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2024年高中英语写作续写短文故事的作文阅读下面材料根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:"BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou'rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis."Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere'shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecomingMystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse'smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse'schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere'shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,"Great.Now,writeitagain."Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn'twin,Iwouldn'tcare.注意:1.续写词数应为150左右;2.请按如下格式作答。Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews._____________________________________________________Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.范文一Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontesttherecamethenews.IreceivedthenewsthatIhadwonthefirstprize!IwassooverwhelmedwithjoyandsurprisethatIalmostjumpedupanddown.Asthedayprogressed,finallyitwastimetoattendtheawardceremony.Steppingontothestage,Ifeltextremelyproudandrelieved,formypersistenteffortshadfinallypaidoff.AsIwasawardedtheprize,apersonwhomeantalottomenaturallycameintomymind.Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Seeingtheprizeinmyhand,hecongratulatedme,saying,"Youhavewonthefirstplace!Youdefinitelydeservedit."AsenseofgratitudewelledupinmeasIheardhisupliftingwords.Hepattedmegentlyontheshoulderandcontinuedinatendervoice,"Keeponwritingandyouwillmakeit."Fromthatdayon,Ithrewmyselfintowritingandwasdeterminedtokeepchallengingmyself.范文二Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontesttherecamethenews.Iwasabouttoforgetitsexistence,newsarrivedthat
Ihademergedvictorious,claimingthetopspot.Overcomewith
anoverwhelmingsenseof
joyanddisbelief,Inearly
leaped
forjoy.Astheeagerlyawaiteddayoftheawardceremonydrewnear,Icouldbarelycontainmyexcitement.Takingcenterstage,
adeepsenseofpride
andfulfillmentwashedoverme,knowingthatmyunwavering
dedication
had
culminated
inthismomentoftriumph.Iwenttomyteacher'sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.
Uponseeingmy
accomplishment,hisfacelitupwithprideasheofferedhisheartfeltcongratulations:"You'vetrulyearnedthisvictory.Yourhardworkand
dedication
havepaidoff."Hiswordsfilledmewithwarmthandgratitude.Withagentlepatontheshoulderandencouragingwords,heimploredmetocontinuewriting,assuringmethatgreatersuccessesawaited.Fromthatmomenton,Iwasmoredeterminedthanevertopourmyheartintomywritingandcontinually
pushmyboundaries.比赛过去了几周,就在我差点忘记它的存在时,传来消息说我获胜了,夺得了第一名。我被一种巨大的喜悦和怀疑所淹没,几乎跳了起来。随着期待已久的颁奖典礼日益临近,我几乎无法抑制自己的兴奋。站在舞台中央,一种深深的自豪和成就感涌上心头,因为我知道我坚定不移的奉献终于在这一刻达到了顶峰。颁奖仪式结束后,我拿着奖品走向老师的办公室。看到我的成就,他的脸上洋溢着骄傲的光芒,向我表示衷心的祝贺:“你真的赢得了这场胜利。你的努力和奉献得到了回报。”他的话让我感到温暖和感激。他轻轻拍了拍我的肩膀,用鼓励的话语恳求我继续写作,向我保证更大的成功在等着我。从那一刻起,我更加坚定地全身心投入写作,不断突破自己的界限。范文一与范文二:优化改写理由供参考1.“Iwasabouttoforgetitsexistence”不仅传达了时间的流逝,还体现了作者的情感变化,从期待到几乎遗忘,为后文的惊喜做了铺垫。2.用“emergedvictorious”代替“wonthefirstprize”,前者更具文学色彩,后者则较为普通。“overcomewithanoverwhelmingsenseofjoyanddisbelief”比“sooverwhelmedwithjoyandsurprise”更具体地描述了作者的情感状态,同时增加了不相信自己获胜的心理描写。3.将“Asdayprogressed,finallyitwastimetoattendtheawardceremony”调整为“Astheeagerlyawaiteddayoftheawardceremonydrewnear”,使句子更符合英语表达习惯,同时强调了作者对颁奖典礼的期待。4.“Takingcenterstage,adeepsenseofprideandfulfillmentwashedoverme”将主语放在句首,突出了作者的感受,使句子更加有力。5.“Hisfacelitupwithpride”增加了对老师表情的描写,使读者能够更直观地感受到老师的喜
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