【公开课课件】高中英语读后续写

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ThereAreNoVansTome,whatThanksgivingreallymeansisgivinggoodthanks,noteatingturkey.BythetimeIwas18IhadcreatedmyThanksgivingritual(惯例).Iwouldgooutshoppingandbuyenoughfoodforoneortwofamilies.ThenIwoulddresslikeadeliveryboy,gotothepoorestneighborhoodandjustknockonadoor,andwouldalwaysincludeanotesaying“AllthatIaskinreturnisthatyoutakegoodenoughcareofyourselfsothatsomedayyoucandothesamethingforsomeoneelse.”IhavereceivedmorefromthisannualritualthanIhavefromanyamountofmoneyI’veeverearned,especiallyonesuchexperienceinNewYorkCity.SeveralyearsagoIwasinNewYorkCitywithmynewlymarriedwifeduringThanksgiving.Shewassadbecausewewerenotwithourfamily.NormallyshewouldbehomedecoratingthehouseforChristmas,butwewerestuckhereinahotelroom.Isaid,“Honey,look,whydon’twedecoratesomelivestodayinsteadofsometrees?”WhenItoldherwhatIalwaysdoonThanksgiving,shegotexcited.Isaid,“Let’sgosomeplacewherewecanreallyappreciatewhoweare,whatweareabletodoandwhatwecanreallygive.Let’sgotothepoorneighborhoodHarlemandfeedsomepeoplethereinneed.We’llgobuyenoughfoodforsixorsevenfamiliesfor30days.We’vegotenough.Let’sgodoit!”

Westartedbygettingavan(货车),butthereseemednovansinallofNewYorkCity.Therent-a-carplaceswerealloutofvans.Mywifewasdisappointed,andIsaid,“Look,thebottomlineisthatifwewantsomething,wecanmakeithappen!Allwehavetodoistakeaction.ThereareplentyofvanshereinNewYorkCity.Lookdownatthestreet.Doyouseeallthosevans?Let’sgogetone!”Mywifeagreedandwetookaction.Knowthestory--elementsCharactersTimePlaceEventanexperienceinNewYorkCitytosearchvans.mywife,I,thedriverduringThanksgiving(the4thThursdayinNov.)NewYorkCityWhywereweinneedofvans?Whatdoesthewriterintendtotellus?Littlepeoplecanmakeabigdifference.Afriendinneedisafriendindeed.Nothingisimpossibleforawillingheart.Onegoodturndeservesanother....kindnessovertplotSettingIncitingincidentRisingactionClimaxFallingactionResolutionDenouementEventsA.Weneededavanforloadingsupplies.B.Wetriedourchanceatthestreet.C.Wewenttotherent-a-carplacesforgettingavan,butinvain.D.StuckinahotelduringThanksgivingwedecidedtohelppeopleinHarlem.DACBKnowthestory--plotCovertplotTimeEventsMoodBeforewemadeaplanMywifeandIwere_____inahotelShefelt________WhenwemadeaplanItoldher_______________Wedecidedto_____________Shegot________AfterwemadeaplanWestartedbygetting_____,butfound___________________;Iadvisedto______________Shewas________stucksadmyThanksgivingritualexcitedgotothepoorHarlemandbuyfoodforthemavanthereseemednovansavailabledisappointedtakeachanceinthestreetsWeavethestoryParagraph1:Wetriedstoppingvansastheyweredrivingdownthestreet.

_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Eventuallyavandroveupandthedriversaidyes.________________________________________________________________________________

划线词分类CharacterwifeSettingThanksgiving;food;experience;Harlem;inneed;vanActionbuy;knockMooddisappointedEvent:Mood:Event:Mood:stucktoldstartedsadexciteddisappointedattempttogetavan---invaindisappointed/hopeless

succeedingettingavandelighted/excited话题词块/表达表示失望：叹气Shesighedheavily.Afterseveralfruitlessattempts,mywifeletoutalongsigh.跺脚Mywifestampedherfootindespair.

Staringatthevanszoomingpastus,mywifetrembledwithrage.皱眉“Whocanweturnhelpto?”mywifemurmuredwithafiercefrown.紧皱眉头颤抖Mywifegaveamiserableshrug.

沮丧地耸了耸肩耸肩目光呆滞Shelookedblankinamoment.目光呆滞蹒跚Withadazedlookonourface,westaggeredaway.苦笑Shesmiledasadsmile.失望地看Mywifedarted/castafrustratedlookatme.低头Ilookedmywifeindesperation.绝望地Shebowedherheadandsaidnothing.摇头Shejustshookherheadin

hopelessness.哭Tearsofgrievance(委屈)/ˈɡriːvəns/cameintohereyeswhenshesawthemleft.表示失望：心跳加快Myheartthumpedfiercelyinmychest,tensionoverwhelmingmeentirelyinitspower.表示高兴：尖叫Hearingthewords,mywifeshriekedwithexcitement激动的尖叫心跳Myheartthumpedwithexcitement.兴奋地心直跳(表高兴难以置信)Withashriekofdelight,Shehuggedme.拥抱握手Itookholdofhishands

gratefully.点头Wenoddedgratefully.笑Hereyes

twinkledandherlipsbrokeintoabroadsmile.跳起来Hearingthesimpleyes,wealljumpedwithjoy.哭Weshedtearswithjoy.松口气Atthismoment,webreathedasighofrelief.wewerewildwithexcitement/joy.wecouldhardlycontainourexcitement.weweredelightedbeyonddescription.wewerefloatingonair.wewerebesideourselves(极度兴奋)withexcitement.webeamwithexcitement.Ourfacelitup.Ourheartwasthunderingwithexcitement.moreexpressionstoshowexcitementAwaveofhappinesssweptoverus.Asurgeofexcitementflashedintomyheart.Asenseofwarmthflowedinmybody.表示努力：用让步状语从句Wekeptonstrugglingforward,eventhough___________________

While_______________________________________,weneverlosthopeforanothertry.weknewitwashopeless.thepassingdriverszoomedpastuswithoutastop_________________________________(as),wecontinuedtowaveatthepassingcarsstubbornly.Wetoldourselvesrepeatedly________________________(however),wewouldn'tgiveintosetbacks.Disappointedandfatiguedaswewerehoweverpainstakingthetaskwas,

Inspiteof________________________,westillbelievedinmiracles.countlessfailures用非谓语表示努力：__________________________________________(berefused),wedecidedtotryonelasttime.Havingbeenrefusedmanytimes__________________________________(咬紧牙关),wepushedon.Grittingourteeth

用强调句__________________________________(妻子的鼓励)gavemeanextraburstofenergy.迸发出额外的能量Itwasmywife'sencouragementthat

用倒装结构_____________________________________________(never)Neverwouldwebedefeatedbytheplight表示努力：用虚拟语气Wesummonedup/collectedup/pluckedup/musteredup/gatheredourcourageandyelledatthetopofourvoiceforthefearthat_____________________wewouldmissavan.用谚语Ourheartsankatthethoughtofourfailuretogetavan,butwetoldourselves________________________________.(绝不半途而废)neverdoanythingbyhalves用“the+比较级，the+比较级”Weconstantlyconvinceourselvesthatthemore____________________________________________________.effortsweputin,theluckierwewouldbe.常见问题未理清人物关系：Harlem是地点不是人物书写较差故事太过冗长拖沓未按要求划线优秀习作22.5本文抓住了故事的中心矛盾——我们的努力和过往车辆的“无情”(turnablindeye/spedpass/drownourhope)构思和推动情节;用无灵主语和外貌描写(fingersnumbed/throatchocked/red-rimmed)侧面烘托了“我们”的无奈和无助。

结尾段用了时间状语immediately/then/thatnight/when等有序地推进故事发展；并且用外部寒冷的环境跟内心感到的温暖和炽热作对比深化主题“atleastwecanofferourkindness”优秀习作20郑子欣高三（1）该文使用了非谓语（wavingat...;）onlyto...；无灵主语(disappointmentcreptontomyface;Thegatheringgloomevendeepenedmyanxiety)牵动故事发展

文章第二段用了with复合结构“withbutterfliesinmystomach”、非谓语“Lookingat...”、独立主格结构“tearsrollingdownourcheeks”形象地展示了故事结尾

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