读后续写练习写作讲义-2025届高三英语一轮复习写作专项

读后续做习写作讲义

Thehusbandwhovanished

Step1感知•阅读导航

话题导入

Jim与Anne于1960年结婚，住在纽约郊区拉奇蒙特，他们虽然没有孩子但

生活甜蜜。在1971年的某一个月，Jim连续遇到了几个小意外，脑部受伤，后

突然失忆且失踪。之后，Anne一边外出工作维持生计，一边坚定地等待他回来。

Jim失忆后阴差阳错到了费城市区，换了名字，开始了没有过去的生活。1985

年，Jim又连续遇到了几个小意外，竟然恢复了记忆。恢复记忆后的Jim会回到

Anne身边吗？Anne还在坚定地等待他吗？

本文改编自一篇短篇小说，全文共519词，建议用时8分钟。

阅读目标

1.把握故事的梗概和主要情节。

2.体会故事主人公之间恒久的爱及爱的力量。

3.模仿故事语言风格，合理构思情节，展开读后续写，培养想象能力。

读前预热

I.Videotime

Haveyoueverheardthesongweplayedjustnow?Canyouuseonewordto

summarizetheapparentthemeandthehiddenthemeofthesong?

II.Discussion

Haveyoueverwaitedforsomeone?Howlongdidyouwaitandhowdidyou

feel?Andwhatifyouwait14yearsforsomeone?

1TheMcDonnell'slivedinasmallbrickhouseinLarchmont,asuburbofNew

YorkCity.Jimwastheforemanofmailcarriersatthepostoffice.Marriedin1960,

heandAnnewerechildless.

2Ontheeveningoftheeleventhanniversaryoftheirmarriage,carryingout

thegarbage,JimMcDonnellslippedonicysteps,andstruckhishead.Afewdays

later,drivingtowork,helostcontrolofthecar,hitatelephonepole,and

bangedhisforeheadagainstthewindshield.Thefollowingdayhefelloffthestairs

andbangedhishead.Foundunconscious,hewashospitalizedforthreedayswitha

cerebralconcussion（脑震荡）.Onedayinthesamemonth,Jimborroweda

friendsstationwagonanddrovetoKennedyAirporttopickupAnne'sbrotherand

family,unawarethatthewalletcontaininghisidentificationhadslippedoutofhis

pocketontothefloorofthecar.Afterreturningthecar,hewasneverseenagain.

3Forweeks,Annewalkedthehousewringingherhandsandpraying.Atnight,

watchingtelevision,shewouldstareatthearmchairwhereJimhaddozedoff

evenings.Sheoftendreamedhehadcomehome,onlytowakeupandfindhe

wasn/tthere.

4AfterJimsdisappearance,toearnaliving,Annetriedvariouskindsofjobs;

in1977,shetookhercurrentjobasanursingattendant.Annefellintothehabitof

workingatthehospitalonholidaysbecauseitwaseasierifshekeptbusy.Through

itall,shehadfaiththatJimwouldreturn.Shekepthisclothesintheclosetcovered

toprotectthemfromdust.Hisrazorandcanofshavingcreamremainedinthe

bathroomcabinet.

5SowhatreallyhappenedtoAnne/shusband?Duringhiswalkhome,Jim

hadindeedblackedout,losingallabilitytorememberwhohewasandwherehe

lived.Whathappenedthenisunclear.Thenextthingheknewwasthathewasin

downtownPhiladelphia.SeeingsignsadvertisingtheservicesofaJamesPeters,

arealestatebroker,JimadoptedJamesPetersashisownname.Hehadno

past;hisonlyrealitywasthepresent.JamesPetersgotaSocialSecuritycard,

whichcouldbeobtainedatthattimewithoutshowingabirthcertificate,andtook

ajobinahealthclub.HealsogotanightshiftjobattheP&Pluncheonette,where

hebecamewellknownforhisomelets（煎蛋卷），aswellashiskindnessandgood

humor.

6BernadineGolashovsky,awaitressatP&P,recalls,/zMyfatherhaddied

andJimapparentlyhadnofamily,soafterhestartedatP&Pweadoptedeach

other.Hebecamemyfatherfigure,andwe—myhusband,Pete,ourfour

childrenandI—werehisfamily.Thechildrenlovedhim.”

7InDecember,1985,awomanappearedinhisdreamagainandagain.On

December22,1985,Jimhadfallenandbangedhishead.Thenextdayhehad

fallenagain,strikinghishead.OnDecember24,heawokefeelingconfused,yet

excited.Afteralmost15years,heknewwhohewas!

Step2理解.文本解读

I.Storymountain

[Climax：3][Resolution：][Buildup：2][Beginning：1]

A.JimbangedhisheadseveraltimesanddisappearedandthenAnnestarted

workingwiththefaiththathewouldcomeback.

B.Jimsuddenlyrecoveredhismemory.

C.JimandAnnemarriedandlivedinLarchmontinNewYorkCity.

II.Jimscharacter

[CluesinthetextPossiblecharacteristics...carryingoutthegarbage

1....hebecamewellknownforhisomelets,aswellashiskindnessand

goodhumour.2....we—myhusband,Pete,ourfourchildrenand

I—werehisfamily.Thechildrenlovedhim.3.]

III.Deepreading

1.DoyouthinkJimlovesAnnedeeply?Useevidencefromthestoryto

supportyouropinion.

2.DoyouthinkAnnelovesJimdeeply?Useevidencefromthestoryto

supportyouropinion.

3.WhydidnobodyknowJimspast?

Step3运用•读写整合

I.Predicttheplots

1.WhatwouldJimthinkanddoafterherecoveredhismemory?

2.DoyouthinkAnneisstillwaitingforJim?

3.WhatwouldhappenifJimandAnnemeeteachotheragain?

II.Explorethetheme

Whatcouldbethepossiblethemeofthestory?

III.Continuationwriting

请根据已给出的小说情节、语言特点及所给段落开头语，续写两段，使之构

成一篇完整的小说。词数应为150左右。

Paragraph1：

Suddenly,hebecamescared.

Paragraph2：

AnnehadjustreturnedhomefromChristmasMass,whereshelitcandlesand

prayedforJim.

Step4提升•素养建构

Writingtechniques

1.叙述(narrativewriting)VS描写(descriptivewriting)

叙述和描写是记叙文和故事中的两种常用写作方式。叙述是指将事情的经过

记录下来，一般采用时间顺序或事情发展顺序。在时空转换较多，或为加快叙

事节奏时，宜使用叙述。描写是把人物或景物的状态具体形象地描绘出来，往

往借助感官，如听觉、视觉、嗅觉等。在需要突出某个特定场景让主人公留下

深刻印象时，宜使用描写。叙述就如全景图，而描写就如近景图，故事写作中

往往会将两者结合使用。在本故事中，故事原文时间跨度较大，多采用叙述;在

读后续写环节展现Jim与Anne相见时的情景时，宜使用描写，让故事更具画面

感和冲击力。

原文最后一段：InDecember,1985,awomanappearedinhisdreamagain

andagain.OnDecember22,1985,Jimhadfallenandbangedhishead.Thenext

dayhehadfallenagain,strikinghishead.OnDecember24,heawokefeeling

confused,yetexcited.

此处需快速交代Jim在一个月内的几次经历，故采用叙述。

读后续写部分的第二段，可使用描写展现_,仙与Anne相见时的动人场景：

Anneopenedthedoor—therestoodamanwithawhitebeard.Immediatelyshe

recognizedhim.Wordsfailedher.HHello,Anne,"Jimsaid.Tohim,Annelooked

alittleolderbutprettier.Annestrokedhisface,tearsstreamingdownherface.

Thentheythrewthemselvesintoeachothersarms.Christmasbellwasringing,as

ifbringingthebestwishestothishappycouple.

本段融合了多种描写方式，让读者感受到两人久别重逢后的激动和喜悦，具

有较强的感染力。

2.展示而非讲述(toshowratherthantotell)

以下方式能够有效地直接或间接刻画人物，突出某个场景。

a.感官描写

借助感官描写，如听觉、视觉、嗅觉、味觉、触觉等，能创造出身临其境之

感。

b.多维描写

刻画人物、烘托场景时可采用动作描写、语言描写、神态描写、外貌描写、

心理描写等多维描写方式展现立体的人物形象或场景。

如读后续写部分第二段：Anneopenedthedoor—therestoodamanwitha

whitebeard.Immediatelysherecognizedhim.Wordsfailedher."Hello,Anne,"

Jimsaid.Tohim,Annelookedalittleolderbutprettier.Annestrokedhisface,

tearsstreamingdownherface.Thentheythrewthemselvesintoeachothersarms.

Christmasbellwasringing,asifbringingthebestwishestothishappycouple.

本段结合了动作描写、语言描写、外貌描写、心理描写、神态描写、环境描

写，让读者感受到夫妻之间的深情和重逢后的喜悦。

c.侧面描写

刻画人物时可使用一些细节或例子展现人物性格特点。本文通过侧面描写很

好地体现了夫妻之间忠贞的爱。

原文中并没有直接说明Anne对Jim的爱，但我们可以从以下两个段落中深

刻地感受到：

Forweeks,Annewalkedthehousewringingherhandsandpraying.Atnight,

watchingtelevision,shewouldstareatthearmchairwhereJimhaddozedoff

evenings.Sheoftendreamedhehadcomehome,onlytowakeupandfindhe

wasn/tthere.

...Throughitall,shehadfaiththatJimwouldreturn.Shekepthisclothesinthe

closetcoveredtoprotectthemfromdust.Hisrazorandcanofshavingcream

remainedinthebathroomcabinet.

这两段通过描写Jim刚失踪不久后Anne失魂落魄的样子，以及Anne坚信Jim

会回来，在家里保留着Jim的衣物，很好地表现了Anne对Jim的爱。

Jim对Anne的爱可从原文最后一段第一句"InDecember,1985,awoman

appearedinhisdreamagainandagain."看出,失忆多年，妻子Anne突然出现在

Jim梦里，这足以体现Anne在他心中的地位。

答案

Step2理解.文本解读

1.1〜3CAB

II.1.considerateandhelpful2.kindandhumorous3.easygoingand

respectable

III.

1.Yes,JimlovesAnne.Firstly,theyspentthe11thanniversarytogether.

Secondly,AnnestartedworkingafterJimdisappearedtoearnaliving,which

indicatesAnnedependedonJimbeforehedisappeared.Thirdly,Jimdreamedof

Anne14yearsafterhelosthismemory.

2.Yes.Inthebeginning,itwashardforAnnetoacceptthefactthatJim

disappeared.Later,shefellintothehabitofworkingatthehospitalonholidays

becauseitwaseasierifshekeptbusy.Throughitall,shehadfaiththatJimwould

return.Shekepthisclothesintheclosetcoveredtoprotectthemfromdust.His

razorandcanofshavingcreamremainedinthebathroomcabinet.

3.BecausehelostallhisidentificationandadoptedJamesPetersashisname.

What/smore,helosthismemory.

Step3运用•读写整合

I.

1.HewouldbenervousandwanttoknowifAnnewasstillwaitingforhim.Also,

hewouldhurryhometoseeAnne.

2.Yes,AnnelovesJimdeeply.ShehadthefaiththatJimwouldcomeback.

3.Theywouldhugeachotherandcrytearsofjoy.

II.

ThestoryshowshowJimlosesandrecovershismemory.Throughoutthestory,

wecanalsofindsomecluesthatindicatedeeplovebetweenthecouple.Sothe

logicalendingshouldbereuni