亲情类读后续写生病的mike课件-高考作文复习专项

亲情类读后续写指导案例

——以生病的Mike读后续写为例TeachingObjectives:Afterthisclass,studentswillbeableto:1.explorethegiventextincludingitstexttype,tense,theme,conflict,sixbasicelements,itsplotsandsoon;2.haveagoodunderstandingofhowtoworkoutthefameworkandconstructtheplotinthecontinuationwritingonfamilyaffections(亲情)usingQ-Astrategy;3.cherishfamilyaffections.Lead-inbywatchingashortvideoandhaveadiscussioningroups.Let’shaveadiscussioningroups:1.Whathappenedbetweenthemotherandson?2.Didthesongotoschoolfinally?Why?3.Canyoupredictwhathislifewillbelikeinthefuture?TheGivenText01Comprehension02Let’sexplorethetext.1.What’sthe

theme?

Healthyeating&honesty.

Parents’

andkid’s

to

unhealthyfood;(1)Parents:didn’tgivemoneytobuyjunkfood;(2)Mike:stronglywishedtobuyjunkfood;secretlytakesomefromhismom’swallet;boughtabagoffood...;hungaroundoutsidetoenjoythefood..;didn'ttakenoticeofit.

Let’ssearchformoredetailedinformation:oppositionaddiction2.What’stheconflict?3.Readforbasicelements:5w+1Hsixbasicelementsmajortense:When

Where

WhoWhatWhyhowwhenMikewassevenyearsold,atnoonthatday,intheafternoonthatdayathome,astore,hospitalMike,Mike’smother,doctorHisparentsusuallydidn'tgivehimmoneybecausehelikedtobuyjunkfood.Theyknewsuchfoodwouldbeharmfultokids’bodies.Hurriedtodrivehimtothehospital;admitwhathehaddone。simplepasttense4.Readforplot:

Mike’sparentsusuallydidn’tgivehimmoneybecausehelikedtobuyjunkfoodMikesecretlytakesomemoneyfromhismom’swalletwithoutlettingherdiscoverit.Paragraph1:Shehurriedtodrivehimtothehospital.

Paragraph2:Mikerealizedheshouldadmitwhathehaddone.

Opening(介绍)

Build-up（发展）

Climax（高潮）Resolution(解决)Ending(结尾)writingprocess03本课以生病的Mike即IllMike读后续写为案例，尝试运用G-NandQ-A策略高效的指导学生展开亲情类文章的读后续写。在续写部分，教师基于原文本信息的解读以及围绕两段首句中hurried;driveto;hospital，realized,admit等关键信息以what,how,why等6个问题串进行提问，最后修改、润色、整理成文。具体操作：语言学王初明教授指出，“内容要创造，语言要模仿，创造与模仿要紧密结合”。为了加强读后续写在主题与情感方面与原文的融洽度，分为两个步骤进行：第一步就是读：读懂六要素和主题、读通情节和感情发展并读精、读深；第二步就是续写：首先要关注衔接，其次就要关注构思。读后续写原文文本一般为记叙文。基于文本特点，续写内容的丰富性取决于情节的发展（冲突构造--冲突化解--亲情升华）。因此，要基于前文的阅读、围绕主题，对故事的情节进行合理的预测和构造，进而发展为续写的内容。可以按照每段三个层次，构思每一段的情节。续写第一段基于段首句，延续文章的发展预测可能的故事情节根据第二段段首句，预测第一段的结束续写第二段基于段首句，延续文章的发展故事的结局升华：呼应主题——受到教训，得到启发，获得灵感HaveadiscussionWhatquestionswillyouraiseaboutthegiventwofirstsentence?Para1:

Shehurriedtodrivehimtothehospital._____________________________________Para2:Mikerealizedheshouldadmitwhathehaddone.______________________________Possiblequestions:Para1:She

hurriedto

drive

him

to

the

hospital:Q1:What’sMikeandhismom’sresponseandhowdidhefeelonthewaytothehospital?Q2:WhatdidthedoctordoandsayandhowdidMikefeel?WhatdidMike’smomdoandhowdidshefeel?Para2:Mike

realized

he

should

admit

what

he

had

done:Q3:WhatdidMiketellhismomandhowdidhefeelaftertellingthetruthandwhat’shismom’sreaction?Q4:WhatthendidthedoctordowithMike’sillnessanddidhefeelbetteraftertakingthemedicine?Q5:WhatdidMikelearnfromthisexperience?Possiblequestions:Para1:She

hurriedto

drive

him

to

the

hospital.Designtechniques在续写第一段的框架下，就续写第一段首句中的关键人物Mike和Mom,事件：妈妈开车送他去医院路上的路上，从人物的动作、行为、心理、情感等方面进行提问和尝试回答，答案不唯一，合理即可。（注意与原文的衔接）Para1:She

hurriedto

drive

him

to

the

hospital.Q2:WhatdidthedoctordoandsayandhowdidMikefeel?WhatdidMike’smomdoandhowdidshefeel?PA1:Afterparkingthecar,hismomrushedhimtothedoctorswiththenurse’shelp.Afterafewsimplechecks,thedoctorsaidheneededafewfurtherexaminationsaboutthestomach,whichwouldbeverypainfulandexpensive.Seeingthattheywerenotrichandmomfeltsoworriedthathertearsbeganfallingdownherface,Mikerecalledthemomentswhenhisdearmomanddadusuallytaughthimtobeanhonestmanwhengrewup.Designtechniques到医院停车后，妈妈有哪些行为、动作、语言等；医生问了我什么问题，我的感受如何，什么促使我做出后来承认一切的这一举动的原因也要设计进取，整个故事应该出现一个促进问题解决-即我承认错误以及妈妈原谅我的正能量结尾关键性因素。因此，围绕这些关键因素提出了两个主要的问题并尝试回答。（注意：冲突构造；注意与续写第二段首句的衔接）Para2:Mike

realized

he

should

admit

what

he

had

done.Q3：WhatdidMiketellhismomandhowdidhefeelaftertellingthetruthandwhat’shismom’sreaction?PA1:He

felt

so

sorry

and

guilty.

After

gathering

his

courage,

he

came

close

to

his

mom

and

told

her

that

he

took

a

few

coins

from

her

wallet

and

bought

a

bag

of

peppery

food

and

a

bottle

of

iced

Cocacola.

After

hearing

this,

his

mom

seemed

to

have

understood

everything,

patted

him

gently

on

his

shoulder

and

said

it

was

so

kind

of

you

to

be

honest

and

it

was

not

too

late

to

let

us

know

it.PA2…Designtechniques基于第二首句与正能量结尾构成的框架，围绕Mike承认错误这一事实，结合主题，围绕关键因素Mike的心理活动、语言、动作等进行提问。他承认错误前经历了那些思想斗争，鼓足勇气，回忆父母一直的教育--做人要诚实，最终承认错误，说了什么话，妈妈有何感受？（注意：冲突化解）Para2:Mike

realized

he

should

admit

what

he

had

done.Designtechniques医生了解情况之后，说了什么，吃了医生开的药之后，我的情况是否缓解和好转。Para2:Mike

realized

he

should

admit

what

he

had

done.Q5:WhatdidMikelearnfromthisexperience?PA1:Mikefeltsothankfultohisgreatmomandlearnedthatnomatterwhathappenedweshouldnothesitatetotellourparentsthetruthinordertogettheirtimelyhelp

andpromisedthathedidn’ttakeju