【课件】读后续写微技巧(四条主线深挖续写基点)

四条主线深挖续写基点【真题再现】

(2023·新高考Ⅰ卷)

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplaywhereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(银匠)inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.注意:1.续写词数应为150个左右;2.请按如下格式在相应位置作答。

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【解题策略】第一步浏览前文,弄清关键要素并归纳主旨要素描述主旨whenWhenIwasinmiddleschool我作为一个来自巴西、英语为第二语言的孩子,英语写作特别困难,但在老师的鼓励下,通过自己的努力获得了写作的乐趣whereinmiddleschoolwhoI;myteacherwhatenterawritingcontestwhymysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest第二步梳理四条线索,预测续写内容文段线索文脉走向前文时间线WhenIwasinmiddleschool空间线inmiddleschool情感线puzzled→encouraged→tired;doubts→theenjoymentofwriting情节线Myteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.→Atfirst,Irefused.→Iwasencouragedbymyteacher.→Ipreparedthewriting.→Igottiredandhaddoubts.→Iinsistedonwriting.→Ihandedintheessay.续写预测1.Iwonthefirstplace.Iwasthankfulformyteacher’sencouragement.2.Ishowedmythankstomyteacheragain.Andheinspiredmetocontinuewriting.第三步借助开头,确定续写段落梗概。段落第一段开头Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.梗概Iwonthefirstplace.Myclassmatescongratulatedmeonmysuccess.Myteacherhandedmeanawardcup.Ithankedhimforhisencouragement.段落第二段开头Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.梗概Ithankedmyteacheragain.HeinspiredmetocontinuewritinginEnglish.Ipromisedtoliveuptohisexpectation.第四步丰富语言,前呼后应考场高分续写评卷老师点评

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.①Iwonthefirstplace.Whenmyteacherannouncedthegoodnewswithdelightintheclassroom,IwassosurprisedthatIfeltithardtobelieve.②Someofmyclassmatesstaredatmeindisbeliefwhile③othersclappedandcongratulatedmeonmysuccess.Thenmyteacherhandedmeanawardcup.Holdingthecup,④IbenttomyteacherandthankedhimforhisencouragementwhichallowedmetoimprovemyEnglishandenjoywriting.⑤Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Withexcitedtearsinmyeyes,⑥Ithankedhimagain,addingthatitwashewholetmegetatasteforwriting.⑦Pattingmeontheshoulder,heinspiredmetocontinuewritinginEnglishandbelievedthatIwouldmakegreatachievementsinwriting.Wetalkedalotaboutwriting.IpromisedthatIwouldliveuptohisexpectationandneverstopwritinginEnglishthough⑧itwasmysecondlanguage.①使用了高级句型——倒装句。②使用了复合句,句中含有so...that...。③while是并列连词,连接并列句。④使用了动词-ing短语。⑤使用动词不定式作宾语补足语。⑥使用了独立主格结构。⑦使用了复杂句式,其中包括动词-ing短语作状语;强调句型。⑧使用了though引导的让步状语从句。【技巧分析】一、5W和1H把握记叙文基本要素。读后续写中所提供的前文通常是一篇记叙文的一部分,阅读时为了获取对续写有用的关键信息,要特别关注5W和1H,其具体情况见下表。要素解读5Wwhen指故事发生的时间,比如在母亲节等where指故事发生的地点,比如在家里的厨房等who指故事中的主人公、相关的人物,比如双胞胎、父亲、母亲等what从文章中提取出所发生的事件why指事件发生的起因。比如为母亲做早餐等1Hhow指事件发生的过程、方式等二、厘清框架探索故事模式记叙文通常采用顺叙、倒叙和插叙等手段组织故事情节的发展,无论采用哪种形式都会体现其发展的框架,这个框架有助于预测续写的走向,因此十分重要。其具体模式如下表:模式解读开端通常交代时间、地点和人物等信息发展通常叙述事件的起因和细节及经过高潮通常叙述事件中的矛盾和冲突。比如2021年全国新高考Ⅰ卷前文中,粥沸外流、面包烤糊等结局事件的最终结果三、探寻“四条主线”,深挖关键信息记叙文通常遵循时间、空间、情感和情节变化来组织语言和行文,所以这些前文信息和要求续写的部分存在着密切的联系,因此在解题时必须关注前文中的这些关键线索。其详情如下表:主线解读时间线指故事中以时间先后顺序叙述情节的发展。比如2021年全国新高考Ⅰ卷前文中的时间线是:母亲节前夕→母