雅思作作文评分标准

经典word整理文档，仅参考，双击此处可删除页眉页脚。本资料属于网络整理，如有侵权，请联系删除，谢谢！雅思作文的评分标准包括四个方面：TaskResponseCoherenceandCohesionLexicalResourceGrammaticalRangeandAccuracy雅思的4Gates就是其评分标准，分别为内容，逻辑结构，语法的准确使用篇5.5分的雅思范文是如何在修改之前蜕变成为高分作品。Cambridge8Test2Nowadaysthewaymanypeopleinteractwitheachotherhaschangedbecauseoftechnology.Inwhatwayshastechnologyaffectedthetypesofrelationshipspeoplemake?Hasthisbecomeapositiveornegativedevelopment?原文：Nowadaysthewaypeopleinteractwitheachotherhaschangedbecauseoftechnology.Yes,thetechnologyhaschangedthepeoplesinteractioninveryenhancedmanner.Earlierpeopleusetowaitandtrytofindeasywaytocontacttheirfriendsorrelativesleavingfar.Inpasttherewasnoquicktechnologytocontactortoestablishanycommunicationbetweenonepersontoanotherperson.Thedrawbackwithpastcommunicationsystemswasthatitwereveryslowandweretimetakingprocesssuchastelegrams,letteretc.Peopleusedtoafraidtowritetheirpersonalfeedbacksorthingstotheirloveonesduetoinsecuremediumofcommunication.Whenitcomestoprofessionallevel,theprivacyandaccuracyshouldbemaintainbut,tothattimetherewerenosecurecommunications.Nowthethingshavechangedaround,peoplefromfardistancecontacttheirlovesoneinaneasyandquickwayswhichimprovestheinteractionlevelbetweentwoperson.Qualitytheleveloftheinteractionbetweenpeopletopeople,hasimprovedbecausethepeopleareequippedwithhigh-tectechnologywhichenhancesthecommunication.Therearemanymanymediumwhichareavailablenowsuchasinternet,calledcardsetc.Thetechnologyhasprovidedthemobilityfasterwhichhelppeopletotalkortointeractatanytimeanywhereintheworld.Peoplecancontacttheirfriendorrelativesanytimetheywant.Ithasbecomesoeasierandferiendlytobeintouchwithyourferiends,relativesevenwiththeunknownpeople.原文翻译：今天，由于科技的发展人们相互交流的方式也发生了变化。统的问题是速度慢，费时间，比如：电报和信件等。在过去，人们不敢给爱人写但是在当时根本没有安全的通信可言。技，所以他们交流的方式已经得到改善。现在有了很多这类媒体，比如：国际互联网、语音卡等。他人沟通。得更容易了。SampleAnswer:ThisisananswerwrittenbyacandidatewhoachievedaBand5.5score.Hereistheexaminerscomment:这是一位考生写的5.5分作文。Thetopicintroductionhasbeencopiedfromthetaskandisdeductedfromthewordcount.Thisleavestheanswerunderlengthat236words,sothecandidatelosesmarksforthis.文章的开篇是从题目中抄来的，所以不能算字数。剩下的只有236个字，考生因此失分。Thisansweraddressesbothquestions,butthefirstisnotwellcoveredintermsofhowactualrelationshipshavechanged.Nevertheless,thereisaclearopinionthattheeffectshavebeenpositiveandrelationshipshaveimproved,withsomerelevantideastosupportthis.Thereisageneralprogressiontotheargument,withsomeeffectiveuseoftimemarkersandlinkers.Thereisalsosomerepetition,however.Paragraphingisnotalwayslogical,andideasarenotalwayswelllinked.Arangeofvocabularythatisrelevanttothetopicisused,includingsomepreciseandnaturalexpressions.Therearequitealotofmistakesinwordform,wordchoiceorspelling,butthesedonotusuallyreduceunderstanding.Avarietyofsentencetypeisused,butnotalwaysaccurately.Errorsingrammarandpunctuationaredistractingattimes,butonlyrarelycauseproblemsforthereader.于现实中的关系是如何变化的。但是，文章展示了清晰的.观点(这些影响都是好的，而且这些关系都有所改善)并配以相关的观点支持。文章的论证循序渐进，使用了很多表示时间的提示词以及连接词，但是个别有些重复。分段不够逻辑，的表达。虽然有一些词性、词义以及拼写错误，但是并不会太影响理解。使用了读者产生太大的麻烦。修改后：Nowadays,.(Itistruethattechnologyhasshiftedpeoplescommunicativeways.利用Itistruethat的句式突出后面的事件;Change和shift是同义词替换;thewaypeopleinteract和communicativeway是同义词替换。这样的变化可以避免引用题目中的原词。)(拒绝非正式的用法。)Thetechnologyhaschangedthepeoplesinteractioninveryenhancedmanner.Earlierpeopleused(前后时态必须一致。)towaitandtrytofindeasyways(名词单复数)tocontacttheirfriendsorrelativesleavingfar.Inthepast,therewasno(词汇使用不当，应该改成effective)technologytocontactothersortoestablishanycommunicationbetweentwopeople.And(重要的连接词，表示本句和上一句共同解释为什么人们一直在期待找到更有效的通讯方式。)thedrawbackofthepastcommunicationsystemswasthattheycommunicationsystems)weretoo(表示太。)slowandweretime-consuming(表示费时),including(这是应该使用分词形式，表示对主句的communicationways的具体描述。)thetelegrams,theletteretc.Notonlythat,(这里需要连接词)peopleusedtobeafraidtowritetheirpersonalfeedbacksorthingstotheirlovedonesbecauseof(becauseof强调外因dueto强调根据)informationsecurity(根据上下文理解，此处应该表达的是信息安全)ofcommunication.(Theyworriedtheirlettersmightbestolenorreadbysomestrangers.这里可以继续描述人们的担心。)However，(上文主要讨论过去的情况，而接下来将讨论现在的变化)nowthethingshavechangedaround.(必须避免使用，连接两个句子。正确的处理方法是，要么采用断句的方法，要么添加连词。)Peopleinalongdistancecontacttheirlovesdonein(effectiveandefficient)ways,whichimprove(主谓一致，which代替ways。)theinteractionlevelbetweentwopersons.Quality(用词重复)oftheinteractionbetweenpeopleandpeople(主谓之间不能添加，。)hasbeenimproved(这里使用被动是因为沟通质量的提升是因为技术的发展。)becausetheyareequippedwithhigh-techdeviceswhichenhancestheircommunication.T