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Peopleusetheproverb“seeingisbelieving”todescribesituationswhereit’shardtobelievesomethingispossibleifyouhaven’tseenithappen.Iamheretodaytotellyouthattheproverbistrueandtosharewithyouhowagirlandhergrandmothermadeapositivetransformationinacommunity（故事的主线！）.ItwasayearagowhenIwasstudyinglifecyclesinmyscienceclass.Iwroteapaperaboutthelifecycleofthemonarchbutterfly(帝王蝶)andreceivedaperfectscore.Iwassothrilled;IcalledmygrandmotherNanaandtoldhertheexcitingnews.MytalkrecalledmemoriesfromNana’schildhood.“IrememberwhenIwasagirl,”shesaid,“thoseorangeandblackbutterflieswereacommonsight.Comelatesummer,therewouldsuddenlybehundredsofthem,andbeforelongthereweresomanyitfeltlikeyouwerestandinginanorangecloud.”“Itsoundslikeyouwitnessedamigration(迁徙),butwhathappenedtothem?”Iasked.“Tobehonest,I’veneverknown,”Nanaadmitted.“Buttheredoseemtobefewermonarchsaroundtheneighborhood.”NanaandIdecidedtoinvestigate.Thatweekend,wemetatthepubliclibrary.Ourresearchproducedplentyofinformation:somefascinatingandsomeconcerning.Apparently,thenumberofmonarchshasbeenindeclineforthelastseveraldecades.Housingdevelopmentshavedestroyedmuchoftheirhabitat.Someinformationwashopeful,though,likehowconservationists(保护主义者)areworkingtosavethem.Thebestwasthis—itdoesn’ttakelotsofmoneyorequipmenttodoso.Ittakesonlyalittlebitofland,someseeds,anddedicatedpeopletocreatewhat’scalledaMonarchWaystation(驿站).

“WhatifwesetupourownMonarchWaystation?”Isuggested.“We’llneedpeopletohelp.”Nanarespondedimmediatelyanddidn’twastetimetogetstarted.Para1:Thenextday,NanapresentedtheideatohergardenclubandItalkedtomyfriends.衔接句1：情节推进：衔接句2：Para2:NanaandIcreatedablogandfrequentlyupdatedaboutthecommunity’sefforts.衔接句3：情节推进：主题&结尾：朋友们的反应（话语/表情/肢体语言）我们如何齐心协力共同打造MonarchWaystation外界（博客读者）的反响MonarchWaystation项目效果卓越+monarchbutterfly翩翩飞舞盛况如昨——Nana的感想（回扣原文的遗憾）社区/众人齐心协力达成某个目标，人与自然和谐相处我们所取得的初步成效（衔接下一段community’sefforts）

Thenextday,NanapresentedtheideatohergardenclubandItalkedtomyfriends.Manypeoplestartedtoplantflowersintheirgardens.Nana’sgardenclubconvinced使信服thecitygovernmenttoplantabutterflygardennexttothecityfountain.MyfriendsandIspreadleaflets传单/小册子

tellingpeoplehowtobuildMonarchWaystations.Moreandmorepeopletookactiontomakeourcommunitymonarch-friendly.Asspringturnedintosummer,wefoundoureffortsstartedtowork!Afewdozenorangeandblackbutterflieswerespotted发现/看见visitingthewaystations.Assummerprogressed,themonarchsgrewmoreplentiful丰富,多.

NanaandIcreatedablogandfrequentlyupdatedaboutthecommunity’sefforts.Monarchenthusiastsfromacrossthecountycontacteduswiththeirownobservations评论,ideas,andreflections.Thenithappenedonedaywhenthesunwasshiningandtheskywasadeepblue.JustlikeNanaremembered,afewflutteringorangewingssoonbecamehundredsofsoaringbutterflies.Asmonarchssailedaboveandaroundus,Nanacriedtearsofhappinessandgavemeanenormoushug.Itwastrulyaspectacularexperience.NowIknowwhatitmeanstostandinanorangecloudofmonarchs.Iknowwhatpeoplemeanwhentheysay,“seeingisbelieving.”Ilearnthatifwebelieveinsomethingstrongenoughandworktomakeithappen,wewillseeourgoalbecomeareality.高考读后续写分类1．亲子关系、亲情友情（2017.11浙江卷；2020.1浙江卷；2021.1浙江卷；）2．自我完善、自我成长（2021广州一测；2022广州阶段训练；2022广州调研测试）3．奋发梦圆（202010广州阶段测试；2021广州二测）4．爱的礼物（2021年新高考全国卷）5．助人故事/人间温情(2020年新高考卷（山东卷）;2021年八省适应性测试;2022年广二测;)6．野外脱困(201610浙江卷;201706浙江卷;201806浙江卷;202007浙江卷;)1．亲子关系、亲情友情（2017.11浙江卷；2020.1浙江卷；2021.1浙江卷；）1)父亲的爱就像阳光，带给我坚定和热情，使我的意志更加坚定。Myfather'sloveislikethesunshine,whichbringsmefirmnessandenthusiasmsothatmywillisstrengthened.2)母爱是让一个正常人做不可能的事的燃料。Mother‘sloveisthefuelthatenablesanormalhumanbeingtodotheimpossible.3)直到那时我才明白，我们不应该把爱视为理所当然。Onlythendiditdawnonmethatweshouldnevertakeloveforgranted.4)友谊就像萤火虫的光。越暗，光就会越亮。Friendshipislikethelightoffireflies.Thedarkeritis,thebrighterthelightwillbe.1．亲子关系、亲情友情（2017.11浙江卷；2020.1浙江卷；2021.1浙江卷；）1)父亲的爱就像阳光，带给我坚定和热情，使我的意志更加坚定。Myfather'sloveislikethesunshine,whichbringsmefirmnessandenthusiasmsothatmywillisstrengthened.2)母爱是让一个正常人做不可能的事的燃料。Mother‘sloveisthefuelthatenablesanormalhumanbeingtodotheimpossible.3)直到那时我才明白，我们不应该把爱视为理所当然。Onlythendiditdawnonmethatweshouldnevertakeloveforgranted.4)友谊就像萤火虫的光。越暗，光就会越亮。Friendshipislikethelightoffireflies.Thedarkeritis,thebrighterthelightwillbe.1．亲子关系、亲情友情（2017.11浙江卷；2020.1浙江卷；2021.1浙江卷；）【友谊】Thelightofthesettingsunshoneontheboys,witnessingthestartofanewfriendship.夕阳的余晖洒在孩子们的身上，见证了一段新友谊的开始。【感谢母亲】Iamforevergratefultomymother,whohasshapedmewhatIamtoday.我永远感谢我的母亲，是她塑造了今天的我。【感谢父母】Iamsogratefultomyparentsforwhattheydidforme.我非常感谢我的父母为我所做的一切。2．自我完善、自我成长（2021广州一测；2022广州阶段训练；2022广州调研测试）【自信】Embraceeverypossibilityinyourlifeandbelieveinyourself.把握住你生命中的一切可能，相信自己。【远离手机】Withacellphone,wecandoalot.Butwithoutacellphone,alotmorearewaitingtobeexplored.有了手机，我们可以做很多事情。但是没有手机，很多还有更多等待探索【远离网络】Ajourneyinmindisbetterthanthemomentsonline.思想的旅程胜过网上的时刻。【保持冷静】Itturnsoutthatthere’salwaysawayoutofanyplightaslongaswestaycalm.事实证明，只要我们保持冷静，就总有办法摆脱困境。【诚实】NeverbeforeinmylifehaveIsofirmlybelievedhonestyisthebestpolicy.在我的一生中，我从未如此坚定地相信诚实是最好的策略。【过程比结果重要】Itwastheeffortsintheprocessratherthantheresultsthatmattered.重要的是过程中的努力，而不是结果。3．奋发梦圆（202010广州阶段测试；2021广州二测）1.Thereisnoelevatortosuccess,onlystairs.1.通往成功没有电梯，只有楼梯。2.Betheflowerthatblooms,andbutterflieswillcome.4.做那朵盛开的花，蝴蝶就会来。3.Luckiswhathappenswhenpreparationmeetsopportunity.5.当准备遇到机会时会发生运气。4．爱的礼物（2021年新高考全国卷）Familyisauniquegiftthatneedstobeappreciatedandtreasured.5.家庭是一份独特的礼物，需要被欣赏和珍惜。【分享】Theonlywaytomultiplyhappinessistodivideit.增加幸福的唯一方法就是分享幸福。【给予】Therealhappinessofthisworldisnottotakebuttogive.这个世界真正的幸福不是索取而是给予。Givingfromourneedinsteadofourabundanceisjustwhatweneedtodo.5．助人故事/人间温情(2020年新高考卷（山东卷）;2021年八省适应性测试;2022年广二测;)1.HavingheardwhattheMessengershared,thefolkscametounderstandthatitwaskindnessthatkeptthefireburningevenbrighterthanbefore.1.听了使者的分享，人们才明白，是善良让火比以前更旺。2.Fromthatdayon,everytimeImeetsomeon