专题08 环保、科技与自然-备战2022年上海中考英语书面表达满分攻略（解析版）

（一）（2021年徐汇区一模）Writeatleast60wordstotalkabout“Howtechnologyaffectsme”.Doesthedevelopmentoftechnologyaffectyouinapositivewayorinanegativeway?Whatdoyouthinkoftheinfluence?Howdoyoudealwithit?请以“Howtechnologyaffectsme”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，谈论科技发展对你带来了正面的影响还是负面的影响。你怎样看待科技对你的影响吗?你怎样面对这些影响呢?（注意：短文中不得出现考生姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。标点符号不占格）____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文：HowtechnologyaffectsmeWeliveinaninformationtime.Almosteverypersonhasonemobilephone.It'sveryconvenientformetolearntheworldusingourtelephones.Icansendmygreetingstomyfriendsbyphones.Icanalsocommunicatewithmyfriends.Icangettoomuchinformationbymyphones.Ican'timaginewhatourlifewillbelikewithouttelephones.Telephonesareourgoodfriends,butsomechildrenareaddictedtomobilegames,whichaffectstheirstudy.Soweshouldusemobilephonesproperly.【解析】【分析】【详解】1.题干解读：该题目属于说明文写作，在写作时根据汉语提示，谈论科技发展带来了正面的影响还是负面的影响；怎样看待科技的影响；如何面对这些影响等。2.写作指导：本文应该用第一人称来介绍内容；时态采用一般现在时；在介绍内容时，力求语言准确，内容完整，行文连贯，保证条理清晰。（二）（2021年松江区一模）89.Writeatleast60wordsaccordingtothefollowinginformation.虽然写给地球人的一封信中所提及到的问题确实存在,

但是我们人类正在努力改变现状。相信你也看到身边的变化或感受到自己的变化了。请选取其中的一个题目Achangearoundme(我身边的变化)或Achangeaboutme(我的变化),

写一篇不少于60词的短文,

标点符号不占格。注意∶1、短文中不得出现真实姓名和校名及其它相关信息,

否则不予评分。2、照抄阅读语篇不得分。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】高分范文AchangearoundmeEnvironmentalpollutionhasbeenaroundforalongtime.Peoplehavetakenactiontoimprovethesituation.Inmytown,weusedtoleaverubbisheverywhere.Itwasaheavyjobforstreetcleanerstoclearandseparateallkindsofrubbish.Activitieshavebeenorganizedtoarousepeople'sawarenessofrubbishseparationintheneighborhoods,atschoolsandeveninpublicplaces.Noweveryoneinmytownbeginstoputdifferentkindsofrubbishintodifferentbins.Asaresult,ourtownisgettingcleanerandmorebeautiful.Ibelievethischangewillhelpusliveahappierlife.【解析】【分析】【详解】1.题干解读：该题目属于记叙文写作，首先要陈述提及的问题：环境污染确实存在，然后指出人们正在努力改变现状的措施，最后写身边的变化以及自己的感受。2.写作指导：本文应该用第三人称阐述存在的问题以及具体的措施；时态采用一般过去时、现在完成时、一般现在时以及一般将来时的结合。注意将存在问题、改变现状的措施以及看到的身边变化按照顺序陈述清楚，保证条理清晰。（三）（2021年静安一模）69.Writeatleast60wordsonthegivensituation.（根据以下情境写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格）在美国新泽西这一走丢孩子的眼中，马是世界上最美好的事物。你眼中最美好的事物是什么呢？请以“Thegreatestthingintheworld”为题，结合自身经历谈谈你的看法。注意：短文中不得出现考生姓名、校名等个人信息，否则不予评分。照抄阅读语篇不得分。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】例文：ThegreatestthingintheworldWhatisthegreatestthingintheworld?Itisasmile.Asmilecanstartafriendshipandmakeusfeelwarmandjoyful.LastyearwhenI

enteredthenewschool,Ihadnofriendsandfelt

lonely.Thenaboywithabigsmilecameuptome.Ifeltwarmandcheerfulbecauseofhissmileandwesoonbecamegoodfriends.Howgreatthepowerofasmileis!【解析】【分析】【详解】1.

题干解读：该题属于话题作文，作文标题是“Thegreatestthingintheworld”。题目要求结合自身经历谈谈你眼中最美好的事物。注意文章字数不少于60词。2.

写作指导：由于作文是夹叙夹议的议论文，表达观点时用一般现在时，描写经历时用一般过去时，人称为第一人称。作文可以采用“三段式”结构，第一段表明观点，第二段叙述经历，第三段再次强调自己的观点。作文完成后注意检查语法、单词拼写和标点。（四）（2021年徐汇区二模）84.SupposeyouareinterestedindearMarsProject,andyousendane-mailtodearMarsproject@****.combasedononeofthegivensituations.Situation1:YouwanttobeoneofthecrewmemberstotheMars.Youwritetoapplyforaseatintherocket.Situation2:Youwanttoknowmoreabouttheproject,hopingtogetmoredetailedinformation.假设你对dearMars的项目感兴趣，你选择所给情景之一完成一封发送给dearMarsproject@****.com的电子邮件（不少于60词）(注意：邮件中不得出现考生的姓名、校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分。标点符号不占格）____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】DeardearMarsproject,WhenIwasyoung,Ialwayswonderedwhatwasinthesky.IwishedthatonedayIcouldflyintospacetofindthesecretsoftheuniverse.NowIammoreinterestedinspace.YangLiweibecamethefirstChineseastronauttogetintospaceandZhaiZhigangbecamethefirstChinesetowalkinspace.AlltheChinesepeopleareveryproudofthemandsoamI.WhenIreadthedearMarsProjectplan,Iwasveryexcited.Asacommonyouth,IwanttogetachancetoflytotheMars.IfIbecomeamemberofdearMarsproject,Iwilldomybesttosupportothercrewmember.Bestwishesforyou!（五）（2020年奉贤区二模）Writeatleast60wordsonthetopic"GivealiketoSchoolIntheAir"(请以“为空中课堂点赞”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文,标点符号不占格)。提示：空中课堂一个无墙的课堂；空中课堂一个别样的课堂；空中课堂一个难忘的课堂......经历了将近2个月空中课堂的你们，请从自身的感受给空中课堂点赞并给出理由。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________范文：GivealiketoSchoolIntheAirBecauseofthewideandquickspreadofNovelCoronavirus,allthestudentsfromShanghaihavetostayathometostudyfromSchoolIntheAirinsteadofgoingtoarealschool.Frommypointofview,Ilikeitverymuchforthefollowingreasons.Firstofall,SchoolIntheAirisaflexiblewayforourstudents.Thetraditionalwayofstudyistositintheclassroom,butnow,wecansitathometohaveaccesstotheknowledge.Itisconvenientandefficient,wecanlearnifwewant,thereisnolimitofthelocation.What’smore,basedontheserioussituation,SchoolIntheAiriscertainlythebestchoicetoensurethatallthestudentscancatchupwiththelearningschedule,especiallyforthegraduates.Thankstotheseexcellentteachers,learningonlineissohelpfulthatweneedn’tworrytoomuchaboutourclasses.Tosumup,SchoolIntheAirisanewwayforgainingknowledge,onlinecoursesareflexibleanduseful.Weallbenefitalot.

（六）（2020年长宁区二模）Writeatleast60wordsaboutthetopic“Onlinestudymakesme”(请以“网上学习使我”为题写一篇不少于60字的短文，标点符号不占格）抗疫期间(duringtheanti-epidemicperiod)，你不得不在家上网课(haveonlineclasses),这个特殊的经历使你在培养独立性、自信心……等方面也有所收获,请你结合具体事例谈谈自己某一方面的收获。（注意：短文中不得出现考生的姓名，校名及其他相关信息，否则不予评分）____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________范文：OnlinestudymakesmestudybetterWehavetostudyonlineduringtheanti-epidemicperiod.Onlinestudyisgoodforme.ItnotonlycansavetimethatIcandomoreotherthings,butalsocanbeconvenientformydailylifeandstudy.Moreover,afterclassIcanfindthevideoswhichIdidnotunderstandandthenstudyagain.Itcanhelpmestudybetter.Onlinestudyismoreinteresting.SoIammoreconfidentinmystudy.Althougheverythinghastwosides.Onlinestudyisharmfultooureyes.Ifwekeepdoingexerciseforourhealth,theharmisless.Ipreferonlinestudy.Itmakesmestudybetter.（七）（2020年金山区二模）at60about”写一篇不少于60疫情期间我们开启了一种全新的学习模式--远程课堂（remotelessons）。在此期间你是如何学习的？请结合你自身经历，谈谈对远程课堂的看法。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________范文：（八）暑假将近，很多人已经开始计划外出旅游了。假定你是李华，请根据以下图示，以“ToBeaGoodTraveler”为题，给校报专栏写一篇英语短文，倡导“绿色旅游”和“公益旅游”，呼吁同学们做有环保意识和社会责任感的旅行者。要求