读后续写：常见的情绪+动作描写 学案-2024届高考英语作文复习专项

读后续写常见的情绪+动作描写汇总

一、描写情绪的句型

•人做主语

(1)脸上写着…with情绪writtenonsb'sface,sb.+动作.

(2)被…压垮/充满着/被…控制Overwhelmedwith/Consumedwith/Seized

by情绪,sb.+动作.

⑶某人几乎控制不住..之情/难sbcouldhardlycontain/concealsb's情绪.

掩…之情

•情绪做主语

(4)一股…涌上心头，贯穿全身Aflush/sense/rippleof情绪(welledupin

sb'sheartand)surged/flooded/ranthrough

sb

(5)…得说不出话来(剥夺某人说情绪deprivedsbofallpowerofutterance

话的能力)

(6)爬上心头，并将某人吞噬(坏)情绪slowlycreptuponsband

swallowedsb.

⑺…被…取代了情绪1wasreplaceby/gavewayto情绪2

(8)既…又amixtureof...and...

例：

(1)她难过地跑回了房间。Overwhelmedwithasenseofsorrow，sheranbacktoher

roomintears.

（2）当妈妈表扬她的时候，她北常开心。Whenmompraisedher,arippleofpleasure

ranthroughher.

⑶我激动得什么话也说不出来，泪水模糊了我的双眼。Excitementdeprivedmeof

allpowerofutterance,tearsmistingmyeyes.

（4）他的兴奋耗尽了，取而代之的是绝望和焦虑。Hisexcitementfadedawayand

wasreplacedwithdespairandworry.

（5）当爸爸看到混乱的厨房,他非常生气。Whendadcaughtsightofthemessy

kitchen,hecouldhardlycoctain/concealhisfury.

情景练习：

I.当妈妈醒来，看见双胞胎给她准备好的早餐时…

Sodelightedwasshethatshehuggedthetwinstightly,tearsofjoywellingupin

hereyes.（快乐+泪水）

2.当乔丹看见小猫因为自己的错误而在花园里冻僵了时…

Withanexpressionofremorseandanxietywrittenonhisface,Jordanhesitatedto

approachthepoorcreature,hisfeetrootedtothespot.（悔恨、担心+呆住）

3.当米亚看见清理完杂苴后干净美丽的花园时…

Exhaustedasshewasaftertidyingupthegarden,shefeltaflushofcontentment

andpridesurgingthroughher.（累去带足）

4.当我打开礼物盒子，看到的是衬衫，而不是我期待的自行车钥匙时…

Atthesightoftheshirt,asenseofdisappointmentwelledupandsurgedthrough

me.Imanagedtoforceasmile,endeavoringtoconcealmygloom.（失望+强颜欢笑）

5.当Tom得知妈妈是为了救他而烧伤破相时…

Regretfultearswellingupinhiseyes,Tompulledhismotherintohisarmsand

embracedhertightly,murmuringouthisapologiesoverandoveragain.（后悔+哭、

拥抱）

6.当Brendan听说，我准备给他钱买机票时…

Withdisbeliefandgratitudewrittenonhisface/Disbeliefandgratitudedepriving

himofallpowerofutterance,heheldmyhandstightly,tearsmistinghiseyes.（惊讶,

感动+握手，哭泣）

二、与情绪有关的动作描写

满脸喜色。Herfacelitup./Herfacebeamedandher

lightupbrightsmilelituptheroom.

1.愉

grin咧嘴笑。Hegrinnedfromeartoear./Hecurvedhis

快/喜

linger/echmouthintoabroadgrin.

悦

0笑声在房间里萦绕。Laughterlingocd/echoedaround

theroom.

心怦怦跳。Herheartthumpedwiththrilland

anticipation.

他情绪激动，难以成声。Hisvoicewaschokedwith

thump

emotion.

choke

2.激眼睛湿润Tearsmistedhereyes/Hereyes

mist,brim

动brirnrned(brim)withtears

well,hug

他们喜极而泣，紧紧拥抱。Tearsofjoywelledupin

tremble

theireyesastheyhuggedtightlytogether.

她拆信时急切得手都发抖了。Herhandstrembled

witheagernessassheopenedtheletter.

他的心几乎要跳出来了。Hisheartalmostleapedinto

3.紧leaphismouth.

张beat心雷鸣般跳动。Hecouldfeelthethunderousbeatof

hisheart.

4.惊raise惊讶地扬起眉毛raisehereyebrowsinastonishment

讶drop惊讶地目瞪口呆Myjawdropped.

freeze,roo呆住了动弹不得1wasfrozenasifrootedtothespot.

t倒吸一口气Everyonegaspedinastonishment.

gasp

满腔愤怒，Jim一句话也说不出来。Filledwithfury,

utter

Jimwasunabletoutterasingleword.

flame气得面红耳赤。Hisfaceflamedwithanger.

5.愤tremble他的声音因愤怒而颤抖。Hisvoicetrembledwith

rage.

怒stamp

愤怒地跺脚stamp(ed)one'sfootinanger

bang,stor

她砰地关上门，怒气冲।冲地出了房间Shebangedthe

m

doorandstormedoutoftheroom.

他紧咬嘴唇，忍住泪水Hebjt(bite)sb'slip,tryingto

holdbackhistears.

bite这消息使他脸上蒙上一层阴云。Thenewscasta

castcloudofgloomoverhisface.

6.悲拖着沉重的步伐drag(ged)one'sfeet/legs

drag

伤/难

她掩面哭泣。Shesobbed/wept,hidingherfaceinher

sob/weep

过

hands.

brim

她眼里盈满泪水Hereyesbrimmedwithtears.

float

我感到好像漂浮在悲伤的海洋里。Ifeltlikefloating

inanoceanofsadness.

7.恐freeze吓呆了，不敢动。Ifrozewithterror,toofrightenedto

惧squeeze/gmoveaninch.

rab恐惧控制住了他，他几乎说不出一整句话来。Fear

squeezed/grabbedhisheartandheandhecouldhardly

sayawholesentence.

红着脸Heblushedwithshame.

blush他从脸到脖子全红了。Ablushspreadfromhisfaceto

8.羞

hang/lowehisneck.

愧/害

羞愧地低下了头。

rTomhung/loweredhisheadin

羞shame.

burn

脸上滚烫。Shecouldfeelherfaceburning.

脸上掠过失望的神情。Alookofdisappointment

passedoverhisface.

9.失disappoint

听到他没获奖的消息，他心都沉下来了Hisheart

望sink

sankwhenheheardthenewsthathefailedtowina

prize.

被投入了•个黑喑的世界，陷入了绝望。Tonywas

thrownintoaworldofdarknessandsankinto

throw,sinkhopelessness.

10.绝

tear她感到绝望，心都要碎了。Herheartwastornwith

望

bulletdespair.

像子弹一样射穿我的心脏。Thelastwordwentlikea

bullettomyheart.

11.困scratch挠头Hescratchedhishead,notunderstandinga

惑shrugword.

耸肩I,heothersshruggedtheirshoulderswith

puzzlement/confusion.

与情绪有关的动作描写练习：

1.满脸喜色。Herface./Herfacebeamedandherbright

smiletheroom.

2.咧嘴笑。Hefromto.

3.笑声在房间里萦绕。Laughteraroundtheroom.

4.心怦怦跳。Herheartwiththrillandanticipation.

5.他情绪激动，哽咽。Hisvoicewaswithemotion.

6.他们喜极而泣，紧紧拥抱。Tearsofjoyintheireyesasthey

huggedtightlytogether.

7.她拆信时急切得手都发抖了。Herhandswitheagernessassheopened

theletter.

8.他的心几乎要跳出来了。Hisheartalmostintohis.

9.他能感到心脏雷鸣般的跳动。Hecouldfeeltheofhis

heart.

10.惊讶地扬起眉毛。sheherinastonishment.

11.惊讶得目瞪口呆。Myjawinastonishment.

12.呆住了动弹不得Iwasasiftothe.

13.震惊得倒吸一口气。Everyoneinastonishment.

14.满腔愤怒，Jim一句话也说不出来。Filledwithfury,Jimwasunableto

asingleword.

15.气得面红耳赤。Hisfacewithanger.

16.他的声音因愤怒而颤抖。Hisvoicewithrage.

17.愤怒地跺脚。Janeherfootinanger.

18.她砰地关上门，怒气冲冲地出了房间。Shethedoorandoutof

theroom.

19.忍住抑郁的心情。Shecouldhardlyhergloom.

20.这消息使他脸上蒙上一层阴云。Thenewsacloudofoverhis

face.

21.拖着沉重的步伐。Imyfeet/legs.

22.她掩面哭泣。She,herfaceinherhands.

23.她眼里盈满泪水。Hereyeswithtears.

24.我感到好像漂浮在悲伤的海洋里。Ifeltlikeinanof

sadness.

25.吓呆了，不敢动。Iwithterror,toofrightenedtomoveaninch.

26.恐惧控制住了他，他几乎说不出一整句话来。Fearhisheartandhe

andhecouldhardlysayawholesentence.

27.红着脸。Hewithshame.

28.他从脸到脖子全红了。Aspreadfromhisfacetohisneck.

29.羞愧地低下了头。Tomhisheadin.

30.脸上滚烫。Shecouldfeelherface.

31.他的脸上掠过失望的神情。Alookofpassedoverhisface.

32.听到他没获奖的消息，他心都沉下来了。Hisheartwhenheheard

thenewsthathefailedtowinaprize.

33.被投入了一个黑暗的世界，陷入了绝望。Tonywasintoaworldof

darknessandintohopelessness.

34.她感到绝望，心都要碎了。Herheartwaswithdespair.

35.最后一句话像子弹一样射穿我的心脏。Thelastwordwentlikeato

myheart.

36.挠头，不理解。Hehishead,notunderstandingaword.

37.耸肩。Theotherstheirshoulderswithpuzzlement/confusion.

三、身体部位和动作的语料：

1、【腿和脚】

小步跑trot(ted)downthesteps从上方跳过去leapoverthestream.

大步流星stride(strode)alongto飞快移动Thecatshotacrossthe

meetmegarden.

蹑手蹑脚creep(crept)outofbed漫游wanderaimlessly

偷偷溜出sneak/slide(slid)outtothe后退一步takeastepbackinhorror

party站起来rise(rose)toone'sfeet

踮脚走tiptoe(d)tothewindow挣扎着站起来struggletoone'sfeet

气冲冲stormoutoftheroom跳起来spring(sprang)toone's

踱来踱去paceupanddownfeet

一寸寸挪inchone'sway蹲下crouchdown

拖着沉重的脚步drag(ged)one'sheavy加快脚步quickenone^pace(to)

legs悄悄离开edgeaway

蹦跚，摇晃stagger朝...走去makeone'swayto/headfbr

快跑dash/rush/dartinto一动不动stoodrootedtothe

跳蹦跳跳bouncealongtheroadground

2.【眼睛（看）】

看到...sbcatchsightofsth/眼睛睁大one'seyeswiden(ed)

sthcameintoone'ssight.偷看peepat

垂下眼睛sbdroop(ed)one'seyes投射目光sbcasta(...)glanceat...

直视looksbstraightintheeye目光相遇sb'sglancesmetsb.

扫视Hiseyesscannedthe扫一眼glanceat

room.盯着看gaze/stareat

眼神躲闪着我avoidthegazeofme怒视glareat

从窗户往里仔细看peerinsidethroughthe眯眼narrowone'seyes

window从头到脚打量Sheeyedmefromtopto

目光落在…one'sglances/eyesrested/felltoe.

on...

3,【嘴（说）】

松了一口气breatheasighofrelief大喊yell/screamoutloud

说一句话utteraword咆哮roar

齐声说sayinchorus咕哝，喃喃murmur/mumbleanapology

发出呼喊letoutashout和盘托出pourout

惊叫，呼喊exclaim

4、【手】

紧抓grab/graspone'sarms推开某人pushsbaway

手里拿着withsthinone'shands推fJpushthedooropen

抱着holdthebabyinhisarms握拳clenchone'sfists

轻抚strokehisheadgently伸出双臂抱某人throwone'sarms

拍pataroundsb

把某人搂紧怀里pullsbintoone'sarm捂住嘴coverone'smouth

伸出手reachoutone'shand/拿起…咬了一口pickupsthandtakea

extendone'shand(forsth)bite

手心'Hispalmsweresweaty塞进手中pressanoteintomy

鼓掌clapone'shandshand

5.【头，脸，心等其他】

低头lower/drop/bcndone'shead气喘吁吁gaspforbreath

点头赞同nodinagreement辗转难眠Hetossedandturnedin

头靠在某人肩膀restone'sheadonsb'sbed,unabletofall

shoulder

眉开眼笑sb'sfacebeamedwith

happiness

容光焕发Herfacelitup.

哄堂大笑explodewithlaughter

强颜欢笑force/squeezeasmile

嗅闻sniff

脸红flush/burnwith

embarrassment

咬着嘴唇bit(bite)hislips

揭鼻子blow(blew)one'snose

心砰砰跳Myheartbegantopound.

喉头发紧one'sthroattighten(ed)

四.如何写好续写:

1.情节和主题（人与自我+人与他人+人与自然）

人与自我一青少年的认知提升，改正错误认知或做法，变得独立、细心、沉稳、合

作，包容

人与他人一与家人、朋友、陌生人之间的关爱，不求回报的付出，善意之链的传递

2.叙事和写作技巧

3.语料库

>叙事和写作技巧

1.无灵主语

fathercaughtsightofthemessykitchen

—»Themessykitchencameintohissight

Fatherfeltworried.

—Thousandsofthoughtsfloodedintotheworriedfathers'

mind.

Iwasshockedbythenews

一Thenewsshotmelikeabomb,leavingmybrainblankandlimbs

frozen.

2.巧用形、副做状语

Hesmiled—>_Heforcedanunwillingsmile不情愿地笑了

Shecameback一+hunqryandexhausted又饿又

累地

3.人物AB切换，多角度写事

david哭了，我同情他.

—david的眼泪...david'stearstriggeredasenseofsympathyfromthebottomof

myheart.

―我对丁david的哭泣感到.Jfeltsympathetictodavid'ssadnessandsorryfor

myignorance.

4.动作链扩句。在关键动作之前，加上铺垫动作或这么做的原因。

Shepattedmeontheshoulder

—>Shefeltmysorrowandpatted..../

—Feelinqmvsorrow,shepattedmeontheshoulderandsaidinagentle

voice...

5.名词和形容词也可以犷句

asenseofpride(andcontentment)

6.写人物，可以动作+情绪/适当的心理活动+语言结合

jack向妈妈道歉

一悔恨的泪水从jack脸颊落下，jack拉住妈妈的手，低声一遍又一遍地说对不

起

Regretfultearsrollingdownhischeeks,Jackheldmother'shands

tightlyandmumbledhisapologiesrepeatedly.

7.尽量不写直接的对话

“Thankyou.Thankyouverymuch”theoldmansaid

->Theoldmanexpressedhisthanksrepeatedly.

“whydidn'tyoutellmeearlier?”、justdidn'twantyou

toworry^^

—>Figuringoutwhathadhappened,hefelthimselftheluckiestonein

theworldtopossesssuchunderstanding

children/parents/friends.

8.结尾升华可以哲理感悟或温馨画面，如果能呼应原材料则更好

哲理感悟：

【永恒之花】这个难忘的经历/友谊/关爱就像一朵永恒的花朵，盛放在某人记忆

的长河里。

Theunforgettableexperience/friendship/loveandcarewaslikeaneverlasting

flower,bloomingintheriverofmymemory.

【大爱无疆】虽然我没和我爱的人一起过节，但我把温暖送给了这个无家可归

的家庭。

WhileIdidn'tcelebratethefestivalwithmylovedones,Iextendedwarmthto

thehomelessfamily.

【人性光辉】正是一个完全陌生的家庭，帮助我重新获得了对光辉人性的信任

一帮助其他需要帮助的人。

Ifsacompletestrangerfamilythatassistedmeinregainingthetrustinthe

glowinghumannature-helpingothersinneed.

【玫瑰花床/一帆风顺】人生并非由玫瑰花床。有时你走过荆棘丛生的生活之路，

发现它会把你带到一个玫瑰园，有时你必须学会如何忍受荆棘。

Lifeisnotalwaysabedofroses.Sometimesyouwalkthroughthethornypath

oflifetofindthatitleadsyoutoarosegarden,andothertimesyouhaveto

learnhowtoendurethroughthethorns.

【赠人玫瑰】俗话说：“赠人玫瑰，手有余香。”

Justasasayinggoes,4tRosesgiven,fragranceinhand.”

【强调句型】正是我的鼓励和他的坚持帮助他完成了这项艰巨的任务。

Itwasmyencouragementandhispersistencethathelpedhimachievethe

toughtask.

温馨画面：

【金色阳光】温暖的金色阳光从窗户涌进来，加上家人之间的爱，温暖了我们。

Thewarmgoldensunlight,floodinginthroughthewindow,togetherwithlove

betweenmyfamily,warmedusup.

【温暖如春】潮湿的窗外，雪花在寒风中飞舞，而在温暖的等候室里，爱驱走

了寒冬，人们开心地说着笑着。

Outofthesteamywindow,snowflakesdancedinthech川ywind,whileinside

thewarmwaitingroom,lovedroveoutthecoldwinter,withpeopletalkingand

laughingcheerfully.

♦叙事和写作技巧

1.无灵主语whenfathercaughtsightofthe

messykitchen

—>

Fatherfeltworried.

―>

Iwasshocked