【课件】基于2024年续写真题的动作链公开课+课件-2025届高三英语上学期一轮复习专项

高考英语读后续写微技能---动作链描写

ActionChainsinContinuationWritingPresentor:MandyStart!1.预测前置Pleasereviewandfamiliarizeyourselveswithactionchaindescriptions!Learntoappreciatethem!Refertoyourlearningmaterial!AnalysisofTestPapar年份试卷版本情节侧重点2024.06新高考I参加会与路遇暖心出租车司机侧重心理描写和动作描写2023.06新高考I&II在老师鼓励下参加作文比赛侧重心理描写和动作描写2023.01浙江高考我意外救下蜂鸟侧重动作描写2022.06新高考I&IIDavid克服自身局限参加比赛侧重心理描写和动作描写2021.06新高考I&II兄妹俩为妈妈正准备早饭侧重心理和动作描写真题再现

（2024高考英语新课标I读续)ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.IhadplannedtoflytoViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeendelayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedepartureofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairportbuildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn’theardofthebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephoneandrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestosparewerolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,therewasalongqueue(队列)stillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface.“Wemadeit,”hesaid.JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.IflashedhimanapologeticsmileasIpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdidnotplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.There,attheentrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,andpoppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage:“Outoforder.Sorry.”Paragraph1IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Paragraph2Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.actionchain1actionchain2Learningobjectives1.21’-25’:abletocreateavividpicturetovisualizethesituationbyusingactionchainsandactionscenesproperly;第一梯队：21分-25分：能够合理运用动作链和动作面，创造出生动的画面，将情境形象化；2.16’-20’:abletothoroughlycomprehendSCMprincipleandtrytostructureactionchainscorrectly;第二梯队：16分-20分：能够透彻理解SCM原理，并尝试正确构建动作链；3.11’-15’:abletorecognizethesignificanceof“Toshow,nottotell”method,andcultivatetheawarenessofusingactionchains.第三梯队：11分-15分：能够认识到“toshow,nottotell”方法的意义，并培养使用动作链的意识。Invite!2.主题兴发PleasewatchtheshortvideoclipanddescirbewhatBearGryllsdidtosavehimself?(Actions)

Oneday,BearGryllswasrunafterbyalion,whatactionsdidhetaketoescapefromthedanger…WhatdidBearGryllsdotosavehimself?贝爷毫不犹豫丢掉背包，爬进卡车底部，挤进车内。已经想到一个好点子，他迅速下车，小心翼翼将狮子锁在后面。门锁着，狮子也就被困住了。WhatdidBearGryllsdotosavehimself?Bear

Grylls,

without

hesitation,his

backpack,

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truck

himself

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a

good

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carquickly

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,the

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trapped.Explore!3.独研质疑Ponder:Withoutshowingthevideo,howcanwecreateavividpicturethatvisualizesthesituationinwords?如何用文字创造生动画面？让读者能够身临其境？Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?描绘画面平铺直述ToShow,NottotellShowthereaderseverything,tellthemnothing.向读者展示一切，什么都不告诉他们。

--ErnestHemingwayShewasverysad.Hewasveryangry.Iwasverynervous.Herushedoutoftheroom,slamming(狠摔)thedoor.

Shestoodsilently,tearsrollingdownhercheeks.Loweringmyhead,Itookalongdeepbreath.Whichoneismorevivid（生动）?tell=generaldescriptionshow=detaileddescriptionMethod:Usemore

tocreatethepicture.verbsExplore!4.悟道践行

（1）Ponder:Howdoweeffectivelyuseverbstocreateapicture?Anyvalidprinciplestoreferto?怎样有效运用动词创造画面？有什么可以参考的行之有效的原则吗？（SCMPrinciple）Displayofstudents’works分解动作Tosplit01学生出教室。拆解站起来抓起书包冲出教室ThatisThebellsignaledthatschoolwasover,andallthestudentsrosetotheirfeet,seizedtheirschoolbagsandrushedoutoftheclassroomlikearrows.eg.1简易版：eg.2歌手开始演唱拆解：瞥一眼观众深吸一口气开始演唱Thesingerglancedattheaudience,tookadeepbreathandbegantosing.Studentswalkedoutoftheclassroom.splittheaction老师寄语：细心观察，捕捉最能体现人物特征的慢镜头。My

dad

and

I

headed

towards

the

mountains.MydadandI

ournewcowboyhats,

ourhorses,andslowly

towards

the

mountains.情境1：爸爸和我向群山走去。(浙江卷)Skill1:Followtimeorder关键：根据情境及中心动作前后有什么动作来拆分动作，

将结果性的动作，分解成更细致的连贯性的微动作，使动作结果过程化~put

ongotonheaded

情境3：男孩们跳入湖中玩耍。Boys

tothelakeexcitedly,

theirclothes

intothewater.rushedtookoffandjumped

实践运用

一解题思路：Beforejumpingintothewater,whatdidboysdo?（跑去湖边？脱掉衣服？热身运动？......）Shehuggedhim.情境4：她跑去拥抱他。Keypoints：useasmanyconcreteverbsinsteadofgeneralverbs.Skill2:Useconcreteverbshughimtightly笑跑

抱Shehuggedhim.情境5：她跑去拥抱他。Shesmiledfromeartoear,dashedtoHarry,andhuggedhimtightly.Skill2:Useconcreteverbs她笑得合不拢嘴，冲到哈利跟前，紧紧地抱住他。情境6：Hazel看着Fein的画，笑着说这是第三件坏事(六校联考续写）。Hazel_______Fein’spainting,__________and__________ittobethethirdbadthing.staredatannouncedsmirked实践运用二解题思路：怎么看？如何笑？咋说？She_____________________,_______________________,andexpressedhersinceregratitude.关键：利用一连串肢体动作使情绪表现更饱满，更具画面感。shookhishandsfirmlytwistedherheadslightlySkill3:AskyourbodypartsforhelpSheturnedtoandthankedWillis.情境7：她转过来握手言谢

（山东卷续写）。She_______________,_____________________infrontofher,and_______________________inshame.关键：利用头部、手部、脚步动作体现羞愧情绪。claspedherhandsbowedherhead实践运用

三Shewasinshame.情境9：她很羞愧。draggedherfeetforward低着头，双手紧握在身前，拖着脚步走向前。2024年真题例解Para1IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.1.

Gunter反应难以置信，问怎么办？Step1拆解（Split）：肢体动作表惊讶/无奈/怀疑

→

看着我→

询问解决办法shrug/spreadhishands/

meetmyeyes/

askthesolution/raisehiseyebrows/

stare/gazeatme/

inquirewhattodo/eyeswideninsurprise/...

castalookatme/

wait...

looksbstraightintheeye...合并动作ToCombine02Explore!4.悟道践行

（2）Ponder:Whatstructuralformscantheactionchainbepresentedintoachievetheeffectofsentencediversification?动作链可以以哪些结构形式呈现，以达到句式多样化的效果?1.她急忙出门前去开车。2.他套住了小牛。抓起车钥匙→冲出房子→启动发动机瞄准小牛的脖子→扔去绳索→套住小牛He_________atthecalf’sneck,________theropeand_________thecalfsuccessfully.She________hercarkeys,__________outofthehouse,and__________theengine.grabbedrushedstartedaimedthrewtieddidA,didBanddidC动作三连结构感知Iputonmycoathurriedly,grabbedmyschoolbagand

rushedtoschoolthismorning.微情景小练：Imagineyouwillsoonbelateforschoolinthemorning.Practice即学即练今天早上，我匆忙穿上外套，抓起书包，冲向学校。Thechildreneagerlyunwrappedthecolorfulpaper,openedtheirpresents,andscreamedwithdelight.________________________(unwrap)thecolorfulpaper,thechildrenopenedtheirpresents,andscreamedwithdelight.（主动，分词动作先于谓语动词动作）HavingdoneA,sb.didB(anddidC)非谓语Havingdone结构感知HavingeargerlyunwrappedHavingqueuedfor3hours,hewastoldthattheticketshadbeensoldout.微情景小练：Hewastoldtherewerenoticketsavailableafterqueuingforatotalof3hours.Practice即学即练排了三个小时的队后，他被告知票卖完了。David挣扎着站起来，继续跑，没有表现出任何放弃的迹象（2022读续真题）。David___________________and_______________,__________nosignsofgivingup.（主动，现在分词基本与谓语动词同时发生）doingA,sbdidBanddidC...struggledtohisfeetcontinuedrunningshowing非谓语doing结构感知Sittingonthesubway,theoldmanstaredathisphone,knittinghisbrows.微情景小练：Anoldmanistryinghisbesttoseethephonescreenclearly.Practice即学即练老人坐在地铁上，盯着手机，皱着眉头。在Jenny的鼓励下，Forrest看着前方，向前跑以躲避那些霸凌者。________byJenny,Forrest_____________and______________toescapethosebullies.doneA,sbdidBanddidCEncouragedlookedaheaddashedforward非谓语done结构感知（被动，过去分词表被动）Encouragedbyhisteacher’swords,heraisedhishandandwhispered,“Ivolunteer.”微情景小练：Aboyraisedhishandafterbeingencouraged.Practice即学即练他被老师的话鼓舞，举起手，小声说：“我来。”1.Actionchains（动作链）summary:(1)didA,didB

and

didC(2)变形(≥2个动词)non-finiteverbs,sbdidAanddidBsbdidAanddidB,non-finiteverbssbdidA,didBanddidC,non-finiteverbsnon-finiteverbs:主动且完成:Havingdonesth主动:doingsth被动:donesth2024年真题例解Para1IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.1.

Gunter反应

难以置信，问怎么办？Step1拆解（Split）：肢体动作表惊讶/无奈/怀疑

→

看着我→

询问解决办法

raisehiseyebrows

stare/gazeatme

askthesolution

castalookatCombine(1):Heraisedhiseyebrows,staredatmeandaskedwhattodo.Combine(2):Raisinghiseyebrows,hecastalookatme,askingwhattodo.Combine(3):HavingheardwhatIinformed,Gunterraisedhiseyebrowsandstaredatme,askingwhattodo.Combine(4):Surprisedbymywords,Gunterraisedhiseyebrowsandstaredatme,askingwhattodo.

改进动作ToModify03我们需要在同一时间，安排多个相机在不同角度拍摄，然后把不同的镜头剪在一起，构成一个饱满的动作面。---邵田田《中国科技经济新闻数据库》动作链是一个人的动作的依次连贯。但是若是想要描述更具有画面感，可以通过构造“动作面”来让语言更丰富。比如我们可以从肢体、面部、语言和心理等多个维度来刻画场景。Explore!4.悟道践行

（3）Ponder:Howcanwemodifyandbeautifyactionsfromdifferentaspectstocreateamorevividpicture?怎样从各方面改进和美化动作，以创造出更生动的画面？面部肢体语言/心理成句：Wideninghiseyesinextremehorror,hefledaway,screaming,“Mom,help!”

他惊恐地瞪大了眼睛，转身就跑，一边尖叫着:“妈妈，救命!”（非谓语+心理短语,精准谓语动词,语言描写）Wideninghiseyes

inextremehorrorfledawayscreaming,“Mom,help!”动作面Actionscene盯着前方的Andy，表情

肢体

表情

StaringatAndyahead,Redadvancedtowardshimwithasuitcase,(with)asmilespreadingacrosshisface.TheShawshankRedemptionwith复合/独立主格,主句与doing动作的逻辑主语不一致时Red提着行李箱走向Andy，脸上洋溢着笑容。动作面Actionscene动作面Actionscene在海边拍照肢体面部语言\心理面带微笑,低头看花手捧鲜花，站在海边想知道照片拍好了没有Withabunchofflowersinherhands

,shestoodbesidetheseaand

lookeddownattheflowerswithasmile,wonderingifthephotowasdone.巧用with复合主格他们欣喜若狂，在黄昏又唱又跳。

心理肢体___________,theyweresinginganddancingfreelyatdusk.肢体Wildwithjoy动作面Actionscene巧用形容词做伴随状语2024年真题例解Isighed,lookedbackovermyshoulder,andbeggedGunterforadelayedpayment,explainingwhyandwaitingforGunter’sresponse.Step3

改进（Modify）:Isighedhopelessly,lookedbackovermyshoulder,checkingtheline,andthenbeggedGunterforadelayedpayment,explainingthatIcouldn’taffordtomisstheconference.Anxiousandexpectant,Irubbedmyhands,flashinghimanotherapologeticsmileandwaitingforGunter’sresponse.动作三连→didA,didBanddidC非谓语结构(主语一致)①

同一对象同时发生不同动作，且表主动——主+谓,doingsth./doingsth.,主＋谓②

动作有先后关系时

——Havingdonesth,主+谓③

动作与主语逻辑关系为被动时

——Donesth.,主+谓动作描写动作链动作面肢体面部语言心理环境巧用With复合/独立主格结构/adj./adv.SplitCombineModifyPractice!5.项目合作

主题语境:人与社会----互相理解、乐于助人文本大意：作者从维也纳前往布拉格时，善良的出租车司机甘特给予了帮助和理解。作者结束旅行后如约和甘特再次见面。语篇价值：培养学生的文化意识，引导学生树立正确的价值取向，即乐于助人、诚实守信。真题再现

（2024高考英语新课标I读续)ImetGunteronacold,wetandunforgettableeveninginSeptember.Ihadplannedtofly

toViennaandtakeabustoPragueforaconference.Duetoabigstorm,myflighthadbeen

delayedbyanhourandahalf.ItoucheddowninViennajust30minutesbeforethedeparture

ofthelastbustoPrague.ThemomentIgotofftheplane,Iranlikecrazythroughtheairport

buildingandjumpedintothefirsttaxiontherankwithoutasecondthought.ThatwaswhenImetGunter.ItoldhimwhereIwasgoing,buthesaidhehadn’theardof

thebusstation.Ithoughtmypronunciationwastheproblem,soIexplainedagainmoreslowly,

buthestilllookedconfused.WhenIwasabouttogiveup,Gunterfishedouthislittlephone

andrangupafriend.Afteraheateddiscussionthatlastedforwhatseemedlikeacentury,

Gunterputhisphonedownandstartedthecar.Finally,withjusttwominutestosparewerolledintothebusstation.Thankfully,there

wasalongqueue(队列)stillwaitingtoboardthebus.Gunterparkedthetaxibehindthebus,

turnedaround,andlookedatmewithabigsmileonhisface.“Wemadeit,”hesaid.JustthenIrealisedthatIhadzerocashinmywallet.Iflashedhimanapologeticsmileas

IpulledoutmyPortuguesebankcard.Hetrieditseveraltimes,butthecardmachinejustdid

notplayalong.AfeelingofhelplessnesswashedovermeasIsawthebusqueuethinningout.Atthismoment,Gunterpointedtowardsthewaitinghallofthebusstation.There,atthe

entrance,wasacashmachine.Ijumpedoutofthecar,madeamadrunforthemachine,and

poppedmycardin,onlytoreadthemessage:

“Outoforder.Sorry.”Paragraph1IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Paragraph2Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.actionchain1actionchain2Para1:IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.情节设计(十句五定)Gunter反应难以置信，问怎么办？我请求延迟支付解释末班车&参加会议Para2:Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.我问其电话号码承诺回电和付款Gunter思考同意留电话号码我感动冲向巴士Gunter到巴士站接我我感谢他,告知会议顺利在去机场路上到机场我付两次费用,给小费被拒结局：我再次被其善意感动升华：

传播善意的决心…TocombineTomodifyTosplitGroupCGroupDGroupA+BTaskassignmentNChecklistscores13-4verbsareusedinonesentence(0-10)2Generalverbsaresplitedintoconcreteverbs(0-10)3Allverbsarecorrectlycombined(0-10)4Actionchainsareproperlymodified(0-10)5Around150wordsEvaluationReflect!6.反思总结

Ponder:WhathaveIlearntfromthislesson?1.Toshow,nottotell;2.SCMprinciple;3.Practicemakesperfect.动作链下水文

IranbacktoGunterandtoldhimthebadnews.Astonished,Gunterraisedhiseyebrows,staredatme,andaskedwhattodo.Iexplainedtohimtheurgencyofcatchingthebus,emphasizingthesignificanceoftheconferencetome.ThenIhurriedlytoreaslipofpaperfrommynotebook,signalinghimtowritedownhisphonenumberwithananticipatinglook.Amazingly,withoutasecondthought,Gunteracceptedmyslipofpaperandswiftlywrotedownhisphonenumber,asmiledancingaroundthecornersofhismouth.“Haveasafejourney!”addedGunter.

AfeelingofgratitudewashedovermeasIheardhiswords.Afterexpressingmythanks,Igrabbedthebriefcase,madeamadrunforthebus,andjumpedontoitjustbeforeitsdeparture.

Fourdayslater,whenIwasbackinVienna,IcalledGunteraspromised.Wemadeanappointmenttomeetatthebusstationwherehehaddroppedmeoff.ThemomentGunterrecognizedme,hepulledover,quicklygotoutofthecar,strodetome,andgavemeatighthugasifwewerelonglostintimatefriends.Withexcitement,Itoldhimtheconferencewentsmoothlythankstohisgeneroushelp.Uponarrivingattheairport,IhandedsomecashtoGunter,explainingthatIwaspayingforthe‘doublecarride’,backandforthfromtheairporttothebusstation,togetherwithageneroustipthatheturneddownatonce.Gunter’srefusalthistimemeltedthesoftestplaceinmyheart,justashisacceptancedidlasttime.Icouldn’tthankGuntertoomuch.Hiskindn