江苏省高考英语一轮复习第23讲-书面表达写作技巧指导(一)课件复习过程

江苏省高考英语一轮复习第23讲-书面表达写作技巧指导(一)课件Clothesmaketheman.人要衣装，佛要金装。Beautyisthecombinationofthree-tenthsofgiftandseven-tenthsofgrooming.三分长相，七分打扮。

如何使文章起来“靓”

技巧1.使用较高级的词汇3.使用恰当的连接词2.使用较丰富的句式abundantsentencepatternsproperconjunctionsadvancedwordsandphrases4合理添加句子一、善用高级词汇Whichisbetter?

1周末我们会有很多作业要做。A.Wehaveendlesshomeworktodoattheweekend.B.Wehavealotofhomeworktodoattheweekend.2在我所有的老师里,毛老师给我留下了很深的印象。A.Ofallmyteachers,IstillrememberMr.Mao.B.Ofallmyteachers,Mr.Maogavemethedeepestimpression.3、

高级培训班结束后回到家，他的妻子感到精疲力尽。A.Hiswifecamebackhomeaftertheadvancedtrainingclass,feelingverytired.B.Hiswifecamebackhomeaftertheadvancedtrainingclass,feelingveryexhausted.4、他没听我课上讲的东西。A.HeturnedadeafeartowhatIsaidintheclass.B.Hedidn’tlistentowhatIsaidintheclass.→

ontheway/aroundthecorner.

Theweekendiscoming.

Nowadays,peoplethinkeducationisvery

important.→

beofgreatimportance/significanceattachgreatimportanceto

Becausetheweatherwasgood,ourjourneywascomfortable.Thankstothegoodweather，…Thestudentsthereneedn’tpayfortheirbooks.Booksarefreeofchargeforthestudentsthere.Youcanfindmyhouseeasily.You’llhavenotrouble\difficultyfindingmyhouse.

Ihadagoodidea.Agoodideaoccurredto/struck/cametome.Icameupwithagoodidea.use“complicated/advancedwords”

首先_____________起初_____________第一次___________

某人第一次做某事时____________在开始的时候__________

同时____________过了一会____________从那时起____________

直到现在____________不久以后__________

之后不久____________________随着时间的流逝_____________________

firstofall/tobeginwithforthefirsttimethefirsttime+句子uptonowbeforelongsincethen/fromthenoninthebeginning/atthebeginningof…meanwhile/atthesametimeafterawhileatfirstIt’snotlongbefore...Astimegoesby,就我而言_____________众所周知___________正如这样的情况…

________另外,此外___________更糟/严重的是___________更重要的是____________结果_____________我想_____________也就是说___________说实话_____________asfarasIamconcernedAsweallknow/AsisknowntoallAsisthecasebesides/what’smore/moreoverwhat’sworse/moreseriousAboveallasaresult/thereforeItoccurredtomethat…that’stosay/inotherwordstobefrank/totellthetruth就像…________就是因为…__________不只是因为…__________或多或少_____________迟早____________为……树立榜样________________代表某人_______________一方面…另一方面____________

相反的____________

总之____________

最后但同等重要____________比如____________

如下____________想当然地认为____________justlike…justbecausenotjustbecausemoreorlesssetagoodexampleto…soonerorlaterrepresent(v.)sb/onbehalfofsb(介短)foronething…foranotheronthecontrary/Insteadinconclusion/inshort/inbriefasfollowsforexample/take…forexamplelastbutnotleasttakeitforgrantedthat…位于…____________占地……____________有…年历史____________有…人口_______________________享有…的美誉______________

考取…大学______________出国深造_________________他是…的骄傲___________被授予/被认为是..________________coveranareaof…own/haveahistoryof…yearshaveapopulationof+数字enjoythereputationof…beadmittedto…universitygoabroadforfurtherstudiesHeistheprideof…behonored/consideredasbelocatedin…根据我个人经验____________与…息息相关____________在这信息时代_______________________鉴于社会实际的需要____________事实上______________

我们有理由相信______________然而，很可惜的是______________accordingtomypersonalexperiencebecloselyrelatedtointheageofinformation(andcommunication)intheviewofthepracticalneedofsocietyinfact/asamatteroffactWehavereasonstobelievethat…However,it’sapitythat请加上恰当的连接词1）Wecangodowntownanddosomeshopping.__________,wecanpayavisittosomeplacesofinterest.2）Isharedthecostofthegaswithmyfriends.___________,Isaved$80.3）Eatingsugarisbadforourteeth.___________,itmaymakeusfat.InadditionAsaresultWhat’sworse使用恰当的连接词Rewritethesentences

1.Theyarrivedattheschool.Theyfeltthehappyatmosphere.

2.Iwillbegivenanotherchance.Iwillsucceed.3.Hewantstoimprovehis

English.Hestudieshard.方法1.使用从句或非谓语动词使句子高档Whentheyarrivedattheschool,theyfeltthehappyatmosphere.Arrivingattheschool,theyfeltthehappyatmosphere.IfIamgivenanotherchance,Iwillsucceed.Givenanotherchance,Iwillsucceed.

InordertoimprovehisEnglish,hestudieshard.二、善用高档句式Manyboyslearntosmoke.Itdoesharmtotheirhealth.→Manyboyslearntosmoke,

whichdoesharmtotheirhealth.Themealwasverynice.Weallenjoyeditverymuch.→Themealwassonicethatweallenjoyeditverymuch.Shewalkedoutoftheroom.Manystudentsfollowedher.→Followedbymanystudents,shewalkedoutoftheroom.Whenheheardthegoodnews,heburstintotears.

HearingWhenitiscomparedwithothercartoons,

TheWolfandtheSheepismoreinteresting.C2.Hewentthereyesterday.(强调)→Hedidgothereyesterday.3.Topreventthepollutionisveryimportant.（感叹句）

→Howimportantitistopreventthepollution!

1.Thechildrenwon’tcomehomeuntil5pm..(强调)→Itis

notuntil5pm.

thatthechildrenwillcomehome.方法2.巧用倒装结构增强句子的表现力1.Hedidn’trealizehisfoolishnessuntilhereturnedhome.Notuntil2.Wecansavetheearthbychangingthewaywelive.

Only

3.Heiscleverbuthedoesnotworkhard.

as/though4.Theclocktowerstandsontheothersideofthestreet.

OntheothersideofthestreetCompletethesentences

hereturnedhomedidherealizehisfoolishness.bychangingthewaywelivecanwesavetheearth.Clever

heis,hedoesnotworkhard.standstheclocktower.

倒装是一种简单易行提亮句子的方法。Thechildrenwon’tcomehomeuntilitisdark.→

Notuntil

itisdark

willthechildrencomehome.YoucanimproveyourEnglishonlyinthisway.→

Onlyinthisway

canyouimproveyourEnglish.Althoughheisachild,hecanmanageit.→

Childasheis,hecanmanageit.

在文章中设计双重否定的句子，就变成了亮点句，起到强调作用。→

Icouldn’thavemadesomuchprogressinEnglishwithouthishelp.

Thepostmanneverfailstocomeontimeeveryday.

Thepostmancomesontimeeveryday.IhavemadegreatprogressinEnglishwithhishelp.适当使用被动语态，会呈现句型的变化，使句子表达地道丰富。同学们在这个问题上观点不同。Studentshavedifferentopinionsonthisquestion.Opinionsaredividedonthisquestion.主动不如被动巧学会使用with结构With+宾语+adj.adv.prep.--phrasetododoingdone1)她睡着了，灯还亮着。Shefellasleep______________________.2)种了很多花，我们学校呈现出新的面貌。

________________________，ourschooltookonanewlook.3)不要满嘴巴食物说话。Don’tspeak_________________________.4)由于无事可做，我就看了一部电影。_________________

,Isawamovie.

Withmanyflowersplanted

withyourmouthfull

Withnothingtodo

withthelighton当前，不断增加的交通事故已引起人们的广泛关注。Currently,thereisawidespreadconcernoverincreasingtrafficaccidents.现在越来越多的人正在逐渐意识到________________

如上所述，我们不难得出结论____________

它让我很清楚地意识到_________________Nowpeopleingrowingnumbersarecomingtorealizethat…Fromwhathasbeenmentionedabove,wemaysafelydrawtheconclusionthat…Ithasmademewellawarethat…此外，我们不应忽视…______________不用说______________不可否认这个事实______________我深信______________…的主要原因是…Besides,weshouldn’tneglectthat…Itgoeswithoutsayingthat…There’snodenyingthefactthat…Iamgreatlyconvincedthat…Themainreasonwhy…isthat…没有什么比…更重要了_________________________________如果我们能够做到如上所述，毫无疑问…____________________________我们绝对不能_____________我们应该不遗余力的美化我们的环境__________________________Nothingismoreimportantthan…Ifwecandoasmentionedabove,therecanbenodoubtthat…Onnoaccountcanwe…Weshouldsparenoefforttobeautifyourenvironment.方法3.尝试多样化表达方式

Inrecentyears,Beijinghasbeenadvancingveryfast.Allthesemakepeople’slivesconvenient,pleasantandcolorful._____________________________________________which_____________________________________Withthedevelopmentof________________________________________________________________________

_______________________so___that________________________________________________Inrecentyears,Beijinghasbeenadvancingveryfast,makespeople’slivesconvenient,pleasant…

Beijing,people’slivesarebecomingmoreandmoreconvenient,pleasantandcolorful.Nowadays,Beijingisdevelopingfastpeople’slivesaregettingmoreconvenient,pleasantandcolorful.Thoughheiswealthy,heworkshard.Wealthyasheis,heworkshard.Inspiteof/Despitehiswealth,heworkshard.Hedidn’tgetupuntil7o’clock.Itwasnotuntil7o’clockthathegotup.Notuntil7o’clockdidhegetup.一、善用高级词汇二、善用高档句式使用从句或非谓语动词使句子高档。巧用倒装结构增强句子的表现力。

尝试多样化表达方式。如何在内容上言之有物？（一）附加成分作解释说明1、这样更方便照顾父母。拓展：因为父母越来越年迈。

原因

astheyaregettingolderandolder.

2、因广告过多，影片放映晚点。拓展：这导致观众不耐烦甚至恼火。后果

whichmadeaudienceimpatientandsomeofthemevenannoyed.makingaudienceimpatientandsomeofthemevenannoyed.ItwillbemuchmoreconvenienttolookafteryourparentsThereweresomanyadvertisementsthattheydelayedthetimeofshowingthefilm,三、善于合理添加句子条件

3.安全出口（exit）标志不明，存在安全隐患(potentialhazard）。

拓展：万一遇到危险，观众难以逃脱。Incaseofdanger,itisdifficultfortheaudiencetoescape.Theexitisnotclear,sotherewillbepotentialhazard.方法——添加与所给信息有关的前因后果及条件，目的等内容（一）附加成分作解释说明(1)表达不同原因的概括语Thereareseveralreasonsforthis.Thereasonsareasfollows.Thereasonfor…isthat…Thereasonwhy…isthat(2)表示无需说明的事实的概括语：Itgoeswithoutsayingthat…It’sneedlesstosaythat…Needlesstosay,…It’sobviousthat…（二）根据话题加谚语(Proverb)1、我们应该集中注意力于学习。Weshouldfocusourmindonourstudies.Asthesayinggoes,“

.”Weshouldfocusourmindonourstudies...怎么添加谚语？方法——添加与所给信息或话题有关的谚语或俗语。Nopains,nogains2、锻炼对学生有好处。Itisgoodforusstudentstotakeexercise..Asthesayinggoes,“AllworkandnoplaymakesJackadullboy.”Itisgoodforusstudentstotakeexercise.3、我们应该充分利用时间了。Itishightimeforustomakegooduseoftime.Asthesayinggoes,

Itishightimeforustomakegooduseoftime.“Timeandtidewaitfor

noman.”Striketheironwhileitishot.

趁热打铁。Thinktwicebeforeyoudo.

三思而后行。Practicemakesperfect.

熟能生巧。Abirdinthehandisworthtwointhebush.

一鸟在手胜过双鸟在林。WheninRoman,doastheRomansdo.

入乡随俗。

常用谚语(Proverb)Doitnow.

机不可失，时不再来。Failureisthemotherofsuccess.

失败是成功之母。Itisnousecryingoverspiltmilk.

覆水难收。Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.一天一个苹果，医生远离我。AllroadsleadtoRome.条条大路通罗马。常用谚语(Proverb)青少年应尽我们所能保护环境拯救地球Weteenagersshoulddowhatwecantoprotecttheenvironmentandsavetheearth.

Forexample,wecanuserecyclablebagsinsteadofplasticbags,refusetousesingle-useproducts,plantmoretreesandsavewaterandenergy.（三）举例说明珍惜每一滴水Therefore,weshouldnolongerbeindifferentaboutthis.Toprotectourvaluablewaterresources,weshouldcallonpeopletocherisheverydropofwater.Otherwise,maybethelastdropsofwaterwillbeourtears.

Asmiddleschoolstudents,wealsohaveaparttoplay.Doremember:wearenotsavingwater,wearesavingourownlife.Witheveryonedoinghisbit,wecanmakeadifference.（四）结尾提出倡议或号召Asstudents,weshouldstartfromourselves.HereI’dliketoremindmyfriendtotaketheleadinprotectingtheenvironment.Witheveryonedoinghisbit,wecanchangethepresentsituation.

参加俱乐部或活动Don’thesitate.Itwillbegreatfun!Don’twait.Joinusnow!Sinceithassomanybenefits,whatareyouwaitingfor?Starttojoinusnow!保护环境如何在内容上言之有物？１.附加成分作解释说明

２.加谚语(Proverb)３.举例说明

４.结尾提出倡议或号召现在，青少年肥胖越来越严重，很让父母担心。请你根据以下提示写一篇文章参考词汇：肥胖：obesity垃圾食品：junkfood要求：1.字数150左右2.对所有要点要适当发挥，不要简单翻译。3.开头已给出，不计入总数Recently,thephenomenonofteenobesityhasmadealotofparentsconcerned.______________________________________________原因缺少运动饮食结构不合理建议多参加体育锻炼多吃健康食品，远离垃圾食品…

要点分析1、引出主题。Whenitcomestothe

phenomenonofteenobesity,ourparentsareingreatconcern.Whyaresomanykidsgettingfatterandfatter?2、原因。Reasons:3、建议。Suggestions:

BecauseofthepopularityofTVandcomputers,andbecausestudentshavesomuchhomeworktodo,theyaregettinglessexercisethanbefore.原因：1.缺少运动BecauseofthepopularityofTVandcomputers,andstudentsareburdenedwithsomuchhomework,Becausepeople’squalityoflifehasgottenbetterandbetter,familiescanaffordtobuymanyfoods,suchasmeat,chocolateandothersweetoroilysnacks,whichmightmakethekidsoverweight.原因：2.饮食结构不合理Inordertoloseweightandstayhealthy,teensshouldavoidspendingtoomuchtimeinfrontoftheTVorthecomputeranddomoreexercise.建议：1.多参加体育锻炼

建议：2.多吃健康食品，远离垃圾食品Asthesayinggoes,“Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.”Theyshouldalsoeatamorebalanceddietsuchasfruitsandvegetables,andlessfastfoodandjunkfood.建议：3.制定合理的计划，时间表Lastbutnotleast,theyshouldmakeapropertimeschedulesothattheycanbalancetheirexerciseandstudies合成文章

Recently,thephenomenonofteenobesityhasmadealotofparentsconcerned.Whyareteensgettingfatterandfatter?Inmyopinion,therearetworemarkablereasonsforthisproblem.Foronething,becauseofthepopularityofTVandcomputers,andstudentsareburdenedwithsomuchhomeworktodo.Theyaregettinglessexercisethanbefore.Foranother,becausepeople’squalityoflifehasgottenbetterandbetter,familiescanaffordtobuymanyfoods,suchasmeat,chocolateandothersweetoroilysnacks,whichmightmakethekidsoverweight.

Ontheotherhand,/aroused/Ontheonehand,

Inordertoloseweightandstayhealthy,teensshouldavoidspendingtoomuchtimeinfrontoftheTVorthecomputeranddomoreexercise.Asthesayinggoes,“Anappleadaykeepsthedoctoraway.”Theyshouldalsoeatamorebalanceddietsuchasfruits,vegetables,lessfastfoodandjunkfood.Lastbutnotleast,theyshouldmakeapropertimeschedulesothattheycanbalancetheirexerciseandstudies.（一）评分原则：1、本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。2、评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。3、词数少于80和多于140的，从总分中减去2分。4、评分时应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性及上下文的连贯性。5、拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面。评分时应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写及词汇用法均可接受。（二）评分标准：第五档(21-25分)：完全完成了试题规定的任务，完全达到了预期的写作目的——覆盖所有内容要点。——应用了较多的语法结构和词汇。——语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。——有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。第四档(16-20分)：完全完成了试题规定的任务，达到了预期的写作目的——虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。——应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。——语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试较复杂语法结构或词汇所致。——应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑。第三档(11-15分)：基本完成了试题规定的任务，整体而言，基本达到了预期的写作目的——虽漏掉一些内容，但覆盖所有主要内容。——应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。——有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。——应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文内容连贯。第二档(6-10分)：未恰当完成试题规定的任务，信息未能清楚地传达给读者——漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要内容，写了一些无关内容。——语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。——有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响了对写作内容的理解。——较少使用语句间的连接成分，内容缺少连贯性。第一档(1-5分)：未完成试题规定的任务，信息未能传达给读者——明显遗漏主要内容，写了一些无关内容，原因可能是未理解试题要求。——语法结构单调、词汇项目有限。——较多语法结构或词汇方面的错误，影响对写作内容的理解。——缺乏语句间的连接成分，内容不连贯。不得分（0分）：未能传达给读者仟何信息：内容太少，无法评判；写的内容均与所要求内容无关或所写内容无法看清。词汇,句型（高级）和语法多样化（较复杂）1.覆盖了所有的要点

2.应用了较多的语法结构和词汇

3.有效地使用了语句间的连接成分，使全文结构紧凑4.语言得体要点全连接词如何算是一篇好文章？语言地道，规范acompositiontopicsentence（主题句）supportingsentences（扩展句）ending（结尾句）过渡词：first,second,finally,and,besides,also,but,however,what’smore…Writingacompositionisjustlikemakingasandwich.写作的“五项基本原则”

一、长短句原则

二、主题句原则三、一二三原则

1）first,second,third,last（不推荐，原因：俗）

2）firstly,secondly,thirdly,finally（不推荐，原因：俗）

3）thefirst,thesecond,thethird,thelast（不推荐俗）

4）inthefirstplace,inthesecondplace,inthethirdplace,lastly（不推荐，原因：俗）

5）tobeginwith,then,furthermore,finally（推荐）

6）tostartwith,next,inaddition,finally（强烈推荐）

7）firstandforemost,besides,lastbutnotleast（强烈推荐）

8）mostimportantofall,moreover,finally

9）ontheonehand,ontheotherhand（两点的情况）

10）foronething,foranother（适用于两点情况）四、短语优先原则

五、多实少虚原则

在整篇文章中，避免只使用一两个句式，要灵活运用以下结构：倒装句强调句主从复合句分词状语With复合结构

NowstudentsinChinacelebratetheirbirthdaysinmanyways.Usually,apartyisheld.Bestfriendsandrelativeswillcometotheparty.Theyusuallybuyagift.Theyshowtheirbestwishes.Sometimes,peoplesendshortmessagestooanditisbecomingverypopular.ButIthinkthatit’sbettertohelpotherpeople.Weknowthatit’simportanttolearntohelpotherpeople.Helpingotherpeoplecandousalotofgood.Peoplewillhelpyoubecauseyou’vehelpedthemandyou’llbehappy…Improvethiscomposition,try!(1)NowstudentsinChinacelebratetheirbirthdaysinmanyways.(2)Usually,apartyisheld.Bestfriendsandrelativeswillcometotheparty.（用where定语从句）(3)Theyusuallybuyagift.Theyshowtheirbestwishes.（合并句子）(4)Sometimes,peoplesendshortmessagestooanditisbecomingverypopular（用which定语从句）.(5)But(替换）Ithink（替换）thatit’sbettertohelpotherpeople.(6)Weknowthatit’simportanttolearntohelpothers.Helpingotherpeoplecandousalotofgood.(7)Peoplewillhelpyouinreturnandyou’llbehappy（用Foronething,Foranother替换）.NowadaysstudentsinChinacelebratetheirbirthdaysinvariousways.Usually,apartyisheldwherebestfriendsaswellasrelatives