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“点线面”

读后续写解构重塑复习:小说要素Time:

Place:

Character1+Action:

Character2+Action:

Character3+Action:Character4+Action:Importantobject

建构Onabright,warmJulyafternoonOnaroadMacrodeabicycleandmetawolfTwofriends(bicyclists)repairedthebicycle.PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircar.TheystoppedinfrontofMac.PlotThewolf

werecatchingupwithMacandwantedtoattack.SprayPara.1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Step3:紧接着每段的承接动作(每段第二句)

Step4:最后就是补充完整(每段中间)

Step2:

再写两段之间衔接句(第一段的最后一句)Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.

Step3:紧接着每段的承接动作(每段第二句)

Step4:最后就是补充完整(每段中间)

Step1:

先写结局和主题句(最后一句)建构复习:四步定框架P1:

Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.1.延续动作2.转折3.转折的解决办法4.次要角色参与建构复习:定框架后补细节

第一段Hewantedtogetintothecar.

Thewolfcameagain.Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.

数词

汇句

式连接紧密点到链Hewantedtogetintothecar.

解构下自行车

跑向车

要上车gotoffthebicyclerantothecar

描写

start开始

continue继续

jump跳

climb向上爬

run跑

rush冲

dash猛冲

crawl、creep缓慢爬

studge吃力走

stagger摇摇晃晃

stumble跌跌撞撞

sneak偷偷溜走

slide悄悄溜到...

slip悄悄疾行

tiptoe蹑手蹑脚

hobble蹒跚解构

Hewantedtogetintothecar.

解构下自行车

跑向车

要上车gotoffthebicyclerantothecarjumpedoffhisbicycledashedtothedoorofthecar点到链Hewantedtogetintothecar.Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar.重塑点到链

渴望,紧张,害怕类情绪withbutterfliesinone’sstomachbreathedeeplytakeadeepbreathwithanxietybefrightenedtodosthgetintoapanicinpanicwithfrighgtinmyeagernesstodosthgetpanicked,frightenedandnervous重塑Hewantedtogetintothecar.Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar.重塑点到链Hewantedtogetintothecar.Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar.Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.重塑点到链到面延续动作----转折----应对转折的解决办法----次要角色参与P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.

_____?____Thewolfcameagain.Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解构重塑点到链到面8)soonafter=shortlyafter=afewmuniteslater=abitlater=inawhile=

过一会shortlyafterwards不久后onabrightwarmJulyafternoonfromthenon从那时起解构重塑

时间状语延续动作----转折----应对转折的解决办法----次要角色参与P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.

Atthattime/inaflash,Thewolfcameagain.Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解构重塑点到链到面wasabouttodowhen正要...这时thefirst/lasttimewhenever无论什么时候解构重塑when当

as随着whiledoing当beforehecould还没能...afterdoing在...后wasdoing...when正在...这时候...hadjustdone...when刚做完...这时候...

时间状语句子assoonas一..就...

themoment一..就..each/everytime每次it’sthefirst/lasttimewhenever无论什么时候notuntilthendidhe直到那时他才innotimedidhe马上他就延续动作----转折----应对转折的解决办法----次要角色参与P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.

Atthattime,Thewolfcameagain.

ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfcameagain.Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解构重塑点到链到面延续动作----转折----应对转折的解决办法----次要角色参与P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.

Atthattime,Thewolfcameagain.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfcameagain.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解构重塑点到链到面延续动作----转折----应对转折的解决办法----次要角色参与P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.

____?____Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解构重塑点到链到面

连接副词

instantly立刻immeditely马上

suddenly突然

gradually渐渐地eventually最后recently最近actually事实上obviously显然

undoubtedly毫无疑问

Lukily真幸运

amazingly令人惊喜

fortunately真幸运

sadly真遗憾toone’ssurprise

surpringly令人吃惊解构重塑

abruptly突然

延续动作----转折----应对转折的解决办法----次要角色参与P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Instantly/Immediately/Luckily,Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解构重塑点到链到面延续动作----转折----应对转折的解决办法----次要角色参与P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Instantly/Immediately,Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.Luckily,themagicspraysavedMacathirdtime.

PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.解构重塑点到链到面延续动作----转折----应对转折的解决办法----次要角色参与P1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Luckily,themagicspraysavedMacathirdtime.

Seeingthewolfbackoff,Paulquicklyunlockedthedoor,andthefrightenedmanclimbedintothecarinnotime,shuttingthedoorbehindhimheavily.

soonafter,thewolfranoff.

解构重塑点到链到面

Hewantedtogetintothecar.Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.Thewolfcameagain.Hefiredthesprayatthewolf,again.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Luckily,themagicspraysavedMacathirdtime.PaulandBeckyhelpedMacgetintothecar.Thewolfleft.Seeingthewolfbackoff,Paulquicklyunlockedthedoor,andthefrightenedmanclimbedintothecarinnotime,shuttingthedoorbehindhimheavily.soonafter,thewolfranoff.解构重塑点到链到面

Hejumpedoffhisbicycleanddashedtothedoorofthecar,inhiseagernesstogetawayfromthewolf.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Luckily,themagicspraysavedMacathirdtime.Seeingthewolfbackoff,Paulquicklyunlockedthedoor,andthefrightenedmanclimbedintothecarinnotime,shuttingthedoorbehindhimheavily.soonafter,thewolfranoff.点到链到面

延续动作对话次要角色参与结局和主题句Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Macandthetwomenmetagain.MacsaidImetawolf.Thetwomansaidyouwerelucky.TheythankedandsaidgoodbytoPaulandBecky.Peoplehelpedoneanother.解构重塑复习:定框架后补细节:

第二段动作链可以和情感,环境,心理,语言等结合,形成动作面。①Burningwithanger,he

glared

atmewithhisbigfrighteningeyes,

yelling,“You’resuchanidiot.”②Shakingmyheadawkwardly,Isaid,“Icangetlunchsomewhereonmywayback,”notwantingtobotherthewarmed-heartedfamilyanymore.

解构重塑点到链到面点到链到面

动作链可以和情感,环境,心理,语言等结合,形成动作面。①Burningwithanger,he

glared

atmewithhisbigfrighteningeyes,

yelling,“You’resuchanidiot.”此处的burningwithanger是情感描写,glare和yell是动作链,A+Bing形式,

介词with短语与动词glare搭配具体生动,同时将动作和语言描写结合在了一起,形成了饱满的动作面,属于高分表达。

解构重塑点到链到面

动作链可以和情感,环境,心理,语言等结合,形成动作面。②Shakingmyheadawkwardly,Isaid,“Icangetlunchsomewhereonmywayback,”notwantingtobotherthewarmed-heartedfamilyanymore.

此处的shake和said是动作链,Bing+A形式,said后是语言描写,语言描写后是心理描写notwantingtobother,同时将动作链和语言和心理描写结合在了一起,形成了饱满的动作面,属于高分表达。

解构重塑点到链到面

动作链可以和情感,环境,心理,语言等结合,形成动作面。②WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.NotuntilthendidIhearmystomachrumbling.Shakingmyheadawkwardly,Isaid,“Icangetlunchsomewhereonmywayback,”notwantingtobotherthewarmed-heartedfamilyanymore.“Waitaminute,sir,”thegirlstammeredinbrokenEnglish,sensingmyembarrassment.Inafewseconds,thegirlturnedup,withapaperbagheldtightlyinherhand.

解构重塑点到链到面

延续动作对话次要角色参与结局和主题句Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Macandthetwomenmetagain.MacsaidImetawolf.Thetwomansaidyouwerelucky.TheythankedandsaidgoodbytoPaulandBecky.Peoplehelpedoneanother.解构重塑点到链到面

延续动作----对话----次要角色参与----结局和主题句Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Macgotoutofthecarandhuggedhisfriends.“ItwasreallyanightmareandIthoughtIwasgoingtodie,”saidMacinashakyvoice,tearsgatheringinhiseyes.Forhim,lifecouldneverbemorebeautiful.AftersayinggoodbyetoPaulandBeckywithgratitude,thethreemencontinuedtheirtrip,agreeingnevertoseparateagain.解构重塑ThankYou!读后续写第一课2017年6月浙江卷Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(骑行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac’sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase(追赶).Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Paragraph2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.复习:小说要素Time:

Place:

Character1+Action:

Character2+Action:

Character3+Action:Character4+Action:Importantobject

建构Onabright,warmJulyafternoonOnaroadMacrodeabicycleandmetawolfTwofriends(bicyclists)repairedthebicycle.PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircar.TheystoppedinfrontofMac.PlotThewolf

werecatchingupwithMacandwantedtoattack.Spray结构:四步定框架Step1:

先写结局和主题句(最后一句)Step2:

再写两段之间衔接句(第一段的最后一句)Step3:紧接着每段的承接动作(每段第二句)

Step4:最后就是补充完整(每段中间)Para.1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

step3:

step2:Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.step3:step1:结构:定框架后补细节:第一段

延续动作转折转折的解决办法次要角色参与Para.1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.

step3:

step2:结构:定框架后补细节:第二段

延续动作对话次要角色参与结局和主题句Para.2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.step3:step1:2017年6月浙江卷骑行遇狼Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(骑行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac’sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase(追赶).Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.注意:1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右;2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语;3.续写部分分为两段,每段的开头语已为你写好;4.续写完成后,请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Paragraph2:Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.参考范文1Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Macjumpedoffhisbicycleandrushedtothedoorofthecar.ButbeforeMaccouldopenthedoor,thewolfhadcaughtupandjumpedtoattack.Luckily,themagicspraysavedMacathirdtime.Seeingthewolfbackoff,Paulquicklyunlockedthedoor,andthefrightenedmanclimbedintothecarinnotime,shuttingthedoorbehindhimheavily.BeckylookedoutofthebackwindowandsawthewolfstandingoverMac’sbicycleasifitwereakill.Soonafter,theanimalranoff.Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Macgotoutofthecarandhuggedhisfriends.“ItwasreallyanightmareandIthoughtIwasgoingtodie,”saidMacinashakyvoice,tearsgatheringinhiseyes.Forhim,lifecouldneverbemorebeautiful.AftersayinggoodbyetoPaulandBeckywithgratitude,thethreemencontinuedtheirtrip,agreeingnevertoseparateagain.参考范文2Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Maccrashedintothecarwithaloudbang.Asaresult,hefelloffthebicycleandhadhisleftankletwisted.HardlyhadMacstoodupwhenthewolfarrivedandwasabouttolaunchanotherattack.Macwasgoingtodiewhensuddenlythewolfwashitrightontheheadbyapieceofrock.Thewolffellback,howlingwithpain.ItwasPaulwhodidthis.BeckyhelpedMacclimbintothecar,whilePaulkeptshoutingandthrowingstonesatthewolf.Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.TheywereshockedatwhattheysawandjoinedPaul.OneofMac’sfriendspickedoutsomerawmeatandthrewittothewolf.Satisfiedwithwhathegot,thewolfranintothewoods.MacthankedPaulandBecky,“HowgratefulIamthatyoustoppedtosavemeandIoweittoyouthatI’mstillalive.”AsMacgotinjured,thethreemenhadtogiveuptherestoftheirjourneyandreturnedhome.延续动作--转折--解决转

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