelieve.②Someofmyclassmatesstaredatmeindisbeliefwhile③othersclappedandcongratulatedmeonmysuccess.Thenmyteacherhandedmeanawardcup.Holdingthecup,④IbenttomyteacherandthankedhimforhisencouragementwhichallowedmetoimprovemyEnglishandenjoywriting.⑤Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Withexcitedtearsinmyeyes,⑥Ithankedhimagain,addingthatitwashewholetmegetatasteforwriting.⑦Pattingmeontheshoulder,heinspiredmetocontinuewritinginEnglishandbelievedthatIwouldmakegreatachievementsinwriting.Wetalkedalotaboutwriting.IpromisedthatIwouldliveuptohisexpectationandneverstopwritinginEnglishthough⑧itwasmysecondlanguage.①使用了高级句型——倒装句。②使用了复合句,句中含有so...that...。③while是并列连词,连接并列句。④使用了动词-ing短语。⑤使用动词不定式作宾语补足语。⑥使用了独立主格结构。⑦使用了复杂句式,其中包括动词-ing短语作状语;强调句型。⑧使用了though引导的让步状语从句。【技巧分析】一、5W和1H,把握记叙文基本要素。读后续写中所提供的前文通常是一篇记叙文的一部分,阅读时为了获取对续写有用的关键信息,要特别关注5W和1H,其具体情况见下表。要素解读5Wwhen指故事发生的时间,比如在母亲节等where指故事发生的地点,比如在家里的厨房等who指故事中的主人公、相关的人物,比如双胞胎、父亲、母亲等what从文章中提取出所发生的事件why指事件发生的起因。比如为母亲做早餐等1Hhow指事件发生的过程、方式等二、厘清框架探索故事模式记叙文通常采用顺叙、倒叙和插叙等手段组织故事情节的发展,无论采用哪种形式都会体现其发展的框架,这个框架有助于预测续写的走向,因此十分重要。其具体模式如下表:模式解读开端通常交代时间、地点和人物等信息发展通常叙述事件的起因和细节及经过高潮通常叙述事件中的矛盾和冲突。比如2021年全国新高考Ⅰ卷前文中,粥沸外流、面包烤糊等结局事件的最终结果三、探寻四条主线深挖关键信息记叙文通常遵循时间、空间、情感和情节变化来组织语言和行文,所以这些前文信息和要求续写的部分存在着密切的联系,因此在解题时必须关注前文中的这些关键线索。其详情如下表:主线解读时间线指故事中以时间先后顺序叙述情节的发展。比如2021年全国新高考Ⅰ卷前文中的时间线是:母亲节前夕→母亲节当天:在早晨六点……空间线指事件发生、发展的位置不断变化。比如2021年全国新高考Ⅰ卷前文中的空间线是在双胞胎的家里:双胞胎的楼上卧室→楼下厨房→妈妈的卧室情感线指故事主人公随着不同场景的变化而出现的情绪波动。比如2021年全国新高考Ⅰ卷前文中的情感线是:紧张→疼痛→吃惊→自豪情节线指按照一定顺序叙述事件发生的经过。比如2021年全国新高考Ⅰ卷前文中的情节线是:母亲节前夕的计划→母亲节早晨六点下楼去厨房为母亲做早餐→粥沸外流、熄灭炉火→两片面包烤糊……【拓展演练】1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Myfamilyhadonlyrecentlymovedintoanewneighborhood.Allofmyneighborshavebeenveryfriendlyandhelpfulsincewemovedin.However,MrsDavis,anelderlyladylivinginthelasthouseontheothersideoftheroad,escapedassociatingwithus,oranyoneelse.WhenIaskedaroundtheneighborhoodwhy,theywarnedmenottogoafterherbecausetheythoughtshewasinsane(精神失常的)andpreferredstayingaloneafterlosingherhusbandandonlydaughterinanaircraftcrash.Afterthat,shestayedisolated(孤立的)fromalltheneighbors,refusingallthecareandhelp.Ioftensawheronthestreetsduringtheevening,butshewasalwaysbyherself.SheappearedweakandIalwayswantedtohelpher,butafterhearingwhatmyneighborshadsaidabouther,Iwasn’tsurewhetherIshould.Oneday,whenIwasonmywaytothesupermarket,ourpathscrossed.Iwaswalkingpastherandoverheardhersingingatune.Itimmediatelydrewmyattentionbecausemyparentsusedtosingthesamesongwithme.Ibegantosingalongwithher,andshesmiledatmeforthefirsttime.ButwhenIsmiledback,shequicklyhurriedherpaceandwenthome.Sheseemedverydifferenttomethatday.Irefusedtotrustmyneighbors’claimsthatshehadcutherselfofffromtherestofsocietybecauseshewasinsane,sothenextday,Iknockedonherdoor.MrsDaviswashome,andinsteadoflettingmein,shejustlookedatmesilentlythroughthewindow.Inoticedherstaringatmeandwasabouttowalktothewindowwhenshequicklyclosedthecurtains.Thenextday,Irevisitedherhouse.“Hello,Ibroughtyousomething,”Icalledouttoher.“It’stherecordofthemusicyouweresingingyesterday.”注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。ThedooropenedandMrsDavis’eyeswidenedinsurpriseatthesightofmestandingthere.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Severaldayslaterinthemorning,thedoorbellrangatmyhouse.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Withabroadsmileonherlips,Sirin,a15-year-oldgirl,ranwithjoytoshowoffhernewpaintingtohermom.Butthemotherspokeinahushedtone,“Shh..honey.Iambusywithanimportanttalk.Iwilllookatit.Justwaitforsometime,OK?”Sirinfrowned(皱眉)anddecidedtoshowittoherdad.“Dad,seewhatIhavedone,”Sirinannouncedaloudinathrillingvoice.Dadturnedaroundwhileadjustinghistieandshowedthethumbs-up.Immediately,blowinghertwocheeks,Sirincomplained(抱怨),“Dad,youhaven’tseenityet.”Hesmiledather,saying,“Notime,baby.I’lllookatitlater.”Shewasnotakidtobepleasedwithasimplegestureorasmile.Dadwasinahurry,sohejustkissedherforehead(额头),andrushedtogotowork.Sirinstoodthereforafewseconds,andthenrushedintoherownbedroom.Shethrewherpaintingonthefloor,closedthedoorandlayonherbed.Lookinguptotheceiling(天花板),shethoughttoherself,“Whyiseverybodysobusy?”Hereyeswerefilledwithtears.Shethoughtthathermomanddadwouldadmireherpainting,buttheydidn’tpayanyattentiontoit.Itseemedthateverysinglepersononthisearthwasbusywiththeirownworkandnoonehadtimetoshareasinglemomentwithher,neitherinhappinessnorinsorrow!Shewasfedupwith(受够了)everybodyhaving“notime”forher.Whenhermomcalledherfordinner,shecamelatetojointhemonpurpose.“Imadethisspecialnoodlesforyou,honey,”saidMomwhilepassingthebowltowardsSirin.Sirinkeptsilentanddidn’twanttogivealookathermom.Momwassurprisedtoseetheunusualbehaviour.Shecouldn’tguessanything.Suddenly,themorningincidentoccurredtoher.Softly,sheasked,“Honey,didIdosomethingwrong?Whyareyousosad?”注意：1.续写词数应为150左右

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请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答Paragraphl:HearingwhatMomsaid,Sirincouldn’thelpcryingandranintoherroom.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thenextday,whenSirinturnedonthelightinherbedroomafterschool,shecouldn’tbelievewhatshewasseeing!___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Inthevibrantsummerfollowingtheirhighschoolgraduation,bestfriendsSallyandJasminedecidedtocelebratethebeginningoftheirnewchapterwithasurfingholidayonthebeachesofHawaii.Sally,knownforherboldnessandbraveryonthewaves,andJasmine,thecautiousplanner,foundthemselvesintheparadiseofsurfers,readytoridetheendlesssummer.TheirHawaiianadventurebeganundercrystalblueskies,withthesuncastingagoldenglowovertheirambitions.Jasminehadthoroughlyplannedtheirdaystoincludebothsurfinglessonsandampledowntimetosoakintheisland’stranquility(宁静).Sally,however,wasdrawntothewhispersofchallengeandconquestthatthenorthernbeachespromised.Knownfortheiruntamed(无法驾驭的)wavesandthelegendsofsurferswhodaredtodanceuponthem,thesewatersattractedSallyconstantly.DespiteJasmine’scaution,particularlyabouttherumorsofsharksightings,Sally’sdesireonlygrew.Shearguedthatriskwasanintegralpartofsurfing,atestonone’srespectandunderstandingoftheocean’spower.Jasmine’swarningsfellondeafearsasSally,drivenbyamixtureofyouthfulinvincibility(不可战胜)andadeep-seatedneedtoproveherself,decidedtotakeonthenorthernwavesalone.ThedaySallychoseforheradventurebeganwithaseeminglycalm.Theoceanlookedwelcoming,itssurfacebrokenonlybythegentlerollofwaves.Twosafeguardswerewatchingsurfersridingwavesintheseanearby.Notatraceofdangerorsharkscouldbefound.JasminewatchedwithamixtureofaweandanxietyasSallypaddled(划桨)out,herfiguregraduallybecomingasmalldotagainstthevastnessofthesea.Ashourspassed,thesky’sclearbluedeepenedtoadarkgrey,andtheoceanbegantorevealitstruenature.Waves,oncecalm,grewinsizeandintensity,challengingSally’sskillanddetermination.Sherodethemwithgrace,eachsuccessfulreturnfuelingherconfidence.Butnaturecareslittleforhumanbravery.注意：1．续写词数应为150左右;2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。AsSallyrodeonthecrowningwaveoftheday,adarkshapesecretlyemergedunderneath.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________HearingSally’sscream,Jasminequicklyfiguredoutwhathappenedandrushedtothesafeguards.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。EverySunday,thecompetitionstarted.Thethreeofuswouldsetouralarmclockstowakeupearlierthananyoneelse.Ihadsetmyalarmclocktosixinthemorning,hopingthatmybrotherswouldn'tstartbeforeme.Beep.Beep.Beep.Groaning,Ireachedovertomynightstandandslappedthetopofmyalarmclock.“Tooearlyonthiscoldwinterday,”Imurmured.Icurledbackintomywarmblanketandfellasleepagain.Myeyesblinkedopentothewhirringsoundofthevacuumcleaner.“Theychosetheirchoresfirst!”Ithoughtwithdespair.Ijumpedupfrommybedandrushedtothebathroom,whereIstartedtheonlychorethatwasleftforme.Iwoulddefinitelybeshoveling(铲)thedrivewaywhiletheybuiltanigloo(冰屋),Ithoughtcheerlessly,rubbingandwipingmadlyatthetoiletbowl.WhenIfinishedcleaningthetoiletandsink,mybrotherscameintothebathroomtowatchmecleanthebathtubastheymockedmeabouthowI'doversleptandgotstuckwiththelongestchore.“Whoeverfinisheslasthastoshovelthedriveway,remember?”myolderbrotherremindedmewithatriumphantsmilewhenweputonourbigcoatsandsnowpantstogooutside.Thethreeofussteppedoutsideintotheknee-deepsnowandshieldedoureyesfromthebrightness.Mybrotherswastednotimeanddashedofftoplayintheyard,leavingmebehindtotacklethefrustratingtaskofshovelingthedriveway.Withaheavysigh,Iinchedthroughthethicksnowtothedriveway,mybootssinkingwitheachstep.Igrunted(嘟哝)witheffortasmybrothersyelledwithjoy.Sundaywouldneverbemyday,Isighed.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Suddenly,Iheardthesoundofashovelrubbingagainstthedrivewayconcrete.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Afterwefinished,wesatinsidetheigloo,laughingaboutourmorningadventures.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________参考答案1．ThedooropenedandMrsDavis’eyeswidenedinsurpriseatthesightofmestandingthere.Iheldouttherecord,“Ithoughtyoumightenjoythis.”MrsDavisslowlytookitfrommyhands,staringatit.Foramoment,sheseemedlostinmemories.“Thankyou,”shewhispered.ThenIwasinvitedintoherhouse,feelingasenseofconnectionblossomingbetweenus.“Iusedtolistentothissongwithmyhusbandanddaughter.Itwastheirfavorite,”shesharedstoriesofherloveformusic,andthepainofherloss.WhenIleftherhouse,Iofferedtohugher,andMrsDavis’eyesshonewithnewfoundhope.Severaldayslaterinthemorning,thedoorbellrangatmyhouse.Surprisinganddelightful,itwasMrsDavis!Shestoodatourdoorstep,holdingatrayoffreshlybakedcookies,hereyessparklingwithwarmth,“Iwantedtothankyouforbringinglighttomylife.”Irepliedexcitedly,“I’mjustmorethangladtoseeyou.”Gradually,MrsDavisnolongercutherselffromtheworldandshebecamearegularvisitortomyhouse,alsofindingherwaybacktothecommunitythatcaredforher.Sometimes,Irealizedthatallittookwasasmallactofkindnesstobreakdownthebarriersofloneliness.【写作分析】本文以人物为线索，主要讲述了作者和家人搬到新社区后，尽管邻居们都很友好，但大家因误解而避开一位上了年纪的名叫Davis的女士，认为她因失去亲人而精神失常，选择孤立自己。作者最初也受此影响犹豫不决，但在偶然听到Davis女士唱起自己熟悉的歌曲后，决定不理会邻里间的传言，主动尝试接触和帮助她，通过送唱片作为交流的契机，作者去拜访了Davis女士。【要点解析】1.段落续写①由第一段首句“门开了，戴维斯夫人看到我站在那里，惊讶地瞪大了眼睛。”可知，本段可描写作者说明来意后，被邀请到了戴维斯女士家里，他们聊了关于音乐的话题并逐渐熟悉了起来。②由第二段首句“几天后的早晨，我家的门铃响了。”可知，本段可描写戴维斯女士为了感谢作者的拜访送来了自己烤的饼干。从那之后，戴维斯女士不再与世隔绝，成为了作者家的常客。2.续写线索：去送唱片——受到邀请——交流音乐——拥抱——送来饼干——成为常客——感悟3.词汇激活行为类①小声说：whisper/murmur②拥抱某人：hugsb./givesb.ahug③照顾：carefor//lookafter情绪类令人惊讶的：surprising/amazing高兴的：glad/pleased/cheerful【高分句型1】 WhenIleftherhouse,Iofferedtohugher,andMrsDavis’eyesshonewithnewfoundhope.（运用了when引导的时间状语）【高分句型2】 Sometimes,Irealizedthatallittookwasasmallactofkindnesstobreakdownthebarriersofloneliness.（运用了that引导的宾语从句）2．Paragraph1:HearingwhatMomsaid,Sirincouldn’thelpburstingoutcryingandranintoherroom.Shefeltneglectedeventhoughshewaswellawareofherparents’unconditionallove.Momcameinandwhisperedtoher,“Baby,Iknowyouhavetherighttogetangrybutpleaseshareyourproblemswithme.ShehuggedSirin,andpattedherbackgently.ButSirindidn’tsayanything.Accidentally,Momdiscoveredthepaintingonthefloor!Paragraph2Thenextday,whenSirinswitchedonthelightinherbedroomafterschool,shecouldn’tbelievewhatshewasseeing!Beautifullyframed,heroilpaintingwashungonthewall.Justbelowthepainting,itwrote,”Wearesoproudofyou,Sirin,ourlittleangel!”Overwhelmedwithjoy,Sirinrantohermomandhuggedhertightly.“Iamsosorry,dear!Wewouldneversay‘notime’toyouinthefuture!”Momsaidinatremblingvoice.Forchildren,keepingthemcompanyisthebesteducationandlisteningtothemisthebestcommunication.【写作分析】本篇书面表达是读后续写。本文以人物为线索展开。15岁的Sirin面带微笑，迫不及待地和爸爸妈妈炫耀她的新画，但是爸爸妈妈都很忙，没有认真看她的画，所以她很受伤。她妈妈叫她吃晚饭。Sirin故意迟到加入他们。她保持沉默，没有看任何人，用指甲刮着桌子垫子。她妈妈对这种不寻常的行为感到困惑。突然，妈妈想起了早晨的那件事。她温柔地问Sirin是否自己做错了什么。【要点解析】1.段落续写①由第一段句首内容“听到妈妈的话，Sirin忍不住哭了起来，跑进了自己的房间。”可知，第一段可以描写Sirin听到妈妈的话，觉得父母不在乎自己，感到很伤心。②由第二段句首内容“第二天，当Sirin放学后打开卧室的灯时，她简直不敢相信她所看到的!她的油画装裱得很漂亮，挂在墙上。”可知，第二段可以描写Sirin看到这个后的反应和高兴的心情。2.续写线索：无法抑制的伤心——母亲询问——看到画——把画装裱挂在了墙上——父母道歉——高兴。3.词汇积累行为类①发现：discover/find②拥抱：hug/embrace③打开：switchon/turnon情绪类①高兴：joy/pleasure②生气：angry/annoyed[高分句型1]Shefeltneglectedeventhoughshewaswellawareofherparents’unconditionallove.(eventhough引导的让步状语从句)[高分句型2]Baby,Iknowyouhavetherighttogetangrybutpleaseshareyourproblemswithme.(省略that的宾语从句)3．AsSallyrodeonthecrowningwaveoftheday,adarkshapesecretlyemergedunderneath.Approachingwithterrifyingswiftness,themysteriouscreatureemergedabovethesurface—asharkwithsharpteeth,hungrilyeyeingitsprey.Ingreathorroranddespair,Sallyfeltachilldownherspine.Theconfrontationwasamomentfrozenintime.Intheblinkofaneye,thesharksnappeditsjawsatitsmark.PanicandadrenalinesurgedasSallyfoughttoescape,lettingoutadesperatescreamamidsttheroarofthewave.HearingSally’sscream,Jasminequicklyfiguredoutwhathappenedandrushedtothelifeguards.Hurriedly,thelifeguardsplungedintothewaterwhileJasminewaswaitinganxiouslyashore,herheartpoundingwithfear.TheyreachedSally,who,despiteherminorinjuries,clungtoherboardasifitwereherlifeline.Thejourneybacktoshorewasabattleagainstbothnatureandfright,which,luckily,endedinasuccess.CuddlingwithJasminetightly,Sallywepttearsofregretandrelief.Naturehastaughtheragreatlesson,butitalsocementedthetwogirls’bondthroughthisultimatetestoffriendshipandresilience.【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了莎莉和贾斯敏两人去海滩度假，结果遇上了鲨鱼，莎莉被鲨鱼盯上了，挣扎着逃跑，在海浪的咆哮中发出绝望的尖叫。而贾斯敏迅速做出反应，救了莎莉。【要点解析】1.段落续写：①由第一段首句内容“当莎莉乘着这一天最汹涌的浪头时，一个黑影偷偷地从下面冒了出来”可知，第一段可描写莎莉被鲨鱼盯上的经过以及莎莉逃命。②由第二段首句内容“听到莎莉的尖叫，贾思敏很快弄清楚发生了什么事，冲到救生员那里”可知，第二段可描写贾斯敏救助莎莉的经过以及感悟。2.续写线索：鲨鱼出现——莎莉绝望—