读后续写人与动物故事类当木材厂来了一只小鹿课件高考英语一轮复习

高考英语读后续写语篇练习人与动物的故事——当木材厂来了一只小鹿1题目分析读后续写题目再现范文呈现努力方向2Part1题目呈现3续写原文Itwasahotandwetdayinlatesummer.Iwasayoungdadworkinginalocalwoodfactory.Itwasdangerous,back-breakingworkthatpaidverylittle.IntheyearIhadworkedthere,onlyfourotherpeoplehadn’tquitandbeenreplacedwithnewfaces.Thoseofuswhostayeddidsoonlybecausetherewasnootherworktofindtosupportourfamilies.Onedaytheelectricfansweren’tworkingandallofuswerecoveredinsweatandsawdust.WhenIlookedaroundeveryface,theylookedangryandfrustrated.Suddenly,avoicecalledout:“Hey!There’sadeerinhere.Alostlittledeerhadwanderedthroughtheopenloadingbaydoorsandwasnowhidinginfearinbetweenthehugepilesofwood.Allofusstoppedworkingandwentlookingforherassheranaboutcrazilylookingforawayout.4续写原文NowmostpeoplewhereIlivehuntdeerformeatinthefallbuttreatthemwithgreatkindnesstherestoftheyear.Manywillevenbuybagsofcorntohelpfeedthemduringthecoldwintermonths.Itwasnosurprisethenthatallofusweresoonquicklyworkingtogethertofreethislittledeer.Byblockingoffalltheotherroutes,wewereabletoguidehercrazysearchbacktotheopenbaydoors.Wewatchedasshejumpedoutofthebuildingandbackintothewoods.Thenwewalkedbackintowork.Inoticedsomething,though.Oneveryface,therewasajoyfulsmile.Itseemedasifthisonesingleactofkindnesshadenergizedusagainandremindedusofwhatlifewasallabout.5段首句Para1：Iwentoutofthehouseandlookedintothewoodsagain.Para2：WhenIreturnedtothehouse,theworkerswerelaughingandtalkinghappily.6Part2题目分析7点1：位于续写第一段段首，流畅衔接前面的记叙文和第一段段首语；点2：位于续写第一段段尾，流畅衔接第二段段首句；点3：位于续写第二段段首，续写衔接第二段段首语；点4：文章结尾升华，给予读者正能量，揭示和强调主题。情节构建的重点8续写思路分析本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在一家木材厂辛苦工作，这天来了一只迷路的小鹿，所有人都停下手中的工作去找她，而她则疯狂地四处寻找出路。最后大家很快就一起努力解救这只小鹿，小鹿回到了树林，作者发现每个人的脸上都洋溢着快乐的微笑，最后有人提议每个月的这一天为森林野生动物做一些志愿者工作。9续写思路分析Para1：Iwentoutofthehouseandlookedintothewoodsagain.由第一段首句内容“我走出屋子，再次向树林里望去。”可知，第一段可描写作者看到小鹿在森林里玩耍时的感受和想法。10续写思路分析Para2：WhenIreturnedtothehouse,theworkerswerelaughingandtalkinghappily.由第二段首句内容“当我回到屋里时，工人们正在愉快地说笑。”可知，第二段可描写这一事件后工人提议为森林野生动物做一些志愿者工作，作者也感悟到用善行充实每一天，生活才会更加美好和谐。11续写思路分析续写线索作者向树林里望去——发现小鹿快乐玩耍——作者陷入沉思——作者回到屋子——工人提议做志愿者工作——作者感悟12续写素材可用词汇：行为类跳跃：skip/jump返回：return/goback回答：reply/respond情绪类焦急地：anxiously/worriedly快乐的：happy/glad13续写素材可用句型：[高分句型1]Thelittledeerwaslikeachildplayinghappily,skippingandskippingtothedepthsofthewoods.(运用了现在分词作状语)[高分句型2]Iknewthattheywerealsohappyandproudofthebehaviorjustnow.(运用了that引导宾语从句)14Part3范文呈现15范文呈现Iwentoutofthehouseandlookedintothewoodsagain.Thelittledeerwaslikeachildplayinghappily,skippingandskippingtothedepthsofthewoods.Perhapstherewerehisparentsandbrothersandsisters,waitingforhimanxiously.Iwaslostinmymind:wishallthelifecanlivehappily.16范文呈现17范文译文我走出家门，又向树林里望去。小鹿就像一个快乐玩耍的孩子，蹦蹦跳跳地来到森林深处。也许有他的父母和兄弟姐妹在焦急地等着他。我在脑海中迷失了：希望所有的生命都能幸福地生活。18范文译文当我回到家时，工人们笑得很开心。我知道他们也为刚才的行为感到高兴和自豪。当他们看到我走进来时，他们都建议我，“在这个月的这一天为森林野生动物做一些志愿者怎么样？”我立即回答：“我同意！”是的！用善举