高三英语一轮复习读后续写之动作描写3课件

读后续写之动作描写3主语+动作A+动作Band动作C(三个并列谓语,动作依次发生)(doingsth.)，主+谓主+谓,(doingsth.)主+谓,(doingsth.)and(doingsth.)(doingsth.)，主+谓，(doingsth.)Donebysth.，主语+谓语,doing动作链思路一：按照时间轴，把动作拆解成饱满的动作链(描述一系列动作)思路二：构造动作面(动作和伴随状态)在同一时间点，描写不同的角度，剪接在一起。从整体→局部，从肢体→面部→语言/心理描写，从多个角度描绘一个场景。拆解动作描写03Strategy3:ActionScenes动作面EmotionsDialoguesInnerthought4Actions动作面IDEAS=动作+心理，对话，情感，环境Surroundings123451Iwalkedthroughaforest.2Iadmiredthelandscape.34IfeltIwasbeingwatched.Isawaviolentbear.5Itookaphotoofthebear.Thebearranaway.①Iwalkedthroughaforest.②Iadmiredthelandscape.③IfeltIwasbeingwatched.④Isawaviolentbear.

⑤Itookaphotoofthebear.⑥Thebearranaway.12

Fillintheblankstocompletethestory:当我正聚精会神地拍摄这惊人的景观时,我突然感觉有什么在盯着我。我慢慢地转身,相机还端在眼前……然后我僵住了。那是一只熊,离我只有几米远。它也盯着我,水珠从厚厚的棕色皮毛上滴下来。时间凝固了,我和熊都等着看谁会先动。我的双腿开始颤抖。但我竟然还硬是按下了快门。一秒钟过后,那头熊转身跑回了森林。等我从震惊中缓过神来,我查看了相机。这个可怕至极却又如此神奇的经历已经被永久地定格在一张照片中。

WhileIwasconcentratingonphotographingthisamazingscene,IsuddenlyhadafeelingthatIwasbeingwatched.Slowly,andwiththecamerastillheldtomyeye,Iturned…and1.

______.Onlymetresawayfrommewasabear.Withwaterfallingoffitsthick,brownhair,thebearstaredbackatme.2.______________asthebearandIbothwaitedtoseewhowouldmovefirst.3.

.Somehow,Iforcedmyfingertopressthebutton.Asecondlater,thebearturnedandranbackintotheforest.WhenI4.______________________Ilookedatmycamera.Mymost5._____________________________wasnowcapturedforeverinasingleimage.

frozeTimestoodstillMylegsstartedshakingrecoveredfromtheshockfrighteningbutmagicalexperience1.Nezhajumpedoffthewall.3.Hearingmom'swords,Nezhasmiledandjumpedoffthewall.6.Hearingmom'swords,Nezhasmiledcheerfullywithhiseyeswideopenandjumpedoffthewallbrisklyinhighspirits.

5.Hearingmom'swords,Nezhasmiledcheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallbrisklyinhighspirits.2.Nezhaheard

mom'swords,smiledandjumpedoffthewall.4.Hearingmom'swords,Nezhasmiledcheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallbriskly.1.Nezhajumpedoffthewall.3.Hearing

mom'swords,Nezhasmiledandjumpedoffthewall.6.Hearing

mom'swords,Nezhasmiled

cheerfully

withhiseyeswideopenandjumpedoffthewallbriskly

inhighspirits.

5.Hearing

mom'swords,Nezhasmiled

cheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallbriskly

inhighspirits.2.Nezhaheardmom'swords,smiledandjumpedoffthewall.4.Hearing

mom'swords,Nezhasmiled

cheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallbriskly.(UseA,BandC)(Usenon-finiteverbs)(Addadverbs)(Addprepsitionalphrases)(Addwithstructure)

Nezhasmiled___________andjumpedoffthewall_________.

Nezhasmiledandjumpedoffthewall.

cheerfullyquickly

Tip1:

Addothermodifiers

（修饰语）1)Addadverbs（添加副词）Themanletoutascream_________,ranaway_________

andjumpedintothewell_________.这位男子紧张地尖叫，赶紧跑开，勇敢地跳入井中。nervouslyhurriedlybravely

Tip1:

Addothermodifiers

（修饰语）1)Addadverbs（添加副词）

Tip1:

Addothermodifiers

（修饰语）1)Addadverbs（添加副词）副词(短语)可放在整句话，

形容词或动词的前或后。1.幸运的是，除了脚踝扭伤外，情况并不严重。

,nothingwasseriousexceptasprainedankle.2.伯纳有礼貌而兴奋地请他们教他如何做爆米花。(2020年新高考I卷)

,Bernardaskedthemtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.

PolitelyandexcitedlyLuckily

Tip1:

Addothermodifiers

（修饰语）2)Addadjective（添加形容词）Atthatmoment,__________________________________,JeffandJennawinkedattheirfatherstandingbesidethem.1.在那一刻，Jeff和Jenna非常自豪和高兴，他们向站在他们身边的父亲眨了眨眼。（winkatsb.）extremelyproudand

overjoyed

Tip1:

Addothermodifiers

（修饰语）1)Addadjective（添加形容词）2.简天刚亮就起床了，又饿又渴。Janeroseatthebreakofday,.3.幸运的是，安然无恙地登上直升飞机。(2020浙江卷)Fortunately,wegotinthehelicopter,.4.他继续跑，汗流浃背，精疲力竭。(2022新高考卷1)Hekeptrunning,

.hungryandthirstysweatyandexhaustedsafeandsound

Tip2:Addprepositionalphrases（介词短语）

Nezhasmiled

cheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallquickly.

Nezhasmiled

cheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallquickly

inhighspirits

Tip2:Addprepositionalphrases（介词短语）excitement/delight/joysurprise/amazementwith/in+情绪名词grief/sorrow/lowspiritsanger/annoyancepanic/fear/horrorWhenNezhacame,thevillagersfledoutofthehouse__________________________.

inahurry/ingreatfear/inpanic

Tip2:Addprepositionalphrases（介词短语）toone’ssurprise等表情感的名词without…1.令我吃惊的是，他的脚踝扭伤得很厉害。

,hisanklewassprainedbadly.2.我不假思索地跪在他身边，支持他。

,Ikneltdownbesidehimandofferedmysupport.MuchtomysurpriseWithoutthinking

Tip3:AddWith复合结构Nezhasmiled

cheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallquickly

inhighspirits.Nezhasmiled

cheerfully

____________________andjumpedoffthewallquickly

inhighspirits.withhiseyeswideopen

Tip3:AddWith复合结构1.这位男子紧张地尖叫，拳头攥紧(clench)。Themanletoutascreamnervously,____________________________.withhisfistsclenched

Tip3:AddWith复合结构2.老师手里拿着书走进来。Theteachercamein

.withabookinhishand3.钱丢了，她不知如何是好。

,shewasatalosswhattodo.Withhermoneylost

Tip3:AddWith复合结构我一个人躺着，头靠在电话上。想你直到心痛。I’mlyingalonewithmyheadonthephone.Thinkingofyoutillithurts.WatchthevideoandfillintheblanksJack

Oneday,hecametoanewschool...alovelycreaturewithspines(刺)

/spaɪn/Jack

thewholeclass.Then,Jack

tohisseat,buthe

_____________lotsofbooks....Whenheplayedwithhisclassmates,thefootballwas

onhisspines.Jack

andfeltembarrassed.Noonelikedto

him.Jackwaslonelyandheart-broken.He

hiseyesandalmost

.WhenChristmascame,hisclassmatespreparedasurprisegiftforhim.“Let’skeepitasecret!”saidTom.TheylefttheclassroomandleftJackalone.Jackfeltsosad.

WordBankknockedoff,stuck,lowered,cried,playedwith,greeted,sidled（侧身）,frozeWatchthevideoandfillintheblanksJack

thewholeclass.Then,Jack

tohisseat,buthe

_____________lotsofbooks....Whenheplayedwithhisclassmates,thefootballwas

onhisspines.Jack

andfeltembarrassed.Noonelikedto

him.Jackwaslonelyandheart-broken.He

hiseyesandalmost

.WhenChristmascame,hisclassmatespreparedasurprisegiftforhim.“Let’skeepitasecret!”saidTom.TheylefttheclassroomandleftJackalone.Jackfeltsosad.

WordBankknockedoff,stuck,lowered,cried,playedwith,greeted,sidled（侧身）,frozeWatchthevideoandfillintheblanksgreetedsidledknockedoffstuckfrozeplaywithloweredcriedJackgreetedthewholeclass.Then,Jacksidledtohisseat,butheknockedofflotsofbooks.Whenheplayedwithhisclassmates,thefootballwasstuckonhisspines.Jackfrozeandfeltembarrassed.Noonelikedtoplaywithhim.Jackwaslonelyandheart-broken.Heloweredhiseyesandalmostcried.WhenChristmascame,hisclassmatespreparedasurprisegiftforhim.“Let’skeepitasecret!”saidTom.TheylefttheclassroomandleftJackalone.Jackfeltsosad.Practice:Group-workPolishtheactiondescriptionbyusingthegivenstrategies.Jackgreetedthewholeclass.Then,Jacksidledtohisseat,butheknockedofflotsofbooks.Whenheplayedwithhisclassmates,thefootballwasstuckonhisspines.Jackfrozeandfeltembarrassed.Noonelikedtoplaywithhim.Jackwaslonelyandheart-broken.Heloweredhiseyesandalmostcried.WhenChristmascame,hisclassmatespreparedasurprisegiftforhim.“Let’skeepitasecret!”saidTom.TheylefttheclassroomandleftJackalone.Jackfeltsosad.ActionchainUse“v-ing”asanadverbial.Use“with-structure”asanadverbial.Use“adjective”asanadverbial.UpgradevocabularyUseinanimatesubjectsentences.PresentyourideasJackgreetedthewholeclass.Jackglancedathisnewclassmates,wavedhishandandgreetedthemwithasmile.

Paragraph1ActionchainPresentyourideas

Jacksidled（侧身而行）tohisseat.Butheknockedofflotsofbooks.Paragraph1Jacksidledtohisseat,knockingoff

lotsofbooks.Use“v-ing”asanadverbial.PresentyourideasThefootballwasstuckonhisspines.Jackfrozeandfeltembarrassed.

Withthefootballstuckonhisspines,Jackfrozeandfeltembarrassed.

Paragraph2Use“with-structure”asanadverbial.Presentyourideas

Jackwaslonelyandheart-broken.Heloweredhiseyesandalmostcried.Paragraph2Lonelyandheart-broken,

heloweredhiseyesandalmostcried.Use“adjective”asanadverbial.Presentyourideas“Let’skeepitasecret!”saidTom.“Let’skeepitasecret!”whisperedTom.

Paragraph3UpgradevocabularyPresentyourideas

Jackwasunhappy.Paragraph3AstrongsenseofdepressionseizedJackwhenhewasleftaloneintheclassroom.Useinanimatesubjectsentences.Jackgreetedthewholeclass.Then,Jacksidledtohisseat,butheknockedofflotsofbooks....Whenheplayedwithhisclassmates,thefootballwasstuckonhisspines.Jackfrozeandfeltembarrassed.Gradually,noonelikedtoplaywithhim.Jackwaslonelyandheart-broken.Heloweredhiseyesandalmostcried.WhenChristmascame,hisclassmatespreparedasurprisegiftforhim.“Let’skeepitasecret!”saidTom....TheylefttheclassroomandleftJackalone.Jackfeltsosad.Jack

glancedat

hisnewclassmates,wavedhishandandgreeted

themwithasmile.Afterwards,Jacksidledtohisseat,knockingofflotsofbooks,however....

Withthefootballstuckonhisspines,Jackfrozeandfeltembarrassedwhenplayingwithhisclassmates.Gradually,noonelikedtoplaywithhim.Lonelyandheart-broken,heloweredhiseyesandalmostcried.WhenChristmascame,hisclassmatespreparedasurprisegiftforhim.“Let’skeepitasecret!”whisperedTom....Instantly,astrongsenseofdepressionseizedJackwhenhewasleftaloneintheclassroom.Summary(Mind-map)

Strategy1.actionchains：S+V1...,V2...,andV3....

S+V1...,doing..,anddoing....orDoing...,anddoing...,S+V3

Strategy2.①:generalwords→specificwords

②:abstractwords→concretewords

Strategy3.actionscenes：

Combinethedescriptionsofactions,facialexpressions,psychologytogethertocreateasceneofactions.Howtomakeyourwritingvividandattractive?41练习患有脑疾的小男孩David参加越野比赛，赛前他信心动摇想要放弃，“我“鼓励他积极面对困难，战胜自我，David接受了我的建议，尽管困难重重他依然勇敢地完成了比赛，赢得其了同学们的喝彩。(选自2022年高考全国1卷)Consolidation:completethefollowingparagraphfeaturingaseriesofactions请运用所学技巧续写故事第二段：Para2：IwatchedasDavidmovedtothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.He①__________________________________（转过头来看着我）andI②__________________________（我竖起大拇指向他示意，我为他感到骄傲）He③_________________________________________________（笑了笑，深吸一口气，准备比赛，眼里充满决心）.Withabang,everyrunner④______________(跑得像箭一样快).He⑤________________________________________________（尽管脚步异常，还是用尽全身力气跑）.Eventually，hefinishedtherunning.AsDavid,thelastone,madeittothefinishingline,⑥__________________________.(时间像静止了一样)Thunderousapplausebrokeout,withthenameDavidechoingagainandagain.43He①__________________________________（转过头来看着我）Heturnedhisheadandlookingatme.Heturnedhisheadaroundandlookedatme.Heturnedhisheadaroundtolookatme.45I②__________________________（我竖起大拇指向他示意，我为他感到骄傲）

andfeltproudofhim.Isignaledtohimwithathumbs-up,feelingproudofhim.Isignaledtohimwithathumbs-upHe③_____________________________________________（笑了笑，深吸一口气，准备比赛，眼里充满决心）.Hesmiled,tookadeepbreathandpreparedfortherace,andhiseyeswasfullofdetermination.Hesmiled,tookadeepbreathandgotreadyfortherace,withdeterminationinhiseyes.Withabang,everyrunner④____