适用于新高考新教材广西专版2025届高考英语一轮总复习写作专项提升第二部分读后续写课件新人教版

第二部分读后续写英语写作专项提升读后续写要求考生在一段350词以内的语言材料基础上,根据该材料内容和所给段落开头语进行续写,将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接且情节和结构完整的150词左右的短文。读后续写除了要求学生掌握丰富的词汇和句式外,还注重内容构思和情节衔接的能力。读后续写是一种将阅读和写作紧密结合的综合语言能力测试题。读是输入,要求考生能提取有效的文本信息;写是输出,要求考生将有效的文本信息组合并且做出合乎逻辑的推测,运用和原文文本一致的语言风格进行写作。此外,考生还要有语篇结构意识,续写的两段文字需要和原文及段首句保持逻辑上的一致性和语篇的连贯性。一、能力要求1.把握短文关键信息和语言特点的能力学生需要掌握所给短文的主要内容,清楚其关键词和语言结构的使用情况,并通过续写短文表现出来。2.语言运用的能力要准确、恰当使用词汇和语言结构,能够根据内容需要使用较为高级的词汇和语言结构。3.对语篇结构的把控能力考查对上下文逻辑关系的掌握情况,续写的短文应语句连贯、表达有序。4.创造性思维能力学生所续写的短文要具有较丰富的内容,包含详细和生动的情景、态度和感情的描述。二、选材特点读后续写的话题贴近生活,有一定趣味性,选材多以故事为主,一般涉及以下内容:◆亲情、友情类(如2021新高考Ⅰ卷·双胞胎为妈妈准备早餐;2021浙江卷·理解父母之不易,上交工资;2020浙江1月卷·主人与宠物狗之间的深厚感情):侧重人物性格、心理、情绪描写。◆助人为乐类(如2020新高考Ⅰ卷·三个孩子用爆米花帮助另一个孩子):侧重人物性格、动作描写。◆个人经历类(如2020浙江卷·熊口脱险):侧重动作、环境描写。三、评分标准◆各档次的给分范围和要求档次描述第七档(22—25分)——创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容,富有逻辑性,续写完整,与原文情境融洽度高;——使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达流畅,语言错误少,且完全不影响理解;——自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间衔接手段,全文结构清晰,前后呼应,意义连贯档次描述第六档(18—21分)——创造了比较丰富、合理的内容,比较有逻辑性,续写比较完整,与原文情境融洽度较高;——使用了比较多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达比较流畅,有个别错误,但不影响理解;——比较有效地使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯档次描述第五档(15—17分)——创造了基本合理的内容,有一定的逻辑性,续写基本完整,与原文情境相关;——使用了比较恰当的词汇和语法结构,表达方式不够多样,表达有些许错误,但基本不影响理解;——使用了语句间衔接手段,全文结构比较清晰,意义比较连贯第四档(11—14分)——创造了基本完整的故事内容,但有的情节不够合理或逻辑性不强,与原文情景基本相关;——使用了简单的词汇和语法结构,有部分语言错误和不恰当之处,个别部分影响理解;——尚有语句衔接的意识,全文结构基本清晰,意义基本连贯◆评分原则1.本题总分为25分,按七个档次给分。2.评分时,应主要从内容、词汇语法和篇章结构三个方面考虑,具体为:(1)续写内容的质量、完整性以及与原文情境的融洽度;(2)所使用词汇和语法结构的准确性、恰当性和多样性;(3)上下文的衔接和全文的连贯性。3.评分时,先根据作答的整体情况初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来综合衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分。4.评分时还应注意:(1)词数少于120的,酌情扣分。(2)书写较差,以至影响交际的,酌情扣分。(3)单词拼写和标点符号是写作规范的重要方面,评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写和词汇用法均可接受。四、解题步骤第1步

读透文本首先,读透文本材料,确保自己的理解与作者所表达的意义一致。不仅要能读懂字面含义,还要理解文章的隐含意义,并理清文章的脉络和框架。然后,要快速地理清原文的人物和事件。我们可根据when、where、who、what、why、how来理清文本的内容和故事情节的发展脉络,提炼故事的主要事件。第2步

构思情节根据两个续写段落的首句,构思出与上下文连贯,内容充实、引人入胜的故事情节。第一段的续写内容要考虑与上文的融洽衔接,同时要考虑本段和下一段开头语的呼应。总之,第一段要起到搭建本段与前文和后段的桥梁作用。续写的第二段是文章的结尾,除了与续写的第一段的衔接连贯外,还要与全文开头遥相呼应,将感情的真挚、人性的善美、正能量的弘扬表达到位,从而凸显主题,升华精神。通过抒情议论等表达方式表露文章深处蕴含的主题、人物感情以及人生哲理,让文章完美收尾。第3步

打磨写作在具体续写时,我们应对所罗列的要点进行筛选、整合、打磨,让文章出彩。首先,考虑与原文语言风格的一致。观察有无直接引语、各类从句、特殊句型、非谓语动词的灵活运用等。通过模仿创新,提高与原文的协调性,使用多样的句式、结构和有效的衔接词,力求在各个语言层次的表达风格上与原文保持一致。同时,确保语言运用的正确、生动、形象。根据情节需要,对语言加以润色,使用更加准确、具体和生动的动词、形容词和副词等,让人物更加鲜明,让故事更加生动。恰当地使用细节词可以具体、生动地反映出事物的真实特点,能够让读者感受作者独特的思想和情感的变化。第4步

认真誊写最后誊写时,字迹要工整,卷面要清晰。同时认真检查时态、人称等内容,确保没有错误。典例示范阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。“Ada!Milk!”Mamacalled.ItwasAda’sturntogetmilk.Adasighedandshutherfirst-aidbook.Herheadachedfromreadinginthedimmorninglight,buthowelsecouldshelearn?Adatiedthecowclosetoatree.Somewheredownthemountain,somevolunteerdoctorswereteachingmedicalskillstovillagenurses.AdaheardDoctorBettydriveoffhoursago.“Sheshouldhavetakenmewithher.ShethinksI’mtooyoung,butshe’swrong.Iamalready16!”Adathought.AdacarriedthemilkbacktoMama,andthenwandereduptheroad.Roy,avillageboy,gotadonkey,andsomekidsgatheredaroundtoseeit.Roywasalwaysdoingsomethingtogetattention.Hewastryingtostandontheanimal’sbareback.“Nowondertheydon’ttrustkidswithanythingimportant,”Adathought,sighing.Shehadjustturnedawaywhensheheardathudandafewscreams.Roylayonthegroundnearbymoaninginpain.Thedonkeystoodseveralmetersaway.“Roy!”Thekidsnearbyrantowardshim.“GetBetty,”onesaid.Adashookherhead.“Betty’sgonetothecity.”Theotherkidsseemedfrozen.AdarantowhereRoywaslying.Shedroppedtoherkneesonthedustyroad.“Roy!Canyouhearme?”Roymoanedinagony.Adasawthatoneofhislegswascrooked,bentalittlesidewaysbetweenthekneeandtheankle.Abrokenleg!Sherememberedwhatthefirst-aidbookhadsaidaboutbrokenlegs:ifthereisnoambulance,straightenthebonebeforemovingthevictim.Therecertainlywouldn’tbeanyambulancehere.Adalookedbackuptheroad.Theotherkidswerestillstandingthere,watching.“Victor!”Adacalledtooneoftheboys.“GoandgetRoy’smama,andfindsomeonewithatruck.”Sheturnedtotheothers.“Givemeyourshirts.Weneedsomethingtotiehislegwith.”注意:续写词数应为150左右;Adathenfoundastrongstick,whichshewouldusetokeephislegstraight.

Thenextday,BettycametoAda’shome.

续写步骤第一步:归纳文本大意,明确叙述意图。Ada是一个16岁的女孩,她想跟着村里的志愿者医生Betty学习医学,却被Betty以年纪太小为由拒绝了。一天,淘气顽皮的Roy从毛驴背上摔了下来,摔断了腿。然而,医生Betty不在村里,周围没有一个会实施急救的医疗人员。情急之下,Ada准备按照急救书上的知识给Roy简单包扎,并让小伙伴去叫人来帮忙。Ada对Roy实施急救,得到了Betty的肯定,Ada的热心行为应该得到表扬。本文旨在讲述一个学有所用,追求梦想的故事,因而续写部分应与该文章写作意图一致。第二步:根据段落开头语,确定续写方向。根据续写第一段开头语中的“astrongstick”“tokeephislegstraight”可猜测,续写第一段应描写Ada用硬棍对Roy进行急救的过程。根据材料中的

“GoandgetRoy’smama,andfindsomeonewithatruck.”可知,在该段内容中可以添加

Roy的妈妈对Ada表示感谢,最后上车前往医院等细节描写。根据续写第二段开头语中的“BettycametoAda’shome”,结合原文第三段情节可预测,续写第二段应该描述Betty对Ada的认可,同意Ada去上医学课,教她医学知识等方面的内容。第三步:根据关键信息,确定续写细节。根据以上已知关键信息,可以勾勒出以下细节:Ada对Roy进行包扎并进行心理安慰,Roy的妈妈赶来并感谢Ada,Roy被送往医院。Betty表扬了Ada的行为,并允许Ada跟自己学医。Ada长大后当了医生。第四步:调整写作语言,完成读后续写。原文有大量的动作描写,也有环境和心理描写。在调整语言时,可以通过各种准确的词汇描写Roy受伤的痛苦、Ada的具体动作和人物形象。【参考范文】Ada

then

found

a

strong

stick,which

she

would

use

to

keep

his

leg

straight.ShegentlywrappedtheshirtaroundRoy’sbrokenlegandthestick.Roywasclearlyinalotofpainandhisclothesweresoakedwithsweat.AdatriedtocomfortRoy,“Iknowit’shurt.Holdon.You’llbetakentothehospitalimmediately.”ThencameRoy’smama,followedbyavillagerdrivingatruck.Roy’smotherrantoAdaandheldAda’shands,“Thankyou,Ada,”shesaid.AdahelpedthemgetRoyintothetruck.Afterthat,theydrovedownthehillsidetothehospital.The

next

day,Betty

came

to

Ada’s

home.“Iheardwhatyoudid.Goodgirl!”Bettypraised.“Youkeptcalminanemergency.Thatmeansalotforsavingpeople.”Adasmiledtoher.“MayIgotothemedicalclassnow?I’malready16!”Adaaskedeagerly.Bettynodded,“Sure.NowIknowyouhavemedicaltalentsandyou’llbeagooddoctor.CometomorrowandIwillteachyoumedicalskills.”Yearslater,Adabecameasurgeonandshealwaysfeltproudatthethoughtofthisincident.微技能1读出有效信息归纳文本大意记叙文归纳主旨大意的常用方法通常是找出记叙文的六要素,即:时间、地点、人物和事情的起因、经过、结果,并将它们概括表达为“什么人/物在什么时间/地点做了什么事,最终结果如何”。把握文本大意非常重要。只有把握了文本大意才能确保自己的理解与作者所表达的意义一致,确保续写的内容和原有内容在逻辑上的一致。推断记叙文叙述意图的常用方法是提问法,首先问自己“本文的中心话题是什么?”然后问自己通过上述六要素及其叙述手法的分析,“作者向读者传达了有关该话题的什么情或理?”或“作者想让读者有什么样的感受或体验?”。典例示范(2021·新高考Ⅰ卷)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。A

MOTHER’S

DAY

SURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6am.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennaputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意:续写词数应为150左右;Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

写作思路1.明确故事6要素•发生时间:onthemorningofMother’sDay•发生地点:athome•主要人物:thetwins,theirfather,theirmother•事情的起因:tocelebrateMother’sDay•事情的经过:ThetwinsmadeFrenchtoastandchickenporridgeandbroughtMumthebreakfastinbed.•事情的结果:Mumwasmoved.Itwasthebestbreakfastshehadeverhad.2.归纳文本大意母亲节来临之前,双胞胎计划给母亲一个惊喜,那就是为母亲做一顿早餐。早上闹钟一响他们就悄悄地下楼来到厨房。他们要熬鸡肉粥,煎法式吐司。但是,由于锅太热,面包一放进去就糊了;熬粥的锅蒸汽往外喷,粥溢出来扑灭了火;Jeff想清理干净炉灶,结果烫伤了手。故事由一开始的顺顺利利,发展到后来出现了各种问题。3.明确续写意图本文是一篇表达亲情的文章,根据文本大意可推断出,本文的叙述意图是通过详细描述双胞胎为妈妈准备早餐的过程,描绘一个饱含亲情的温馨场面。【参考范文】As

the

twins

looked

around

them

in

disappointment,their

father

appeared.Onelookandheknewwhattheywereupto.Seeingtheircrestfallenfaces,hetoldthemtocleanupthekitchenwhilehehelpedthemmakebreakfastforMother.Thetwinscheeredupanddidastold.Withinanhour,thekitchenwascleaned,andFathermadesomeeggsandwichesandcookedsomeoatporridge.Thenhesneakedbacktobed.Meanwhile,thetwinspreparedthebreakfasttray,addedacardtheyhadmadeandwalkedoutofthekitchen.The

twins

carried

the

breakfast

upstairs

and

woke

their

mother

up.Theyhuggedherandyelled“HappyMother’sDay,dearMummy!”Motherhuggedthetwins.Hereyeswidenedatthesightofthebreakfasttray.SheshookFatherwhowaspretendingtosnore.Hefeignedastonishmentwhenhesawthebreakfast.Motherbitintoasandwichandsaiditwasthebestbreakfastshehadevertasted.Jeffimmediatelywantedtohaveabite.Jennacaughtherfather’seyeandtheywinkedateachothersecretly.【范文赏析】该范文完全是在所给材料的文本大意和叙述意图的基础上进行续写的。续写中围绕主要人物thetwins的活动过程展开。语言生动形象,内容具体,有丰富的词汇,能用生动的语言刻画细节,例如“SheshookFatherwhowaspretendingtosnore.”;使用了准确连续的动作,如huggedherandyelled;描写了丰富生动的表情,如Hereyeswidened,winkedateachothersecretly等;进行了恰当的心理活动描写,如feignedastonishment,这些都使文中人物活灵活现。该文句子结构丰富多样,长短句结合,使用了具体的语言。根据语言环境,恰当使用复合句,例如“Motherbitintoasandwichandsaiditwasthebestbreakfastshehadevertasted.”,适当增加直接引语,使衔接过渡十分流畅,文章内容充实饱满。总之,该范文创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容,富有逻辑性,续写完整,与原文情境融洽度高。热点演练(2023·湖北武汉高三5月质量检测)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。Jacklivedinasmallvillagesurroundedbyforestsandhehadalwaysbeenfascinatedbyanimalsandoftenspenthisfreetimewanderingaroundthewoods,observingthem.Oneday,whilewanderingthroughtheforest,Jackchanceduponagroupofdeereatinggrasspeacefullyinaclearing(空地).Asheapproachedthem,theyrushedaway,frightenedbyhispresence.Jackfeltsadthattheanimalswereafraidofhim,andhedecidedtochangeit.Overthenextfewweeks,Jackvisitedtheclearingeveryday,sittingquietlyandpatiently,observingthedeerfromadistance.Slowlybutsurely,thedeergrewaccustomedtohispresenceandstartedtoapproachhimandallowhimtopetthem.Jackwasthrilledthathehadgainedtheirtrust.Inspiredbyhissuccess,Jackstartedtoexploretheforestmoreandmore,meetingdifferentanimalsalongtheway.Heencounteredafamilyofrabbits,apackofwolves,andevenagroupofbears.Althoughhewasinitiallyscaredofthebears,hesoonrealizedthattheywerejustascuriousabouthimashewasaboutthem.Jackstartedtobringfoodfortheanimals,andtheystartedtoseehimasafriend.Hewouldsitwiththemforhours,watchingthemplayandinteractwitheachother.Helearnedsomuchabouttheirbehaviorandhabits,andhefeltadeepconnectionwiththem.Oneday,whilehewassittingwiththerabbits,Jackheardaloudnoiseinthebushes.Hewasafraidthatitmightbeapredator(捕食者),buttohissurprise,asmallfoxemergedfromthebushes.Thefoxwasstrugglingtowalk,andJackcouldseethatitwasinjured.Withouthesitation,Jackapproachedthefoxslowly,tryingnottoscareit.Hesawthatthefoxhadathorn(刺)stuckinitspaw,anditwasinalotofpain.Jackknewhehadtohelpthefox,buthedidn’twanttohurtitfurther.注意:续写词数应为150左右。Hesatdownnexttothefoxandstartedtalkingtoitinasoftvoice.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Ashegrewolder,Jack’sloveforanimalsgrewstronger._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________He

sat

down

next

to

the

fox

and

started

talking

to

it

in

a

soft

voice.Hegentlystrokeditsfurand,afterafewminutes,managedtopullthethornout.Thefoxlickedhishandgratefullyandstaredathimwithitsbig,browneyes.Fromthatdayon,thefoxwouldfollowJackeverywherehewent.Jack’sfriendshipwiththeanimalsoftheforestwasthetalkofthevillage.Peoplewouldoftenseehimwanderingaroundwithapackofwolvesorsittingwithafamilyofbears.Theywereamazedbyhisabilitytobefriendanimalsthatweresupposedtobewildanddangerous.As

he

grew

older,Jack’s

love

for

animals

grew

stronger.Herealizedthatanimalswerenotjustpetsorcreaturestobehunted,buttheywerehisfriendsandcompanions.Hestartedvolunteeringatananimalshelter,wherehewouldhelpcareforinjuredandabandonedanimals.Healsoworkedwithlocalconservationgroupstoprotecttheforestsandwildlifeinhisarea.Jack’sloveforanimalshadbroughthimasenseofpurposeandfulfillmentthathehadneverexperiencedbefore.Heknewthathehadmadeadifferenceinthelivesofmanyanimals,andhewasgratefulforthefriendshipandcompanionshipofhisanimalfriends.微技能2解读段落首句推测续写情节提炼出文本大意和叙述意图后,结合所给短文的情境和两个续写段落首句中相关的要点,从5W的角度想象续写部分的主要内容,预测故事走向。1.由于两个续写段落的首句已给出,因此预测续写第一段的情节相对第二段较为明确。而第二段的续写情节较为开放,需结合原文的人物性格特征和故事发展脉络大胆预测。2.续写情节的预测,必须密切结合原文的情境、文本大意、叙述意图和核心情节。典例示范(2020·新高考Ⅰ卷)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy—hisnamewasBernard—hadinterestedherverymuch.“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon’tseewhathecando.”Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,”saidClara.“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”“SodoI,”saidHarry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish(完成).”Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.“Itellyouwhatwecando,”saidJohn.“YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn(爆米花),andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”注意:续写词数应为150左右;WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

写作思路根据段落开头语,确定续写方向的前提是要弄清楚所给材料的文本大意和叙述意图。【文本大意】善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里,他们想帮助一个贫困的家庭。那家的男主人生病卧床,女主人要照顾丈夫因此无法外出赚钱,生活十分困难,家中的小男孩Bernard想挣钱养家,但不知道做什么事情。后来,Meredith太太的孩子John想出了一个好主意:制作爆米花让Bernard去卖。【叙述意图】本文是一篇关于助人为乐的文章,根据文本大意可推断出,本文的叙述意图是通过详细描述Meredith一家制作和卖爆米花帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境的过程,来宣扬助人为乐的传统美德。【续写方向】根据续写第一段所给开头语“WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.”可知,Meredith太太也认为这是个好主意。很快,孩子们就忙着爆玉米,而他们的妈妈则出去买纸袋。当她回来时,她把Bernard带来了。Bernard很高兴参加这项工作,他说:“好主意!”他们一起工作,直到把准备好的玉米全部爆开,装满纸袋,放在篮子里。这里需注意与续写第二段首句呼应。根据续写第二段所给开头语“Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.”可知,一切就绪后,Bernard开始了他的新生意。比预期的要快得多,他带着一个空篮子回来了。他这辈子从来没有挣过这么多钱。几个星期以来,Meredith一家继续向Bernard提供爆米花。人们开始关注这个“爆米花小男孩”,每周他至少有50美分可以带回家,这对他和他的家人来说是一笔可观的收入。所有这些都要归功于约翰想出的好主意。【参考范文】When

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one,too.Verysoon,thechildrenwerebusypoppingthecorn,whiletheirmotherwentouttobuythepaperbags.Whenshecameback,shebroughtBernardwithher.Bernardwasverygladtojoinintheworkandsaid,“Sogoodanidea!I’lltryrightnow.”Theyworkedtogetheruntilallthecorntheypreparedwasallpopped,thepaperbagsfilledandarrangedinthebasket.With

everything

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business.Muchsoonerthanexpected,hereturnedwithanemptybasket.Hehadneverearnedsomuchmoneybeforeinhislife.Formanyweeks,theMeredithfamilycontinuedtoofferpopcorntoBernard.Peoplebegantowatchforthe“littlepopcornboy”,andeveryweekhehadatleastfiftycents,asignificantincomeforhimandhisfamily,totakehome.AllofthiswasthankstothegoodideathatJohncameupwith.【范文赏析】该范文完全是在所给材料的文本大意和叙述意图的基础上进行续写的。续写中围绕主要人物theMeredithfamily和Bernard展开,对文本大意中的“后来,Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意——制作爆米花,让Bernard去卖爆米花”进行了合理的拓展,该范文详细描述了Meredith一家如何通过制作爆米花和让Bernard卖爆米花帮助他的家庭摆脱困境,充分体现了所给材料的叙述意图“宣扬助人为乐的传统美德”。总之,该范文创造了新颖、丰富、合理的内容,富有逻辑性,续写完整,与原文情境融洽度高。热点演练阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。Iwokeat5:30a.m.afterarestlessnight’ssleep.Islowlyunzippedthetentdoortoinspectthenewday.Justlikeyesterday,thewindhaddropped.ItwasanotherbeautifulArcticday.Icrawledoutofmysleepingbagunwillingly.Iwasnormallyamorningpersonbuttheintensecoldoutsidemadethatmorningmostunappealing.Anyhow,itwastimetogreetCharlieandstarttheday.MydogCharliewasupanditwasbouncingupanddownattheendofhischainlookingwellrested.Ipouredwhatlookedlikeapoundofdogfoodintohisbowl.Steppingoutofthetent,Ilookedaroundforbearsortracksandsawnone.Itwouldneverbeagoodthingtomeetapolarbear.AnInuit(因纽特人)oncetoldmethatIshouldwatchoutforpolarbears.HesaidthatifImetapolarbear,Ishouldkeepthefollowingrulesinmind.First,keepeyecontact,movesidewaysorslightlyforward,neverbackward,andstaycalm.Donotshowfearandstandbesidealargeobjecttomakeyourselfappearaslargeaspossible.Weaponslikeflaregun(信号枪)arenecessary,butdonotshootunlessforcedto.Don’twoundabear,oryou’llmakeitevenmoredangerous,andneverrun.Itwasonlysixo’clock,soIdecidedtohavealeisurelybreakfastofabowlofmilkpowder,coconutflakes,andbuttermixedwithwarmwater.Isatonmysled(雪橇)toenjoymyfirstbreakfastoftheexpeditiononlytofindthatafterthethirdspoonfulitwasfrozen.Somuchforleisurelybreakfasts!Iaddedmorewarmwaterandatetherestasfastaspossible.SuddenlyIheardadeep,longgrowlcomingfromCharlie’sthroat.InaflashIlookedathimandtheninthedirectioninwhichhewasstaring.Itwasafemalepolarbearfollowedbytwocubs(幼崽)slowly,purposefully,towardme.Theyweretwohundredyardsaway.注意:续写词数应为150左右;Withmyheartquickening,IgrabbedmyloadedflaregunandcarefullywalkedsidewaysafewstepstoCharlie.

Withouttakingmyeyesoffthebear,Iledhimtothesledandfastenedhischaintoarope.Thebearwasgettingcloser.RememberingalltheInuithadtoldme,Ifiredawarningshottothebear’sleft.Butonshecame.Then,Ifiredaflarerightinfrontofher.Shestoppedandlookedatme.ThenshefixedhereyesonCharlie,whowasbarkingwildly.Shelookedbackathercubs,waitedforthemtocatchup,andfinallymovedawaytowardmyright.Thewholeeventlastedfifteenminutesbutseemedyearslong.

MyhandswereshakingasIstoodstill,watchingthethreeslowlymovenorth.Butdespitethefear,Icouldfeeldeepdowninsidearealsatisfaction.InowknewthatIcouldstanduptoabearinthewildandstaycalmenoughtofunctionandstillrememberthewordsfromtheInuit.WithCharlie’shelpIhadpassedmyfirsttest.微技能3抓住关键信息确定后续细节为使续写部分情节构思有依据,首先要找出原文中的关键信息。大多数关键信息和情景模式有关,表示时间、地点和人/物等。1.将关键信息结合到预测的情节中,展开合理的符合故事逻辑的拓展,勾勒出更加丰富的故事细节,然后罗列出即将续写的故事要点。2.不可加入新的人物、地点或事件等,或对次要人物、事件大费笔墨,否则会造成喧宾夺主、偏离主题的后果。典例示范阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。Thoughitisoneofthefadedmemoriesofmylifetoday,therearetimeswhenIrememberhisfaceclearly,especiallyhiseyes.AshehadyellowspotsonhiseyeswecalledhimSpotty.Hewouldhavebeenastray(流浪)dog,untilhecametome.Iwassevenyearsold.MydadhadjustgotanewjobinNasik.Wehadmovedintoarentedhouse.Itwasrainingveryheavilyonthedaywemoved.Itwasacolddarknight.Wehadourmealandwenttosleep.SomehowinthemidnightIheardsomestrangesoundsoutsidethemaindoor.IgatheredcourageandlookedoutthroughthewindowandIwasreallyamusedwithwhatIsawoutside.Therewasasmallpuppylyingonanolddoormatwhichmymotherhadputoutsidethedoor.Hewaswetandtrembling.Atfirstitwasdifficulttoseethelittleone.Itwastheyellowspotsonhiseyesthatmademerealizehispresence.HewastryingtogetunderthedoormattoavoidthecoldairoutsideandhehadmanagedtogetinasIcouldseeonlyhisheadoutsidethedoormat.Washesickorinjured?Ifeltpityforthepoorsoul.Iwentinandcameoutwithanoldtowel.Iwentneartheinnocentoneandheldthepuppyinmyhandandwipedhimtillhehadbecomedry.Itookhimintomyroomandmadeabedforhimwithawoolenblanketandasmallpillow.Heseemedveryhealthyandcomfortableinhisnewbedashewenttosleepimmediately.Thenextmorning,everyoneinthefamilycametoknowabouttheunusualguest.“Shallwekeephimwithus?”Iquestionedmymum.Likeanyotherparentswould,myparentsfirsttotallyrefusedmyideabutmysisterandIconvincedthemtokeepSpotty.SlowlySpottygotonwitheveryoneandbecameoneofmyfamilymembers.注意:续写词数应为150左右;Oneday,Spottyreturnedfromhisdailywalkwithabrokenleg.

Almostayearlater,onemidnightweheardSpottybarkingbreathlessly.

写作思路【文本大意】因为父亲工作的原因作者搬到一个新地方,遇见了一条流浪狗,在一个又冷又黑的晚上,作者一家收留了这条流浪狗。【叙述意图】本文是一篇关于爱护动物的文章,根据文本大意可推断出,本文的叙述意图是生活中我们要爱护动物,保护受伤的动物,人和动物要和谐相处。【续写方向】根据续写第一段开头语“Oneday,Spottyreturnedfromhisdailywalkwithabroke