读后续写如何进行动作描写导学案高三英语一轮复习

读后续写：如何进行动作描写读后续写的写作过程中，成功的动作描写，可以交代人物的身份、地位，可以反映人物心理活动的进程，可以表现人物的性格特征。一、精选动词，精准描述在描写动作时，要准确抓住人物在特定情景中行动的特点，所选动作要体现人物特征，比如年龄、性格、性别、身份、环境、情景等。BodyWordbank(verb.)mouthShout,cry,yell,scream,exclaim,whisper,murmur,mumble,mutter,sob,stammer,stutter,howl,growl,snarl/smile,laugh,grin,

beam,smirk,giggle,chuckle/emphasize/stress/tell/add/explain/admit/reply=respond/praise/plain/fort...footrush,dash,charge,jog,trot,gallop,bolt/makeone'swayto/wander/

travel/

march/staggerjump/springtoone'sfeet/standstill/

trip/drag/crawl...hand/armhit,beat,tap,pat/drag,draw,pull/catch,grab,grasp,seize/cast,throw/lift,raise,carry,take/hug,embrace/reach(out)...试比较：1.

Werandowntotheshoreintimetoseeanenormousanimaloppositeus

jumping

outofthewaterandthen

dropping

downagain.2.

Werandowntotheshoreintimetoseeanenormousanimaloppositeus

throwing

itselfoutofthewaterandthen

crashing

downagain.

（B7U3UndertheSea)句2更能让读者感受到OldTom的重量和动作的力量。场景小练：Henry

jumpedinto

theriverand

saved

Robert.

Hearingthescreams,Henry

______________

totheriverside,

____________

hisclothesand___________

thewaterwithouthesitation.He

________

Robertjustashewassinkingthelasttime.Bygreateffort,andwithmuchdangertohimself,he

________

Roberttotheshore.二、结合修饰成分让动词更具体生动

（主要为副词和介词短语）adverbs

quietly/shyly/slightly/softly/gently/attentively/mildly/fortably/modestly/tightly/cheerfully/hopefully/helplessly/desperately/fiercely/violently/swiftly/firmly/gratefully/swiftly...in+n.inconfusion/admiration/excitement/shock/sorrow/inalow/

weak/

sweet)voice...with+情感n.withdelight/pleasure/excitement/satisfaction/anger/fear...with+身体部位withitssharpeyes/hershakyhand/herpalelips..with+n./pron.+宾补withhishandstrembling...牛刀小试：1.'Willtherebeanyfoodleftover?'heasked

.（满怀希望地）2.Hewalked

（迅速地）towardshomedownthedarkstreet.3.Theywaitedthere

（不安地）foralongtime.4.Hefoughttheillness

（勇敢地）

anddetermination.5.Theywatchedtheexperiment

（非常感兴趣地）.6.

场景小练：(浙江2018.6)Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.“Whatalovelyrabbit!”Ishouted

____________________________（眼睛因极度兴奋而闪闪发光）.ItwasquitedifferentfromthoseIsawinourcity,thus

(立刻)stimulatingmyinterest.

Dad

wasalsostunnedbythisspecialrabbit,gawkingatit

(不动地）.“Dad,let’scatchitasourpet!”Isuggested,

（意外地）receivinghispromptagreement.

（完全地）

forgettingwhat

UnclePaul

hadtoldus,wechasedafterthatprettyrabbit,franticwithrapture.Unfortunately,socleverandswiftwasitthatitdisappearedintheforestbeforelong.Notuntilthendidwerealizethatthelastrayoftwilightwas

（很快地）disappearingamongthenumeroustreesandwecouldn’tfindour

track

atall!Wedid

getlost.三、构造动作链：动作Aand

动作B，动作A,

动作Band

动作C人物的动作或简单，或复杂，都不是一下子就能完成的，细心观察都能捕捉到最能体现人物特征的慢镜头。因此，在描写动作时，细化动作，把动作过程分解成一连串细微的动作，形成动作链，写出动作的连贯性，这样可以使描写具有画面感，使人物更立体。高考真题再现：1.(浙江2016)

Sheatesomeberriesandthenwalkedalongthestream,hopingtofindasuitableplacetoguidethehelicopter.她吃了一些浆果，然后沿着小溪走着，希望能找到一个合适的地方来引导直升机。2.(浙江2016)InnotimedidJanerushtotherock,climbontoitandwaverheryellowblousemadly.

简并没有冲到岩石上，疯狂地摇晃着她的黄色衬衫。3.(浙江2017.6)Seeingthecardisappear,MacandhisfriendsgotonthebicyclesandcontinuedheadingforAlaska.看到汽车消失了，麦克和他的朋友们骑上了自行车，继续前往阿拉斯加。4.(浙江2017.6)Theyjumpedofftheirbicycles,tookouttheknivestheyhadtakenwithandapproachedthewolfinchbyinch.

他们跳下自行车，拿出随身携带的刀，一寸一寸地走近狼。5.(浙江2017.6)Soonitranoffintotheforestanddisappearedinthedistance.很快，它跑进了森林里，消失在远处。牛刀小试：1.(浙江2017.11)CallingoutDavidandme,she

，

and

.

她喊着大卫和我，下车，笑着跳。2.(浙江2017.11)We

________

bigriversandvastplains,

__________

highmountainsand

______________

deepvalleys.我们穿过大河和广阔的平原，爬上高山，俯瞰着深深的山谷。3.（浙江）MydadandI

ournewcowboyhats,

ourhorses,and

___________slowlytowardsthemountains.

我和爸爸戴上新的牛仔帽，骑上马，慢慢地向群山走去。4.（浙江）He

,

,

horserein

andledtheway.他保持沉默，非常仔细地听着，抓住我的缰绳，领着路走了下去。5.

(浙江原文)

He

,

,and

,tryingnottolethisemotions

getthebetterofhim.

他站起来，拥抱着父母，微笑着，试图不让自己的情绪（情绪）战胜他。6.

(浙江原文)

Theboy

thelastbagontohisshoulder,and

.男孩把最后一个包举到肩上，露出了灿烂的微笑。7.

(浙江2020.7)

We

,

,and

blankshotgunshellsintotheair.我们对着熊大喊大叫，用力打花盆，然后向空中发射空弹。8.

I

herthepepperspray,

fromanearbytreeand

inmyhand.

我把胡椒喷雾给了她，折断了附近一棵树上的一根树枝，紧紧地握在手里。9.

(浙江2021.1)Dad

,

,andthen

.爸爸冲了进来，静静地站着，然后突然大笑起来。四、构造动作面：面部+

肢体+

语言/

心理1.他面带杀气，振臂一挥，大喊：“放箭”Withamurderouslookonhisface,hewavedhisarmsandshouted,"Arrow!"

（面部+肢体+语言）2.他们坐在空旷的路边，仰望天空，感受着这难得的宁静。

Seatedbesidetheemptyroadside,theylookedupintothesky,feelingthepreciouspeacefulmoment.

（肢体+面部+心理）牛刀小试：1.____________,he

___________mewithhisfrighteningeyes,

_______,“You’resuchanidiot.”他怒火中烧，用他那可怕的眼睛瞪着我，喊道:“你真是个白痴。”2.(2022全国卷1）Hearingmywords,David

__________

withtearsspillingoutofhiseyesand

__________

hehadmadeafirmdeterminationtofinishthecrosscountryrun.听了我的话，大卫颤抖着转过身来对我说，他已经下定决心要完成越野跑。3._____________

,Lucy

___________,whispering,“Ivolunteer.”被老师的话鼓舞，Lucy举起了手，小声说，“我来。”4._____________,Mikestrokemyhair,

_______,“YouarethemostbeautifulgirlI’veeverseen.”迈克直视着我的眼睛，抚摸着我的头发，低声说:“你是我见过的最漂亮的女孩。”

1.

形容词、分词作状语

2.

定语从句、状语从句五、恰当使用高级语法结构

3.独立主格（名词/代词

+doing/done/todo/n./adj./adv./介短

4.With复合结构读后续写常用句型：1.doing,

谓语动词或

谓语动词,doing

Lookingupatthefarmer,theboysaid,“Thankyou.”

Seeingthewolflyingontheground,theyinstantlyrealizedwhathadhappened.

Shestoodthereshivering/tremblingwithcold.2.AandB,Cing

或

A，BingandCing

或

Aing，

B，CingThestudentscamein,talkingandlaughing.Burningwithanger,he

glared

atmewithhisfrighteningeyes,

yelling,“You’resuchanidiot.”3.Havingdone…,

主句Havingqueuedfor3hours,hewastoldthatthetickethadbeensoldout.=Afterhehadqueuedforfor3hours,hewastoldthatthetickethadbeensoldout.4.done,

谓语动词Deeplymovedbythestory,thechildrenbegantocry.5.done,

谓语动词，doingEncouragedbytheteacher,Lucyraisedherhand,whispering,“Iwanttohaveatry.”6.

形容词作状语Thegirlstoodthere,staringatthefood,coldandhungry.Theysatonthebeach,enjoyingthesunshine,relaxedandhappy.7.

定语从句

Theyoungestkidwantedtogetapresent,buthewasrefusedbyhismother,whichmadehimcry.8.

状语从句Themomentshesawhishusband,Janerushedtohimandhuggedhimtightly.Whenthestudentsheardthattheygotthefirstprizeinthegymnasticspetition,theycheeredandjumpedwithjoy.9.with复合结构Jennywalkedslowlytothefront,withherlegs

trembling

andherheart

beatingfast.Heturnedaround,withtearsrolling/streaming

downhischeeks.Thegirlstoodthere,shivering/tremblingwithcold,withdirtonherfaceandhair.实战演练：1.场景小练：Kevinwasashortdistancerunnerandaftermanyyearsofhardtrainingwonthefirstprizeinthenationalsportsmeeting.

请设计一个情节，详细描述他在获胜后的动作，重点突出他激动的心情。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.2020年7月浙江卷阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Onefall，mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”thetownofChurchillinManitoba，Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbearslikeallwildanimalsshouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear，Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes，thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner，ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed，andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp，whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified，ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear，hitpotshard，andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthoughhejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway，butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇)，Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn'tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears'eyes，butdoesn'thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand，throughthefence，sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫)，thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意:1.

所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.

至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.

续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.

续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:_____________________________________________________________________________________