针对九年级几次作文问题的分析和改进建议.ppt

1、大作文,Hugh C.Wang 22-12-2015,中西思维对比图,中式螺旋式思维，绕圈绕到中心。,西式线性思维，（一般）开始即给出主题。,按线性思维写作示意图,Title,Topic,Body,Conclusion,Say what youll say.,（1）主题句（Topic Sentence） 写主题句的诀窍是针对题目想出一个关键性的形容词、名词或副词。比如写“在我们学校有一个图书馆，我们从里面借书”就缺乏重点，很难展开。如果写“在我们学校我最喜欢的地方就是图书馆，”有了关键词“最喜欢的”，接下来便可以写为什么。,Say it.,（2）发展句 写主题句下面的每一句发展句都必须问自己它

2、与主题句有何关系，以上段为例，每个发展句都必须用来说明老师最喜欢的理由，陈述理由时可以举例。 范例片段 My favorite place in school is the fantastic library from which I borrow books. In a quiet reading room, I can better focus on what I learn. Besides, her are all kinds of books, （当然如果你写不出什么，或者想写的“太多”，就说明你找出那个“关键词”并不是你真正的可以写出作文关键词，那你就得换主题句或关键词了。）,Sa

3、y what you have said.,（3）结论句（Conclusion） 举例之后就可以写结论句了。结论句与主题句息息相关，可以说是主题句的另一种表现。比如还是上面的例子，结尾就可以写成“The library is really a wonderful place to study school work and to expand my knowledge. Sometimes I can even make new friends who loves reading too.”,四种文体（记叙文、说明文、议论文、描述文）简介,记叙文 用以解说一个故事或事件。包括真实或虚幻的故事。

4、 叙述故事时，也要描写。 记叙文写的是在特定情况下发生的实践及体验。,I find Chinese folk music, Jessamine (Moli Flower)to be my favorite music. It was made by the Chinese people and at the beginning of 20th century it was the first piece introduced to Western world by Italian composer Puccini. In 1920, Puccini found the music when h

5、e listen to the music box of his ambassador friends(大使朋友). Then he put the music in to his opera Turandot(图兰朵）.Since then, Jessamine has been known all over the world. As a national and international piece of music, Jessamine can be loved by people always.,NarrativeStyle,My Favorite Music,议论文,是作者根据事

6、实针对某个方面发表自己的见解看法，起说服作用的一种写作方法。 夹叙夹议 叙述（熟悉的）生活片段、细节，但要求对其进行一定的思考、评述和分析，即要对叙述的事情发表自己的看法。,I find Chinese folk music, Jessamine (Moli Flower)to be my favorite music. I like it because the music is strangely beautiful. When I listen to it, I sense a strong joy and courage, imagining I came back to my chi

7、ldhood and enjoyed myself among the beautiful Jessamine flowers. It was made by the Chinese people and at the beginning of 20th century it was the first piece introduced to Western world. It has been playing a very important role in the history of music. I think you should listen to it because it ca

8、n help feel the fresh springtime of life and the beautiful garden of heart.,My Favorite Music,Narrative& Argumentative Style,列提纲确保“总分总”三段式标准,1. 记叙文 行文模式：介绍（主题句） 描写（发展句） 评价（总结句） 写事（时间、地点、人物、事件，发生、发展、结束）,现在学校英语校刊要征集文章，内容是有关你最喜欢的音乐电影或其他，请你写一篇文章投稿。词数，不少于80。,Outline Topic: my favorite Body: 1. I like bec

9、ause 2. It/He/She 3. When I listen to/watch it, I feel Conclusion: I think ,在生活和学习中你一定有很多个人经历，现在有一个经历分享会请你参加，谈谈你的一个经历，并说明这次经历给你带来的感受。（题目自拟，或不用题目）词数，不少于80。,Outline Topic: got bad math grade Body:1. got back home, went into room without a word. 2. father knocked on the door, told me, understand, belie

10、ve me, always be with me. Conclusion: moved, know his love, thank him, （decide to )find out mistakes,He Loves Me Alone I walked home yesterday. My mind would not stop thinking about my bad grades in math. As soon as I walked through the door, my father asked me what was wrong. I told him nothing was

11、 wrong. Then I went into my room without another word. Two minutes later, my father knocked on the door and said, “Son, I guess you must have had something bad. I want you to know I understand and believe you are going to make it. You mum and I are always with you” My fathers words made me moved, wh

12、ich let me know how deeply he loves me and hopes I can grow happily no matter I win or lose! I opened the door and said thanks to my father and then came back to the desk, starting to find out the mistakes in the paper. Ill do my best not to let him down.,He Loves Me Alone I walked home yesterday. M

13、y mind would not stop thinking about my bad grades in math. As soon as I got home, I went into my room without a word. Two minutes later, my father knocked on the door and said, “Son, I guess you must have had something bad. I want you to know I understand and believe you are going to make it. Im al

14、ways with you.” His words moved me. This made me know he loves me no matter I win or lose, and he hopes I can grow happily! I opened the door, saying sorry and thanks to him. Then I came back to the desk, starting to find out the mistakes in the paper.,He Loves Me Alone I walked home yesterday. My m

15、ind would not stop thinking about my bad grades in math. As soon as I got home, I went into my room without a word. Two minutes later, my father knocked on the door and said, “Son, I guess you must have had something bad. I want you to know I understand and believe you are going to make it. Im alway

16、s with you.” His words moved me, which made me know he loves me no matter I win or lose, and he hopes I can grow happily! I opened the door, saying sorry and thanks to him. Then I came back to the desk, starting to find out the mistakes in the paper.,总结,习惯线性英语思维，一切围绕主题，通过适当连接词使文章不但表面完整，内部更加紧密。 按总分（总）三段式，写提纲、打草稿，检查无误，最后誊写。 可以收集一下教科书上的好词好句和你已经能比较熟练使用的所谓“高级词汇”。 务必在考前精进书写，并每次注意文章格式（每段前让三个或四个字母）。,在生活和学习中你一定有很多个人经历，现在有一个经历分享会请你参加，谈谈你的一个经历，并说明这次经历给你带来的感受。（题目自拟，或不用题目）词数，不少于80。,Outline Topic: What event? Body: 1. (F