新高考英语III卷读后续写经过老师鼓励爱上写作课件高考英语专题复习

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——读后续写2023年新高考I&II卷:经过老师鼓励，爱上写作1.Readthestory2.Predictthestory3.Writethestory目录情节主题人物Brainstorming故事的三要素story（葛文山，2022）（衡很亨，2023）情节设计主题揭示续写出“与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文”（教育部考试中心，2015）人物塑造Brainstorming读后续写的三大任务1Readthestory阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofailHisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenightDidhegettiredHavedoubtsDidhewanttoquitIsympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.阅读全文，确定背景(Readforsetting)time(When)place(Where)character（Who）

background(What)settingI;mysocialstudiesteacher;PaulRevere;myoldersisterinmiddleschool

（过去时）Afewweekslaterlibrary;teacher’soffice;(classroom;home)Ididnotlovewriting.Writingwassodifficultandpainfulforme.Teacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.

Isaidnowithoutthinking.2.画故事山，构情节线(Readforplots)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningTherecamethenewsaboutthecontest.Mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.climaxIwroteitagain,andagainandagain.

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finallyfinishedit.3.画故事山，构情感线(Readforemotions)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningTherecamethenewsaboutthecontest.Mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.emotionsclimaxI:changed,determinedTeacher:happyandencouragingI:refused;curiousI:encouragedI:persistentI：joyfulTeacher:congraduationIwroteitagain,andagainandagain.Andfinallyfinishedit.I:enjoyed2PredictthestoryI:changed,determinedTeacher:happyandencouragingI：joyfulTeacher:congraduation4.根据故事山，预测情节和主题(Predict

theplotsandtheme)risingactionfallingactionendingplotsbeginningTherecamethenewsaboutthecontest.Mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.emotions衔接句口诀：两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量I:refused;curiousI:encuragedI:persistent主题句Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.Andfinallyfinishedit.I:enjoyedclimaxParagraph1:Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Paragraph2:Iwenttomyteacher’soffice

aftertheawardpresentation.口诀：两段首句定一框，二框二首正能量衔接句1.Whatisthenews2.Duringtheawardpresentation,whatdidtheydo1.Whathappenedintheteacher’soffice2.Aftertheawardpresentation,whatwilltheydo比赛消息传来--作者获奖--高兴--颁奖典礼感谢老师Iexpressedmythankstomyteacher.主题句颁奖后来到老师办公室--老师告诉作者坚持写作--作者表达了对写作的喜爱--作者写作取得了成功--感激老师回应前文/点出主题1.我开始热爱写作。I’mcrazyaboutwritingnow.2.努力有回报--写作获得成功。Yourhardworkwillpayoff(--becomingawriter).3.感恩之心。Showrespectandgratidutetoteacherforguidance.4.根据故事山，预测情节和主题(Predict

theplotsandtheme)5.DraftforwritingwontheprizeteachercongratulatedattendedtheawardpresentationsharedwithteacherIthankedteacherIthankedteacherAfewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.Para1衔接句onthestagebeinformedexcited,proudinvitedtothestageimmediatelypersonally一个角色的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其他角色的一系列反应。ActionResponse主题句teachercongratulatedteacherencouragedMysuccessIthankedIpromisedthereasonforsuccessIwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Para2goodworks--awriterowemysuccesstomyteacherholdingmyhandskeepwritingdon’tlikebeforetrymybesttowrite一个角色的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其他角色的一系列反应。5.DraftforwritingActionResponse3WritethestoryTip1forwriting口诀：人物时态和事件，语言特色不要变58细节添加法Tip2forwritingToshowin3aspects:①Bodylanguage②Facialexpression③Voice​Toshow,nottotell.(王初明“写长法”)Telling:Hewasdelighted.他很高兴。Showing:bodylanguage+facialexpression肢体语言+面部表情Hewassodelightedthathealmostjumpedup,withtearsfillinghiseyes.他高兴得几乎跳了起来，热泪盈眶。Tip2forwritingToshow,nottotell.(王初明“写长法”)Tip3forwriting语言协同：创造性的模仿（原文风格）原文:·WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,

“Great.Now,writeitagain.”写作:·Holdingmyhands,hesaid,“Congratulations!Youareagoodwriter,sokeepwriting.”Tip3forwriting语言协同：创造性的模仿（原文风格）原文:Isympathizedimmediately.写作:IwassohappytohearthenewsthatIimmediatelyshareditwithmyteacher.评分标准参考小试身手请你将自己的习作写在题目的横线上。Paragraph1:

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________参考范文Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.IwasinformedthatIwonthefirstprizeinthewritingcontestandthattherewouldbeanawardpresentationintwodays.IwassohappytohearthenewsthatIimmediatelysharedit