2023年全国英语高考1卷读后续写我的写作比赛讲评与示范讲义-2024届高三英语二轮复习

一．读后续写原题目WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenter

awritingcontest,Isaidnowithoutthinking.

Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.

【举例子】WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.

Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:"BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou'rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyou

haveagoodshotat

this."Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedto

giveitatry.【写作思路】IchosePaulRevere'shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（银匠）

inBostonwhorodeahorseallnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse'smouth.Notabrilliantidea,but

funny,andunlikelytobeanyoneelse'schoice.【写作过程】Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.

But,likeRevere'shorse,Ikeptgoing.

Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,

hereadit,laughedoutloud,

and

said,"Great.Now,writeitagain."Iwroteitagain,andagain,andagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwayto

theenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn'twin,Iwouldn'tcare.当我在中学的时候，我的社会学老师让我参加一个写作比赛，我想都没想就拒绝了。我不喜欢写作。我的家庭来自巴西，所以英语只是我的第二语言。写作对我来说是如此困难和痛苦，以至于我的老师允许我通过表演一个剧本来展示我关于泰坦尼克号沉没的论文，我在剧中扮演所有的角色。没有人比他笑得更厉害了。那么，为什么他突然强迫我做一件我肯定会失败的事情呢?他回答说.“因为我喜欢你的故事。如果你愿意努力，我认为你很有可能获得这份工作。”受到他的话的鼓舞，我同意试一试。我选择保罗·里维尔的马作为我的主题。保罗·里维尔是波士顿的一名银匠，1775年4月18日，他整夜骑马去列克星敦，警告人们英国士兵要来了。我的故事将直接来自马的口述。不是个好主意，但很有趣，不太可能是别人的选择。马在黑夜中疾驰时在想什么呢?他累了吗?有疑问吗?他想辞职吗?我立刻表示同情。我累了。我有过怀疑。我想辞职。但是，就像里维尔的马一样，我继续前进。我工作很努力。我检查了我的拼写。我请姐姐纠正我的语法。我从图书馆借了六本关于保罗·里维尔的书。我甚至读了一些。当我把文章交给老师时，他读了后大笑起来，说“太好了。现在，再写一遍。”我写了一遍又一遍。当我终于写完时，获胜的念头已经让位于写作的乐趣。如果我没赢，我也不在乎。注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.Paral:Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenewsPara2:Iwenttomyteacher'officeaftertheawardpresentation.二、审题思考（1）第一段段首句的“news”是什么？根据第二段段首句theawardpresentation而且我要去参加颁奖仪式。可以推断出消息是我的作品获奖了，我为什么会拿到奖？我的作文很幽默，有意思:让老师大笑，所以是funny自己的潜力直修改持不懈并且从中找到了乐趣。第一段的结尾和第二段开头如何衔接 因为第二段段首句说“我要去老师办公室”，所以我们应该想为什么我要去老师办公室。也许是颁奖礼的时候看到了老师鼓堂的身影或者是我回想起了老师的鼓励。在老师办公室里我们会有怎样的对话？老师祝贺我，肯定我的天赋。我感谢老师的鼓励，让我对写作有了态度上的转变，如何回扣到“马”？“But,likeRevere'shorse,Ikeptgoing.”微情节设计Para1:Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.揭示news是什么我的心情：难以置信参加颁奖典礼观众反应我想到/看到老师Para2:Iwenttomyteacher'officeaftertheawardpresentation.见面时的动作描写老师祝贺我，肯定我的天赋我感谢老师：想到老师的督促，让自己对写作有了态度转变（4）我的感悟原创范文：Para1:

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethe

news.

After

fiercecompetition,my

contribution

stoodout

andwonthefirstplace.

NeverhadIanticipated

thatmywriting

competency

could

receivesuchrecognition.

Attheawardceremony,hearingmyname

called,I

strode

ontothe

podium

andtookthe

trophy

withexcitementandan

unprecedented

feelingof

accomplishment.With

thunderousapplauseechoingintheauditorium,

scarcelycouldIwaitto

sharethethehonorwithmyteacher,who

contributedalottomediscoveringmypotentialandpassions.Para2:

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

AsIentered,he

lookedupfrom

hisdesk,a

radiant

smile

spreadingacross

hisface,andsaid,

“Congratulations!Your

diligence

and

perseverancepaidoff.”

“Butfor

yourinspiration,I

couldneverwon

theprize.”

I

extendedmycordialgratitudeto

himforalltheguidanceand

affirmation

heofferedme.

Recallingthe

hardshipsencounteredforthedurationof

writing,I

perceived

thatitwasthe

self-assurance

inmyownpotentialand

persistence

thatcountedthemost.

Withit,Iknewthatnochallengewouldbetoo

daunting.AndIwould

keepgoingonmypath,like

Revere’shorse.下水文：Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Itwasmewhowonthefirstprize!Overwhelmedbywildjoy,Irosetomyfeetandpunchedmyfistintheair,shoutingoutloudly“Imadeit!”

Feelingonthetopofworld,Icouldinstantlypicturemyfamilymembershuggingmewithpride.

Thefollowingday

asIstoodonthestageoftheawardpresentation,mytears

brimmedoverandrolleddownmycheeksunconsciously.Throughmymindechoedmyteacher’sencouragingwords.ItwasthenthatIrealizedthatwithouthimIcould’thavefoundmyselfinsuchpotential.(94

words)

I

wenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

Extremelyeagerandexcited,I

steppdeintohisroom,expressingmysincereappreciationwithmyeyesglitteringwithcontentment.

Themomentabrightsmileworkeditswayacrosshisface,ourglancesmetbriefly.“I

hopeyoucaninsistonwriting,”

saidmyteacher,holdingoutahandandstrokingmyheadslightly.A

stron