高考英语二轮复习之作文提分要诀 08 描写形象生动（含解析）-人教版高三英语试题

满分攻略描写形象生动满分攻略攻略---外貌、性格与环境描写让续写更加丰满围绕原文主旨，续写部分可利用恰当的词语描述人物的外貌、性格和周围的环境，丰富续写情。一、外貌性格描写1．外貌性格描写的3个原则①进行外貌描写时，可写对一个人的总体印象，也可以抓住人物重要的外貌特征或性格特点进行描述。如攻略3例题原文中第一段对妈妈性格的描写，采用了loving,sweet,absent­minded和forgetful等形容词，使一个可爱又健忘的妈妈的形象跃然纸上。②可以具体描述人物的五官、着装，甚至可以配上动作描述。③在描写人物片段时，可写你对人物印象最深的一两点，再加上一两句人物评价。2．外貌与性格描写的高分素材外貌描写(1)她圆圆的脸上有一双蓝色的眼睛，还有两个可爱的酒窝。①Onherroundfaceareapairofblueeyesandlovelydimples.(倒装句型)②Sheisagirlwithapairofblueeyesandlovelydimplesonherroundface.(with引导的介宾结构作后置定语，补充说明人物信息)(2)李老师三十多岁，身材适中，常梳着马尾辫。①MissLiisinherthirtieswithamediumbuildandhasherhairinaponytail.(由and连接的并列句；with短语用作状语，表示伴随状态)②MissLiisamedium­sizedwomaninherthirtieswhooftenwears/tiesherhairinaponytail.(定语从句补充介绍人物特征)③MissLi,inherthirties,isofmediumsize,andoftenhasherhairtiedinaponytail.(“beof＋adj.＋n．”结构表示人或物具有某种特征。常用的名词有：size,height,weight,build,age,shape等)性格描写①SuchisMs.Han,aneasygoing,kindandwarm­heartedwoman.韩老师是一个随和善良又热心肠的女人。②Thoughhecomesfromapoorfamily,heisapersonofgreatdeterminationandcourage.他虽出身贫寒，但拥有坚强的意志和勇气。二、环境描写1．环境描写的4个原则①选择与主题和情节设置一致的环境要素，以营造故事发生的特定环境。②细致深入。所选的景物一定要运用所学的词汇和句法进行细致深入的描写。③添加附加信息，如天气变化和周边的景物等，如昏暗的路灯、摇曳的树影等。④环境细节描写一定要与动作和心理活动等相结合，才能更好地完成续写任务。例如：攻略3第一段续写中可适当描写一下在帐篷中过夜时周围的环境，突出作者内心的祥和、快乐。2．环境描写的高分素材①Itwasbeginningtosnow,andsnowflakeswereblindingmyeyes.天开始下雪了，雪花让我看不清了。②Thesunwasbreakingthroughtheblanketofmist.太阳穿过薄雾。③Summerseesthemountainsturnbrightgreenwithgrowingrice.Duringautumn,thesesamemountainsareflashgold,andinwintertheyarecoveredinsheetsofwhitefrost.夏天，水稻生长群山绿意盎然。秋天漫山铺金，冬天银装素裹。④Alittlewayoffwasalittlebrook,rushingandsparklingalongbetweengreenbanks.不远处有一条小溪，在绿色的两岸之间奔流不息，波光粼粼。【写作演示】(2017年11月，浙江卷)阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。AVacationwithMyMotherIhadaninterestingchildhood:Itwasfilledwithsurpriseandamusements,allbecauseofmymother—eq\a\vs4\al(loving)，eq\a\vs4\al(sweet)，andyeteq\a\vs4\al(absent­)eq\a\vs4\al(minded)andeq\a\vs4\al(forgetful).OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingalleq\a\vs4\al(thesights)alongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight­year­oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood­byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe'deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler'schecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept.“YoustandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileIgo,andI'llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids？”“What？！Oh,Gosh...Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren'tabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely­lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetupthetentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections.Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorsteps,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.Paragraph1Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand­newtentwehadbroughtwithus.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【续写思路点拨】1．细读原文，明确叙述意图原文基调轻松、温暖。通过介绍一次出游经历，描述妈妈健忘、心不在焉、善良、爱孩子的性格特征。第一段概括妈妈的性格特征；第二段以妈妈遗落钱包的事情来说明妈妈健忘；由第三段担心妈妈遗忘孩子的事，说明妈妈心不在焉，同时侧面反映孩子的靠谱、沉稳；由最后一段倒数第二和第三句可看出妈妈很善良。根据人物性格特征，结合续写第二段首句可推测，续写时应设计一件有趣的事来体现“快乐、母爱、温情、亲情”。2．根据段落开头语，确定续写方向※根据续写第一段首句中的关键词“werememberedthebrand­newtent”可知，该段应着重描写围绕帐篷发生的有趣的eq\a\vs4\al(故事)。※根据续写第二段首句中的关键词“alongtheway”可推断第二段可描述一路上妈妈对孩子的关爱。结合首句中关键词“greatsights”，可简单进行环境描写与原文呼应。3．围绕原文主旨，进行人物性格和环境描写①在描写母亲时，以原文对母亲性格的描写为依据，描述一件小事突出母亲的健忘和心不在焉；也利用一些描述性的词语，如read、sing、warmth、comfortable、safe、laughter等描写旅途中母亲所表现出的母爱。这些描写能使母亲的形象更加丰满、高大，“母爱”溢于言表。②根据原文标题中的关键词vacation，和原文第二段中的“allhersightsalongtheway”，可推断出续写部分可适当进行环境描写，体现和母亲共度假期的快乐，一家人的亲情。【参考范文】Paragraph1Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand­newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Mominsistedthatweshouldmakefulluseofitsincewehadbroughtit.DavidandIlookedatDad,hopinghecouldrefusehercrazyideaagain,buttoourgreatdisappointment,heagreedwithMom'sidea.Sowesetupthetentatthefootofthemountainbyariver.“Oh,Iforgotthepillows！”Momscreamedoutbeforeweslept.Finally,wehadtocollectsomegrassasourpillows.Despitetheacheofmyneck,Ienjoyedthenicenightwithfreshairandmillionsofstars.Paragraph2Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Thetentbecameaclosefriendthen.Everytimewecamped,Momreadabookorsangasoftsong.Thewarmthofherarmsletusfeelcomfortableandsafe.Thoughshewasforgetfulandabsent­minded,laughteraccompaniedusalongtheway.Finallywemetourtwosetsofgrandparentsandenjoyedfamilyhappiness.Thistripmademeexperiencemymother'sandfamily'slove.真题演练真题演练（2018年6月，浙江高考）阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydad’sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast."Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,"hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn’tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains."Don’tbelateforsupper,"UnclePaulcried,"andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon’tgetlost!""OK!"mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(编织的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.注意：（1）所续写短文的词数应为l50左右；（2）至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语：（3）续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；（4）续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【参考范文】Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.MyhorseturnedtothelefttoavoidthelittlerabbitasIheldontightlyandtriednottofall.Thenmydadturnedaroundandshouted,“Holdon!”Allofasuddenthehorsebegantorun.Mydadtriedtokeepupbehindus.Forafewminutesmyhorsesloweddowntoatrotandthenstoppedbesideariver.Ilookedaroundandr