【读后续写】2018年6月份浙江省新高考读后续写课件

2018年6月份浙江省新高考读后续写叙事类记叙文读后续写写作技巧思维导图续写六要素时间，地点，人物（一致）

情节（完整性，合理性）： 事情的起因 事情的经过 事情的结果场景描写心理描写动作描写人物描写有效对话内容一致：照应关联词汇复现

结尾：哲理式结尾（立意）自然结尾情感结尾以景结情写作手法

Itwassummer,andmy

dad

wantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.

UnclePaul,mydad’sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthe

farmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdownthe

river

nearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast."Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,"hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTina

feed

thechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethe

sheep

outtograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn’tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains."Don’tbe

late

forsupper,"UnclePaulcried,"andkeeptothe

track

sothatyoudon’t

getlost!""OK!"mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutof

sight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)

blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse..Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.

.

201806浙江高考如何读？InterpretationoftheText文本解读AstoryhowwherewhenwhywhowhatUnclePaulInterpretationoftheText文本解读(Who)brotherIDadStep1:解读前文一：体裁______人称_________时态______二：5WWho:________________________When:_______________________Where:______________________Whatisthemainideaofeachparagraph?(sbdidsth)Why:____________________________________________ Lesson：___________________________________________Para1Para2Para3Para4MydadtookmeavacationtotheWildWestinsummer.Mydad’sfriend,UnclePaultookustohisfarm.IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorseonthefarm.Intheafternoon,myfatherandIrodeahorsetowardsthemountain.记叙文第一人称过去式Mydad,UnclePaulandIOnesummerOnUnclePaul‘sfarmhouseWecameacrossalittlerabbitandgotlostbecauseitwasdark.Keepcalmnomatterwhathappened.InterpretationoftheText文本解读(When)(background)onesummerday(Para.1)(the1stday)inthelateafternoon,spentthenight(Para.2)(the2ndday)veryearlyinthemorning,afterthebreakfast,intheafternoon,afterawhile(Para.3)InterpretationoftheText文本解读(How)★故事情节线：根据以上的时间线，我们可以梳理出各个时间点的故事情节。大背景：父亲带一家人去UnclePaul的农场过暑假。第一天：下午uncle到机场接我们，晚上在农场听青蛙叫和潺潺的水声。第二天：一早吃过早饭，体验了农场的生活，和Tina一起喂鸡，看着父亲和uncle一起放羊，同时看到父亲骑马觉得很酷，也想试一试。在“我”的请求之下，父亲答应陪“我”一起去骑马。出发前，uncle叮嘱“我们”要沿着足迹走并在晚饭前赶回来，不然会迷路。于是，“我”和父亲就出发了。Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读(G-N策略）1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para.1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.GivenInformationIaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.（Para.4)Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）NewInformation①Whatwastherabbitlike?②Whatwasmyreactiontotherabbit?③Whatwouldweseewhilechasingtherabbit?④Whathappenednext?1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para.1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Interpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para.2Wehavenoideawherewewereanditgotdark.Intheafternoon,...ificouldtakeahorseride.(Para.4)GivenInformationInterpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）NewInformation①HowdidIfeelandwhatdidDadreact?②Didwefindthewayout?How?③Whomaycometoourrescue?④Howaboutthesurroundingsinthedarkness?1.Interpretationofgiveninformation首句解读：Para.2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditgotdark.2.Interpretationofunderlinedwords下划线词解读：dad,UnclePaul,farmhouse,river,feed,sheep,late,track,getlost,sightInterpretationofunderlinedwordsandgiveninformation划线词和续写首句解读Characters人物类dad,UnclePaul,sheep,Places地点类farmhouse,river,trackTime时间类lateAction动作类feed,getlost,sight如何写？UnclePaul

Interpretationofwritingideas写作思路解读1Ihadtoldussuggested,unexpectedlyreceivinghispromptagreement

wasalsostunnedbythisspecialrabbit,gawkingatitmotionlesslyDadTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表达微技能：之环境描写篇读后续写的语言表达要生动形象，离不开对人物动作的准确描写，情绪、神态的生动刻画，以及环境的渲染烘托。特别是环境的描写，它服务于文章的主题和人物刻画，不仅给读者一种身临其境的感受，有时候还可以推动故事情节的发展，烘托人物的心理活动，让文本的语言更丰富，读者的体验更深刻。真可谓“一切景语皆情语”（王国维）。借景抒情、寓情于景是写作中常用的手法。环境描写也可分为客观环境和主观环境。这里主要聚焦客观环境（自然环境）的描写。1.描述天气的形容词stormy,warm,hot,rainy,cloudy,snowy,windy,foggy,misty,frosty,damp,wet,humid,freezingcold,clear,changeable,wild,moderate,calm,terrible,awful,sweltering2.天气描述的名词fog,snow,drizzle,lightrain,shower,storm,downpour,blizzard,snowstorm,thunder,typhoon,tornado,hurricaneTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表达微技能：之环境描写篇3.自然环境词块(在一般的自然环境的词前加入描述性的词，让环境描写更加具体)high/steep/snowed-cappedmountains/hillsgrand/wide/deep/lowvalleyrunning/shallow/deepwater/stream/creekspectacularsunriseandsettingsun

thethunderingcloudsthe

fragile/fragrant

flowers

thedark,rainingevening

thegreengrass

thefragrantrosesTheMicro-skillsTraininginwriting表达微技能：之环境描写篇如何得高分？Haveatry牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换1.受到惊吓，马突然跑了起来，跑的如此之快，以至于我什么也看不见只能听见风在耳边呼啸。__________________________________________________________________________________________________Frightenedbytherabbit,thehorsebegantorace.ItransofastthatIcouldhardlyseeanythingbutheardthewindwhistlinginmyear2.时间一点点过去，夜幕开始降临，天空开始出现一闪闪的星星，同情地看着我们。。_____________________________________________________________________________________________Astimewentby,thenightbegantofallandthestarsappearedinthesky,twinklingtheireyeatuswithsympathy.4.随着太阳下山，天色渐暗，岩石和松柏都看不清了。__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________当黑暗追逐着最后一丝阳光，那些岩石和松柏也渐渐被夜色吞噬。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.随着夜幕的降临，风吹得我有点冷。______________________________________________________________________当黑夜笼罩了大山，风开始吹得冻骨了。_____________________________________________________________________3.时间一点点过去，夜幕开始降临，天空开始出现一闪闪的星星，同情地看着我们。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Astimewentby,thenightbegantofallandthestarsappearedinthesky,twinklingtheireyeatuswithsympathy.Asthesunset,itwasgettingdarkerandIcouldhardlyseetherocksandpinetreesclearly.Asthedarknesswaschasingthelastrayofdaylight,thebrownrocksanddeeppinetreeswereswallowedbythenight.Asthenightfell,Ifeltabitcoldwhenthewindblew.Whenthedarknessenveloped/ruledthemountain,thewindbegantocreepintoourbones.7.更糟糕的是，树林里开始起雾了，周围的一切都被蒙上了一层纱，这无疑增加我们的困难，让我们更加无助。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________6.为了取暖，父亲生了一堆火。一切万籁俱寂，只有呼呼的风声和噼噼啪啪的火苗声相伴。_________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Tokeepwarm,fatherbuiltacampfire.Everythingwasinsilence,onlythehowlingofthewindandtheflamesofthefireforcompany.What’sworse,fogcreptinwithoutbeingnoticed.Everythingarounduswasveiled,whichundoubtedlyaddedtoourdifficultyandleftusevenmorehelplessPossibleversion1Paragraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.“Whatalovelyrabbit!”Ishoutedwitheyesglitteringwithterrificexcitement.ItwasquitedifferentfromthoseIsawinourcity,thusimmediatelystimulatingmyinterest.

Dad

wasalsostunnedbythisspecialrabbit,gawkingatitmotionlessly.“Dad,let’scatchitasourpet!”Isuggested,unexpectedlyreceivinghispromptagreement.Entirelyforgettingwhat

UnclePaul

hadtoldus,wechasedafterthatprettyrabbit,franticwithrapture.Unfortunately,socleverandswiftwasitthatitdisappearedintheforestbeforelong.Notuntilthendidwerealizethatthelastrayoftwilightwasquicklydisappearingamongthenumeroustreesandwecouldn’tfindour

track

atall!Wedid

getlost.

Possibleversion1Paragraph2

Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Thebone-chillingwindhowledfiercelylikeawolf,makingthedarknessevenmoresuffocating.“Dad,whatcanwedo?”Ithrewmyarmsaroundhimtightly,quiveringandseizedbystarkhorror.“Allisgoingwell!”Dadansweredinagentlevoice,calmandmollified.Wewanderedinthescaryforestanddidn’tknowwhathorriblethingswouldhappentous,hopingtofindthewayback.Suddenly,weheardthesoundofwaterrollingdownthe

river.Wewereoverthemoonanddecidedtofollowtheriver.Afterawhile,weheardthefamiliarsoundof

sheep

andthencaught

sight

ofthe

farmhouse.Thefamilywerewaitingforusinthedistance.Seeingthis,aradiantsmilelitupbothofourfaces.评点：光线的消退暗示了时间的流逝和黑夜的到来，推动了故事情节的发展，与下文的gettingdark衔接；bone-chilling,scary,horrible词的运用以及比喻修辞的运用，渲染了阴森恐怖的气氛，也烘托了主人公内心的害怕、恐惧；同时，河流和羊的声音也为故事的结局提供了线索和出路，给故事画上了圆满的句号。Possibleversion2Paragraph1Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.Myhorsewassoafraidthatitbeganrunningferociously.Icouldfeeltheairhittingmyfaceheavilyandhearmy

dad’s

hystericalcryfromadistance.Myheartwaspumpingwildlyandmybloodwaspulsingthroughmyveins.Ipulledbackthereins,distractedthehorseandtriedeverymeanstostopthehorsebutinvain.Afterwhatseemedaneternity,mydadcaughtupwithmebreathlesslyandmanagedtostopmyhorse.Butwefoundthatwewereindistress,withno

trackbesideus.Possibleversion2Paragraph2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.The

riverbesideuswasstillandsereneunderthelastrayofsunshinebutwedidn’thavethemoodtoenjoyit.Suddenly,itoccurredtousthattherewasalsoarivernearbythe

farmhouse.Realizingtherivermaybeaguideback,ourspiritssoaredandwebegantotrotbrisklyalongtheriver.Justafewminuteslater,catching

sight

ofthesilhouetteofthehouse,Ifeltafeelingofreliefandrelaxationsurgedthroughme.Icouldpicture

UnclePaul’s

smilingfaceandourdelicioussupperandIthoughttomyselfthatourbeinglostaddedaspecialtastetomyadventurousvacationwhichIwouldrememberallmylife.评点：这篇文章的环境描写较少，但是出现的几句却在文章里起到了画龙点睛的作用。比如空气击打着脸充分表现了马跑之快和当时情况的紧急。河流的平静和作者内心的不平静形成对比，凸显了主人公迷路后的焦虑不安，后来农场房子的出现又让主人公顿时柳暗花明。因此，不难发现这些环境描写看似漫不经心，其实在推动故事情节的展开，并和主人公的言行和心理息息相关。

人物描写；场景描写；

心理描写；动作描写；有效对话；细节描写：文中的细节描写：场景描写：1.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthe

farmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdownthe

river

nearby.2.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.场景描写：1.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthe

farmhouse

listeningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdownthe

river

nearby.2.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.心理描写：IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.动作描写：MydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.有效对话："Don’tbe

late

forsupper,"UnclePaulcried,"andkeeptothe

track

sothatyoudon’t

getlost!""OK!"修辞：Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)

blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.Step2：分类划线关键词Characters:_____________________________Noun:_________________________________Verb:__________________________________Adj/Adv________________________________Dad,UnclePaulFarmhouse,river,sheep,track,sightFeed,getlostlateStep3：Considertheplotdevelopmentswithquestions（情节推理）dad,UnclePaul,farmhouse,river,sheep,track,sight,feed,late,getlostPara1:Suddenly,alittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhouse.1.Seeingtherunningrabbit,howdidthewriterorthehorsefeel/react?2.Howdidthewriter’sfatherreacttothewriter’ssituation?3.Howdidtheygetlost?Whatwastheirfeelingsaboutbeinglost?Para2Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.

1.Whentheygotlost,whatweretheirfeelings?2.Whatdifficultiesdidtheymeet?Howtoovercomethem?3.HowcouldP2beendedreasonablyandhappily?step4读后续写模式之八法（1）情绪：消极情绪（有时积极）（2）细节：进一步解释描写（3）转折：个人的努力或借助外界（4）转机：事情似乎有了转机，并抱有希望，感到欣慰（5）失望：但是问题还是没有解决或出现了新问题（6）新法：突然有了一个想法（一句话说明这个想法）（7）结局：过了一段时间；事情有了最后的转折（8）总结：点题，呼应前文Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.

续写思路1.Itwassoquickthatmyhorsewasscared.Awaveofnervousnesssweptovermeespeciallywhenthehorseranlikecrazy.（情绪）2.Myheartpoundingandmypalmssweating,aninnervoicetoldmethatIhadtocalmdown.（细节：进一步解释描写）3.Thoughinapanic,Ipluckedmycouragetopullonthereins.（转折：个人努力）4.Luckily,itdidn’ttakelongbeforeIsettleddownthehorse.（转机：成功，希望来了）5.Justatthatmoment,Dadranover,gaspingforair.（失望：但是问题还是没有解决或出现了新问题）有效对话（衔接）6.“Boy,wearewayoffthetrack.”Hesaidseriously,alookofconcernspreadingacrosshisface.Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.续写思路1.Hungryandfrustrated,wetriedtofindawayoutbutinvain.Icalledhardandloudly,buttheonlyanswerwastherustlingofthewindinthetrees.(努力失败)2.Suddenlydadsaid,“Doyouheartherivernearby?Wecanbackalongit”（突然有了办法）(修辞手法)3.Unexpectedly,theriverbroughtustothefamiliartrackatlast.（开始做）4.Afterwhatseemedtwohours,UnclePaul’sfarmhousedidcomeintosight.（成功了）5.Myfather’sfacebrightenedup,sodidmine.Howwisemydadwas!（感受）6.Keepcalmnomatterwhathappened,thenyoucanovercomeeverything—that’swhatIlearnedfrom.哲理结尾6.Weeventuallyheardthefamiliarfrogs，andsawthecomfortingsightoftheoldfarmhouse.自然结尾6.Whatathrillingbutmemorableexperienceitwas.情感结尾6.AswegotcloserwesawUnclePaulintheyardwithaflashlightwavingusover.Atthatmoment,allofusburstintoasweetsmile.以景结情(总结)

1.Itwassoquickthatmyhorsewasscared.Awaveofnervousnesssweptovermeespeciallywhenthehorseranlikecrazy.

2.Myheartpoundingandmypalmssweating,aninnervoicetoldmethatIhadtocalmdown.

3.Thoughinapanic,Ipluckedmycouragetopullonthereins.

4.Luckily,itdidn’ttakelongbeforeIsettleddownthehorse.

5.Justatthatmoment,

Dad

ranover,gaspingforair.

6.“Boy,weareawayfromthe(keeptothe

track)track.”Hesaidseriously,alookofconcernspreadingacrosshisface.

1.Hungryandfrustrated,wetriedtofindawayoutbutinvain.Icalledhardandloudly,buttheonlyanswerwastherustlingofthewindinthetrees.

(thedeepgreenpipetrees)

2.Suddenlydadsaid,“Doyouheartherivernearby?Wecanbackalongit”

3.Unexpectedly,theriverbroughtustothefamiliartrackatlast.

4.Afterwhatseemedtwohours,UnclePaul’sfarmhousedidcomeintosight.

(hisfarmoutofsight)

5.Myfather’sfacebrightenedup,sodidmine.Howwisemydadwas!

6.Keepcalmnomatterwhathappened,thenyoucanovercomeeverything—that’swhatIlearnedfrom.照应，关联，词汇复现随堂演练PPT2021-9-10一、翻译下列词或词块。（每题3分，共36分）1.潺潺的水声___________________________ 2.呼呼的风声__________________________3.刺骨的风_____________________________4.恐怖的森林__________________________5.最后的一缕阳光_______________________ 6.风在耳边呼啸________________________7.被黑夜吞噬___________________________ 8.黑夜笼罩了大山______________________9.夜幕降临_____________________________ 10.一切都被蒙上了纱___________________11.情绪高涨_____________________________12.轻快地小跑_________________________13.侵入骨髓____________14.激发了我的兴趣_____________2018年6月浙江省高考真题读后续写4thefaintsoundofthewaterthehowlingofthewindbone–chillingwindscaryforestthelastrayofsunshinethewindwhistledintheearbeswallowedbythenightThedarknessenvelopedthemountainThenightfellEverythingwasveiledspiritsroar

besurprisedtodo

creepintobones

stimulatemyinterest二、用所给词的正确形式填空。（每空2分，共44分）1.“Whatalovelyrabbit!”Ishoutedwitheyes___________(glitter)withterrific_________(excite).2.Dadwasalso___________(震惊)bythespecialrabbit,___________(gawk)atit___________(motion).3.EntirelyforgettingwhatUnclePaultoldus,wechasedafterthatprettyrabbit,frantic_____rapture.4.Ithrewmyarmsaroundhimtightly,___________(quiver)and_______(seize)bystarkhorror.5.“Allisgoingwell!”Dadansweredinagentlevoice,_______and_______(平静的).glitteringexcitementstunnedgawkingmotionlesslywithquiveringseizedcalmmollified6.Myheartwaspum