英语 冲刺高考之读后续写满分手册专题06 导学案-如何使续写中的动作描写富有“电影镜头感”

导学案——如何使续写中的动作描写富有“电影镜头感”语言表达“空乏平淡”是同学们在读后续写中存在的典型问题，究其原因就是：不会根据文章主题和情节发展进行精彩生动的动作描写是其中主要原因之一。今天，学会5招，提升读后续写技巧——让续写中的人物变得“灵动”起来！学习目标：1.Learnwaystodescribevividlyincontinuationwriting.2.Promotewritingskillsthroughpractice.StepI：输入——夯实基础“看”a.根据英语写出汉语意思catchaglimpseof____________takeaquicklook_____________

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up____________________gazeat_____________________stareat____________________glareat____________________peepat_____________________glimpse/glanceat____________gapeat____________________blinkat____________________one’seyesfallonsomeplace___lookatsbstraightintheeye____one’seyesfix/focus/concentrateon_one’seyesscan________________b.根据汉语提示默写英语短语偷瞄一眼_______________________瞥见；不注意看到_________________向里看，调查____________________抬起头向上看____________________

凝视____________________________盯住____________________________怒目而视________________________偷窥_____________________________瞥一眼___________________________吃惊地看________________________朝…眨眼_________________________某人的目光落在___________________直视某人的眼睛___________________某人的目光紧盯着_________________某人的眼睛扫视___________________“走”的精彩描写a.根据英语写出汉语意思tiptoe________________________stride________________________Sneak________________________limp_________________________stumble______________________stagger_______________________slipintotheroom_______________stormoutofthedoor____________dashback_____________________rush/hurrytothestation__________pacerestlessly__________________wanderaimlessly_______________b.根据汉语提示默写英语短语蹑手蹑脚

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大步走_________________________

鬼鬼祟祟地走

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瘸着走

__________________________跌跌撞撞地走____________________蹒跚

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溜进房间________________________冲出房门_________________________冲回____________________________冲到车站_________________________不安地走动_______________________无目的地漫步_____________________“手”的动作描写a.根据英语写出汉语意思graspatsth____________________seizesth(fromsb)______________drag_________________________reachforone’shand___________raiseone’shands____________slidone’shandsinto____________catch/holdofone’sarm_________cupone’shandover____________withone’sheadinone’shands__foldone’sarms_______________catch/grabone’sarm__________pullsb.intoone’sarms________b.根据汉语提示默写英语短语尽力抓住某物____________________（常指通过暴力突然）夺取________拖拽；吃力地往前拉______________伸手抓住某人____________________举手____________________________将手插进......___________________抓住某人的手臂________________捂住......_______________________双手抱着头......_________________某人双臂交叉___________________抓住某人的胳膊________________拉某人进怀___________________StepII：学会“5招”使续写“灵动”——让你的动作描写富有“电影镜头感”Suddenly,Amovingdot(点)onthehorizonwasspotted.Exhaustedbuthopeful,Janejumpedtoherfeettocatchaclearsightofit."Thehelicopter,"Janemurmured,sprangupanddashedtothecenterofanopenarea,wavingheryellowblousedesperatelyandyellingatthehelicopterwithexcitement.Thistimeshewasspotted,whichmadeherfeelmoredelighted.Eyesbrimmingwithtears,JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTomlikeaflyingarrow,huggingtightlyinhisarms,“pleaseneverleavemealone!"第1招：三联动——连续使用三个动词并列做谓语例如：（上文中红色句子）"Thehelicopter,"Janemurmured,sprangupanddashedtothecenterof............JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTom......第2招：非谓动——非谓语动词与主句的谓语搭配使用例如：（上文中蓝色句子）"Thehelicopter,"Janemurmured,sprangupanddashedtothecenterofanopenarea,wavingheryellowblousedesperatelyandyellingatthehelicopterwithexcitement.Eyesbrimmingwithtears,JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTomlikeaflyingarrow,huggingtightlyinhisarms,“pleaseneverleavemealone!"第3招：副助动——句子前后或动词前后使用恰当的副词增强语效例如：Suddenly,Amovingdot(点)onthehorizonwasspotted.......wavingheryellowblousedesperately.....第4招：介宾动——介词短语修饰限定，尤其是with复合结构例如：JanejumpedofftherockandrushedtowardsTomlikeaflyingarrow......Withbutterfliesinhisstomach,hewalkedtowardstheentrance.第5招：无主动——无灵主语往往是时间或地点名词后接see或witness等动词例如：Thelittleriverandwoodsinmyhometownwitnessedmygrowth.StepIII：Practicemakesperfect!句子训练：1.Helefthistent________________________.他一头雾水地离开他的帐篷2.Hearingthathehadbeensaved,we______________________.听说他得救了，我们松了口气。3.Helookedatme______________________________.他以可怕的眼神看着我。4.Theyleftthecave_______________________.他们惊慌地离开了那个山洞。5.Shestared_________________________atthestranger.她惊愕地盯着那陌生人。6.Atthesightofthesnake,Jack___________________________.一看到那条蛇，杰克跳起来、抓起一块石头就扔过去。7._________________________,thepeopleonboardgotpanicked,_____________.飞机急剧下降，机上的人们开始恐慌,全都尖叫起来。8.Atlast,wereturnedtoourcamp,_________________________.我们终于回到了营地，又渴又饿筋疲力尽。9.______________,fearoverwhelmedme,__________________.夜幕降临，我感到极度害怕，使我浑身哆嗦。10.________________________,weran____________.恶狼在后面紧追，我们拼命地逃跑。StepIV：语篇输出——学以致用阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。(2021·江苏如皋第二次适应性考试)Onedarknightduringthesummerholidays,IwalkedovertomyfriendJeremy'shousetostayover.Weweregoingtohaveamoviemarathonofourfavoritesci­fiadventurefilmseriesandstayuplatewithsomesnacksanddrinks.Ihadnotbeentohishousebeforebecausehehadonlyrecentlymoved,soIaskedhimtotextmeoverhisnewaddress:64CherryTreeRoad.Jeremy'snewstreetwasanicepartoftown,linedwithtalltreesandmostofthehouseshadahedgeorfenceatthefront.Someofthehouseshadtheirnumbersonthegate,someonthehouse,andsomedidn'tseemtohaveanumberatall.IthadstartedtocloudoverasIleftmyhouse,andasIturnedontohisroad,itbegantorain.Astheraingotheavier,Irushedtofindnumbersixty­fourandeventuallyfoundit...orsoIthought.Iwalkedpastnumber62,soassumeditwasthenextone,whichappearedtohavenonumber.Yousee,usuallytheoddnumbersareononesideofthestreet,theevennumbersontheother.Iwalkedquicklyupthedrivewaytothefrontdoor.Itwasverydarktooandtherewerenolightsoninsidethehouse,whichdidseemstrange.However,Iwasgettingdrenched(湿透的)andwantedtogetinside!Irangthebell,butnobodycame,soIrangandknockedagain.ThenInoticedtherewashousenumberafterall.Aridiculoussmallonethatsaid63.Therewasasuddenthud(呯的一声)insidetheapparentlyemptyhouse,andamomentlaterthefrontdooropenedviolently.Ahooded(戴兜帽的)manwithabeardandblueglasseshurriedpastmeandranintothestreet.Therewasashoutfrominside:“Waitforme,Rob！”Anothermanrushedout,buthedroppedwhathewascarryingandtrippedonthedoorstep.Theothermanshoutedfromtheroad“C'mon,Kev！”hepickedhimselfupandlookedatmebeforeracingafterhisfriend.注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在相应位置作答。Ilookedatwhatthesecondmanhaddropped;itwasjewellery.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________“Youwerebravefortryingstopthem，”saidtheofficer._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________导学案—如何使续写中的动作描写富有“电影镜头感”答案StepI：输入——夯实基础“看”a.根据英语写出汉语意思偷瞄一眼瞥见；不注意看到向里看，调查抬起头向上看

凝视盯住怒目而视偷窥瞥一眼吃惊地看朝…眨眼某人的目光落在..直视某人的眼睛某人的目光紧盯着......某人的眼睛扫视......b.根据汉语提示默写英语短语catchaglimpseoftakeaquicklook

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upgazeatstareatglareatpeepatglimpse/glanceatgapeatblinkatone’seyesfallonsomeplacelookatsbstraightintheeyeone’seyesfix/focus/concentrateonone’seyesscan“跑、走”a.根据英语写出汉语意思①蹑手蹑脚

②大步走

③鬼鬼祟祟地走

④瘸着走

⑤跌跌撞撞地走

⑥蹒跚

⑦溜进房间⑧冲出房门⑨冲回⑩冲到车站⑪不安地走动⑫无目的地漫步b.根据汉语提示默写英语短语（1）tiptoe（2）stride（3）sneak（4）limp（5）stumble（6）stagger（7）slipintotheroom（8）stormoutofthedoor（9）dashback（10）rush/hurrytothestation（11）pacerestlessly（12）wanderaimlessly“手”的动作描写a.根据英语写出汉语意思尽力抓住某物（常指通过暴力突然）夺取拖拽；吃力地往前拉伸手抓住某人举手将手插进......抓住某人的手臂捂住......双手抱着头......某人双臂交叉抓住某人的胳膊拉某人进怀b.根据汉语提示默写英语短语graspatsthseizesth(fromsb)dragreachforone’shandraiseone’shandsslidone’shandsintocatch/holdofone’sarmcupone’shandoverwithone’sheadinone’shandsfoldone’sarmscatch/grabone’sarmpullsb.intoone’sarmsStepIII.句子训练：1.Helefthistentinconfusion/confused.他一头雾水地离开他的帐篷2.Hearingthathehadbeensaved,wesighedin/withrelief.听说他得救了，我们松了口气。3.Helookedatmewithfrighteningeyes.他以可怕的眼神看着我。4.Theyleftthecaveinapanic/,panicked.他们惊慌地离开了那个山洞。5.Shestaredinastonishmentatthestranger.她惊愕地盯着那陌生人。6.Atthesightofthesnake,Jackjumpedtohisfeet，graspedastoneandthrewatit.一看到那条蛇，杰克跳起来、抓起一块石头就扔过去。7.Withtheplanefallingrapidly,thepeopleonboardgotpanicked,allscreaming.飞机急剧下降，机上的人们开始恐慌,全都尖叫起来。8.Atlast,wereturnedtoourcamp,hungry,thirstyandexhausted.我们终于回到了营地，又渴又饿筋疲力尽。9.Nightsettingin,fear