2024届高考读后续写思维模型构建：一勤身心皆富足一惰一生唯余憾篇课件

读后续写

[Onceuponatime],therewasafarmer(calledRipVanWinkle).Helivedinavillageinthemountainswithhiswifeandtwoyoungchildren,adaughterandason.Ripwasaveryhappyandkindmanandhegotonwellwithallthechildreninthevillage.Theylovedhimbecauseheplayedgameswiththemandoftentoldthemstorieswhilehewassittingoutsidethe“KingGeorge”,thevillageinn.Hespentalotoftimeintheinnbecausehewasaverylazyman.[Insteadof]workingonhisfarm,hewould

gofishingorhunting,orsitinthevillageinntalkingtohisfriends.Hisfamilywaspoorandhiswifeusedto

getangrywithhim.“Whatkindoffarmerareyou?”Shewouldask.“Whydon’tyougetdowntosomework,youlazyman!”

Afterargumentswithhiswife,Ripalwayswentoffhuntingwithhisdog,Wolf.Oneday,afteranotherargument,Ripwentfurtherthanusualintothewoodsandcametoabeautifulvalley.Suddenly,heheardastrangevoicecallinghisname.Anoldman,(dressedin

old-fashionedclothes),wastryingtocarryabarrel(桶)andaskedRiptohelphim.Ripagreed.Theytookthebarreltoacave,(wherethereweremorepeople,alldressedinthesamestrangeclothes.)Afterthat,theoldmangave/Rip/adrinkfromthebarrel.Ripimmediatelyfellintoadeepsleep.What/HowWhen/WhereWhoWhy文本解读SettingCharacterPlotTheme

Whenwhowhereonceuponatime

afarmer(calledRipVanWinkle).Narrator叙事者“thirdperson”perspective第三人称视角Tense:________________SimplepasttenseMom文本解读SettingCharacteravalley&amountainvillageCharacteranalysisDetails.文本解读.....

Ripwasaveryhappyandkindmanandhegotonwellwithallthechildreninthevillage.Theylovedhimbecauseheplayedgameswiththemandoftentoldthemstorieswhilehewassittingoutsidethe“KingGeorge”,thevillageinn.....

....[Insteadof]workingonhisfarm,hewould

gofishingorhunting,orsitinthevillageinntalkingtohisfriends.Hisfamilywaspoorandhiswifeusedto

getangrywithhim........Ripwentfurtherthanusualintothewoodsandcametoabeautifulvalley.Suddenly,heheardastrangevoicecallinghisname.Anoldman,(dressedin

old-fashionedclothes),

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WorkouttheconflictortheclimaxBeginningDevelopmentConflictClimax/Ending[Insteadof]workingonhisfarm,hewouldgofishingorhunting,orsitinthevillageinntalkingtohisfriends.Hisfamilywaspoorandhiswifeusedtogetangrywithhim.Remembertosolvetheconflict.

[Onceuponatime],therewasafarmer(calledRipVanWinkle).whospentalotoftimeintheinnbecausehewasaverylazyman.文本解读+创设情境Hecameacrossanoldman,(dressedinold-fashionedclothes),inthedeepwoodswhowastryingtocarryabarrel(桶)andaskedRiptohelphim.Theytookthebarreltoacave,(wherethereweremorepeople,alldressedinthesamestrangeclothes.)Afterthat,theoldmangave/Rip/adrinkfromthebarrel.Ripimmediatelyfellintoadeepsleep.PlotA.

alazyfarmer.B.ahappy-go-luckyfarmer.C.Lazinessruinsamananddiligengcemakesameaningfulandhappylife.....“Whydon’tyougetdowntosomework,youlazyman!”.

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线索文本解读+主题探究Theme

【Paragraph1】Sometimelater,hewokeupunderatreeinthesamevalley.

根据第1自然段给出的首句，尤其是根据第2自然段首句Whenhegottohishouse,hesawthatitwasoldandabandoned.

大致可以判定：第一自然段应该描写主人公在山谷中酒醒之后所见所闻所感，而且，应该是比较令人惊异的发现。因为第2自然段首句提供的信息。

创设情节突出主题Analyzethe2givensentencesandtheoriginalpassageAddsomedetailsbyraisingquestions

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Analyzethe2givensentencesandtheoriginalpassageAddsomedetailsbyraisingquestions

Whenhegottohishouse,hesawthatitwasoldandabandoned.

根据第2自然段首句

大致可以判定：主人公在山谷中应该邂逅了仙人，洞中忽一日，世上已逾年。可以朝着这个方向发散思维，构思情节，方能达到完美收尾效果。

所见所闻所感所思外貌描写环境描写语言描写动作描写心理描写情感描写所见所做所感Appearance/SurroundingsConversations/LanguagesBehavior/Actions/VerbsEmotions/Feelings通过细节描写呈现出情节的________跌宕起伏UP---DOWN--UPUsethedescriptivetechniquestoenrichthedetails创设情节突出主题

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Sometimelater,hewokeupunderatreeinthesamevalley.Hewasalone,[worriedabouthisdog]andheknewhewasgoingtogetintomoretroublewithhiswife.Thenhenoticedacuriousthing-----hishairwasoverhisshouldersandhisbeardwasoverafootlong![Sostrange]washe

thathedecidedimmediatelytogetbacktothevillage.Assoonashegotthere,herealizedthateverythingwasdifferentandtherewerelotsofnewhouses.[Surprisingly],hedidn’trecognizethepeopleinthevillage.语言描写范文赏析心理描写

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Whenhegottohishouse,hesawthatitwasoldandabandoned.