2021浙江卷读后续写分析讲义-2024届高三英语二轮复习

2021浙江卷读后续写分析父亲小时候把所挣的钱都用来补贴家用。父亲George只有八年级文凭。Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighth-gradeeducation.Aquietman,hedidn'tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Fromage14,heworked.Andhisdad,Albert,父亲小时候把所挣的钱都用来补贴家用。父亲George只有八年级文凭。“我”认为“我”会在任何方面超过父亲。Ididn'treallyunderstandhisworldeither：Hewasalivestocktrucker,andIthoughtthatIwouldsurpass（超过）anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalkedacrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.“我”认为“我”会在任何方面超过父亲。Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets,hittingabaseball,orthrowingafootball,preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.Inpoorweather,Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone（长号）.虽然工作很辛苦，“我”也不确定究竟会得到多少报酬，但“我”依旧期待着薪水发放的时候。上八年级之前的暑假“我”被雇佣到附近农场去做兼职挣钱。ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask,thetractorfiredupandwewereoff,ridingdownthefieldandlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.Afterashortway,thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.Thishappenedoverandover,butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslikecockleburs,lamb's-quarters,foxtails,andthekingofweeds,theprettypurplethistle.Itwastiringwork,butIlookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.虽然工作很辛苦，“我”也不确定究竟会得到多少报酬，但“我”依旧期待着薪水发放的时候。上八年级之前的暑假“我”被雇佣到附近农场去做兼职挣钱。父亲认为“我”应该也像他当年一样把挣得的钱用来补贴家用。Athome,mydadsaid,"Ajob'sabigsteptogrowingup.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold."Mydad'swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmightnotbeminetodowithasIwished.父亲认为“我”应该也像他当年一样把挣得的钱用来补贴家用。“我”认为把挣得的钱用来补贴家用这件事是不公平的。Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks,andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework,butIwasn'tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.“我”认为把挣得的钱用来补贴家用这件事是不公平的。注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Thepaydayarrivedatlast.___________________________________________________Paragraph2:Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.______________________________________________文本勾画Mydad,George,onlyhadaneighth-gradeeducation.tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.IthoughtthatIwouldsurpass（超过）anythinghehadaccomplishedThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Ilookedforwardtothepay,eventhoughIwasn'tsurehowmuchitwouldamountto.I'mgladyouwillbecontributingtothehousehold.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.文章大意文章讲述了“我”在八年级前暑假在农场兼职赚钱的故事。父亲希望“我”能把赚的钱贡献给家里，而“我”却觉得这不公平。直到薪水发放日的时候，“我”才体会到父母的担忧。文本分析梳理原文（记叙文五要素）读五要素WhoMydadandIWhenThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeWhereAneighboringfarmerHow(emotion)expected→disappointed→unfair→excited→understandWhat(mainidea)ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboringfarmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Mydadwantedmetocontributetothehousehold.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.情节+情感分析Para1.→情节：介绍爸爸情况，即爸爸上学只到八年级，十四岁便辍学工作补贴家用了。→情感：对爸爸的敬畏之情以及尊重。Para2.→情节：爸爸只是一位牲畜运输司机，“我”自认为会在任何方面都会超过爸爸。→情感：非常有自信，对任何事情都充满了期待。Para3.→情节：分享了在七十年代“我”的暑假日常生活。→情感：开心快乐的暑假时光。Para4.→情节：邻居雇佣“我”去除草，虽然工作很苦，但为了赚钱“我”依然坚持着。→情感：累并快乐着，对薪水充满了期待。Para5.→情节：爸爸暗示“我”应该像他当年一样把赚的钱贡献给家庭。→情感：感到失望与不愿。Para6.→情节：“我”意识到把自己兼职除草赚的钱贡献出来是不公平的一件事。→情感：愤怒、不解，意识到不公平。续写段1.终于等到了薪水发放日。→情节：①描写“我”领到薪水后的兴奋与激动，计划着如何使用这笔钱，但是却不愿意把辛辛苦苦挣的钱用来补贴家用。②描写“我”是如何转变自己的想法的：看见了满脸皱纹的父母的对家庭的辛劳付出，突然就理解了父亲曾经对“我”说的“工作是迈向成长的一大步”。→情感：从激动兴奋，再到不满不愿，最后是理解父母，转变想法。续写段2.“我”立刻知道了“我”的父母担忧的是什么。→情节：①描写“我”理解了父母担心自己不懂得为家庭做出贡献，然后又想到了父亲为这个家的辛劳付出，“我”便自豪地把钱交给了父亲。→情感：从发现父母不易，再到理解奉献，最后自豪。句子衔接第一段Thepaydayarrivedatlast.Althoughthejobwasverytiring,IwasveryhappyinmyheartforIgotsomethingfrommywork.Thetoiloflaborwasforgottenforthetimebeing.IthoughtIshouldhavemyownmoneyandplannedhowtospendit.“Howmuchmoneyhaveyouearned?”Dadasked.Iwassurprised,reluctanttotellhimmyincome.Thenextmorning,mydad’slivestocktruckstartedrunning.Isawmyfather’shard-workingfigureandthoughtofhiswords“Ajob’sabigsteptogrowingup”.第二段Iunderstoodimmediatelywhatmyparentswereworriedabout.TheywereworriedthatIwastooselfishtogive.Irealizedthatmylaborwasveryhard,butmygrowthandourwholefamilyhadbeendependingonthehardworkofmyparents!Dadnevercomplainedaboutunfairness!Heevenseemedtothinkthatwasfair.Ithought,“I’veonlyworkedfortwoweeks,buthowmanyyearsmyfatherhasworked!”Intheevening,Dadcam