专题16读后续写之九省联考2024浙江首考真题方法指导与详解-高考英语写作题型全面突破

专题16读后续写之九省联考、2024浙江首考真题方法指导与详解（2024年九省联考）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Lastsummer,Hildaworkedasavolunteerwithdolphintrainersatasealifepark.Herjobwastomakesurethetankswerefreeofanyitemssothatthetrainerscouldtrainthedolphinstofetchspecificitems.However,onedayaftercleaning,oneofthedolphins,Maya,presentedHildawithacandywrapperfromthetank.WhenKatherine,thetrainer,sawthis,sheblamedHildaforhercarelessness.Upsetbutnotdiscouragedbythisevent,HildadecidedtodosomespyingonMaya.Thenextmorning,Hildaarrivedattheparkearly.Sheputonherscubagear(水下呼吸器)andjumpedintothetankforherusual,underwatersweep.Findingnothinginthetank,sheclimbedoutofthewaterjustintimetoseeKatherinejumpinginontheotherside.Afterwhathappenedyesterday,Hildaknewwhatshewasdoing.ShewatchedasKatherineperformedherunderwatersearch,butHildawasn'tsurprisedwhenshesurfacedemptyhanded.Duringthetanksweeps,Mayahadbeenswimmingplayfully,butnowthedolphinstoppedsuddenlyandswamtothebackpartofthetankwherethefilter(过滤)boxwaslocated.Shestuckhernosedownbehindtheboxandthenswamaway.WhatwasMayadoingbackthere?Hildawondered.Shejumpedbackintothewaterandswamovertotakealookbehindthebox,andherquestionwasanswered.HildathenswamacrossthetankfollowingMaya’spathandemergedfromthewatertofindKatherineremovingherscubagear.AsKatherineturnedaround,hermouthdroppedopen.TherewasMayaattheedgeofthetankwithab(梳子)inhermouthwaitingforhertreat.“Maya!Wheredidyougetthat?”demandedKatherine,takingthebandthrowingherafish.“Iknowwhereshegotit,”declaredHildaclimbingoutofthetankwithahandfulofitemsstillwetfromtheirwatery,restingplace.“What’sallthis?”Katherineasked,obviouslyconfused.注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【文本解析】1.厘清人物及性格特点WhowhatcharacteristicsHilda:海洋公园志愿者负责清理海豚训练的水箱。聪明、观察细致Katherine:海豚训练师起初因为误会责备Hilda，后来意识到Hilda的洞察力和玛雅的特殊行为。严厉的Maya:海豚喜欢收集物品，并将其藏在过滤箱后面聪明2.运用故事山来梳理文本情节发展：Opening:Hilda作为志愿者在海洋公园工作，负责清理海豚水箱。Buildup:因为Maya呈现了一个糖果包装纸，Katherine错误地责备Hilda粗心没打扫干净。Hilda决定弄清真相，通过观察，最终发现了海豚收集和隐藏物品的行为。Climax:Hilda向Katherine揭示了Maya的秘密并展示了海豚收集的物品。Resolution:Katherine意识到了Hilda的细致观察和Maya的特殊行为，解开了两人之间的误解。Ending:故事以Katherine对Hilda的赞赏和对Maya行为的新理解结束，突出了观察、理解和团队合作的重要性。3.段落构思由第一段段首句“海达微笑着说那是玛雅的秘密哦”和第二段段首句“现在凯瑟琳明白事实真相了”可知，第一段主要描写海达揭示秘密，凯瑟琳的反应以及解释秘密如何被发现的三部分。第二段主要描写凯瑟琳向海达道歉，并对玛雅行为表示理解，并突出观察、理解以及团队合作的重要性这三部分。【范文赏析】“ThisisMaya'ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.【真相大白】Inherhand,shedisplayedtheitemsshehadretrievedbehindthefilterbox.“She'sbeenkeepingthesefromthetank,notme.”【凯瑟琳反应】Katherine'seyeswidenedassheexaminedthesmallpileofobjectsthatMayahadcollected.【秘密发现的过程】HildaexplainedhowshehadwatchedMayacleverlyhidetheitemsaway,turningthetankintoherownlittlecollectionspot.【冰释前嫌】ThetensionintheairdissolvedasKatherinerealizedthatHilda'sdedicationhadrevealedMaya'splayfulhabit,notamistakeonherpart.NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.【凯瑟琳态度的转变】ShelookedatMaya,thenatHilda,andhersternexpressionsoftenedintoasmile.“Ioweyouanapology,Hilda.You'veshowngreatinitiativeandcare,”shesaid,hertonefilledwithnewfoundrespect.【理解万岁】Together,theywatchedMayaperformhertricks,understandingnowthatthedolphin'sbehaviorwasnotatrainingissuebutasignofherintelligenceandcuriosity.【突出主题】Thedayendednotwithblame,butwithlaughterandasenseofteamwork,astheyallenjoyedMaya'scleverantics.【点睛】词汇积累：eyeswidened瞪大眼睛herstern（严厉的）expressionsoftenedintoasmile严厉的表情化为微笑oweyouanapology欠你一声道歉asenseofteamwork团队合作意识Blamesb.for因...责备某人mouthdroppedopen（由于吃惊）张大嘴巴[高分句型1]Katherine'seyeswidenedassheexaminedthesmallpileofobjectsthatMayahadcollected.【无灵主语、定语从句】[高分句型2]ThetensionintheairdissolvedasKatherinerealizedthatHilda'sdedicationhadrevealedMaya'splayfulhabit,notamistakeonherpart.【无灵主语、宾语从句】[高分句型3]ShelookedatMaya,thenatHilda,andhersternexpressionsoftenedintoasmile.【无灵主语，且创新使用了soften】[高分句型4]Thedayendednotwithblame,butwithlaughterandasenseofteamwork,astheyallenjoyedMaya'scleverantics（滑稽）.【无灵主语，not...but,endwith】（2024年浙江首考）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Evaspentthefirstweekofhighschooltryingtokeepherheadabovewater.Oneofthemajorheadachesforherwasfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Itwasasixstorybuilding.Oneachfloor,hallwaysstretchedinfourdirections,leadingtoclassrooms,laboratories,andteachers'offices.Somewhereinthebuilding,therewasalsoalibrary,acafeteria,andagym.Havingapoorsenseofdirection,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.Allthedifferenthallwaysandroomsweretoomuchtothinkabout,letalonemittomemory.Shedecidedthatshewouldmemorizewhereherclasseswereandthenpretendthattherestoftheplacedidn’texist.InherfastP.E.class,EvawasshockedwhenCoachPittannouncedthateveryonehadtorunonemilearoundthetrackoutside.Shesearchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsofpanic.Therewasnothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.ToEva,"amile"wasusedtodescribelongdistances.Itwastenmilesfromherhometohergrandfather's,andthatalwaysseemedlikealongway,eveninacar!WhenCoachPittblewhiswhistle（哨子）,Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust.However,whilesomeofherclassmatesedgedahead,othersactuallyfellbehind."It'sjustthebeginning,"shethought."I'lleinlastforsure."SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheartpoundingandlegsshaking.Feelingdesperate,Evastartedusingamindtrickonherself.Shestoppedthinkingabouttheword"mile."Instead,shefocusedonreachingtheshadoweastonthetrackbyanoaktreeupahead.Thensheconcentratedonjoggingtothespotwherethetrackcurved(弯）.Afterthat,shetriedtoseeifshecouldpleteherfirstlap.Onelapturnedintotwo,thenthree,thenfour.注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1:WhenCoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【文本解析】1.主题语境：人与自我；面对恐惧、适应新环境、自我成长和克服困难文本大意：Eva在高中的第一周艰难适应。对于没有方向感的她来说，一个重大难题是在一所楼高六层，每层有四个方向走廊的学校建筑中找到自己的路，同时体育课上跑步也是一个巨大挑战。2.故事山梳理故事情节Beginning:Eva开始了她的高中生活，在这个新环境中她艰难适应。最大的挑战之一是在巨大的学校建筑中找到自己的路。建筑物庞大，使她感到迷茫。Buildup:Eva在巨大的学校建筑中迷路的问题逐渐升级，她决定只记住自己上课的地方。此时，体育课上的一个新挑战出现了：教练要求每个人跑一英里。Eva对跑步感到极度恐惧，认为自己无法完成。Climax：跑步的时候，Eva开始感到绝望。然而，她使用了一个心理技巧：不再想象一英里到底有多长，而是专注于逐渐实现小目标。她的心情由恐惧慢慢转变为自信，一圈又一圈地坚持。Resolution:Eva最终成功地完成了跑步，并意外地获得了教练的表扬。她意识到，她所害怕的距离实际上更多是心理层面的挑战。她决定将这种分解任务的方法应用到学校的探索上，逐步熟悉整个建筑。Ending:Eva通过逐步攻克学校建筑的复杂性，成功地适应了新环境。故事以她的成长和自信的提升结束，她从一开始的迷茫和恐惧变得更加自信和适应。这个故事不仅是关于学习和适应的，还强调了面对挑战时心理策略的重要性。【范文赏析】WhenCoachPittsaid"Nicework"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.Despiteherinitialdoubts,shehadnotonlypletedthemilebuthadalsokeptpacewithmanyofherclassmates.Herheartstillpoundedfromtheexertion(n．费力；尽力）,andherlegsfeltlikejelly（紧张得发软）,butasenseofacplishmentsurgedthroughher.Breakingthedauntingdistanceintosmallerachievabletargetshadmadetheimpossiblepossible.Sherealizedthatfocusingonimmediate,reachablegoals,likethenextbendinthetrackortheshadowofatree,haddistractedherfromtheoverwhelmingideaofthemile.Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.Insteadofbeingdauntedbyitsenormity,shebrokeitdownintomanageablesections.First,shefocusedonmemorizingtheroutefromtheentrancetoherfirstclass.Gradually,sheaddedotherlandmarksthelibrary,thecafeteria,thegymtohermentalmap.Dayby