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第13讲课文初探+读后续写（独段演练）一、听见课文TheDailyNewsTSUNAMIHITSASIA：OVER6，500DEADByRobertWoodhouseMonday,27December2004Themostpowerfulearthquakeinthepast40yearscausedatsunamithat(crash)intocoastlinesacrossAsiayesterday，killingmorethan6,500peopleinIndonesia,India,Thailand,Malaysia,andatleastfourothercountries.Fishermen,tourists,hotels,homes,andcarsweresweptawaybyhuge(wave)causedbythestrongearthquakethatreachedamagnitudeof9.0.Theunderseaquake(strike)around7：00a.m.,SundayoffthewestcoastofIndonesia'sSumatraIsland.Inthatareaalone,atleast1，870peoplewerekilled.InSriLanka,some1,600kilometreswestofthequakecentre,thenumberofdeathsstoodat2,498,andonemillionmorewere(affect)bythetsunami,government(office)said.Indianofficialssaidasmanyas1,900hadbeenkilledalongthesoutherncoast.Another254werefound(death)inThailandand54inthreeothercountries.InsouthernThailand,1，900peoplewerehurtandmanymorewere(miss)，localofficialssaid.“Iwashavingbreakfastwithmythreechildrenwhenwaterstartedfillingmyhome.Wehadtoleaveeverythingandrunto(safe)，”saidChandraTheeravit,alocalThaiwoman.Thousandsofpeoplearestillmissing,andthenumberofdeathsisexpectedtogroweven(high)overthenextfewdays.Foreignaidisbeing(organise)forthetsunami­hitcountries.However,dangerous(condition)anddamagedroadswillmakeitdifficultto(delivery)foodandsupplies．词汇及短语归纳总结①crash[kræʃ]vt.&vi.碰撞；撞击n.撞车；碰撞crashinto撞倒……；冲入②sweepaway消灭；彻底消除sweep[swiːp]vt.&vi.(swept,swept)打扫；清扫③wave[weɪv]n．海浪；波浪vi.&vt.挥手；招手hugewaves巨浪④strike[straɪk]vi.&vt.(struck,struck/stricken)侵袭；突击；击打n．罢工；罢课；袭击⑤offprep.离，距离⑥someadv.(＝about)大约；约莫⑦standat达到特定水平(或数量、高度等)⑧affectvt.影响⑨officialn．官员adj.官方的；正式的governmentofficials政府官员⑩missingadj.(＝lost)失踪的⑪localadj.当地的n.当地人⑫safetyn．安全处所⑬expectvt.预计，预料⑭evenadv.更(程度副词)常用的修饰比较级的程度副词、短语还有still,far,any,much,alot等。⑮delivervt.&vi.递送；传达vt.发表 二、题型初识1、从读后续写说起1.1读后续写题型简介读后续写即提供一段350词以内的语言材料（记叙文），要求考生依据该材料内容，所给段落开头语进行续写（150词左右），将其发展成一篇与给定材料有逻辑衔接、情节架构自然、而且结构完整的短文。1.2读后续写评分标准一共有五档：档次2125分能写到所有要点，创造了合理的内容，逻辑正确。续写完整，与原文融合度高使用了多样且恰当的词汇和语法结构，表达流畅。语言错误很少，且全不影响理解。自然有效地使用了段落间、语句间的衔接手段，全文结构清晰，前后呼应，意义连贯。1.3读后续写原则【情节原则】原文一致原则内容前后衔接，上下连贯曲折并解决原则续写的文章要么会含有文章中要么会含有在段首句设置的困难、误解、错误等，最终都要解决，有圆满结局。正能量原则比如:Mike发现自己的好朋友Jack考试作弊，纠结了很久要不要和老师说。A.最后没有和老师说。B.最后和老师说了，然后两人闹矛盾，甚至打架。C.最后和老师说了，Jack认识到自己的错误并且感谢Mike。失误，一定会____吵架，一定会____犯错，一定会____被迫，一定会____被杀，一定会____骗钱，一定会____【改卷原则】语言大于情节（不是说情节不重要的意思），描写大于叙述

2、典例示范【“二条四点”逻辑训练】(高考阅读改编读后续写)Asayoungboy,Isometimestraveledthecountryroadswithmydad.HewasaruralmailcarrierandonSaturdayshewouldaskmetogowithhim.Drivingthroughthecountrysidewasalwaysanadventure:Therewereanimalstosee,peopletovisit,andchocolatecookiesifyouknewwheretostop,andDaddid.OnDad'sfinaldayofwork,ittookhimwellinto"theeveningtopletehisroundsbecauseatleastonememberfromeachfamilywaswaitingattheirmailboxtoappreciatehimforhisfriendshipandhisyearsofservice."Twohundredandnineteenmailboxesonmyroute,"heusedtosay,"andastoryateveryone."Oneladyhadnomailbox,soDadtookthemailintohereverydaybecauseshewasnearlyblind.Heoncelecturedmethattobringeveryoneplainpleasurewashisgreatestpleasure,whichhasclungtomesofar.Mailboxesweresometimesusedforthingsotherthanmail.Once,ayounggirlwrotelettersbuthadnostamps,sosheleftafewbuttonsontheenvelopeinthemailbox;Dadpaidforthestamps.AsIdrovehome,Inoticedtwolamppoles,oneoneachsideofthestreet.Whenmydadwasaround,thosepolessupportedwoodenboxesaboutfourfeetofftheground.Oneboxwaspaintedgreen,andtheotherwasred,andeachhadalongnarrowholeatthetopwithwhitelettering:SantaClaus,NORTHPOLE.ForyearschildrenhaddroppedletterstoSantathroughthoseholes.Iwasamongthekidswhoseletterswerealwaysansweredintime.Imadeaturnatthecorneranddrovepastthepostofficeandacrosstherailroadtrackstoourhouse.MomandIweresittingatthekitchentablewhenIheardfootsteps.There,atthedoor,stoodFrankTownsend,Dad'spostmasterandgreatfriendformanyyears.Threadsofsilverranthroughhisbeardandthehair.Obviously,timeandsorrowforthepastdaysplougheddeepwrinklesonhisbrow.Sittingdownatthetable,hebegantotelloldstories.Paragraph1:AtonepointFranklookedatmewithtearsinhiseyesasifrecallingsomething.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thinkingofthisphilosophyofpleasure,Iresolvedtobethisyear’sSantaClaus.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【两条情节线简要构造】Para1:Frank告诉我父亲就是“圣诞老人→_________________________________________→________________________________→__________________________________________Para2:我拿着Frank给的钥匙前往信箱→__________________________________________→___________________________→升华主题（_________________________________）【高分构思参考】Para1:Frank告诉我父亲就是“圣诞老人”——我非常震惊，但联系儿时回忆想通了前因后果——记忆再次涌上心头——我想起了父亲的哲学Para2:我拿着Frank给的钥匙前往信箱——我给信箱里的信回信——我把信送给原来的地址——他们收到信的反应——我的反应——升华主题（e.g.在温情的传递中，过去的岁月永不消逝）【关键四句训练】AtonepointFranklookedatmewithtearsinhiseyesasifrecallingsomething.(关键句1)______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________FatherwasgenuinelytheSantaClaus!Recallingeveryletterofmineansweredintime,Iappreciatedmydad’sdedicationalltheseyears,myeyesmoistenedwithtears.Flakesstillwhirling,Iseeminglyspottedasparkleoflightcastingonme,meltingthesnowcarpetingmyheart.Frankwentonwiththestories,conveyinghissentimentalattachmenttothegoneera.ButIwasnotthatattentive.Memoriesofthepastcamefloodingagain.“Yourfatheralwaysconsideredothers’pleasureashisown”.(关键句2)______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thinkingofthisphilosophyofpleasure,Iresolvedtobethisyear’sSantaClaus.(关键句3)______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Afteraslightcrack,themailboxesgotridoftheirmetalshacklesandunveiledthemailsintheirstomachs.Dustyandcrumpled,themailslaytherequietly,waitingtobeanswered.Igentlytookthemout,rushedhomeandputpentopaperwiththesignatureofSantaClaus.WhenIbroughteverylettertoeveryoriginaladdress,theowners’eyebrowsliftedhighbutthensoothedasIexplainedpatientlytothem.Someofthemevenrememberedmyfatherandofferedmesomecookies.Spottingtheunderstandinglooksontheirfaces,Ifeltasurgeofwarmthmingledwithpleasurecirculatingthroughmybody.(关键句4)_____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【高分范例】关键句1：HardlyhadthewordsflowedfromhistremblinglipswhenIdroppedmyjaw.关键句2:Frank’sremarkhitmelikeaclapofthunder,remindingmeofthephilosophyofpleasurepasseddownfrommyfather.关键句3：Bravingtheneedlelikewind,I,graspingthekeyFrankhandedme,mademywaytothemailboxes.关键句4：【主题升华句】①Afterwavingthemfarewell,Islackenedmystepsinthesnowandwanderedaroundthefamiliarroad,reminiscingforthepastgoldendaysthatwouldneverfadeaway.②Itdawnedonmethatdespitethegoneeraofmail,westillhadtheunderlyingspiritofsharinghappinesspasseddown.③Flakeswerestillswirlingintheskybutthetenderflameinmyhearthadmeltedthesnowsurroundingus.3、独段演练（2023·浙江台州·统考一模）【写作概要】作者让女儿帮自己种东西，天真的女儿以为什么东西都可以种，所以她种了铅笔、蜡笔、茶匙等等，作者为了维护女儿的天真，一直悄悄地让女儿种的东西“长”出来。直到女儿把金鱼埋到土里……【续写线索】让女儿帮忙种东西——女儿把金鱼中了下去——母亲背对栅栏思索……续写首句：Isatdownwithmybacktothefenceandthoughtforalongtime.1.倚着篱笆坐着，我陷入沉思。Sittingagainstthefence,Ipondereddeeply.2.当我寻找合适的词语时，天空渐渐变暗了。TheskydarkenedasIsearchedfortherightwords.3.最后，莱妮Laynie的声音响起：“莫莉长大了吗？”Finally,Laynie'svoicepipedup"IsMollybigyet?".4.我深吸了一口气，“宝贝，有些事情无论我们等待多久都无法长大。”她的嘴唇颤抖。Itookadeepbreath,"Babe,somethingscan'tgrownomatterhowlongwewait."Herlipquivered.5.“但是你看，这些花都是因为你的照顾才开花的。你想和我一起种下更多色彩缤纷的种子吗？”她点了点头。"Butlook,theseflowersarebloomingthankstoyourcare.Wouldyouliketoplantmorecolorfulseedswithme?"Shenodded.6.第二天，我们用鲜丽的花朵填满了花园。Thenextdaywefilledthegardenwithbrightblooms.7.尽管莫莉仍然很小，但当她把种子撒进泥土时，莱妮Laynie的笑容回来了。ThoughMollyremainedsmall,Laynie'ssmilereturnedasshesprinkledseedsintotheearth.8.我发誓（v.vow）永远培养她的好奇心，而不是扼杀它。她的想象力和我们的花园会一起不断成长。Ivowedalwaystonurturehercuriousspirit,notshutitdown.Herimaginationandourgardenwouldkeepgrowingtogether.【一段成文】Isatdownwithmybacktothefenceandthoughtforalongtime.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________三、课后作业1、独段演练Passage1【写作概要】本文以旅行为线索，讲述了作者在PuertoPlata租了别墅，享受海边的宁静，别墅的保安在作者生病时对她的照顾让作者了解到了旅行的意义。【写作思路】在我们到达后，我发现自己患了重感冒，感觉很难受。幸好在别墅保安Pedro的无微不至的照顾下，作者恢复了身体。作者在离开之前，Pedro和当地人为准备了地道的当地盛宴，这让作者感到很温暖，尤其是生病时Pedro对她的照顾。她将永远无法忘记Pedro。【续写线索】生病→Pedro照顾她→离开之前参加地道的当地盛宴→作者感受到了当地人的热情，尤其是Pedro对她的照顾→永远无法忘记Pedro。续写首句：AfterIarrived,Isuddenlyfoundmyselfcatchingaheavycoldandfeltterrible.【单句写作】1.当我因为发烧和流感症状变得更糟时，我的朋友惊慌失措。WhenIwasgettingalotworseduetoextremefeverandflusymptoms,myfriendpanicked.2.然后佩德罗出现了。他带我去了诊所，站在我身边，再也没有离开过。ThenPedroappeared.Hetookmetotheclinicandstoodbymysideandneverleft.3.在我们离开的前一天，由于我得到的医疗照顾，我终于感觉好多了。Thedaybeforeourdeparture,IwasfinallyfeelingalotbetterduetothemedicalcareIwasgiven.5.自从我离开后，佩德罗和别墅里的其他工作人员为我们准备了一顿真正盛宴。SinceIwasleaving,Pedroandtheotherstaffmemberatthevillapreparedusatrulyfeast.6.然后，我们去了海滩，他们给我举办了告别派对，我们整晚跳舞聊。Then,wewenttothebeachwheretheythrewmeafarewellpartyandwedancedandtalkedallnightlong.7.我被这个了不起的人的善良和慷慨惊呆了。Iwasblownawaybythekindnessandgenerosityofthisamazingman.8.这次经历向我展示了真正的善良和同情的真正意义，它完全改变了生活。Thisexperienceshowedmetherealmeaningofgenuinekindnessandpassion,anditwastotallylifechanging.9.我只要我活着，就永远不会忘记佩德罗。IwillneverforgetPedroaslongasIlive.【一段成文】：AfterIarrived,Isuddenlyfoundmyselfcatchingaheavycoldandfeltterrible.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Passage2【写作概要】本文以事情发展的顺序展开，讲述了外婆认为蜜蜂代替了外公替她为花园施肥的故事。【写作思路】作者的外公外婆在作者出生前就有一个花园，花园里的花和蔬菜长得很好，随着外公外婆变老，他们很难在照顾花园，于是将花园缩小。一年夏天，外公去世了，外婆自己一个人更难照顾花园，于是将花园缩成很小的一个。初夏的时候，花园里来了很多蜜蜂，外婆后来得知这些蜜蜂能给庄稼授粉，帮助作物成长，那时，外婆意识到原来这些蜜蜂一整夏天都在帮助她的花园。从那时起，外婆总认为那是去世的外公在帮助外婆种植花园。【续写线索】不知道如何做——决定不管蜜蜂——外婆哥哥来看她——外婆告诉哥哥蜜蜂的事——外婆哥哥告诉外婆蜜蜂能授粉——外婆意识到蜜蜂在帮助自己——外婆认为蜜蜂是外公派来帮助自己的续写首句：Grandmawonderedwhatintheworldshecoulddo.【单句写作】1.她应该雇人来驱赶蜜蜂吗？Shouldshehiresomeonetogetridofbees?2.她决定等着再考虑一下。Shedecidedtowaitandthinkitover.3.奶奶总能看到几只蜜蜂在树上高高的洞口嗡嗡地飞来飞去。Grandmacouldalwaysseeafewbeesbuzzinginandoutaroundtheopeninghighinthetree.4.没过多久，她决定蜜蜂不会打扰任何人，于是她就开始了她的生意，没有任何其他的想法。Beforelong,shedecidedthebeeswon’tbotheranyone,soshewentaboutherbusinessanddidn’tgivethemanyotherthought.5.有一天，奶奶的哥哥弗兰克说：“在亚利桑那州，农民们经常雇佣养蜂人在他们的田地附近建立蜂箱。蜜蜂授粉并帮助作物生长。”Oneday,Grandma’sbrotherFranksaid,“InArizona,thefarmersoftenhiredbeekeeperstosetupbeehivesneartheirfields.Thebeespollinatedthecropsandhelpedthemtogrow.”6.从那时起，奶奶一直认为，由于那年夏天爷爷不能在那里帮助她，他就派蜜蜂来代替他的位置，让奶奶的小花园不断生长。Fromthattimeon,GrandmaalwaysbelievedthatsinceGrandpacouldn’tbetheretohelpherthatsummer,hehadsentthebeestotakehisplaceandmakeGrandma’slittlegardengrowandgrow.【一段成文】：Grandmawonderedwhatintheworldshecoulddo.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2、常规练习阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Inthespringsun,myauntandIheadedforherflowershop.NormallyIwouldbedelightedtohelpinhershop,butnotrecentlybecauseofRosa.Rosawasmysister,justonemonthold,whowassettledinmyoldbedroom.Fortenyears,thesmallroomwasfullofmytoysandbooks.Butnowitwastransformedintoherbabyroom,decoratedlikeagardenwithpinksandyellows.Myspace,myoldlife,wasgone.“Hereweare!”Wearrivedattheshop,awaveofcolourandsweetsmellwashingoverme.MyauntsaidIcouldpicksomeflowersforMumandDad.Iusedtolovethis,buttodayIwassooverewithtirednessandenvy.WhybothertobringthemflowerswhentheywereenjoyingRosaathomewithoutme?SilentlyIhelpedmyauntarrangeflowers.“Yourmumtoldmetherehasn’tbeenmuchshuteyerecentlyforanyofyou.”“Notmuch,sinceRosathealarmclockwasinstalled(安装),”Iplainedwithahugeyawn(哈欠).“Irememberhavingtocreep(蹑手蹑脚地走)aroundlikeawornoutmousewhenyourmumwasababy.Ispentthefirstmonthshatinghersomuch.”“ButyouandMumseemsoclose,”Isaid,guiltilyhidingawaymyenvyofRosa.“Nowweare.Butittookmeyearstogrowintotheroleofbigsister.Fewflowersblossom(绽放)overnight,youknow.”Shepulledmeinforasidehug,glancingupattheclock,andsuggestedItakeawalkoutside.Behindhershopwasafielddottedwithspringflowers.Steppingintothefield,Ibegantopicklittleflowers.Itwaslikegatheringmychildhoodmemories.IrememberedhowI’dsitwithDad,makingflowerchains,crowning(授予)eachotherwiththesilliesttitles:QueenofJunkFoodandKingofMess.Mysmilegrewwider.TheshiningyellowflowersremindedmeofthecolorinRosa’sbabyroom.Wassheawake?Iwondered.注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Para.1:SuddenlyIsawtwofamiliarfigureswalkingtowardsme.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:Rosawaswideawakeinherbabybasketbe