高考英语读后续写专题之遇险类+地震中的温暖与追求+讲义

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Thevideoofaquakesurvivorsearchingforthearmyofficerwhosavedhislife10yearsago

hasattractedmuchattentiononChina'ssocialmedia.

“Tenyearshavepassed.Ihavebecomeasoldierlikeyou.Canyouseeme?I'vebeenlooking

foryoualltheseyears.Whereareyou?”thesurvivor,QiangTianlin（强天林），saysinthevideo.

Sincethevideowentonlineaweekago,ithasbeenviewedmorethan12milliontimesand

forwarded（转发）over30,000timesonSinaWeibo.

Qiangwas14andattendingGuanzhuangMiddleSchoolwhenthe8.0-magnitudeearthquake

struckSichuan,sWenchuanCountyonMay12,2008.

Thequakeclaimed（索取）morethan80,000lives,andaround130,000military（军队）

personneltookpartinthesearchandrescuework.

Worriedabouthisfamily,Qianglefthisschoolandheadedhomealone.Walkingona

mountaintrack,aftershockssuddenlycausedalandslide.

Apassingsoldiergrabbed（抓住）Qiangandusedhisownbodytoshield（保护）the

teenagerfromthefallingrocks.

“Wereitnotthatsoldier,Imighthavedied.Isawfallingrockshittinghisbackandhishands

werebleeding,Qiangrecalled（回忆）.Thesoldiertookhimtoatemporaryshelternearbyand

fetchedQiang5sfamilythenextday.Inthefollowingmonths,hecametotheshelterseveraltimes,

settinguptentsanddelivering（派送）supplies（物资）topeople.

“IregretthatIdidn'taskforhisname.AllIknowisthathewas1.7meterstallandothers

calledhimBattalionCommander,Qiangsaid.

注意：

1.所续写的短文词数应为150左右；

2.续写部分分为二段，每段的开头语已经为你写好；

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TheeventsofMay12totallychangedQiang5slife.Previously（以前的）,hisacademic

performance（学习成绩）waspoor,buttheofficer

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Theofficerresponded（回复）afterviewing（观看）thevideoonSinaWeibo.Andtheyhada

chancetochatontheWeChat（微信）.___________________________________________

一、文章大意

2008年5月12日四川汶川发生8.0级地震，强天林当时14岁，在回家途

中遭遇山体滑坡，一位路过的身高约1.7米、被称为营长的士兵用身体保护了

他，并将他带到临时避难所，还帮他找到了家人，之后多次来送物资。10年后，

强天林已成为一名士兵，他发布视频寻找当年救他的军官，该视频在社交媒体上

引起广泛关注。

二、伏笔及续写回应

（一）伏笔

1.军官的保护行为：为强天林挡住落石，手部流血，这一细节为后续强天林

的转变埋下情感基础，可在续写中体现强天林对这份恩情的铭记以及其对

他人生态度的影响。

2.军官多次送物资：展现军官的持续关怀，可在续写中成为强天林成长过程

中的温暖回忆和激励因素。

3.强天林不知军官名字：推动故事发展，使得寻找军官这一情节成为可能和

必要，在续写中可围绕寻找过程及找到后的情感交流展开。

（二）续写回应

1.第一段：可描述军官的行为如何改变强天林的生活，如从学习成绩差到努

力学习，最终成为士兵，回应军官的榜样力量对他的积极影响。

2.第二段：写军官看到视频后的回应以及他们的交流，可展现两人之间的情

感连接，如军官对强天林成长的欣慰等。

三、续写要点

（一）第一段

1.描述强天林生活的变化，重点突出在学习和人生目标方面的转变，强调军

官对他的激励作用。

2.可以提及他在努力过程中遇到的困难以及如何克服，进一步丰富情节。

（二）第二段

1.军官回应的内容和方式，比如表达对强天林的赞赏、回忆当年的情景等。

2.两人交流中的情感互动，如感动、欣慰等，以及对未来的展望或期许。

四、故事线

地震发生-军官救强天林-强天林成长-发布视频寻找军官-军官回应-

情感交流与展望未来

五、感情线

从军官的救命之恩引发强天林的感恩之情，到他努力成长过程中的坚定信念，再

到找到军官后的感动与欣慰，情感逐渐升华。

六、主旨升华句

1.Theactofkindnessinthefaceofdisastersowedtheseedsofhopeand

transformationinayoungheart.（在灾难面前的善举在一颗年轻的心中播下

了希望和转变的种子。）

2.Throughtheyears,thememoryofthatselflesssacrificebecamethedriving

forcebehindone'spursuitofabetterself.（多年来，那份无私牺牲的记忆成

为了一个人追求更好自我的动力。）

3.Thebondformedinthechaosoftheearthquakeendured,bridgingthegapof

timeandbringingtwolivesbacktogetherinamomentofemotionalreunion.

（在地震混乱中形成的纽带经久不衰，跨越了时间的鸿沟，在情感重聚的

时刻将两个生命再次联系在一起。）

4.Thesearchwasnotjustforaperson,butfortheembodimentofcourageand

kindnessthathadshapedalifeandinspiredajourneyofgrowth.（这次寻找不

仅仅是为了一个人，更是为了寻找勇气和善良的化身，它塑造了一个生命

并激发了成长之旅。）

5.Intheaftermathofdisaster,asimpleactofheroismhadthepowertoignitea

flameofdeterminationthatwouldburnbrightlythroughtheyears,leadingtoa

beautifulencounterofgratitudeandfulfillment.（在灾难的余波中，一个简单

的英雄行为有能力点燃一团决心的火焰，多年来熊熊燃烧，导致了一次感

恩和满足的美好相遇。）

七、写作范文

范文一

第一段

TheeventsofMay12totallychangedQiang'slife.Previously,hisacademic

performancewaspoor,buttheofficer'sheroicactbecameaturningpoint.Everytime

hethoughtofthesoldierriskinghislifetosavehim,asurgeofdeterminationfilled

him.Hestartedtofocusonhisstudies,spendinglonghoursporingoverbooks.When

hefaceddifficultiesandwantedtogiveup,theimageofthebleedinghandsofthe

officerwouldflashinhismind,motivatinghimtopersevere.Eventually,hishard

workpaidoff,andhemanagedtogetgoodgrades.Inspiredbytheofficer,healso

joinedtheschooFsvolunteerteam,helpingothersjustliketheofficerhaddonefor

him.Hewasdeterminedtobecomeasoldiertocontinuespreadingloveandhope.

第二段

TheofficerrespondedafterviewingthevideoonSinaWeibo.Andtheyhadachance

tochatontheWeChat.TheofficerwasdeeplytouchedbyQiang'seffortsand

transformation.HetoldQiangthathewasjustdoinghisdutybackthenandnever

expectedsuchaprofoundimpact.HerecalledthemomenthesavedQiangvividlyand

wasgladtoseethattheyoungboyhadgrownintoaresponsibleandbraveman.They

talkedabouttheirlivesovertheyears,andtheofficerencouragedQiangtokeepup

thegoodworkinthemilitary.Theypromisedtomeetinpersonsomeday,andboth

werelookingforwardtothatmomentwithanticipationandjoy,knowingthattheir

connectionformedduringthedisasterhadenduredandwouldcontinuetoinspire

theminthefuture.

范文二

第一段

TheeventsofMay12totallychangedQiang'slife.Previously,hisacademic

performancewaspoor,buttheofficer'sselflessshieldinspiredanewpathforhim.He

madeavowtohimselfthathewouldnotwastethesecondchanceatlifegivenbythe

officer.Hebegantostudywithextraordinarydiligence,seekinghelpfromteachers

andclassmateswheneverheencounteredproblems.Thememoryoftheofficer's

kindnessbecamehissourceofstrengthduringtoughtimes.Inadditiontoimproving

hisacademicperformance,healsoactivelyparticipatedinphysicaltraining,aimingto

buildastrongbodyliketheofficer.Hisdreamofbecomingasoldiergrewstronger

daybyday,andhefinallyachieveditthroughunremittingefforts.

第二段

TheofficerrespondedafterviewingthevideoonSinaWeibo.Andtheyhadachance

tochatontheWeChat.TheofficerexpressedhisprideinQiang'sachievements.He

sharedsomeofhisownexperiencesinthemilitaryandadvisedQiangtoalways

remembertheresponsibilityonhisshoulders.Theyreminiscedaboutthedaysafter

theearthquake,andtheofficerwasamazedathowmuchQianghadremembered

abouttheirbriefencounters.Theirconversationwasfilledwithwarmthandemotion.

TheofficerhopedthatQiangwouldcontinuetostriveforexcellenceandmake

contributionstothecountryandthepeople.Thisencounternotonlyrekindledtheir

oldconnectionbutalsostrengthenedtheirbeliefinthepowerofkindnessandthe

responsibilitytopassiton.Astheyendedthechat,theybothfeltasenseof

fulfillmentandlookedforwardtoanewchapterintheirrelationship.

参考答案

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