2025年高考英语复习应用文写作与读后续写精讲精练30.心理状态等的刻画方法

心理状态等的刻画方法

心理描写概述

心理描写是在特定情境下对人物的内心活动、心理情感、情绪状态等进行的描写。心理描写渗透着现

实环境，读者能从人物的心理描写中感知角色视角下对生活的体验，从而领会人物的精神面貌、展现人物

的性格特征。“心理描写主要分为直接心理描写和间接心理描写，其中，直接心理描写包括客观心理剖析、

内心独白、梦境幻觉。

1.客观心理剖析

客观心理剖析是以第三人称的视角叙述人物心理活动，多用于小说、寓言、童话等文学体裁当中，如

《皇帝的新装》中皇帝、大臣的心理描写都采用了客观心理剖析，以“心里想”“他想”等作为标志，用作者的

口吻表现人物的心理状态。客观心理剖析以文外视角进行撰写，能够表达不同人物的不同情境下的真实心

理感受，能够使读者更加直观的理解角色心理活动。

2.内心独白

内心独白是以第一人称阐释的无声的人物内心语言，能最真实最直接的反映当前角色的内心状态和情

绪。相比较客观心理剖析，人物内心独白更偏向于理性和逻辑的思考，它可以作为一种内心的思考，比基

于特定情景下的意识心理的产生而言，更具逻辑性和哲理性。人物内心独白要置于文本大背景下考量，同

时结合事件、情感进行理性思考，挖掘其中的主题思想，在理解人物内心独白的真正认识人物。因此，在

进行人物独白的剖析时，要以理性的眼光综合人物独白出现的环境、情节，避免人物心理活动与环境的割

裂；在写作中对人物独白进行修改时，注意既要符合人物身份，又要表现人物真实情感，感悟人物心理描

写与语境的融入。

3.梦境幻觉

梦境幻觉是指通过梦境或人物在某种情绪状态下，视觉、听觉上出现虚幻的画面、声音，从而展现人

物内心世界、抒发情感的描写。

人物的心理描写是以角色视角渗透生活现实，细腻的心理描写能切实感受人物的情感变化、展现人物

内心，将读者代入把握人物行为动因，体会人物共情。心理描写是对人物内心活动的直接刻画，是将人物

的内心感触表现出来的一种重要方式。心理描写是一种叙述视角的调整，以人物的所思所感来表现作者在

文本中传达的思想，是以文本情境中的角色个人心理分析来审视历史、社会、人生的“独白”。从人物的心理

描写中，读者能直面人物的内心世界，或以人物的心理挖掘文本背后的内涵。

读者直接面对的不是赤裸裸的生活，而是被一层心理体验所浸透的生活，心理描写的边缘就是生活的

边缘一一这是使读者对熟悉的生活环境产生陌生感的主要源泉。因此，分析人物的心理描写，应该将人物

置于文本情境中，以人物的角度考量心理活动产生的脉络。

心理状态刻画微观技巧

描写恐惧心理的方法

第一部分表示恐惧

1.他心跳较快，想都没有想，他就开始跑了。Hisheartbeatwildlyandwithoutthinking,hestartedtorun.

2.他突然闪现一丝恐惧。Thethoughtoffearcrossedhismind.

3.突然一阵恐惧控制了他，他吓得呆在原地。他试着移动，但是却不能，直到一个尖锐的声音唤醒了他。

Asuddenrushofpanicrulinghim,hewasfrozentothespot.Hetriedhardtomove，butcouldnot,untilasharp

soundawokehim.

4.Mac心跳得很快，双手颤抖。他的脸变得惨白，眼里充满了恐惧。

Mac’sheartwasbeatingwildly/violently/waspoundingandhishandswereshaking.Hisfaceturnedpaleandeyes

werefullofhorror.

5.他因恐惧而呆住，站在那儿一动不动。Frozenwithfear,hestoodrootedtothespot.

6.一看到凶猛的狼，我吓得僵住了，吓得一动也不敢动。

Atthesightofthefiercewolf,Ifrozewithterror,tooscaredtomoveaninch.

7.他被恐惧吓倒了，Mac不知道要说什么？Overwhelmedbyfear,Macdidn’tknowwhattosay/do.(be

overwhelmedby被...给压垮/吓倒/征服)

8.一种惊恐的感觉掠过他的心头。Afrightenedfeelingcrept/swept/overhisheart.

9.他心中涌起了一阵恐惧。/恐惧席卷了他。

Afloodoffearwelledupinhim./Fearfloodedoverhim.

10.她因恐惧而窒息。Shewaschokedwithfear.

11.时间似乎停止了，尽管他们可能只在那儿二至三分钟。

Timeseemedtostandstill,thoughtheywereprobablythereforonlytwoorthreeminutes.

第二部分应对恐惧

1.一股力量立刻取代了Jane不断增长的恐惧和焦虑。

AsenseofstrengthimmediatelyreplacedthemountingfearandanxietyinJane'smind.

2.他的大脑又开始快速转动，尽力想着...

Hismindbegantorace,tryingtothinking...

3.他鼓起勇气...

Hepluckeduphiscouragetodo...

4.(副词)立刻/马上;突然=immediately/abruptly/instantly/promptly;suddenly=allofasudden

5.（短语）立刻马上；=withoutdelay/withoutpausing;

6.毫不犹豫/迟疑=withoutanyhesitation

第三部分历险后的心情\动作描写

1.Theybreathedasighofrelief.

2.(心有余悸)ThoughMacwassafe,hestillcouldfeelhisheartbeatingquickly.Hewasevenhavingtroubling

breathing,andhefeltdizzy(眩晕).Foramoment（有一会）,hewasafraidhewouldfaint(晕倒)

注：对“adventurousexperience”总结性的句子

1.Neverwouldtheyforgetsuchathrillingsummerholidayintheirwholelife.

2.Whatathrillingadventure!

3.Manyyearshavepassed,tillnow,IstillrememberthethrillingtriptotheWildWest.

4.Thevacationwithmymyforgetfulmotherwouldalwaysstandoutinmymemory.和妈妈一起的旅行总是

会让我记忆犹新。

心理状态描写常用升级策略

开心（通过心理、表情、动作来表达）

普通版：Hewashappy.

进阶版:1.Hereyesshone/glittered/sparkled/twinkledwithjoy.

2.Herfacelitupwithpleasure.（容光焕发）

3.Herheartwaspoundingwithexcitement.（砰砰直跳）

4.Happiness/joy/pleasure/delighttookholdofhim.(极度开心)

5.Shewasoverflowingwithhappiness/joy/pleasure/delight.(幸福洋溢)

6.Heshedtearsofjoy.（流下开心的泪水）

例句：

1.Hiseyestwinkledwithpleasurewhenhesawthenews.

当他看到新闻，他的眼里闪耀着快乐。

2.Hegrinnedwithdelightwhenhesawus.

当他看到我们，咧开嘴开心地笑了。

3.Thesmileonherfaceshonelikeadiamond.

她脸上的笑容像钻石一样闪耀。

4.Icouldn’trestrainmyjoyandjumpedintothehouse.

我抑制不住内心的喜悦，蹦蹦跳跳地进了家门。

5.Hecastusalook/glance,withhisfacewearingabroad/wide/radiant/warmsmile.

她看向我们，面带灿烂/温暖的笑容。

6.Whenhismotherkissedhimonthecheek,itseemedasifthebabywereonthetopoftheworld.

当妈妈亲吻他的脸颊时，小婴儿开心极了。

伤心（心理、表情、动作）

普通版：Hewassad.

进阶表达：

不同的哭：cry哭（泛指，哭出声）sob呜咽，啜泣wail嚎啕大哭weep小声/无声流泪

burstintotears放声大哭fightbacktears抑制住泪水

beclosetotears/beonthevergeoftears快要哭了beintears含泪

例句：

1.Hesighedwithdisappointment.

他失望地叹了口气。

2.Hestruggledtofightbackhistears.

他试图控制住自己的泪水。

3.Hiseyesbrimmedwithtearsofsorrow.

他的眼里噙满了悲伤的泪水。

4.Hestoodsilently,tearsrollingdownhischeeks.

他静静地站着，眼泪流下他的脸颊。

5.IfeellikeIamfloatinginanoceanofsadness.

我感觉自己漂浮在悲伤的海洋里。

6.Isawanoldladywailingwithfistbeatingherchestinthestreetcorner.我看到一个老奶奶在街角捶胸痛哭。

7.Whenheembracedmewithhisarmsopenwide,Ifeltmythroatchokewithsob.当他张开双臂拥抱我时，我

觉得自己喉头哽咽。

8.Uponhearingthebadnews,shefeltseizedbyaburstofsadnessandcouldn’thelpcryingbitterly.一听到这个

坏消息，她就被一股悲伤之感控制，忍不住哭泣。

紧张（心理、表情、动作）

普通版：Hewasnervous.

进阶版：

1.Standingintheclassroom,Ibecameincreasinglynervousandcouldfeelmyheartbeatingwildly.站在教室

里，我越来越紧张，我能听见自己心跳加速的声音。

2.Herfaceturnedpale,feelinglikesittingonpinsandneedles.

她的脸刷白，感觉如坐针毡。

3.Beforethecompetition,hispalmsweresweatyandkneesweresoft.

比赛前，他手心出汗，膝盖发软。

4.Atthesightofthefiercewolf,Ifeltsoscaredthatmythroattightenedandmykneesfeltweak.看到恶狼，我喉

咙发紧，膝盖发软。

5.Atthesightofthefiercewolf,Ifrozewithterror,tooscaredtomoveaninch.看到恶狼，我被吓呆到一动不

动。

6.Atthesightofthefiercewolf,Iwasseizedbyastrongsenseofhorrorandmypalmsweresweating.看到恶

狼，我被一股强烈的恐惧感攫住了，掌心流汗。

尴尬/羞愧（心理、表情、动作）

普通版：Hewasembarrassed/ashamed.

进阶版：

1.Hisfaceflushed(通红)/burned(燃烧)withembarrassment/shame.

他因尴尬而满脸通红。/他窘得脸都红了。

2.Hehung/dropped/loweredhisheadinshame.

他羞愧地低下了头。

3.Shefeltsoashamedthatshecouldfeelherfaceburning.

她感到羞愧难当，脸上滚烫。

4.Soashamedwasshethatshecouldfeelthebloodrushtoherface.

她感到羞愧极了，血液涌上脸颊。

5.Soashameddidshefeelthatshewasclosetotears.

她羞愧到快哭了。

愤怒（心理、表情、动作）

普通版：Hewasangry.

进阶表达：flyoffthehandle勃然大怒loseone’stemper发脾气

例句：

1.Hisvoicetrembledwithanger/rage(愤怒).

他气得声音发抖。

2.Heglaredatmewithburningeyes.

他盯着我，眼里充满怒火。

3.Filledwithanger/fury(狂怒)，Tomwasunabletoutterasingleword.

Tom气得一句话也说不出。

4.Boilingwithrage，Tomshookhisfistatme.

Tom怒火中烧，对我挥舞拳头。

绝望（心理、表情、动作）

普通版：Hefelthopeless/desperate.

进阶版：

1.Uponhearingthebadnews,hewassuddenlythrownintoaworldofdarknessandsankintohopelessness.

听到这个坏消息，他突然被投入黑暗世界，陷入绝望。

2.Hefeltleftoutandwasgettingdesperatewithloneliness.

他感觉被遗弃了，孤独使他感到绝望。

3.Hisbeliefsinlookingforwardandseeingthepositiveineverythingdesertedhim.（被信念抛弃）

他那种向前看、看到一切事物积极一面的信念抛弃了他。

感谢（心理、表情、动作）

普通版：Ithankedmyfather.

进阶版：

1.Iranovertomyfather,reachedoutmyhandsandhugged/embracedhimtightly/firmly.

我跑向父亲，伸出手，紧紧抱住他。

2.Withgratefultearshanginginhiseyes,hekeptextending（表达）hisgratitude(感激），“Thankyousomuch!”

他眼中满是感激的泪水，不停地说：“非常感谢！”

鼓励（心理、表情、动作）

普通版：Hefeltencouraged.

进阶版：

1.Takingadeepbreath,Imanagedtocalmmyselfdownandwalkeduptotheplatformconfidently.

深吸一口气，我成功地让自己镇定，然后自信地走上了讲台。

2.Iwalkedovertohim,andpattedhimontheshoulder,encouraging:“Comeon!”

我走向他，拍拍他的肩膀，鼓励道：“加油！”

震惊（心理、表情、动作）

普通版：Hewassurprised/shocked.

进阶版：

1.Hiseyesgrewwide/widenedwithsurprise/astonishment(震惊)whenheheardthenews.

听到这个消息后，他惊讶地睁大了眼睛。

2.It’shardtobelieve.Hedidn’tacceptthejobthathewaslongfor.

真难以置信，他竟然没有接受那份期待已久的工作。

3.Grandfather’sdeathwasreallyaboltfromtheblueforme.

祖父去世的消息对我来说简直是晴天霹雳。

疑惑/迷茫（心理、表情、动作）

普通版：Hefeltconfused.

进阶版：

1.Withaconfusedlookonhisface,hehadnoideawhattodo.

他露出困惑的表情，不知道该做什么。

2.Hescratchedhishead,havingonideawhattodo.

他挠了挠头，不知道该做什么。

3.Hescratchedhishead,notunderstandingaword.

他挠了挠头，一个字也听不懂。

拓展训练

1．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Atanearlyage,BobwasrepeatedlytoldbyhismotherMarkita,“Believeinyourselfnomatterwhat

happens.”WhenBobwas12,hismothertraveledwithhiminacar.Slowlynightfell.Bobwasasleepinthefront

seatofthecar.AsMarkitadrovecarefullydownthewindingdirtroad,sheturnedontoanarrowbridge.Asshedid,

thecarhitarockandranofftheroad,andtherightfrontwheelgotstuck.Fearingthecarwouldtipover,she

attemptedtodriveitbackontotheroadbypressinghardonthegaspedal(油门)andturningthesteeringwheel(方

向盘)totheleft.ButBob’sfootgotcaughtbetweenhismother’slegandthesteeringwheelandshelostcontrolof

thecar.

Thecarrolledoverandhitadeepvalley.Bobcouldhardlygethisbreathback.“Whathappened,Mama?”he

asked.“Ourwheelsarepointingtowardthesky.”

Markitawasblindedbyblood.Shewastoopainfultomoveandcryforhelp.“I’llgetyouout,Mama,”said

Bob,whohadluckilyescapedinjury.Hemanagedtogetoutofthecarthroughtheopenwindowandtriedtopull

hismotherout.Butshecouldn’tmove.“Justletmesleep,”repliedMarkita,whoseemedtobeoutofconsciousness

(意识).“No,Mama,”Bobcontinued.“Youcan’tsleep.”

Bobreachedhermotherandtriedtopullheroutofthecar,butfailed.Hethentoldherhe'dclimbuptothe

roadandstopacartogethelp.Fearingthatnoonewouldbeabletoseeherlittleboyinthedark,Markitarefused

tolethimgoalone.Instead,Markitadidherbesttoopenthedoor.Shemovedinchesatatime.Thepainwasso

greatthatMarkitawantedtogiveup,butBobwouldn’tlether.

注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Tokeephismothermoving,Bobrepeatedthewordshismothertoldhim.

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Aboutanhourlater,Bobandhismotherfinallyreachedtheroad._

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2．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Lillypaused,herplans—goingclimbingmomentarilyforgotten,asshewatchedtheolderwoman’swheels

stuckintherailroadtracks.Thewoman,withamixtureoffrustrationanddeterminationacrossherface,pushed

againstthestubbornwheels,tryingtofreeherself.

Withouthesitation,Lillyapproachedher.“Doyouneedsomehelp?”sheasked,hervoicegentleyetclear.

Thewomanlookedup,surprisedandslightlyembarrassed.“Oh,dear,IthoughtIcouldmanage,butthese

tracksaremoreofachallengethanIexpected,”sheadmitted.

Lillysmiled.“Letmehelpyou,”sheoffered,placingherbagonthegroundbeforegraspingthehandlesof

thewheelchair.Withajointeffort,theymanagedtogetthewheelchairbackonsolidground.

“Thankyou,younglady.I’mMartha,”thewomanintroducedherself.

“I’mLilly.It’snicetomeetyou.Martha.Areyouheadingsomewherenearby?”Lillyasked,curiousabout

thewoman’sjourney.

“Yes,justacrossthestreettothepark.Mygranddaughterisplayingintheschoolbandthere.It’stheirfirst

publicperformance,andIwouldn’tmissitfortheworld,”Marthaexplained,hervoicefilledwithpride.

Lillyglancedatherwatch,realizingherownplanscouldwait.“Wouldyoulikemetowalkwithyoutothe

park?It’snotrouble.”sheoffered.

Martha’sfacelitupwithagratefulsmile.“Iwouldappreciatethatverymuch.Lilly.”

Astheymadetheirwaytothepark,LillylearnedthatMarthahadbeenamusicteacherformostofherlife,

instilling(灌输)aloveofmusicincountlesschildren,includingherowngranddaughter.Lillyfoundherself

absorbedinMartha’sstoriesofpastconcerts,andthejoythatmusicbroughttoherlife.

Uponreachingthepark,theyfoundaspotwhereMarthacouldhaveaclearviewofthestage.Theairwas

filledwiththeexcitementofparents,friends,andlocals,whogatheredtosupporttheyoungmusicians.

注意：1.续写词数应为150个左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

“Wouldyouliketostayandlistentotheperformance?”MarthaaskedLily.

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Astheconcertdrewtoaclose,MarthaopenedhereyesandturnedtoLilly.

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3．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Inmychildhood,undertheinfluenceofmyelderbrotherandmypeersintheneighborhood,Itrieda

numberofoutdooractivities.Ofcourse,Iwasnotsotakenbyallofthem.whetherIwasdoingthemforthefirst

timeorcontinuously.However,fatehaditsownplansinstore.Youneverknowwhenanoutdooractivitywill

changemylife.

Thenameofthisactivityis“fishing”.Abouttenyearsago,Ididn'treallyliketheideaofsittingonthebank

ofalakeorriver,spendinglonghoursunderthesun'sultravioletrays,whichcancausesunburnsandskindamage,

andanxiouslyanticipatingsomefishtobekindtotakemybait(诱饵).Infact,Iusedtothinkofthisoutdoor

activityassomekindof“hide-and-seek-game”thatispopularwithmostyoungkids,exceptthatitwasmuchharder

becauseIcouldseemy“prey(猎物)”onlyaftercatchingit.

However,allthatchangedwhenIpaidavisittomyauntinthecountrysideduringasummerholiday.Iwas

finallyconvincedbyoneofmycousinstoaccompanyhimtoanearbylakeinordertodosomefishingpractice

withhim.Infact,heevenassuredmethatfishwouldeatmybaits.SoIagreedandwenttothelakeexpectingto

catchsomefish.Beforethrowingmyfishinglineintothewater,mycousindidsometricksattachingsomesortof

foodtomyfishingpole.

Learningtofishinariverorlakecanbechallengingforthebeginnerslikeme.Theactofdroppingalineis

easy,butbeingasuccessfulfisherishard.That'swhytheycallitfishingbutnotcatchingButwithpracticeand

patience,itcanbecomeeasierovertime.Patienceisessentialinlakefishing.Itmaytakesometimetofindtheright

spotorlure(鱼饵)thatwillattractfish.

注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Mycousinhadtorepeatedlyremindmetokeeppatient.

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Whenwefinallyleftthelake,Ihadcaughtthreefish!

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4．阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

CrabLessons

MysonGeordiwasaratherspiritedboy.Verylittleheldhisattentionforlong.Hespentmostofhisspare

timethinkingupnewwaystoscaremehalftodeath.Likethetimehedecidedto“surf”onatinyplastictablethat

wasmeanttoholdafewdrinksratherthanasix-year-oldboy.Geordihadjustbegunlearningabouttheoceanin

schoolandwassurprisinglyfascinatedbyit.WelivedinDelaware,soanydiscussionabouttheoceanusually

includedhorseshoecrabs,whichcrowdedourcoaststomateinthelatespring.

Aspartofthelesson,Geordi’steacherbroughthorseshoecrabshells(壳)toschoolforthechildrentotouch

andexamine.Hearingthathorseshoecrabshadbeenaroundforover300millionyears,evenbeforethedinosaurs,

Geordithoughtthatwasofficiallythecoolestthinghehadeverheard.Hecouldnotstoptalkingaboutitfordays,

andIdecideditwastimeforustotakeadrivetotheDelawareBay.

Aswesteppedoutfromthecar,strongwindnearlyblewmypoorforty-five-poundchildtotheground.

Beingasix-year-oldmischievous(调皮的)boy,Geordisawthisasanopportunitytoshowcasehisamazingtalents,

whichincludedfallingdown,gettingup,fallingdownand,yes,gettingupagain.This,ofcourse,wasalways

completewithgiggles(咯咯笑).ThedramacametoasuddenstopasGeordispiedthedozensof

army-truck-lookingcreaturesinthesand.Thenextsoundeffectwas“Wow!”ashisbodyfrozeandhiseyes

widenedwithwonder.

Geordiranaroundexcitedly,notknowingwhichonetocheckoutfirst.Hesettledonahorseshoecrabthat

wasonitsback,legswavingwildlyintheair,desperateforwater.“Mom,lookatthisone!”hescreamed.“He’s

cool!”Ipointedoutthedifferentbodypartsofthecrabforhim,andhelistenedquietlyandabsorbedthe

information.Hesaid,“Ireallylikedhim.IthinkIwillnamehimSpikebecausehehadallthosereallycool,spiky

(尖的)thingsonhisback.”ThenIpickedupthecrab,turneditovertoitsproperpositionandplaceditattheedge

ofthewater.

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右;

2.请按如下格式作答。

GeordiaskedwhatIwasdoing.

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Geordispottedmanymorehorseshoecrabsontheirbacks.

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参考答案

1．

Tokeephismothermoving,Bobrepeatedthewordshismothertoldhim.“Believeinyourself.Iknowyou

can”.Bobkepttalkingtohismother.Withtimepassingby,theireffortpaidoff.Whentheyweretryingtostepout

ofthevalley,theskywassobrightandstarry.Bobwasabletoseehismother’sfaceclearly.Hebrokeintotears.

Abovethevalley,therecamethelightandthesoundofcarsontheroad.Theyheldeachother,walkingslowlyto

themainroad.

Aboutanhourlater,Bobandhismotherfinallyreachedtheroad.Therewasasignonthesideoftheroad.

Theygottothesignandhadagoodrest.Meanwhile,Bobtookoffhisclothesandwavedhishandsintheair.“Stop!

Pleasestop!”theboykeptshouting.“Weneedhelp.Getmymamatoahospital.”Luckily,adriversawhimfrom

thewindowandpulledup.Herushedthemtothenearbyhospital.Now,Markitahasrecoveredfrominjuries.She

said,“Ifithadn’tbeenforBob,I’dhavedied.”

【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了在鲍勃很小的时候，他的母亲玛基塔就反复告诉他:“无论发生

什么，都要相信自己。在鲍勃12岁时，他和妈妈玛基塔发生了车祸，车子掉到了一个深谷里。鲍勃没有受

伤，但是他的妈妈痛得动弹不得，大声呼救。鲍勃决定爬上马路去寻求救援，由于担心没有人能在黑暗中

看到她的小男孩，玛基塔拒绝让他一个人去。相反，玛基塔尽力打开了车门。她每次移动几英寸。太痛苦

了，玛基塔想放弃，但鲍勃不让她放弃。

【要点解析】1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“为了让妈妈继续移动，鲍勃重复了妈妈告诉他的话。”可知，第一段可描写鲍勃和妈妈

一起努力走出了山谷。在山谷上方，路上传来了灯光和汽车的声音。他们互相扶着，慢慢地向大路走去

②由第二段首句内容“大约一个小时后，鲍勃和他的妈妈终于到了公路上”可知，第二段可描写鲍勃向司机求

救，获救以及被送往医院。现在母亲康复以及对鲍勃的感激。

2.续写线索：努力走出了山谷——慢慢地向大路走去——求救——获救——送往医院——玛基塔现在康复了

——感激

3.词汇激活

行为类

从……走出来：stepoutof/comeoutof

恢复：recover/pickup

死：die/passaway

搀扶：hold/supportsb.withone’shand

情绪类

相信：trust/believein/beconfidentof

[高分句型1]Ifithadn’tbeenforBob,I’dhavedied.(运用了if引导的虚拟条件句)

[高分句型2]Theyheldeachother,walkingslowlytothemainroad.(运用了现在分词作状语)

2．Onepossibleversion:

“Wouldyouliketostayandlistentotheperformance?”MarthaaskedLily.Lillyhesitatedforamomentbut

quicklynodded.Sherealizedthisunexpectedincidentcouldpossiblybringhermorejoythanthatanyplanned

outingcouldhavebrought.Asthefirstnotesoftheband’stunefilledtheair,Marthapointedouthergranddaughter,

wholookedasdeterminedashergrandmother.Asweetmelodyfillingtheair,Marthaclosedhereyes,lostinthe

sound.Lillywatched,feelingawarmthinherheartasshewitnessedMartha’sloveforhergranddaughterandher

passionformusic.

Astheconcertdrewtoaclose,MarthaopenedhereyesandturnedtoLilly.“Thankyoufortoday,Lilly.

You’vemadeanoldladyveryhappy,”shesaid,hervoicesoftyetfilledwithsincerity.Lilyresponded,“Itwasmy

pleasure,Martha.Todaywasawonderfulsurpriseformetoo.”Theyexchangedsmiles.Lily’soriginalplanswere

missed,butinreturn,shefeltasenseoffulfillment,gainingsomethingfarmorevaluable—areminderofthebeauty

ofkindness,thepowerofmusic,andtheunexpectedfriendshipsthatcanariseinthemostordinarycircumstances.

【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了莉莉原计划去登山，在路途中却遇到了一个坐着轮椅，车轮

卡在轨道上的女人玛莎，莉莉帮助了她，并送她去公园，在交谈中，莉莉知道玛莎原来是一名音乐老师，

她的孙女正在公园里表演。玛莎邀请莉莉一起观看了演出，虽然莉莉未能实现原本的计划，但是她却获得

了更有价值的东西。

【要点解析】1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“‘你愿意留下来听演出吗？”玛莎问莉莉’可知，第一段可描写玛莎邀请莉莉观看孙女表

演，玛莎沉浸其中及莉莉的感受。

②由第二段首句内容“音乐会快结束时，玛莎睁开眼睛，转向莉莉”可知，第二段可描写玛莎感谢莉莉的陪伴

和观看以及莉莉在这件事中的感受。

2.续写线索：莉莉同意观看演出——玛莎沉浸在演出中——莉莉的观看感受——向莉莉表示感谢——莉莉对

于这次经历的感受和收获

3.词汇激活

行为类

①意识到：realize/beawarethat

②观察：watch/observe

③回应：respond/reply

情绪类

①有决心的，坚定的：determined/resolved

②开心：happy/pleased/cheerful

[高分句型1]Asthefirstnotesoftheband’stunefilledtheair,Marthapointedouthergranddaughter,wholooked

asdeterminedashergrandmother.(运用了由as引导的状语从句和who引导的非限制性定语从句)

[高分句型2]Asweetmelodyfillingtheair,Marthaclosedhereyes,lostinthesound.(运用了独立主格结构和过

去分词短语作状语)

3．Onepossibleversion:

Mycousinhadtorepeatedlyremindmetokeeppatient.Hetaughtmehowtoadjustmypolebasedonthe

movementsofthefishandhowtodeterminethebesttimetoliftthepolewhenafishwasonthehook.Underhis

guidance,Icalmeddowngradually,stayingfocusedtowaitpatiently.Thensuddenly,Ifeltajerkofmypole.A

surgeofthrillsweepingoverme,IpulledthefishingpoleoutofwaterandIcaughtmyfirstfish!SoexcitedwasI

thatIevengaveajumpintheair.Itwasasmallone,butitwasamilestoneforme!

Whenwefinallyleftthelake,Ihadcaughtthreefish!Thrilledandfulfilled,Iskippedallthewayhomewith

mycousin,tellinghimitwasapitythatIhadbeenmissingoutonsomuchbyavoidingthissimpleoutdooractivity

before.Sincethen,Ihavebecomeapassionatefishermanandlovespendingtimeoutdoors,appreciatingthesimple

ple