读后续写个人成长类 来自grandma的爱 讲义 高三英语二轮复习写作专项

续写题目Manyyearsearlier,mymotherknewthatshecouldnotsendmetocollegeandpayforit.Sheworkedinaretailstoreandmadejustenoughtopaythebillsandtakecareoftheotherchildrenathome.IfIwantedtogotocollege,itwasuptometofindouthowtogetthere.

IfoundthatIqualifiedforsomegrantsbecauseofthesizeofourfamily,mymom’sincomeandmySATscores.Therewasenoughtocoverschoolandbooks,butnotenoughforroomandboard.Iacceptedajobaspartofawork-studyprogram.Whilenotattractive,itwasoneIcoulddo.Iwasheddishesintheschoolcafeteria.JustwhenIthoughtIwasgoingtodropoutofmycollegecareer,anangelappeared.Well,oneofthosethatareonearth,withoutwings.“Iheardthatyouneedsomehelp,”hesaid.“Whatdoyoumean?”Iasked,tryingtofigureoutwhichareaofmylifehemeant."Financially,tostayinschool.”“Well,Imakeitokay.Ijusthavetroubleworkingallthesehoursandfindingtimetostudy.”“Well,IthinkIhaveawaytohelpyouout.”Hewentontoexplainthathisgrandparentsneededhelpontheweekends.Allthatwasrequiredofmewascookingmealsandhelpingthemgetinandoutofbedinthemorningandevening.Thejobpaidfourhundreddollarsamonth,twicethemoneyIwasmakingwashingdishes.NowIwouldhavetimetostudy.Iwenttomeethisgrandparentsandacceptedthejob.Myfirstdiscoverywashisgrandmother’sgreatloveofmusic.Shespenthoursplayingherold,off-keypiano.Oneday,shetoldmeIdidn’thaveenoughfuninmylifeandtookituponherselftoteachmetheart.Grandmawasimpressedwithmyabilityandencouragedmetocontinue.Weekendsintheirhousebecamemorethanjustbooksandcooking,theywerefilledwiththewonderfulsoundsoftheout-of-tunepianoandtwoveryout-of-tunesingers.Paragraph1WhenChristmasbreakcame,Grandmagotachestcold,andIwasafraidtoleaveher.Paragraph2Theenvelopewasfromgrandmawhohadjustpassedaway.

续写尝试Paragraph1WhenChristmasbreakcame,Grandmagotachestcold,andIwasafraidtoleaveher.So,Idecidedtopayheravisit.The“angel”answeredthedoorandledmetoherbedroomwhereasmallgauntfigurewithfurrowedbrowslayquietlyonthebed.Myhearttwitched.Hearingus,Grandmaopenedhereyes.“Honey,happyholidays!Haveyoupacked?”,shesmiledweakly.Icamecloserandheldherhand,“Iwanttobewithyou,Grandma.”Shepattedmyhandgently,“Don’tworrydear.Yourfamilymustmissyou.Go.IpromiseI’llseeyousoon.”

Shelied.WhenIreceivedthatsoul-crushingphonecall,suddenly,theworldseemedtohavelostitscoloruntilaletterfoundourdoor.

Paragraph2Theenvelopewasfromgrandmawhohadjustpassedaway.Init,shetoldmehowproudshewasofmeandhowmuchshelovedme.Herwordswerelikeawarmembracethatenvelopedmeinloveandcomfort.AsIreadtheletter,Icouldhearthesoundoftheoldpianointhebackground.Itwasoutoftune,butitdidn’tmatterforitwasareminderofallthewonderfultimeswehadspenttogether.Inasplitsecond,I

thoughtIsaw,throughmyblurryeyes,Grandmasittingatthepiano,herfingersmovinggracefullyoverthekeys.Then,shelookedupatmeandsmiled.AtthatmomentIknew,inherownway,Grandma

hadkeptherpromise.续写精析“The“angel”answeredthedoorandledmetoherbedroomwhereasmallgauntfigurewithfurrowedbrowslayquietlyonthebed.”Angel应门，呼应原文称呼，衔接上句逻辑，然后紧接着把主角引到grandma的房间中。关系副词where引导的定语从句说明房间内的情况。asmallgauntfigurewithfurrowedbrowslayquietlyonthebed.

这句话用了4处细节体现出grandma此刻的状态。small&gaunt，病痛折磨下的祖母显得，身材弱小而面容瘦削。gaunt：牛津verythin,usuallybecauseofillness.Withfurrowedbrows眉头紧锁，暗示grandma胸痛的严重，无时不刻都在疼着，所以眉关难以抚平。Layquietly祖母很喜欢弹钢琴，但此刻她却安静地躺在床上，进一步让读者感知grandma的状态。Myhearttwitched.twitch：牛津ifapartofyourbodytwitches,orifyoutwitchit,itmakesasuddenquickmovement,sometimesonethatyoucannotcontrol痉挛；抽搐；抽动进入房间，看到病卧的祖母，身形消瘦，眉头紧锁，主角的心不由自主地抽动，“祖孙”感情之深，一词足矣。Hearingus,Grandmaopenedhereyes.“Honey,happyholidays!Haveyoupacked?”,shesmiledweakly.Grandma这个人物我是偏爱的。正如原文中所塑造，我希望续写中能体现出她坚毅、善良、理解和睿智。尽管续写第二段提示，grandma已然离主角远去，但我希望她生前身后，都能像一束温暖的光一样。所以，我的第一段，grandma听到动静醒过来，看到主角，虚弱的微笑着。虽然自己已经病重，但言语中则是对后辈的关切，“节日快乐孩子，东西收拾好了吗？”Icamecloserandheldherhand,“Iwanttobewithyou,Grandma.”人物互动，视角流转自然。我看到grandma的情况，听到她的关心，上前握住了她的手。这个握手的动作，手的温度，温暖的是彼此的心。Shepattedmyhandgently,“Don’tworrydear.Yourfamilymustmissyou.Go.IpromiseI’llseeyousoon.”先握手，才能后拍手。逻辑完美，且动作进一步丰满人物形象。“别担心孩子，你的家人肯定很想你。回吧，我保证我们很快就能见面。”Grandma知道孩子心理纠结，故而温和地解开心结。grandma知道自己时日无多，但依然承诺与孩子他日相逢，给孩子希望。这是何等的爱，何等的情。Shelied.一句话，两个词，读者已心领神会。至深的情感，至诚的触动，至简的表达。“她说谎了。”当一个人离开，很多时候，我们不会去思考这整件事的影响，不会听别人说，“节哀顺变”，而是紧紧揪住他没有说完的那句话，没有看成的那场电影，没能成行的那个旅程。自然也包括她没有信守的那个承诺。这一刻