高中英语读后续写：遛狗(202010浙江五校联考)课件

1、2020 学年第一学期五校联考续写 2020 学年第一学期五校联考续写阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。September is most beautiful in Strathroy, where people wholeheartedly enjoy the simple pleasures of life and nature. Roland was no exception. He was a magnificent German Shepherd（德国牧羊犬）, a little l azy and overweight though. He loved t

2、o doze in the backyard. He yawned and stretched his body as he heard the slowly approaching footsteps of Mrs. Proudfoot. “Come have your lunch dear!” said Mrs. Proudfoot with her usual fondness for him and he wagged his tail affectionately in return.Roland was licking the last piece of meat in his p

3、late when the doorbell burst into music. Mrs. Proudfoot hurried to answer the door. Roland stood alert by her side.“Good noon Mrs. Proudfoot”. It was Sam, her teenage neighbor. “My! My! You look pale! What happened?” asked Mrs. Proudfoot with genuine worry. She immediately waved him in and closed th

4、e door behind. Mrs. Proudfoot was a lonely widow, but was well loved in her neighborhood especially by kids, though she had no kids to call her own. Once encouraged, Sam disclosed his dilemma. “My friend Barry lost a rare book of school library. It costs 150 dollars, but he has only 55 dollars and h

5、is poor parents cant afford to pay the rest. Barry is working part time but thats far from enough.” With a dramatic sigh he continued, “If he didnt refund the loss before the end of term, he will be dismissed from final exams. That will ruin his future! I have to help him, whatever it takes. He is m

6、y b est friend.”“Dont worry, Sammy. You want me to pay” but Mrs. Proudfoot was interrupted. “No, No, Mrs. Proudfoot. This is not what I came here for. Ill work for you. Would you favor me to walk your dog please? For 2 dollars a day.” He looked up with begging eyes.Mrs. Proudfoot clapped her hands i

7、n agreement, “That cant be better! Ive been worried about Roland lately. He does need some exercise! Its nice of you to make such an offer.”Sam thanked her over and over, “I will start tomorrow morning.”阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。注意：所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；续写

8、完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1：Sam arrived very early the next morning.Paragraph 2：A month later, Mrs. Proudfoot was delighted to find Roland fit and energetic. 注意：Reading ：Analyze the storyRead for main characters(who)Roland a magnificent German ShepherdSam a teenager;Mrs. Proudfoots neighborMrs

9、. Proudfoota lonely widow(寡妇)2. Read for time and place (when and where)Time : SeptemberPlace：StrathroyReading ：Analyze the storyRola3. Read for plotRoland, the shepherd, was having his lunch.Sam came to Mrs. Proudfoot , his face pale.Mrs. Proudfoot waved him in and encouraged him to tell what happe

10、ned.Sam disclosed his dilemma: his friend Barry lost a rare book of school library costing $150 but had only $55.Mrs. Proudfoot offered to give him the money.Sam interrupted and begged to walk the dog for Mrs. Proudfoot and get paid for $2 a day.Mrs. Proudfoot agreed, saying her dog needed some exer

11、cise.Sam was grateful and promised to start the next day.3. Read for plot4. Read for personalities of the characters and important details Roland： *He was a magnificent German Shepherd, a little lazy and overweight though loved to doze in the backyardyawned and stretched his body he wagged his tail

12、affectionately in return.* Mrs. Proudfoot hurried to answer the door. Roland stood alert by her side.a devoted dog;is obedient to Mrs. Proudfoot Will it be easy for Sam to walk the dog？lazy, doze,yawn, stretchneeds exerciseoverweightHow will Sam make Roland obey his instructions? but 4. Read for per

13、sonalities of tMrs. Proudfoot： *“Come have your lunch dear!” said Mrs. Proudfoot with her usual fondness for him .*“My! My! You look pale! What happened?” asked Mrs. Proudfoot with genuine worry. She immediately waved him in .* Mrs. Proudfoot was a lonely widow, but was well loved in her neighborhoo

14、d especially by kids, though she had no kids to call her own.* Once encouraged, Sam disclosed his dilemma.*“Dont worry, Sammy. You want me to pay”*Mrs. Proudfoot clapped her hands in agreement, “That cant be better! Ive been worried about Roland lately. He does need some exercise! Its nice of you to

15、 make such an offer.” animal-friendly; kind-hearted; warm-hearted; considerate; thoughtful; affectionate; trustworthy; reliableShe needs company.Mrs. Proudfoot：She needs compaSam:*My friend Barry lost a rare book of school library. It costs 150 dollars, but he has only 55 dollars and his poor parent

16、s cant afford to pay the rest. Barry is working part time but thats far from enough.” With a dramatic sigh he continued, “If he didnt refund the loss before the end of term, he will be dismissed from final exams. That will ruin his future! I have to help him, whatever it takes. He is my b est friend

17、.*“Dont worry, Sammy. You want me to pay” but Mrs. Proudfoot was interrupted. “No, No, Mrs. Proudfoot. This is not what I came here for. Ill work for you. Would you favor me to walk your dog please? For 2 dollars a day.” He looked up with begging eyes.a devoted/loyal/faithful friend; considerate; a

18、person of self-esteem and independenceSam:a devoted/loyal/faithful f5. Read for theme(本文的主题可以从多个角度提炼，但是不管从哪个角度提炼，无论前面情节情感是怎样的变化，最终的主题都应该是积极的正面的。)1).Helping others is helping yourself.2).A kind person will never be lonely.3).Sometimes only a little kindness can ignite something shining.4).Roses given

19、, fragrance in hand.5. Read for theme(本文的主题可以从多个角度Continue writing：1.先把最后一句写好，即：主题句Paragraph 2：A month later, Mrs. Proudfoot was delighted to find Roland fit and energetic. At the end of the storyRoland: Sam: Mrs. Proudfoot: fit and energetic, liked exercise got enough money for his friend Barry to

20、pay for the lost book so that Barrys future wont be ruineddelighted to find Roland fit and energetic; got visited every by Sam, not lonely any more.was thankful to Mrs. Proudfoot and offered to continue walking the dog, but for free.possible developmentContinue writing：At the end ofTip1：根据对已给故事的分析,结

21、合第二段所给段落首句,确定主题, 写好主题句，然后再围绕主题来展开前面两段情节的发展。The last sentence: Sometimes only a little kindness can ignite something shining, making the world more beautiful and harmonious.2.把衔接句写好，即第一段的最后一句Paragraph 1：Sam arrived very early the next morning.Paragraph 2：A month later, Mrs. Proudfoot was delighted to

22、 find Roland fit and energetic. Possible sentence: With the temptation of the delicious meat, Roland followed Sam eagerly. Day by day, it gradually became a routine for both of them./Delightedly, Sam found Roland had gradually become willing and eager to have a walk outside.Tip1：根据对已给故事的分析,结合第二段所给段落

23、首句,确定3.紧接着每段的提示语句写角色的情感或反应Paragraph 1：Sam arrived very early the next morning.Possible sentence: Seeing Roland lazily bathed in mild sunshine with eyes narrowed into a line, Sam darted towards him, arms widely opened, trying to tempt Roland to stand up and follow him out. Sam Rolandmain interaction3

24、.紧接着每段的提示语句写角色的情感或反应Sam Paragraph 2：A month later, Mrs. Proudfoot was delighted to find Roland fit and energetic.Possible sentence: Satisfied with Sams work, she gave him some extra money, saying, “Life is marvelous. Thanks to your help, a fat lazy dog has become strong and energetic!” /Wagging his

25、tail merrily, Roland bounced beside Mrs. Proudfoot , as if ecstatic over her praise./Enjoying the pleasure to roam along the country road with Roland, Sam also harvested a lot from the relaxing time. Sam Mrs. Proudfoot Rolandmain interactionParagraph 2：Sam 4. 把每段的中间补充完整(以ActionResponse的方法推动中间情节发展，即角

26、色A的所言、所行、所感、所想会引起其它角色的反应)下面以第一段为例：Paragraph 1:Sam arrived very early the next morning. Seeing Roland lazily bathed in mild sunshine with eyes narrowed into a line, Sam darted towards him, arms widely opened, trying to tempt Roland to stand up and follow him out. Giving him a lazy glimpse, Roland pol

27、itely wagged his tail and then turned his head away, falling sound asleep again.(Roland Sam-Roland)Tip2：一定要反复研读揣摩所提供的段落以及所提供的两个首句，注重对重要细节的理解，分析人物性格，领会故事发展方向和主题。4. 把每段的中间补充完整(以ActionResponseA possible version Paragraph 1: Sam arrived very early the next morning. Seeing Roland lazily bathed in mild su

28、nshine with eyes narrowed into a line, Sam darted towards him, arms widely opened. Giving him a lazy glimpse, Roland politely wagged his tail and then turned his head away, falling sound asleep again. Desperately brainstorming, Sam got a piece of delicious bone from Mrs. Proudfoot. Lured by the tast

29、y smell, Roland swiftly bounced up and jumped at the bone, following Sam out. In this way, the first day was smoothly finished. Day by day, Sam was delighted to find Roland gradually become willing and eager to have a walk outside.A possible version Paragraph 1Paragraph 2： A month later, Mrs. Proudf

30、oot was delighted to find Roland fit and energetic. Enjoying the pleasure to roam along the country road with Roland, Sam also harvested a lot from the relaxing time. Eventually one day, Sam was excited to tell Mrs. Proudfoot, “Barry and I have earned enough money. Thank you, Mrs. Proudfoot! But can

31、 I continue walking Roland for you? For free!” Radiantly, Mrs. Proudfoot nodded. Receiving a positive answer, Sam was wild with joy and Roland, wagging his tail merrily, as if intoxicated. Sometimes only a little kindness can ignite something shining, making the world more beautiful and harmonious.P

32、aragraph 2：这篇作文第一段的情节设计：Roland一开始不愿意跟Sam走，Sam用骨头饼干引诱Roland，并慢慢地让Roland喜欢上了这个活动的过程，情节设计合理。文中seeing，unwilling， excitedly ruffling, tempted, bouncing 等分词的使用使文中人和动物生动起来,且与第二段首句衔接,是亮点。不足之处在于：little kindness would make the world more brilliant，主题提升合理，但在第二段的情节设计中体现的不够；原文中Sam帮Mrs Proudfoot 遛狗为了帮助朋友Barry 赚钱还

33、清丢失书本的钱，这件事情在第二段里也没有后续提及。总的来说，这位同学的语言基本功还是不错的，也有一定的积累。学生习作1：这篇作文第一段的情节设计：Roland一开始不愿意跟Sam走这篇作文的亮点在于句子能以丰富的语言结构,如：v-ing,with 结构,adj.结构,v-ed等形式开头, 使文章读起来生动形象。情节构思合理，逻辑性较强。一、二两段衔接合理。主题提升方向是合理的,但是主题句的表达方式可以改进。比如可以这样表达：Though Mrs Proudfoot was a lonely widow, her heart was brimful of happiness and warmth

34、. “Roses given, fragrance in hand”. She actually fulfilled herself by helping others.总的来说这位同学的语言有较多积累,功底不错。学生习作2：这篇作文的亮点在于句子能以丰富的语言结构,如：v-ing,wLanguage appreciation and accumulation:dog: (from the given story)1.He was a magnificent German Shepherd, a little lazy and overweight though. adj.2.He loved to doze in the backyard. He yawned and stretched his body.