读后续写+用画笔敲开孤独的心：我的暑期艺术课教学记+讲义 高三上学期10月月考英语试题

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Ialwayshopeforsomestudentwhopossessesthatunusualcapabilitytoconveyfeeling,insight,andpassionthroughart.Itdoesn’thappenoften,butitdidonesummerholiday--andfromawonderfullyunexpectedsource.Thatsummer,Ivolunteeredtoteachasummerschoolartclassforhighschoolfreshmen.WhenIarrivedonthefirstday,thestudentsweregroupinginthecenteroftheclassroom,exceptforared-hairedgirlnamedEmmawhotookadeskinthebackrow.Ilookedoverwhatwouldbemyworkspaceforthefollowingdays.TherewerelargewindowswithplentyoflightandIspottedseveralkindsoftreesoutsidethatwouldserveasmodels.Emmawasalwaystheearliesttogettoourclasses,andIcouIdfeelhereffort.

However,shekeptherseatinthebackrowasthoughbeingignoredwassomethingtohopefor.Iaskedonepopulargirl,whosaid,

“Sheisanorphan.Wetrytobefriendly,butsheactslikeshe’sinanotherworld.”

Isaid,

“Allright.Let’strytomakethissummerthegoodpartofEmma’slife,OK?”Therewasnoanswerinwordsbutshenodded,tellingmesheunderstoodandempathized--goodkid,atheart.Duringthefollowingdays,Icouldfeelotherstudents’kindnesstoEmma.Sometimes,Emmaeventalkedanddrewwiththem,butshestillkeptacertaindistancefromme.WhenIaskedtoseeherwork,sheleanedforwardcoveringitwithherforearms.Treatingherinanyspecialwayonlyseemedtoemphasizeherpainfuldissimilarity,soIlimitedmycommunicationwithhertoagoodmorningsmile.Thesummerwentbyquicklyandeveryonegotmuchbetteratdrawing.SodidEmma’sbehavior.Wehadalotoffunintheprocess,butthelastdaycameattherighttime.Thekidsfiledinandwatchedmewritetheassignmentonthewhiteboard:

Drawapicturetitled:

“APlaceILove”.注意：1.

续写词数应为150左右；2.

请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。续写第一句：Iwalkedaround,

watchingthedrawingsdevelop.续写第二句：ItwasEmma’sturntoshowherdrawing.

五要素分析主体：包括“我”（教师）、Emma和其他学生。“我”希望引导学生通过艺术表达情感，Emma是一个性格孤僻的孤儿学生，其他学生对Emma有友善的态度。目标：“我”的目标是教好艺术课，让每个学生尤其是Emma能在艺术中找到快乐和自我表达；Emma的目标或许是在不被特殊对待的情况下融入集体和享受绘画；其他学生的目标是完成课程学习和友好对待Emma。情境：暑期艺术课堂，教室有充足光线和窗外树木可作绘画模型，有一群性格各异的高一新生，存在着同学间特殊个体（Emma）的关系状况。行动：“我”采取正常授课、引导同学友善相处、不过度关注Emma以免其不适等行动；Emma努力上课、逐渐与同学交流但对“我”保持距离；其他同学主动与Emma交流。结果：经过一个夏天，大家绘画水平提高，Emma的行为也有所改善，同学们相处愉快。主要矛盾Emma的心理隔阂：作为孤儿，她内心敏感，渴望融入又害怕被特殊对待，对老师有距离感，这是她心理上自我保护与渴望交流的矛盾。老师引导的分寸问题：老师既想帮助Emma又担心特殊对待会加重她的心理负担，在引导方式上存在矛盾。解决方法持续温和关注：像“我”之前保持微笑问候这种温和方式可以继续，让Emma感受到平等对待。同时可以在课后不经意地与她交流绘画技巧等，逐步拉近心理距离。集体活动促进融合：组织更多的小组绘画活动等集体项目，让Emma在集体氛围中更自然地融入，减少她作为特殊个体的孤独感，也让她在活动中感受到老师对她和对其他同学并无不同。&分析过程：1.根据原文，可以分析，Emma画的是“这个夏天不一样的教室”2.第一段主要写大家画的是什么：有人画家里，有人画游乐场，有人画湖边，大家都展示出了画出了自己喜欢的地方3.第二段主要写Emma画的教室：详细描述一下这个教室的场景，以及要呼应原材料中【TherewerelargewindowswithplentyoflightandIspottedseveralkindsoftreesoutsidethatwouldserveasmodels.】&本篇的难点：1.学生很容易看出要往什么方向写，但是觉得可写的点太少，不知道要怎样写大家的画，才能把第一段字数凑齐2.在本篇写作中，十句五定不适用，因为第一段首句之后不适合描写心情。学生还没画完呢，还没看到学生们完整的画，哪来的心情，生搬硬套使不得。参考答案Iwalkedaround,watchingthedrawingsdevelop.

Thestudentswereimmersedintheirwork,

eachtryingtocapturetheessenceoftheplacetheylovedintheiruniqueway.Thedrawingswerea

mixofvibrantcolorsanddelicatelines,eachtellingastoryofsomeone'sheartfeltattachmenttoa

specialplace.Ismiled,knowingthatthisassignmenthadbeenasuccessinitsownway.ItwasEmma’sturntoshowherdrawing.Shestoodupslowly,herfaceflushedwith

nervousness.Sheheldupherdrawing,andIgasped.Itwasabeautifulrenderingoftheclassroom

wehadspentthesummerin.Thelargewindows,thevarioustreesoutside,andeventhewhiteboard

withourfinalassignmentwrittenonitwereallcapturedinmeticulousdetail.Butmorethanthat,it

wastheemotioninthedrawingthatstruckme.Emmahadcapturedtheessenceofoursummer

together,thejoy,thestruggle,andthegrowththatwehadallexperienced.Ilookedupather,tears

inmyeyes,andsawthatshewassmilingtoo.Inthatmoment,IknewthatEmmahadnotonly

foundaplacesheloved,butshehadalsofoundacommunitythatlovedher.下水文Iwalkedaround,watchingthedrawingsdevelop.

Thestudentswereimmersedintheirwork,

eachtryingtocapturetheessenceoftheplacetheylovedintheiruniqueway.Thedrawingswerea

mixofvibrantcolorsanddelicatelines,eachtellingastoryofsomeone'sheartfeltattachmenttoa

specialplace.Ismiled,knowingthatthisassignmenthadbeenasuccessinitsown

way.Whentheyfinishedassignment,Iaskedeachto

show

theirartwork,

andto

share

themeaning

andfeelingstheywantedtoconvey.Some

drew

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beautyof

thescenicspotstheyhadvisited.

Everyone

thentalkedaboutthemeaningbehind,

ofwhichIfeltveryproud.

ItwasEmma’sturntoshowherdrawing.Shestoodupslowly,herfaceflushedwith

nervousness.Sheheldupherdrawing,andIgasped.

Shestoodupslowly,holdingupherdrawing.

Itwas

theclassroom

wehadspentthesummerin.Thelargewindows,thevarioustreesoutside,andeventhewhiteboardwithourfinalassignmentwrittenonitwereallcapturedinmeticulousdetail.Butmorethanthat,it

wastheemotioninthedrawing