2024年高考英语复习资料：读后续写之如何续写故事开头

专题32读后续写之如何续写故事开头

《考点•题型•技巧》

甑考点导就

L开端布局方法1：副词突显动作等

2.开端布局方法2：形容词短语表明心态

3.开端布局方法3：非谓语动词的烘托

4.开端布局方法4：使用从句

5.开端布局方法5：使用介词短语

6.开端布局方法6：对话或独白

7.开端布局方法7：介绍人物身份

8.开端布局方法8：情绪烘托

9.开端布局方法9：背景烘托

10.开端布局方法10：人物动作特写

11.开端布局方法11：声音效果传情

12.开端布局方法12：设问激发思考

【答题技巧】

一个好的故事开头就好比是一堂成功的课的导入，能够迅速抓住学生和老师们的

兴趣，并且愿意听下去，跟着授课老师的思路走。一个好的故事开头就好比是一个带

着香味十足的诱饵，诱使读者上钩并且饶有趣味地看完。而一个拙劣的故事开头，定

会让读者大倒胃口，恢恢欲睡。可见，写好一个好故事的好开头是多么的重要。那么

在时间紧迫的考场上的英语读后续写的过程中，如何写出靓丽的开头呢？我们可以从

语法手段和写作涉及的内容来具体涉及故事的开端。

【题型分析】

阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

Iamadoctor,soIlovemyjob.Ialwayshave,butIfeelparticularlyproudtodoitatthe

moment.WithCOVID-19sweepingthroughWuhan,peopleareavoidinghospitalsaspossible

theycan.However,pregnantwomenstillneedtocomeintothehospital.Babiesstillneedtobe

bom.

Rightnow,itisevenscarierforthesewomen,astheyhavetocomeinontheirown,often

feelingfrightened.Theirfamiliesareseparatedfromthemduetosafetymeasures.We'vealways

providedphysicalsupport,butnowwearedoingsoonadifferentlevel-wealsohavetokeep

themcompanyandofferemotionalsupport.Unfortunately,someofthewomenhavecaught

corona-virus,andbeingatthehospitalputsmeatrisk.Personally,Ifeelprotectedbecausewe

havefullpersonalprotectiveequipment,whichwewearallthroughour13-hourshifts.Youdon't

knowifsomeoneiscarryingcorona-virusornot.

Ididn'twanttoputmyfamilyindangerbybringingthevirushomeandpossiblypassingit

ontothem.Asasingleparenttomychildren,Xiaohua,12yearsold,andXiaoyong,9,1realizedI

hadtomakeaverytoughdecisionaboutmyfamily'ssafetywhenthecountrywentintolockdown.

Givingupworkwasn'tanoptionfbrme.Iwantedtobeabletolookafterthewomenwhowere

feelingpoorlyandveryscared,butIcouldnotleavemylittleangelsbehindeither.

Atthispoint,mysistersuggestedthatthechildrenstaywithherandherhusbandforthetime

beingandleavemetomyhospitalduties.Ithoughtitwasagreatidea,sowesetadatefbrherto

pickthemup.WhenIexplainedthesituationtomyangelsandtoldthemtheyneededtostaywith

theirauntforawhile,theybothseemedupset,butagreedtogo.OnthedayIsawthemoff,they

keptlookingbackatmeuntiltheyweretoofartobeseen.

注意：

1、续写词数应为150左右；

2、请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

Afterthat,myworkloadincreasedbecausesomeofmycoworkersfellill.

Aweeklater,itcametoXiaoyong'sbirthday.

【参考范文】

Afterthat,myworkloadincreasedbecausesomeofmycoworkersfellill.Wehadtowork

doubleshiftsandmylifewasdedicatedtonothingbutwork.EverydayIcamebackhome

completelyexhaustedandfellasleep.AssoonasIwokeup,Ineededtogotothehospital.I

pouredallmyeffortsintomypatients,whichwasveryrewarding.However,ittroubledmethatI

didn'thavetimeformyownkids.Xiaoyongwasgoingtocelebratehisbirthdaysoon.Ihadtodo

somethingtomakeupforhim.

Aweeklater,itcametoXiaoyong'sbirthday.Imadeavideocalltothemfromthehospital.I

greetedthemonthescreenwithmymaskandgoggleson,theyrecognizedmeatonce,shouting

excitedly.Itookthephonetothehallwheremycoworkerssang“HappyBirthday,Xiaoyong!”

Theyalsoencouragedhimtobestrong,andagrinappearedonhisface.Mychildren's

understandingandmycoworker'ssupportgavemeawarmfeeling,andIbelievenothingcould

evertrulyseparatemeandmybelovedones.Wearesuretowin.

【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者是一位有两个孩子的单亲母亲，也是一位

助产士，在新冠疫情期间，在工作和家人之间难以抉择，最后选择去医院工作，把孩子交给

前夫照顾。

【写作步骤】

1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“之后，我的工作量增加了，因为我的一些同事生病了。”可知，第一段

可描写作者在医院的工作越来越忙,没时间照顾孩子，作者想要在孩子生日的时候弥补孩子。

②由第二段首句内容“一周后，到了小勇的生日。”可知，第二段可描写作者和同事一起在医

院祝孩子生日快乐，孩子很开兴。

2.续写线索：工作——烦恼——弥补——庆生——鼓励——感悟

3.词汇激活

行为类

①致力于：wasdedicatedto/wasdevotedto

②回家：camebackhome/returnedhome

③打视频电话：madeavideocall/video-called

情绪类

①烦恼：trouble/worry

②兴奋地：excitedly/withexcitement

【写作亮点】

[高分句型1].Ipouredallmyeffortsintomypatients,whichwasveryrewarding.（由关系代词

which引导非限制性定语从句）

[高分句型2].However,ittroubledmethatIdidn'thavetimeformyownkids.（由that引导主语

从句）

Q检测训练

i、阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,some

peopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.

Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisiting

thepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,she

wouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasa

mansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.

Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.

“Iwishyoucouldseeshesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara."Heissuch

ahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon'tseewhathecando.”

Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.t4Iwishwecould

helphimtoearnmoney,saidClara.t4Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.^^

"SodoI,“saidHarry.4tWereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.^^

Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,t4Ihave

agreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）

Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobea

goodone.t4Itellyouwhatwecando,“saidJohn."YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsent

us?Well,wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花）,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeit

aroundtothehousesandsellit.”

注意：

1.续写词数应为150左右：

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

【范文】

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohnfsidea,shethoughtit-wasagoodone,too.So,theywenttothe

localsupermarkettogether.Theyboughtabagofcomandsomespecialbagsforpopcorn.When

theygothome,theymadealotofpopcornandputitinthespecialbags.Withthepopcorn,they

wenttoBernard'shome.TheytoldBernardhowtosellthepopcorn.Bernardandhisparentswere

verygrateful.AndtheMeredithfamilyalsofeltveryhappytohelpthisfamily.

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hetookthepopcornaround

tothehousesandsoldallhispopcorn.Heearnedalotofmoney.Then,hewantedtobe

self-dependent.Therefore,heaskedMrs.Meredithtoteachhimhowtomakepopcorn.Afterthat,

notonlydidhesellpopcorn,buthealsoaddedcreamandsalttothepopcorntomakeittaste

better.Bernardgrewuptobearemarkableman.HedidnotforgetthehelpofMeredith'sfamily,

andhealsodidwhathecouldtohelpthoseinneed.

【解析】本文是根据短文进行续写，使之成为一个完整的故事。

1.认真读懂所给提供的材料:善良的Meredith一家住在一个小社区里，他们想帮助一个贫困

的家庭.那家的男主人生病卧床，女主人要照顾丈夫、无法外出赚钱，家中的小男孩Bernard

也做不了什么事情，生活十分困难。后来，Meredith的孩子想出了一个主意-制作爆米花，

让Bernard去卖爆米花。

2.根据所给材料确定文章主题:Meredith如何通过制作和卖爆米花帮助Bernard一家摆脱困境

的。

3.续写部分和前面的文章衔接得上，并且与原文情节发展和人物性格相一致，故事情节的向

后延续发展要合乎情理。

4.根据第一段首句WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,

too.（当Meredith太太听到John的主意时，她也认为这是个好主意）可以针对如何实现制作爆

米花这个提议展开构思；根据第二段首句Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnew

business.（一切准备就绪后，Bernard开始了他的新生意）可以针对Bernard如何通过卖爆米花

让家庭摆脱困境展开构思。

5.续写的语言要尽可能与原文的语言保持风格上的一致。文章时态以一般过去时为主。应使

用自己熟悉的句型和短语进行写作，考生耍注意尽可能使句子的表达形式多样化，适当的使

用一些高级句式和高级词汇，以提高书面表达的档次和可读性。作文要层次清晰，要点全面，

表达流畅，切合题干要求，句子结构准确，适当补充信息，使篇章结构连贯。

2.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

Itookajobasareceptionistforaveterinarianweeksago.Asanenthusiasticanimallover,I

acceptedthepositionontheconditionthatIwouldn,thavetoassistwithanywoundedanimals.I

couldn'tbeartoseeanycreatureinpain.

Attheendofmyfirstweek,wewereabouttoclosetheofficeforthedaywhenayoungman

inhisthirtiesranuptousholdingaseverelyinjuredDobermanpinscherpuppyinhisarmsand

beggingustosavehislife.Thefour-month-oldpuphadbeenhitbyacar.

ThedoctorandIrushedbackintotheoperatingroomimmediately.Thepoorcreaturewasin

criticalcondition.Theonlyplacetheskinwasstillattachedtothispoorlittleanimal'sbodywas

aroundoneshoulder.Thevetworkedtirelesslyforwhatseemedlikehours,stitchinghimback

togetheragain.Thatwastheeasypart.Thepuppyhadbrokenmultiplebones,includinghisspine.

Ifhewasluckyenoughtosurvivethenextfewdays,wewerequitesurehewouldneverwalk

again.

Thedayforeverchangedmylife.Theveterinarianinstructedme,andIbecamehisassistant

inallthingsmedical.OneofmyfirstjobswastogivethatDobermanpuppydailyphysicaltherapy.

Imovedhistinylegsonaregularbasistokeephismusclesfromweakening.

Weekswentbyuntiloneday,Ifeltthislittlefighterpushbackeversoslightly.Andhe

continuedtopushbacktillhecouldfinallyusehislegs.Whatamiracle!

Daybyday,thelittlefightermadealittlebitprogressuntilthevetcalledhisownertelling

himthathispuppywasreadytogohome.Havingaccompaniedthepuppyforseveralmonths,I

couldimaginehowexcitedandrelievedtheyoungmanwas.AndIwassurehewouldtookgood

careof.Twodayslater,thepuppywastakenawaybyhisowner.

1.所续写的短文词数应为150左右；

2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好。

Paragraph1:

Aboutayearpassed,Iwalkedintotheclinic'scrowdedwaitingroom.

Paragraph2:

Iwentontobeavettechfor14years,andsinceretirement,Fvevolunteeredatano-kill

animalshelter.

【参考范文】

Paragraph1:

Aboutayea,passed,Iwalkedintotheclinic'scrowdedwaitingroom.Icalledthenameof

thenextclient.Suddenly,ahugeDobermanwhohadbeenstandingquietlywithhisowneronthe

oppositesideoftheroombrokelooseandrushedtowardme.Ifoundmyselfpinnedagainstthe

wallwiththismagnificentdogstandingonhishindlegs,hisfrontpawsonmyshoulders,washing

myfacewithabundantandjoyfulkisses!

Paragraph2:

/ontobeavettechfor14years,andsinceretirement,I'vevolunteeredatano-kill

animalshelter.Beingavettechnicianandvolunteeratano-killanimalshelter,Isucceededin

savingmoreanimals,whichoftenmademethinkofthegratefulhugeDoberman.Althoughmany

yearshavepassed,Istillshedtearsinamazementatthedisplayofloveandgratitudethedoghad

forme.Allthedogsknewtheyhadbeenrescuedbymeandtheyweregratefultome.

【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者在一家兽医那里找了一份前台接待员的工

作，在作者工作的第一个星期结束的时候，诊所里来了一只受重伤的杜宾犬小狗，作者成为

了兽医的助手，照顾好了小狗.一年后杜宾犬再次来到诊所，热情地亲吻作者，作者退休后

仍然在一家不猎杀动物的收容所做志愿者，仍然为这只狗对自己的爱和感激而流泪。

【写作步骤】

1.段落续写：

①由第一段首句内容“大约一年过去了，我走进诊所拥挤的候诊室。”可知，第一段可描写被

作者救治过的杜宾犬再次回到诊所的事情。

②由第二段首句内容“我做了14年的兽医技师，退休后，我在一家不猎杀动物的收容所做志

愿者.”可知，第二段可描写作者成为志愿者后的所作所为以及感悟

2.续写线索：作者走进候诊室——杜宾犬向作者表示感激——作者退休成为志愿者——作者

感悟

3.词汇激活

行为类

走进：walkinto/stepinto

继续：goon/continueto

时间逝去:pass/goby

情绪类

感谢：gratitude/begrateful/appreciation

快乐：joyful/happy

【写作亮点】

[高分句型1]Suddenly,ahugeDobermanwhohadbeenstandingquietlywithhisowneronthe

oppositesideoftheroombrokelooseandrushedtowardme.（运用了who弓|导定语从句）

[高分句型2]Beingavettechnicianandvolunteeratano-killanimalshelter,Isucceededin

savingmoreanimals,whichoftenmademethinkofthegratefulhugeDoberman.（运用了which

引导非限制性定语从句）

3、阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事.

AVacationwithMyMother

Ihadaninterestingchildhood.Itwasfilledwithsurprisesandamusements,allbecauseofmy

mother—loving,sweet,yetabsent-mindedandforgetful.OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenI

waseleventellsalotabouther.

MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedto

spendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingallthesightsalongtheway.Asthefirstday

ofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallof

ourfriends.Whoknewifwe'deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,

andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravely

droveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurse

andtraveler'schecksMomhadforgotten.

DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwas

drivingwhileDadslept:"Youstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookout（放口肖）whileIgo,andI'll

standoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo."Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:"Honey,

wherearethekids?”"What?!Oh,Gosh...Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet."Wewere

neveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren'tabouttotakeanychances.

Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivingin

vainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewitha

likely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetuptentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toour

greatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections（反对）.Ifa

strangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorstep,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinks

everyoneintheworldisasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.

注意：

1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；

2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；

3,续写部分分为两段，每段的开头已为你写好；

4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语.

Paragraph1:

Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.

Paragraph2:

Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.

【范文】

Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Thinkingofthistent,

Momsuggestedthatwegocampinginthenextvillageinexcitement,withhereyesglittering.

Consideringherenthusiasm,weallagreed.Whenthedoorofourcaropened,Momstormedout

instantlyandurgedustoputupthetent.DavidandIwereaskedtopickupsomebranchestobuild

afire.Andwhenwecameback,DadandMomhadalreadylaindownthegrasscomfortablyin

frontofthetent,talkingmerrilywithalocalboyatourage,whokeptglancingatthistent

curiously.Soonwelearntthattheboyinragsevendidn'thaveahometolivein.Ofcourse,Mom

t6forgof,totakethistentwithusagain.

Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Andwealsohada

nicetimelivingwithmygrandparentsduringthattrip.Butwhatimpressedmemostwasthattent,

whichwasforgottendeliberatelybyMom.Thoughshedidlovegoingcamping,shepresentedthat

poorboywiththistentoutofsympathy.ItwasMomthatmademychildhoodcolorful.Anditwas

alsoshethatshowedmethetruemeaningofgiving.

【解析】这是一篇读后续写.短文叙述了作者的母亲很健忘，一家四口自驾旅游去祖父母所

居住的地方，途中发生了有趣的事情。

【详解】

首先，根据文章当中第二段内容比较开心的基调，第一段的故事情节应该比较偏向正面感情

色彩，例如：我们在露营过程中一起搭建帐篷的开心时光或露营过程中的趣事（尤其是前文

有铺垫妈妈是个forgetful的人,这一点也可以埋下伏笔来表达后面过程中由于妈妈健忘而带

来的趣事）（也有同学在此处描述了露营过程中对其他陌生人提供帮助，来集中体现nice这一

个点）;

其次，第二段开头说来描述欣赏风景：此处可以用一些描述景色环境的表达来烘托下氛围，

但是第二段不能仅仅只能有景色描述；例如：这里可以实写和虚写结合的方式，看到景色（同

时回忆往事），最终把故事的落脚点放在“家人的感情”“亲情”“生活的乐趣”“与妈妈一起的趣

事”等等角度都可以的;当然也有同学描述与陌生人的相遇，引出了陌生人的善意这个主题；

总之这次的话题比较开放，情节可以写的角度比较多；

再次，除了情节方面的内容以外，以下几个方面是考生需要着重关注的得分点：字迹清晰程

度，语法多样性和句式丰富性，衔接成分的使用，语言的场景恰当程度;高考英语写作中，

考生所采用的句型结构一定程度上影响了老师对考生写作水平的判断;说到语法丰富性方

面，例如在作文中用到从句结构、强调句、非谓语结构等。尤其应该注意的是：避免句型单

一化，如通篇使用定语从句，这样反而使阅卷老师觉得该考生对句型掌握的不够充分。应该

在文章写作中有意识地多使用不同的句型结构。

【点睛】

文章思路清晰，语言规范，段落整齐，语篇连贯，层次清晰.使用了较为高级的句式：虚拟

语气和with复合结构Momsuggestedthatwegocampinginthenextvillagein

excitement,withhereyesglittering.Consideringherenthusiasm,weallagreed,what弓I导的主语

从句和which引导的非限制性定语从句Butwhatimpressedmemostwasthattent,whichwas

forgottendeliberatelybyMom.

高级句式的应用提升了写作的档次，整个短文显示出了作者高水平的英语表达能力。

4、

Myschoolhadatraditionduringtheninth-gradegraduation:abeautifulgoldandgreen

jacket（theschoolcolors）,wasawardedtothestudentwhohadmaintainedthehighestgradesfor

nineyears.

IhadbeenastraightAstudentsincethefirstgradeandhadlookedforwardsverymuchto

owningthatjacket.Myfatherwasafarmlaborerwhocouldn'tearnenoughmoneytofeedfive

children.Iwasgiventomygrandparentstoraise.Therewouldneverbeaschoolsportsjacketfor

us.Thisscholarshipjacketwasmyonlychance.

OnedayinMay,Ihappenedtooverhearintheoffice.Mr.Schmidt,myhistoryteacher,and

Mr.Boone,mymathteacherarguingaboutme."Irefusetodoit!Idon*tcarewhoherfatheris；

hergradescan'tmatchMartha*satall.Iwon*tlieorfalsify（伪造）records.^^saidMr.Schmidt

angrily.

ButMr.Boone*svoicesoundedcalm."Joann'sfatherisnotonlyontheBoard（董事会），he

ownstheonlystoreintown:wecouldsayitwasaclosetieand...^^

Shakingandsad,I,waitedafewminutesandwalkedaway.

Thenextdaywhentheprincipalcalledmeintohisoffice."Martha,“hesaid,“There'sbeena

changeinpolicythisyearregardingthescholarshipjacket.ThisyeartheBoardhasdecidedto

chargefifteendollars,whichstillwon'tcoverthecompletecostofthejacket.Soifyouareunable

topaythemoneyforthejacket,itwillbegiventothenextoneinline.^^

StandingwithallthedignityIcouldfind,Isaid,“Filspeaktomygrandfatheraboutit,sir,

andletyouknowtomorrow.1criedonthewayhome.

注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。

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BythetimeIgothome,myeyeswereredandswollen.Ifoundmygrandpainthebeanfield.

Paragraph2:

Idraggedintotheprincipalfsofficethenextday,sadanddisappointed.

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Paragraph1：

BythetimeIgothome,myeyeswereredandswollen.Ifoundmygrandpainthebean

field.Sensingsomethingwrong,heaskedmewhathappenedwithgreatconcern.Imurmuredthe

principal'swords,asurgeofregretgnawingatmyheart.Ireallyhatedtoseemygray-haired

Grandpa'sdisappointment.Grandpa'seyesroundedindisbelief.Timetickingby,heheaveda

longsigh,“Mychild,anawardboughtcan'tbecalledanaward."Inoddedunderstandingly.But

whoknewhowreluctantandbitterIwas?

Paragraph2：

Idraggedintotheprincipal'sofficethenextday,sadanddisappointed.Myheadstilllifted

withdignity,Itriedtofightbackthetears,stammering,cannot...affordthejacket,sir."Staring

intomyeyes,theprincipalsuddenlygrinned,“Ihavegoodnewsforyou.^^Ilookedathimin

confusion."Theboarddecidedthatanawardcannotbeboughtjustforthesakeofwinners5

dignity.^^Hiseyesbrimmedwithsmiles.IpinchedmyhandonlytofindIwasnotdreaming.Only

atthatmomentdidIbelievethatMr.Schmidtandmygrandpawereright:nevercanawardsbe

falsifiedorbought.(162words)

【写作分析】本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者的学校在九年级的毕业典礼上会奖励一件

漂亮的金绿色的夹克给9年来成绩最好的学生，作者一直是优等生，渴望得到那件夹克，但

是偶然听到Mr.Schmidt老师和校长争论夹克到底给她还是Joann.后来祖父告诉作者买来

的奖不能叫奖.校长最后也把夹克奖给了作者。

【写作步骤】

1.段落续写：

①.由第一段首句内容“当我回到家时，我的眼睛又红又肿。我在豆地里找到了祖父「'可知，

第一段可描写作者告诉了祖父发生的一切，祖父告诉作者买来的奖不能叫奖。

②.由第二段首句内容“第二天，我拖着沉重的脚步走进校长办公室，既伤心又失望。”可知，

第二段可描写作者伤心地告诉校长自己买不起夹克，但是校长最后还是把夹克奖给了作者。

2.续写线索：找到祖父——告诉发生的事——作者心理情绪——祖父叹息感慨——走到校长

办公室一告诉校长买不起一校长更改主意一作者得到夹克

3.词汇激活

行为类

①.低声说：murmur/sayinalowvoice/mutter

②.看着：stareinto/lookat/watch

情绪类

①滩以置信：indisbelief?incredibly/unbelievably

②.失望：disappointment/despair/frustration

【写作亮点】

[高分句型1].Sensingsomethingwrong,heaskedmewhathappenedwithgreatconcern.(运用

了现在分词作状语）

[高分句型2].IpinchedmyhandonlytofindIwasnotdreaming.（运用了省略引导词that的宾

语从句作find的宾语）

[高分句型3].OnlyatthatmomentdidIbelievethatMr.Schmidtandmygrandpawereright:

nevercanawardsbefalsifiedorbought.（运用了部分倒装句和由that引导的宾语从句作believe

的宾语）

5.阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。

ItwasanArtlesson.Rachelsatatthedeskwatchingherclassmatesbusypreparingthewater

jarsandpaints.SheunderstoodwhyMrs.WestonaskedhertositdownandgotLisatofetch

everythingforher.ItwasalwaysadisasterwhenRacheltriedtodoArt!

Rachelsighedandreachedouttodipherbrushinsomeblackpaintand一oh,no!She

knockedoverthejar.Thewaterspreadacrossthedeskanddrownedthepaper.LisacalledMrs.

WestontoseewhatRachelhaddone.Rachelwentredintheface.Shejumpedtoherfeettogeta

cloth.Herchairfelloverbackwards.SheturnedroundandherpaintbrushcaughtLisaacrossthe

face,givingherablackmoustache.Lisawassosurprisedthatshefellbackagainstawire

bookstand.Itcamecrashingdownandthebookswentalloverthefloor.

Howclumsy（笨拙的）!Rachelthoughtasshewenthomeonthebus.Thebusstoppedoutside

herhouse.Shejumpedupandherelbow（肘部）knockedawoman飞hatrightoverhereyes.Oh,

no!Rachelsaidsorry,gotoffandranindoors.Mumwasn'tinthekitchenbutlayinbedasshe

caughtanawfulcold.RachelofferedtomakeacupofteabutMumwouldratherwaitforDad.

Rachelsighed.SheunderstoodMumwasafraidshewouldspill（溅出）it.

“ButwouldyougotoMrs.Willowforsomecoldcure?”askedMum.Rachelturnedtothe

dooratonce."ButRachel,Mrs.Willow'shouseisfullofbeautifulthings,soifsheasksyouto

comein,you'dbettersayno."Rachelsighedandranout.

Mrs.Willowwasanoldladywithwhitehairandsharpblueeyeslivinginanoldhouse.She

openedthedoorandinvitedherin.Rachelsaidwhyshecameandthatshepreferredtowait

outsiderememberinghermother9swarning.Mrs.WillowinsistedRachelcomeinside.Rachel

tookadeepbreathandsteppedin.ShelookedroundMrs.Willow'ssittingroomandsawatonce

whyMumhadbeenworried.

注意:

1.续写词数应为150左右：

2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.

Paragraph1:

Therewerebeautifulthingseverywhere—prettychina//g〃res（瓷雕）anddelicatevases.

Paragraph2:

WithasmileMrs.Willowcomfortedhersayingithadbeenbrokenbefore.

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Therewerebeautifulthingseverywhere-prettychinafiguresanddelicatevases.Rachel

stoodverystill,afraidofknockingsomethingover.Mrs.WillowhandedRachelasmallbrown

bottle.Rachelcouldn'twaittogetaway,feelinganyminutetherewouldbeadisaster.She

thankedherandturnedtothedoorwhensomethingbrushedagainstherleg.Rachelwasso

surprisedthatshejumpedbackwards.Itwasacat!Butherelbowhitavaseanditfelltothefloor,

broken.Howawkward!

WithasmileMrs.Willowcomfortedhersayingithadbeenbrokenbefore.Rachelsighedand

staredather."Idid,whenIwasyoung.Youcouldn'thavebeenasclumsyasIwas,"Mrs.Willow

said,hersharpblueeyesshining."Keeptellingyourselfyouareaswananditwillwork."Rachel

doubtfullysaidthatseveraltimes.Aftertheyclearedupthevase,theydrankteafromchinacups

andatecakesoffdelicateplatesandRacheldidn'tbreakanotherthing.Itwasakindofmagic.

Rachelsmiled.

PossibleVersionTwo:

Therewerebeautifulthingseverywhere-prettychinafiguresanddelicatevases.Allthe

treasuresseemedtoboastalonghistoryandthuspriceless.tcWow,itisreallyalandofwonder.

Rachelcouldn'thelpadmiringtheeleganceofthechinafiguresandvases.Mom'swords

echoing（重复）inhermind,curiositystillgottheupperhand（占上风）.Shereachedforoneof

them,butunfortunately,thevaseslippedoffherhandandlayinpiecesonthefloor.Herheart

missingabeat,shefeltterriblyworried.

WithasmileMrs.Willowcomfortedhersayingithadbeenbrokenbefore.Rachelsighedand

staredather."Noworryatall.It'llbeperfectafterbeingmended,Mrs.Willowsaid,hersharp

blueeyesshining,"Nobodygrowsupwithoutbeingclumsy.^^Rachelletoutalongsighandfor

thefirsttimeshefeltgoodaboutherclumsyself.ShebelievedwhatMrs.Willowsaidmusthave

thesamemagicasherspecialcoldcure.Toheramazement,shereturnedhomewiththebottleof

medicinesafeandsound.

【写作分析】文章以人物为线索展开，讲述了Rachel是一个笨拙的人，总是会破坏周围的

东西，一天Rachel的妈妈生病了，妈妈想让她去Mrs.Willow家要一些感冒药，并嘱咐她

Mrs.Willow家里有很多精致的东西，最好不要进她的家门。

【写作步骤】

L段落续写

①由第一段首句内容“到处都是美丽的东西——漂亮的瓷器和精致的花瓶。”可知，第一段可

描写Rachel进了Mrs.Willow家门后，行为举止很拘束，最后还是打碎了一个瓶子。

②由第二段首句内容“威洛太太微笑着安慰她说，它以前也坏过。”可知，第二段可描写Mrs.

Willow安慰了Rachel并很好地招待了她。

2.续写线索：Rachel害怕打碎东西--迫不及待想离开----感谢Mrs.Willow------撞到了花

瓶，花瓶碎了---Mrs.Willow安慰Rachel------打扫花瓶---享受好的食物

3.词汇激活：

行为类：

①迫不及待：can'twaittodosth./beeagertodosth.

②打扫：cleanup/sweepup

情绪类：

①害怕的：afraid/frightened

②感谢：thank/begrateful

【写作亮点】

[高分句型1]

Rachelwassosurprisedthatshejumpedbackwards.（so…that…引导结果状语从句）

[高分句型2]

Aftertheyclearedupthevase,theydrankteafromchinacupsandatecakesoffdelicateplatesand

Racheldidn'tbreakanotherthing,（after弓I导时间状语从句）

6、阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。

Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfrom

hishometoAlaskawithhisfHends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,but

theyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled

（骑行）alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedto

showthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.

ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim."Man,thafsabigdog!”hethought.

Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn'tadogatall,butawolf,quickly

catchingupwithhim.

Mac'sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofhearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefired

thesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac*srelief,itfellback,

shak