【课件】2025届高考英语应用文：审-评-改三个维度+课件

英语应用文

审—评--改TeachingobjectivesTolearnhowtoanalyzetherequirementsinpracticalwritingTolearnthescoringcriteriaToscoretheworkswrittenbystudentsaccordingtothestandard原题再现（济宁期末）66.假定你是李华，上周末你校举办了冬季运动会，你目睹了很多感人瞬间，请你给英国朋友Ryan写封邮件分享其中一个。内容包括：1.感人瞬间；2.你的感想。注意：1.写作词数应为80个左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。审题文体：背景分析：

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写信对象：三.写作要点：书信，朋友之间（非正式）上周末（过去式）你们学校运动员Ryan(李华的外国朋友：对等关系)介绍感人瞬间+个人感想篇章构思第一段：第二段：第三段：引入话题描述感人瞬间表达感想Whatsportseventscanyouthinkof?Trackandfieldmeets:100-meterdash/race

200-meterdash

therelayrace

highjump

longjumpskipropeshotput（铅球）

tug-of–war(拔河)Ballgames:basketballgame

footballmatch

badmintoncompetition

tabletennis第一段：引入话题简要提及上周末学校举办了冬季运动会，引出要分享一个感人瞬间的主题，让朋友了解邮件背景。

DearRyan,Howareyou?Lastweekend,ourschoolheldanexcitingWinterSportsMeeting.Itwasfilledwithintensecompetitionsand,moreimportantly,manyheartwarmingmoments.Ican'twaittoshareoneofthemwithyou第二段：描述感人瞬间(Body)Whattouchingmomentscanyoudescribe?OlympicMotto

Faster,Higher,Stronger更团结Together(2021)必修一Unit3Developingideas真题再现

2022年全国新课标卷I第二节(满分25分)

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路线)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.

Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!

Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊恼).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.

Para.1Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.

Para.2IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Para.2IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.Withablastofthegun,Davidtriedhisbesttoshootfromthestartline,buthefailed.Painfulandabitembarrassedashewas,hestilldraggedhisfeettokeepmovingforward.Thesunwasbeatingdown,thehotweathersuffocating.Afterwhatseemedyears,David,rockinghissmallbodylikeacatonahotbrick,eventuallyfinishedhisrunasthelastone.Whenapproachingthefinishline,heburstintoabigtoothysmileandwavedtomewithexcitement,crying“Imadeit!Imadeit!”Allthekidsincludingthosefromotherschoolseruptedintoabigapplause,cheeringforhisdeterminationandpersistence.Atthatmoment,aflushofadmirationandjoysweptoverme.Generalintroduction:BackgroundWhathesaw/heardHowhefelt选择性必修一Unit3第二段：描述感人瞬间详细讲述在长跑比赛中，一位同学摔倒后，其他同学放弃竞争名次，纷纷折返去搀扶他，一起冲过终点的场景，重点刻画同学们的动作、表情等细节。Duringthe1500-meterrace,thetrackwasicyinsomeparts.Onerunnerslippedandfellheavily.Insteadofseizingthechancetospeedahead,severalnearbyrunnersimmediatelystoppedintheirtracks.Theyturnedbackwithouthesitation,theirfacesfullofconcern.Withgreatcare,theyhelpedthefallenclassmateupandsupportedhim,stepbystep,towardsthefinishline.Thecrowd,whichhadbeensilentforamoment,eruptedintothunderousapplause.第三段：表达感想阐述这个瞬间让自己看到了同学间真挚的友谊、团结精神，以及超越比赛胜负的高尚品质，表明此事对自己的触动。/体育精神合理的废话Feelings–体育精神类Everysinglememberoftheteamtookpainstofightinthegame.Strongteamspiritcontributesgreatlytotheirsuccess.Winninggoldinthecompetitioncapturetheteam’scompetitivespirit.Their

perseverancepaidoffwithanepiccomebackagainstthedefendingchampion.Showingastrongwill/thesteeliestnerves,theyplayedaclosematchagainst…他们表现出坚强的意志/钢铁般的意志，与对手进行了一场势均力敌的比赛…Thismomentreallytouchedmedeeply.Itmademerealizethatinourschoollife,friendshipandunityarefarmorepreciousthanwinningarace.It'sthesequalitiesthatmakeourschoolcommunitysowarmandstrong.Ibelievesuchbeautifulmomentscanalsobefoundeverywhereinyourschoollife.Hopeyou'rehavingagreattime!DearRyan,Howisitgoing?Youwon’tbelieveit—the4×400mrelayatourWinterSportsMeettotallystolethespotlight!Thestorygoeslikethis.Ourleadrunnerwasracingtowardsvictory,whenoutofnowhere,hetrippedandfelljustafewmetersfromthefinishline,spraininghisankle.Despitetheintensepain,hestruggledtohisfeetandinchedtowardsthefinishlinedeterminedly,whichearnedgreatcheersofencouragementfromthecrowd,fuelinghisresolve.Finally,hemadeit.Hisperseveranceisadmirableandinspiring,servingasapowerfulreminderthatweshouldnevergiveupeasilywhenstrivingforourgoals,howeverdifficultthecircumstances.Stayintouchandexchangemoreofourlife’sbeautifulstoriesinthefuture.Bestregards,LiHua译文：亲爱的瑞安：

最近怎么样？你绝对想不到，我们冬季运动会的4×400米接力赛成了全场焦点！

事情是这样的。我们的第一棒选手一路领先，眼看就要冲线，却突然在离终点线几米远的地方绊倒了，扭伤了脚踝。尽管疼痛难忍，他还是挣扎着站起来，一瘸一拐地向终点线挪去，这种坚定的毅力赢得了观众阵阵加油声，也激励着他继续前进。最终，他成功冲线。他的坚韧不拔令人钦佩，也鼓舞着我们，无论情况多么艰难，都不要轻易放弃。

期待未来能与你分享更多生活中的美好故事，保持联系。评分标准评分标准评分标准评分标准评分标准passionforamountsof大量的，修饰不可数名词SharethemostimpressiveonewasmovedcompetitionUnexpectedly，hetrippedandfelljustafewmetersfromthefinishline,spraininghisankle.10分错误分析与修改

表达较生硬，“substantial”在这里使用不太合适，可改为“Isawmanytouchingmomentsinthisevent.”

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