读后续写：场景描写 讲义-高三英语写作专项

场景描写的素材（来自原著：追风筝的人）Atleasttwodozenkitesalreadyhungintheskyjikepapersharksroamingforprey.Withinanhour,thenumberdoubled,andred,blue,andyellowkitesglidedandspuninthesky.Acoldbreezewaftedthroughmyhair.Thewindwasperfectforkiteflying,blowingjusthardenoughtogivesomelift,makethesweepseasier.（放风筝的场景描写，从各个角度，立体描述）空中已经挂着至少二十来只风筝，如同纸制的鲨鱼，巡游搜猎食物。不到一个钟头，这个数字翻了一番，红色的、蓝色的、黄色的风筝在苍穹来回飞舞，熠熠生辉。寒冷的微风吹过我的头发。这风正适宜放风筝，风速不大，恰好能让风筝飘浮起来，也便于操控。Thewaterwasadeepblueandsunlightglitteredonitslookingglass-clearsurface.湖水澄蓝，波平如镜，阳光照在湖上熠熠生辉。ThenIglancedupandsawapairofkites,redwithlongbluetails,soaringinthesky.Theydancedhighabovethetreesonthewestendofthepark,overthewindmills,floatingsidebysidelikeapairofeyeslookingdownonSanFrancisco,thecityInowcallhome.（场景、比喻）我抬起头，望见两只红色的风筝，带着长长的蓝色尾巴，在天空中冉冉升起。它们舞动着，飞越公园西边的树林，飞越风车，并排飘浮着，如同一双眼睛俯视着旧金山，这个我现在当成家园的城市。Blueskiesstoodtallandfar,thesunlikeabrandingironsearingthebackofyourneck.CreekswhereHassanandIskippedstonesallspringturneddry,andrickshawsstirreddustwhentheysputteredby.（场景、比喻）天空一碧如洗，阳光像烙铁般灼痛后颈。整个春天我和哈桑在溪流打水漂，到了夏天它们也干涸了。黄包车嗒嗒走过，扬起阵阵灰尘。Somewhere,abranchsnapped,anowlhooted.Thewind,softandcold,clickedthroughtreebranchesandstirredthebushesthatsprinkledtheslope.Andfrombelow,thefaintsoundofwatertumblingthroughthevalley.在某个地方传来树枝劈啪作响的声音，还有猫头鹰的叫声。寒风微微拂动树枝，吹过山坡上的灌木丛。而下面，水流在山谷淌动，传来阵阵微弱的声音。Bythreeo'clock,therainhadstoppedandtheskywasacurdledgrayburdenedwithlumpsofclouds.Acoolbreezeblewthroughthepark.（天气）到三点时，雨停了，铅灰色的天空阴云密布，一阵寒风吹过公园。Thesunwasbeginningtoset,glitteringredthroughthecracksbetweentheramshacklebuildings.（景象）太阳开始下山，那些摇摇欲坠的房子的裂缝中，渗出闪闪的红色斜晖。【方法技巧】•“四对照、四一致”.对照原文中心。在读懂原文的基础上，紧扣原文中心，以原文的结局为起点，写出故事情节的发展和变化。.对照原文情节。对原文故事没有写出的情节展开合理的推想，打开思路。多角度地想象出几种情况或结局，并从中加以最优选择。.对照原文逻辑。要注意前后照应，符合逻辑，防止自相矛盾。必须与上文紧密联系，使上下文融为一体。.对照原文角色。原文的主要角色，续文中都要安排“戏"但不要引进影响事件结局的新角色。注意确保四个一致：.要与原文的主题或作者的本来意图保持一致。.要与原文的体裁、结构、写作手法保持一致。.要与原文的语言特点和叙事风格保持一致。.主要人物的思想行为、性格特点要与原文保持一致。【小试牛刀】阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.AshewalkedalongParkAvenueneartheFirstNationalBank,heheardthesoundofsomeonetryingtostartacar.Hetriedagainandagainbutcouldn'tgetthecarmoving.Arthurturnedandlookedinsideatthefaceofayoungmanwholookedworried.Arthurstoppedandasked,"Itlookslikeyou'vegotaproblem,“Arthursaid.'Tmafraidso.PminabighurryandIcan!tstartmycar.”“Istheresomethingleandotohelp?”Arthurasked.Theyoungmanlookedatthetwosuitcasesinthebackseatandthensaid,“Thanks.Ifyoufresureitwouldn'tbetoomuchtrouble,youcouldhelpmegetthesesuitcasesintoataxi.”“Notroubleatall.Tdbegladtohelp.”Theyoungmangotoutandtookoneofthesuitcasesfromthebackseat.Afterplacingitontheground,heturnedtogettheotherone.JustasArthurpickedupthefirstsuitcaseandstartedwalking,heheardthelongloudnoiseofanalarm.Itwasfromthebank.Therehadbeenarobbery（抢劫）!ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore.Nowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthealarmandtheshoutsofpeoplerunningfromalldirections.Carsstoppedandthepassengersjoinedthecrowdinfrontofthebank.Peopleaskedeachother,“Whathappened?”Buteveryonehadadifferentanswer.Arthur,stillcarryingthesuitcase,turnedtolookatthebankandwalkedrightintotheyoungwomaninfrontofhim.Shelookedatthesuitcaseandthenathim.Arthurwassurprised.uWhyisshelookingatmelikethat?”Hethought."Thesuitcase!ShethinksI'mthebankthief!”Arthurlookedaroundatthecrowdofpeople.Hebecamefrightened,andwithoutanotherthought,hestartedtorun.注意：.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehindz"Stopzstop!” Paragraph2:ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur 【经典范文】【范文一】Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”Andalsoatthemoment,Arthursuddenlyrealizedthattheyoungmanmightbethebankrobber.SoArthurdidn'tstop,butcontinuedtorununtilhesawataxi.Hestoppedit,jumpedinwiththesuitcaseandsaidtothedriver,"Gotothepolicestation,please.Themanshoutingbehindisthebankthief!”Thetaxiracedawaylikethewind.ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthurtoldthepolicewhathadhappened.Obviously,thepolicehadalreadylearnedabouttherobbery.Theyopenedthesuitcaseandtherewasalargesumofmoneyinside,asArthurhadexpected.ThenthepoliceaskedArthurtodescribetheyoungmanandtheothersuitcase.Later,withtheinformation,thepolicecaughttherobber.ThepoliceandthebankboththankedArthuralot.(Words:153)【范文二】Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”Thinkingofthewaytheyoungmanhadbehaved,herealizedtheyoungmanmightbethebankrobber.SoArthurranfasterandstoppedataxi.Themomenthegotintothetaxi,hetoldthedriverthemanshoutingbehindwasthebankthiefandaskedhimtodrivetothenearestpolicestation.ThedriverfollowedwhatArthursaidanddroveaway.ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthurthankedthedriveranddirectlywentin.JustasArthurwasdescribingwhathadhappenednearthebankonPackAvenueandreportedtheyoungmantothepolice,heheardavoiceoutsi