2023届高考英语专题复习书面表达金课 读后续写 课件

Continuationwriting析阅卷标准明答题思路析文章结构创故事情节析语言特点仿语言风格搭建流程输出续写范文析阅卷标准明答题思路读后续写题型解读

根据所给的一段约350词的语言材料和段落的开头语进行约150词的续写，将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节和结构完整的短文。

提供的短文，多以记叙文故事类文章或者夹叙夹议类文章为主，故事情节有曲折、有起伏，但故事线索的逻辑性比较强。

就目前已考过的读后续写来看，都属于“problem-solving”的思路。350词150词逻辑衔接情节和结构完整记叙文夹叙夹议有曲折有起伏逻辑性problem-solving第五档21-25分恰到好处，且有亮点血肉骨气备之第四档16-20分顺畅，但亮点不够云而通之第三档11-15分尽管有错，但能读懂知所云，然未周之第二档6-10分支离破碎，难以读下去知所欲云，然未能云第一档1-5分读不下去不知所云1.续写部分与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度；2.内容的丰富性和对文章关键词语的覆盖情况；3.应用语法结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性；4.上下文的连贯性。阅卷时主要考虑以下内容读后续写是一种将阅读与写作紧密结合的考查形式，可以说是。主要考查以下四个方面的能力：1.迅速获取文章主题（theme）、关键信息（5W1H）、语言特色的能力。2.语篇建构能力。3.创造性思维。4.语言运用的准确性与丰富性。读写并重+浅层的信息定位能力：深层的文本分析能力：

what,when,where,who,why,how等理清故事的发展脉络明确文本的中心思想和写作目的研判故事的语言风格和语言特色读后续写题型能力考查的解读阅读理解能力由读到写的思维能力+书面表达能力三大原则020103前后衔接上下连贯风格一致基于故事发展（故事线+感情线）预测正能量结局。弘扬社会主义核心价值观。故事跌宕起伏，人物会遇到困难或问题，最终解决。正能量原则原文一致原则曲折性原则迷路了失败了吵架了犯错了贼逃了回到了家最终成功和睦相处改过自新绳之以法走近阅卷评分员陈开始的一句话“Withgreatconfidence,shebegantofindsomemethodstosatisfyherstomach.”这句话跟上文的天黑下来不是特别地连贯。接下来看第一段的最后一句“Nightfell",天黑了下来，“Janefellintosleep,dreamingshewouldberescuedbyahelicopterandbebacktoTom."这句话连贯得比较好，而且还用了ing形式dreaming。再看第二段，第二段天亮了，“Fortunately,itwassunnywhichbrightenedJane'sheart."这个连贯地也比较好。再来看一下他的语言。这篇的语言写得比较好，比如说有“Unconsciously,Janefoundsomerubbishbelongedtoher.",语言虽然写得比较好，但是好像不是很恰当。然后有一句NosoonershesawTomdidsheburstintotears."用了一个nosooner,但是后面的语法出现了一点问题。然后有比较好的短语“bewildwithjoy"还有句型“withtearsonface",好词好句比较多，但是也有点点小错误，可以定在第四档的十七分左右。评分员访谈分析1.您是怎样评分的?一般需要读几次续写才能得出评分?

连贯初步定档，语言+故事完整性、精彩度，最后定档。

三次：连贯，语言，确认2.

对于评分标准您有哪些建议?

书写3.您现在是如何训练学生读后续写的?

理解前文、达到连贯、打好语言基础。感受逻辑性和连贯性阅卷演练写作一该篇作文在逻辑、语言方面做到了平衡、全面、出色。首先，在逻辑上，该篇文章做到了合理合情：起初，主人公身陷森林，内心充满了悔恨，在面对困难时焦虑、畏惧；之后，主人公努力求生，最终获救，并且领悟到了一定的人生道理。纵观整个故事，情节发展不仅符合两段给出的开头所限定的情景要求，而且还设置了一定的悬念，增强了故事的可读性。在语言上，这篇文章并没有一味采用大词、难词，而是在高中词汇范围内精挑细选，活用了许多小词，增加了许多阅读趣味。例如，文章第一句“anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest”中，“rule”一词就使用了拟人的修辞手法，让森林阴森黑暗的一面展露无遗，同时描绘出主人公身处绝境的紧迫性。在“Eagerandexcited,sheflaggedheryellowblouse...”一句中，直接将情绪形容词放在句首，使用了非谓语动词的语法，表达精练。此外，“There,shesawherhusband,amanstaringather,wearinganexpressionofrelief.”一句中，使用了几个短句，却包含了两处非谓语动词语法，同时活用了“wear”一词，把两个人相见时的场景生动地描绘了出来。总体来说，这篇文章反映出该考生课外阅读较多，平时应有较多练笔。25写作二

这篇文章最大的特色就是语言能力非常突出。

首先，全文使用了非常多的高级词汇，如“cluster,rage,dominate,infuriated”等等。这些词汇不仅准确地描绘出人物的动作，而且对环境描写也更为生动。不过，其词汇的使用也有一些只求大、不注意词义搭配自然程度的嫌疑，甚至有误用，如“adhere,flourish,astound”等。在修辞方面，文章多处使用拟人修辞手法，如“Clustersofstarsdecoratedthevastsky,weaklyshininginthemoon-eclipseddarkness.”以及“Sunshineembracedtheforestplain.”两句中，两个动词“decorate”，“embrace”使用了拟人。在语法上，全文主要使用非谓语动词，力求用最精练的语言表达出最生动的画面。

值得一提的是，文章虽然没有使用许多句式，但却从没给读者句子重复、单调的感觉，究其原因，是作者巧妙地给每句话设置了不同的主语。另外，本文每句话采用的写作切入角度也值得研究。例如，第一段中，作者从远景（stars,sky）到近景（stream），再到细节特写（ears），勾勒出了故事发生的不同场景，让故事显得有血有肉，情节丰满，这也成为了文章逻辑上的出彩点。24写作三

首先，在逻辑上，文章前半段对剧情的合理拓展非常符合情境：主人公从悔恨到无奈，最终鼓起勇气寻找出路。情节的丰富曲折增强了故事的可读性。

在语言方面，文章使用了多种句型，如“Neverinherwildestdreamhadshethoughtthatshewouldrunintosuchserioustrouble.”一句使用了倒装句；“ItsuddenlyoccurredtoherthatshehadafamilyandTomtoattendto.”一句用了主语从句；“Prayingthatthehelicopterwillcomebackagain,Janesatdown.”一句使用了非谓语动词。句型的多变避免了句子的单调乏味，使文章更有灵性。同时，一些词汇的使用也使文章比较生动，例如“Desperateandhopeless,Janekneltdown,tearstreamingdownherface.”一句中，“stream”的使用非常贴切。25写作四

该作文最大的亮点在于其语言的地道性。从文中使用了“ataloss”，“inadesperateattempt”，“spot”，“wornout”等词。同时，该考生的组句能力也非常出色。文章中出现了多个长句、复杂句，例如“Feelingunbearablycoldandextremelyexhausted,Janewasquiteatalossastohowtocopewiththeterriblesituation.”一句中，非谓语动词是其中的亮点语法，表达了人物当时的身体状况。

值得一提的是，该篇作文中没有一处出现人物对话，但仍然保证了故事的可读性与真实感。为何？因为作者对故事的各个情境、人物的动作、心理活动等方面都进行了细致入微的描绘，代替了语言相对简单的对话，反而让文章的语言显得更书面化。这一点，值得各位考生借鉴——人物对话写得越多，意味着作文的口语程度越高，往往不太容易得分，如果犯错，却容易失分，所以不太建议用大量对话。25答题情况分析及审题建议第一，从逻辑方面来看，大部分考生对故事的主要情节拓展基本做到了合情合理，衔接较为顺畅。但是，也有不少考生构思能力较为欠缺，无法在短时间内理清故事脉络以及写作意图，对所给的十个关键词、两段开头语中提供的线索信息没有很好利用，未实现语言交际的目的。第二，从语言方面来看，大多数考生能做到语言的基本正确。但是很多考生仍然基础薄弱，不能用英文传达意义，出现一些低级错误。第三，抄袭现象比较严重。抄袭的情况一般分为三类：抄自续写原文部分，抄自试卷的其他部分（如阅读题），或者之前背诵的某一段文章。由于读后续写的内容连贯性强，抄袭的同学很难浑水摸鱼，往往以零分或低分告终。第四，内容创新不够，平淡无奇。既然是故事，需要一定的情节构思和布局，不要求考生必须出奇制胜，但也需要考生能有较清晰的逻辑思维能力和一定的创造能力，情节合情合理，达到最后的合理收官。第五，整体卷面美观程度有待提高，行文书写体现不了语言美。析文章结构创故事情节读懂文章How六要素法Continuation阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Jennywasaprettyeight-year-oldgirl.Onedaywhensheandhermotherwerecheckingoutatthegrocerystore,Jennysawaplasticpearlnecklace(项链),bywhichshewastotallydefeated.Howeagerlyshewantedit!Butwhenshesawtheprice,herheartsankalittle.Shegathereduphercourageandaskedhermotherifshewouldbuyitforher.Hermothersaid,“Well,itisaprettynecklace,butitcostsanawfullotofmoney.Icanbuyyouthenecklace,butwhenwegethome,weshouldmakeupalistofhouseworkthatyoucandotopayforthenecklace.”Jennyagreedimmediately,feelingaburstofjoy.Sohermotherboughtthepearlnecklaceforher.Jennyworkedonherhouseworkdeterminedlyandearnestlyeveryday.SoonJennypaidoffthepearls.Jennyhadaverylovingdaddy.WhenJennywenttobed,hewouldreadJennyherfavoritestory.Onenightwhenhefinishedthestory,hesaid,“Jenny,doyouloveme?”“Oh,yes,Daddy,youknowIloveyou.”thelittlegirlsaiddelightedly(高兴地),withabroadsmileonherface.“Well,then,givemeyourpearls.”Hearingthat,Jennyfrozethere,ananxiousexpressiontwistingherface.“Oh!Daddy,notmypearls!ButyoucanhaveRosy,myfavoritedoll.Rememberher?Yougavehertomelastyearformybirthday.Okay?”“Ohno,darling,that’sokay.”Herfatherbrushedhercheekwithakiss,gentlyandcalmly.“Goodnight,littleone.”Aweeklater,herfatheronceagainaskedJennyafterherstory,“Doyouloveme?”“Ohyes,Daddy,youknowIloveyou.”thelittlegirlmurmuredsoftly,tryingtoescapefromherfather’seyes.“Well,then,givemeyourpearls.”“Oh,Daddy,notmypearls!ButyoucanhaveRibbons,mytoyhorse.Doyourememberher?Sheismyfavorite.”Thelittlegirlbegged.“No,that’sokay,”herfathersaid,smilingbroadlyandsweetlyandbrushedhercheekagainwithakiss.“Godblessyou,littleone.Sweetdreams.”注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；读后续写范例Paragraph1：Severaldayslater,whenJenny’sfathercameintoreadherstory,Jennywaswaitinganxiouslyforhimonthebed.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：Holdingtheplasticpearlhisdaughteroffered,thefatherdraggedoutabluebox.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________读六要素（Who,What,When,Where,Why,How）Person：Firstperson?Secondperson?Thirdperson?Tense:Thesimplepasttense?Thesimplepresenttense?ThoroughReading以记叙文为例注意：有时候一个文本并不具备所有的要素，可能只会涉及其中的三到四个读六要素（Who,What,When,Where,Why,How）Who

isthemaincharacter?When

didthestoryhappen?Where

didthestoryhappen?What

happenedinthestory?Why

didhewantthenecklace?How

wasthestoryended?JennyandherdaddyOnenightwhenherdaddyfinishedthestoryAtJenny’sbedroomHerdaddywantedherplasticpearlnecklace.HewantedtoknowwhichismoreimportanttoJenny,heorhernecklace.Jennydidn’tgiveittoherdaddy.ThoroughReading读六要素（Who,What,When,Where,Why,How）Who:JennyandherdaddyWhen:OnenightwhenherdaddyfinishedthestoryWhere:AtJenny’sbedroomWhat:Herdaddywantedherplasticpearlnecklace.Why:HewantedtoknowwhichismoreimportanttoJenny,heorhernecklace.Whatisthestoryabout?Jennydidalotofhouseworkinexchangeforaplasticpearlnecklace.Herdaddyaskedhertwicewhethershecouldgivehimhernecklace.Shesaidnotoherdaddy.How:Jennydidn’tgiveittoherdaddy.ThoroughReadingPerson：Firstperson?Secondperson?Thirdperson?ThirdpersonTense:Thesimplepasttense?Thesimplepresenttense?ThesimplepasttenseThoroughReading拿捏情感和情节Plotplanning情节:一般包括开端、发展、高潮、结局等部分。CharactersJenny,hermother,herdaddyBeginning

Jennydidalotofhouseworkinexchangeforaplasticpearlnecklace.DevelopmentHerdaddyaskedhertwicewhethershecouldgivehimhernecklace.Andshesaidnotoherdaddy.

Climax?

Ending?(youropinion)

?

ProblemSolutionRising……falling……Jenny,hermother,herdaddyclimaxParagraph1:Paragraph2:JennydidhouseworkinexchangeforaplasticpearlnecklaceHerdaddyaskedhertwicewhethershecouldgivehimhernecklace.Shesaidnotoherdaddy.

Thekeywords:JennyatthegrocerystorepearlnecklaceDaddybedlovedelightedlygivefavoritekissTip1:重要信息主要人物Plotplanning确定主题创设情节InfertheplotdevelopmentaccordingtothegivensentencesParagraph1：Severaldayslater,whenJenny’sfathercameintoreadherstory,Jennywaswaitinganxiouslyforhimonthebed.Paragraph2：Holdingtheplasticpearlhisdaughteroffered,thefatherdraggedoutabluebox.Tip2:先留意所给第二段的开头语，里面的一些关键信息必须要在第一段里面有所体现PlotplanningParagraph1：Severaldayslater,whenJenny’sfathercameintoreadherstory,Jennywaswaitinganxiouslyforhimonthebed.Tip3:结合关键词展开推断思考：根据第二段开头，可知Jenny把项链给了爸爸。可以从动作，对话，情绪等几方面去考虑1.门打开了，爸爸走进来。2.爸爸发现Jenny心事重重，问她发生什么事了。3.Jenny坐在那，不回答。4.Jenny问她爸是不是真的想要她的珍珠项链5.答曰是。6.Jenny把项链给了爸爸。Plotplanning析语言特点仿语言风格读后续写－如何打磨语言vividwritingWaystopolishyourstory

perconjunctions2.abundantsentencepatterns1.advancedwordsandphrases1.Advancedwordsandphrases(1)丰满人物内心（心情的表达）

Rich

adjectives

and

otherusefulexpressions

toportraytheinnerthoughtsofthefigures(2)增加表达效果（动作的表达）Detailedverbstomakeexpressionspowerful(3)丰富故事情节（细节和连贯）Properadverbs

toenrichyourstory小提示：1.高级词汇的选择遵循具体性原则，晚词优先原则1)agood/nicewomanawarm-hearted/generous/honest

woman2)Findingthelostdiamondringwouldbedifficult.

Findingthelostdiamondringwouldbe

challenging.3)Ashleigh'scarelessnesscaused

thelossofthediamondring.Ashleigh'scarelessnesswereresponsiblefor

...

小提示：2.避免重复使用同一词语1)TheHannahsthankedKorey,saying“Thankyou

foryourkindness,orwewillneverhaveit”againandagain.2)TheHannahsexpressedtheirgratitudetoKorey,saying“Thank

youforyourkindness,orneverwillwehaveit”againandagain.2.Abundantsentencepatterns思考翻译：穿着白色裙子，这个女孩儿看起来非常漂亮。(1)Thegirlwearsawhiteskirt,andshelooksbeautiful.(2)Wearingawhiteskirt,thegirllooksprettybeautiful.(3)Wearingawhiteskirt,thegirlappearsabsolutelybreathtaking,makingmefallinlovewithher.BasicSentencesComplexSentences1.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.2.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.3.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.4.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.5.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.ComplexSentences6.Iwishyoucouldseehim.7....butIdon’tseewhathecando.8.Aftertheirmotherhadlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.9.Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,...ComplexSentences10.Ihaveasolutionthatwecanhelpaccomplish(完成).11.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.12.Itellyouwhatwecando,...13.YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleSamsentus?ComplexSentences(Classified)GroupOne--ObjectClauses2.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.6.Iwishyoucouldseehim.7....butIdon’tseewhathecando.10.Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,...12.Itellyouwhatwecando,...ComplexSentences(Classified)GroupTwo--AttributiveClause4.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.5.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.11.Ihaveasolutionthatwecanhelpaccomplish(完成).13.YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleSamsentus?ComplexSentences(Classified)GroupThree--AdverbalClause1.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.3.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.8.Aftertheirmotherhadlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.11.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.

ChristmasDaywascoming.Iwasjustakidthen,andmybigsistertoldmetherewasnoSantaClaus.I

fledtomygrandmabecauseshewouldbestraightwithme.IknewGrandmaalwaystoldmethetruth.

Grandmawashome,andItoldhereverything.Shewasreadyforme."NoSantaClaus?"she

shouted.

"Ridiculous!Don'tbelieveit.Thatrumorhasbeengoingaroundforyears,anditmakesmemad.""Now,putonyourcoat,andlet'sgo."Gowhere,grandma?"Iasked."Where"

turnedouttobeKerby’sGeneralStore,theonestoreintownthathadalitbitofjustabouteverything.Aswewalkedthroughitsdoors,Grandmahandedmetendollars"Takethismoney,"shesaid,"andbuysomethingforsomeonewhoneedsit.I’llwaitforyouinthecar"ThensheturnedandwalkedoutofKerby’s.Iwasonlyeightyearsold.I’doftengoneshoppingwithmymother,andneverhadIshoppedforanythingallbymyself.Thestoreseemedbigandcrowded,fullofpeoplecompetingtofinishtheirChristmasshopping.ForafewmomentsIjuststoodthere,confused,holdingthatten-dollarbill,wonderingwhattobuyandwhotobuysomethingfor.典例分析

IsuddenlythoughtofBobbyDecker,whowasakidwithbadbreathandmessyhair.HesatrightbehindmeinMrs.Pollock'sgrade-twoclass.BobbyDeckerdidn'thaveacoat.Iknewthatbecauseheneverwentoutforrecessduringthewinter.

Hismotheralwayswroteanote,tellingtheteacherthathehadacough,butwekidsknewthatBobbyDeckerdidn'thaveacough,andthathedidn'thaveacoat.IwouldbuyBobbyDeckeracoat!Settledonaredone,whichlookedreallywarm,andhewouldlikethat."IsthisaChristmaspresentforsomeone?"theladybehindthecounteraskedkindly,asIlaidmytendollarsdown."Yes."

Theniceladysmiledatme,putthecoatinabagandwishedmeaMerryChristmas.Paragraph1：Thatevening,GrandmahelpedmewrapthecoatinChristmaspaper.___________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Grandmaand1waitedbreathlesslyforBobbyDecker’sfrontdoortoopenandfinallyitopened._______________________________________________典例分析写作出彩高级且丰富的句式同样重要(1)

Never

hadIshoppedforanythingallbymyself.(2)Thestoreseemedbigandcrowded,fullofpeoplecompetingtofinishtheirChristmasshopping.(3)ForafewmomentsIjuststoodthere,confused,holdingthatten-dollarbill,wonderingwhattobuy

andwhotobuysomethingfor.(4)IsuddenlythoughtofBobbyDecker,whowasakidwithbadbreathandmessyhair.(5)Hismotheralwayswroteanote,tellingtheteacherthathehadacough,butwekidsknewthatBobbyDeckerdidn'thaveacough,andthathedidn'thaveacoat.2.Abundantsentencepatterns并列动作：

Theniceladysmiled

atme,

put

thecoatinabagand

wished

meaMerryChristmas.伴随状语：使用分词形式、使用“with”结构、使用独立主格结构、使用形容词、名词、介词短语Hismotheralwayswroteanote,tellingtheteacherthathehadacough.

Bornintoapoorfamily,BobbyDeckerdidn'tevenhaveawarmcoat.

Quickly,weranintothecar,withourheartsbeatingwildly.Theyhuggedeachothertightly,tearsrollingdowntheircheeks.BobbyDeckersawthecoat,

confusedbutexcited.

Thatevening,GrandmahelpedmewrapthecoatinChristmaspaper.Sheaskedmetowrite"ToBobby,fromSantaClaus”onit.ThenwewenttoBobbyDecker'shouse.Weparkedourcar,notfarawayfromhishouse,andwewalkedtohisfrontdoor.Silently,IputtheChristmaspresentdownwhenGrandmaknockedathisdoor.Quicklyweranintothecar.Thenwewaitedforhim.

GrandmaandIwaitedbreathlesslyforBobbyDecker'sfrontdoortoopenandfinallyitopened.BobbyDeckerwentout.Whenhesawthecoatinthebag,helookedverysurprisedandthencalledhismothertogoout.TheyhuggedeachotherintearsandprayedtoSantaClaus.IfeltveryproudofwhatIhaddone.AtthattimeIdecidedtobeSanta'shelperforever.Thatmoment,IcametorealizethatSantaClausisineveryone'sheartifheiswillingtobeoneofhishelpers.Let’shaveatry!1.Sheaskedmetowrite"ToBobby,fromSantaClaus”onit.ThenwewenttoBobbyDecker'shouse.Shewrote"ToBobby,fromSantaClaus"onit,afterwhich

she

drovemeoverto

BobbyDecker'shouse,explaining

IwasofficiallyoneofSanta'shelpers.2.Weparkedourcar,notfarawayfromhishouse,andwewalkedtohisfrontdoor.GrandmaparkeddownthestreetfromBobby'shouse.

Takingadeepbreath,I

dashedforhisfrontdoor.GrandmaparkeddownthestreetfromBobby'shouse.Then,shegavemeanudge,whispering,“AllrightSantaClaus,getgoing”.

Taking

adeepbreath,I

dashedfor

hisfrontdoor.3.Silently,IputtheChristmaspresentdownwhenGrandmaknockedathisdoor.Quicklyweranintothecar.Thenwewaitedforhim.Seeingnootherpeoplenoticeus,I

puttheChristmaspresentdown,poundedhisdoorbell

andthen

GrandmaandI

crept

andhidinthecar.Let’shaveatry!1.BobbyDeckerwentout.OutwentBobbyDecker./

Therestood

BobbyDecker.2.Whenhesawthecoatinthebag,helookedverysurprisedandthencalledhismothertogoout.Seeingthecoatinthebag,heputhishandoverhismouth,

dumbstruck.

Afterawhile,heyelledathismothertogoout.Let’shaveatry!3.Theyhuggedeachotherintears

andprayedtoSantaClaus.IfeltveryproudofwhatIhaddone.Theyhuggedeachother

intears

and

afterhearingthemsay“thanks”toSantaClaus,IfeltveryproudofwhatIhaddone.4.Thatmoment,IcametorealizethatSantaClausisineveryone'sheartifheiswillingtobeoneofhishelpers.Itwasthatnightthat

Irealized

thetruththathewhohasnoChristmasinhisheartwillneverfindChristmasunderatree.Itwas

thatnightthat

Irealizedthoseawful

rumors

aboutSantaClauswerejustwhatGrandmasaidtheywere:ridiculous.SantaClauswasdefinitelyaliveandwewereactuallyonhisteam.Let’shaveatry!Appreciation:Para1:Thatevening,GrandmahelpedmewrapthecoatinChristmaspaper.Shewrote"ToBobby,fromSantaClaus"onit,afterwhich

shedrovemeovertoBobbyDecker'shouse,explainingIwasofficiallyoneofSanta'shelpers.GrandmaparkeddownthestreetfromBobby'shouse.Then,shegavemeanudge,whispering,“AllrightSantaClaus,getgoing”.

Taking

adeepbreath,Idashedfor

hisfrontdoor.

Seeingnootherpeoplenoticeus,Iput

theChristmaspresentdown,pounded

hisdoorbellandthen

GrandmaandIcrept

and

hid

inthecar.Appreciation:

Para2:GrandmaandIwaitedbreathlesslyforBobbyDecker’sfrontdoortoopenandfinallyitopened.OutwentBobbyDecker.Seeingthecoatinthebag,heputhishandoverhismouth,

dumbstruck.

Afterawhile,heyelledathismothertogoout.

Afterhearingthemsay"thanks"toSantaClaus,IfeltveryproudofwhatIhaddone.AtthattimeIdecidedtobeSanta'shelperforever.Itwas

thatnightthat

thoseawfulrumorsaboutSantaClauswerejustwhatGrandmasaidtheywere:ridiculous.SantaClauswasdefinitelyaliveandwewereactuallyonhisteam.小提示：结合使用长句与短句根据实际情况在文章中交替使用长句与短句，使得文章错落有致，这样不仅使文章在形式上增加美感，而且使文章读起来铿锵有力，如:Itookadeepbreath,rushedtohisfrontdoor,andput

thepresentdown.

Then

I

rang

thedoorbelland

flew

backtothecar.`Takingadeepbreath,Irushedtohisfrontdoor,and

put

theChristmaspresentdown.

Afterpounding

hisdoorbell,GrandmaandIcrept

and

hid

inthecar.2.Abundantsentencepatterns小提示：恰当套用某些固定表达1)Afterpoundinghisdoorbell,GrandmaandIcreptandhidinthecar,feelingnervousbutexcited.Wecouldn'ttakeabreath.Afterpoundinghisdoorbell,GrandmaandIcreptandhidinthecar,feelingtoonervousandexcited

to

takeabreath.2)Theyfelttouchedandthrilled.Andtheycouldn'thelphuggingeachotherintearsandprayedtoSantaClaus.Theyfeltsotouchedandthrilled

thatthey...3)Whenhesawthecoatinthebag,helookedverysurprisedandthencalledhismothertogoout.Themoment

hesawthecoatinthebag,he

puthishandoverhismouth,

dumbstruck.

Afterawhile,he

yelledathismothertogoout.2.Abundantsentencepatterns输入是输出的基础，不能纯粹地通过写作来提升写作，而应该通过阅读来学习如何写作。以合适的语篇为载体，多读美的东西，进行语篇分析，培养逻辑思维能力。考试题型的二次开发：精读完形（叙事类）任何一篇完形都覆盖着几乎80%的语法，包含经典短语和句子，都是百里挑一的好文章。完形的主题与续写的主题基本一致，都告诉我们一些人生道理（心灵鸡汤）。注重积累，形成自己的语料库，如悲伤逆流成河，惊讶到目瞪口呆，紧张到无法呼吸等等。备考指导Practicemakesperfect!PolishyourdraftPolishyourdraft修改:保证用上关键词，确保语法正确，替换高级词汇，然后运用各种从句、复合结构、非谓语动词、以及强调句和倒装句等特殊句式扩写:增加一些语言描写、动作描写、情绪描写、环境描写，增添语言的丰富性。1.Thedooropened,andJenny’sfathercamein.Whenthedooropened,herdadcamein,withastorybookinhislefthand.2.Jenny’sfatherfoundherdaughterupset,andaskedherwhathadhappened?SeeingJennysittingonthebedwithananxiouslook,hewentover,heldherhands,andaskedwhatwasthematter.3.Jennyjustsatthere.Shesaidnothing.Shakingherhead,Jennysaidnothing.修改:保证用上关键词，确保语法正确，替换高级词汇，然后运用各种从句、复合结构、非谓语动词、以及强调句和倒装句等特殊句式扩写:增加一些语言描写、动作描写、情绪描写、环境描写，增添语言的丰富性。4.Jennyaskedherfatherwhetherhereallywantedherpearlnecklace.Foramoment,silencefilledtheroom.“Daddy,”Jenny’svoicebrokethesilence,“Doyoureallywantmypearlnecklace?”5.Herfathersaidyes.Lookinggentlyintoherdaughter’seyes,henoddedwithadelightedsmileontheface.6.Jennygaveittoherdaddy.“Okay.”Jennycontinued,“Despitemyaffectionforthelovelynecklace,itisyouandmomthatIlovemuchbetter.”Beforeherdadcouldsayaword,Jennytookoutthenecklacefromunderthequiltandgaveittohim.PolishyourdraftLast

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copyingThedooropened,andJenny’sfathercamein.Jenny’sfatherfoundherdaughterupset,andaskedherwhathappened?Jennyjustsatthere.Shesaidnothing.Afterawhile,Jennyaskedherfatherwhetherhereallywantedherpearlnecklace.Herfathersaidyes.Jennygaveittoherdaddy.草稿版：润色版：Whenthedooropened,herdadcamein,withastorybookinhislefthand.SeeingJennysittingonthebedwithananxiouslook,hewentover,heldherhands,andaskedwhatwasthematter.Shakingherhead,Jennysaidnothing.Foramoment,silencefilledtheroom.“Daddy,”Jenny’svoicebrokethesilence,“Doyoureallywantmypearlnecklace?”Lookinggentlyintoherdaughter’seyes,henoddedwithadelightedsmileontheface.“Okay.”Jennycontinued,“Despitemyaffectionforthelovelynecklace,itisyouandmomthatIlovemuchbetter.”Beforeherdadcouldsayaword,Jennytookoutthenecklacefromunderthequiltandgaveittohim.升级版Severaldayslater,whenJenny’sfathercameintoreadherastory,Jennywaswaitinganxiouslyforhimonthebed.Whenlisteningtothestory,Jennywastotallyabsent-minded,withherhandsholdingthepearlnecklacetightlyandfirmly.Whenthestorycametoanend,unexpectedly,Jennyofferedherbelovednecklacetoherfather,withherfingerstremblingautomatically.Nooneknewwhatthenecklacemeanttoher.Shewhisperedtoherfather,softlyandgently,“Daddy,youknowIloveyoumorethanthenecklace.”Then,thenecklaceslidintoherfather’shandsdeterminedly.Have

a

tryParagraph2：Holdingtheplasticpearlhisdaughteroffered,thefatherdraggedoutabluebox.Paragraph2：Holdingtheplasticpearlhisdaughteroffered,hisfatherdraggedoutabluebox.MuchtoJenny’samazement,abeautifulrealpearlnecklacelaypeacefullyinthebox,whichsetherheartracing.Jennyfrozethere,athrilledexpressiontwistingherface.BeforeJenneywasabletosaysomething,herfatherbrushedawarmkissonherfaceandgatheredherintohisarms.Holdingthegenuinenecklaceinherhand,Jennyliftedherlip,tearsbeginningtoblurhervision.Have

a

try搭建流程输出续写范文阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成-篇完整的短文。

WewereenjoyingthesummervacationonthebeachesonBeautifulGulfshoresAlabama.Mydaughterwasabout6yearsoldandtheyoungestwas3.Weboughtatwo-maninflatable(需充气的)boatthinkingthiswouldmakeforareallyfundayforthetwogirls.Andsoitdid.Thetwoofthemplayedalldayinthatboat.

Notfarfromus,amiddle-agedmanwastakingasunbath,greetinguswithasmilenow

andthen.Laterthelittleonegottiredandwasbeginningtolookprettypinkwithtoomuch

sun.So,Itookhertoourspotonthesandandplacedanumbrellaoverherasmyoldergirl

continuedtoplayintheboat.Iprobablybecamealittletooinvolvedwithmyyoungerdaughter

and