“读后续写”（2016年浙江卷真题）讲解课件- 高三英语二轮复习

县长在全县审计工作会议上的发言_1县长在全县审计工作会议上的讲话同志们:县委、县政府决定召开审计工作会议,主要目的是进一步提高对审计工作的认识,把我们各部门、各单位、各街镇的思想统一到县委、县政府的要求上来,高度重视审计工作,主动配合审计工作,确保我们有限的财政资金能够用好,用出成效。这次会议的主要任务是总结近年来全县审计工作,安排部署今年审计工作任务。这次会议非常重要,在央要求转变工作作风,尽量压缩会议的大背景下,我们其他方面的业务会议都进行了认真整合、压缩、合并,就审计工作专门召开一次会议,这可见县委、县政府对审计工作的高度重视。刚才云生同志代表县委、县政府对审计工作作了认真的回顾总结,同时也安排了今年的审计工作任务,应该说云生同志的讲话不仅总结了我们这些年的审计工作,肯定了审计工作取得的成效、发挥的作用,同时实事求是地对我们这些年来审计部门在审计工作发现的问题进行了认真的梳理总结,对大家作了一些通报,希望全县各部门、各单位、各镇街以及学校、医院等单位,一定要认真贯彻好本次会议精神,回去以后要结合本单位工作实际,认真进行总结,认真进行整改。下面,我再讲四点意见:一、充分肯定后续写读读后续写的具体要求

给文：

350词以内，(多为记叙文)

有段落开头语(各一句)

要求：

接续原文（150词左右),

故事合理、完整，衔接度高2读后续写的高分攻略评分标准第五档：21分-25分第四档：16分-20分第三档：11分-15分第二档：6分-10分第一档：1分-5分续写扣分理由一、书写潦草，卷面涂改；二、上下文的连贯性差；三、错词错句多，好词好句少；四、没有丰富和生动的细节推动情节的发展；五、与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度差六、无逻辑性，故事主题跑偏。获得高分的写作技巧Tip1:故事要围绕着主要人物展开。Tip2:详细刻画角色及其情感。Tip4:使用恰当的修饰词以使描写更加生动。Tip3:使用恰当的衔接词以使故事更有连贯性。Tip5:做到首尾呼应以使故事更加有条理。Tip6:确保第二段和第一段的衔接有逻辑。

阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。(2016年10月浙江高考试题)

OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeintheforest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimetheyreachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom,“I’mgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp”andwalkedaway.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,sheturned

示例around,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnowcappedmountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.“Tom!”shecried.“Help!”Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershewalked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopforthenight.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimandtellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling(滴落)somewhereatadistance.Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandateafewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthestreamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,thetreesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgotoanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.应使用5个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1：

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.____________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2：

ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.__________________________________________________________

课前检测：1.On_________(see)me,hegavesuchastartofsurprisethathedroppedallthethingsinhishand.2.Hewassosurprised____hestoodthere____hismouthopen.3.Maybe_______(ashame)ofwhathehaddone,hewasabouttoturnaway_____Iseizedhisarmquickly.4.Istared____himforseveralsecondsandbrokethesilence,_________(say)“Roy,trustme.Iamwillingtohelpyou.”5._______________(regret)whathehaddone,hecouldn’tholdbackhistears,bentdownandburstout________(cry)withhisheadburiedinhishands.seeingthatwithashamedwhenatsayingHavingregrettedcrying6._________(feel)asenseofrelief,Roycan’twait__________(apologize)toourteacherforhisbehavior.7.Infrontoftheoffice,hehesitated____________(knock)atthedoor.8.__________(encourage)byme,heeventuallymadeit.9.Roypulledoutthemoneyandhandedittotheteacher,____________(apologize)forhisbehavior.10.Onceyouroutgoingpersonalityleftadeepimpression_____us.11.Youareblessed_____suchagoodfriend.12._________(step)outoftheoffice,wefeltasenseofreliefwiththesun___________(shine)downoverus.FeelingtoapologizetoknockEncouragedapologizingonwithSteppingshiningRead步骤？ThinkWrite1)5W1H2)organization3)language关键词开头语Predicttheplotproperly1)Actions动作2)Feelings情感3)Surroundings环境Getthemainidea读线索5W1Hcontentwhowhenwhere

what

Why

JanewaslosttheyquarreledJane,TomoneweekendinJuly

intheforestmainidea?OnweekendinJuly,JanewaslostintheforestbecauseshehadquarreledwithTom.Inwhatorderisthematerialdeveloped?OneweekendinJuly,……Asnightwasbeginningtofall,……Janeroseatthebreakoftheday,……But……anditwasgettingdarkagain.ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Time读结构Withnopathtofollow,Jane……with复合结构……,sheturnedaround,hopingto……分词作状语Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthat……Janerose……,hungryandthirsty.形容词作状语Ifonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephone……固定句式Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.倒装读语言BeginningClimaxEndingquarrel

angrysawhelicopterswasrescued?processlostconfused，tired构思Para.1:But

no

more

helicopters

came

and

it

was

dark.

续写部分:简当时的感受？简是如何过夜的？

简睡着了吗？Para.2:It

was

daybreak

when

Jane

woke

up.续写部分：简获救了吗？谁救了简？

怎么救的？

她当时的感受？A:actions动作的丰富性F:feelings情感表达的多样性S:surroundings恰当运用环境描写Write第五档续写例文

Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Feelingdisappointed,Janehadtostayaloneforanothernight.Afterwalkingalongdistanceagain,itoccurredtoherthatshehadaboxofmatcheswithher.Shewaswildwithjoyandusedthemtoburnsomebranchessothatshecouldgetsomewarmth.Staringatthejumpingfire,Janethoughtofallthething