高三第三次联考读后续写+见证奇迹的一夜+讲义

高三第三次联考读后续写：Iwasworkingasasupervisorinasmall,ruralhospitalonabittercoldMidwesternwinterin1992.Iwasn’tevensupposedtobeworkingtheeveningshift,buthadagreedtoswapwithacolleaguewhoneededthenightoff.Amongmymanydutieswastoassistintheemergencyroom(ER)ifourERnurseneededhelp.Suddenly,mypager(寻呼机)

echoeddownthehallwaythatquietevening.1992年，在中西部一个严寒的冬天，我在一家小型农村医院担任主管。我甚至不应该上夜班，但我同意与一位需要休息一晚的同事交换。我的许多职责之一是，如果急诊室护士需要帮助，我会在急诊室提供帮助。突然，我的寻呼机(寻呼机)在那个安静的夜晚，走廊里回响着。“Ineedyourhelpnow,”

anurseinERsaidurgently.

“Wehaveanambulanceoutonalittleboy.Notmanydetails,butitdoesn’tsoundgood.Hewasfoundoutsideinasnowbank,andthefirstrespondershavestartedCPR.”

Myheartsank.Itwasthirtydegreesbelowzerowithwindchill.Thechilddidn’thaveachance.“我现在需要你的帮助，”急诊室的一名护士急切地说。“我们有一辆救护车在救一个小男孩。没有太多细节，但听起来不太好。他在外面的一个雪堆里被发现，急救人员已经开始心肺复苏。”我的心一沉。气温为零下三十度，风寒交加。这个孩子没有机会。Ienteredtheemergencyroom.Theambulancewasjustpullingup,andwhenthegurney(轮床)rolledintotheERitwasmetwithdeadsilence.CPRwasinprogress.Theblondboylaylifelessandpalewithlittlehandsfrozensosolid.

Becauseofthecircumstances,wewereobligatedtocontinueCPRuntil

hiscorebodytemperaturewasraised.

Nooneintheroomseemedtoholdanyhopeofbringingbackthislittleboy.我进入了急诊室。救护车刚停下来，轮床(轮床)滚进急诊室时，一片死寂。心肺复苏术正在进行中。金发男孩躺在那里，脸色苍白，小手冻得僵硬。由于当时的情况，我们有义务继续进行心肺复苏，直到他的核心体温升高。房间里似乎没有人抱着把这个小男孩带回来的希望。Thenexthourpassedquicklyasmanywayswereconductedtowarmhimup.Istoodsilentlyoverhim,

tearsrunningdownmycheeks,asIprayedsilentlyforhimandhisfamily.Icouldn’tevenhelpunderstandingthepainhisparentswereexperiencing.接下来的一个小时过得很快，人们采取了许多方法让他暖和起来。我默默地站在他身边，泪流满面，默默地为他和他的家人祈祷。我甚至忍不住理解他父母所经历的痛苦。Hewasthesameageasmylittleboy,withthesamebeautifulblueeyesandblondhair.IthoughtofhowmuchIlovedmysonandtriedtorememberthelasttimeItoldhimIlovedhimso.Whatifhediedtonight?WouldhedieknowinghowmuchIlovedhim?Irealized,watchingagroupofdoctorsandnursesdesperatelytryingtodotheimpossible,thatIhadn’teven

huggedhimbeforeleavingforwork.AndIdeeplyregrettedthatnow.他和我的小男孩同龄，有着同样美丽的蓝眼睛和金发。我想起了我是多么爱我的儿子，并努力回忆起我最后一次告诉他我如此爱他时的情景。如果他今晚去世了怎么办？知道我有多爱他，他会死吗？看着一群医生和护士拼命想做不可能的事，我意识到，在去上班之前，我甚至没有拥抱过他。我现在对此深感遗憾。

第一段：Thenamiracle

(奇迹)

occurred.第二段：Watchingthescene,Imadeapromisetomyselfthatnight.前文大意：1992年“我”在一家乡村小医院当主管。一个晚上来了一个小男孩，男孩幸存的机会很小。

考情分析：写好不易！从学生的反馈看，有两个难点：1.

第一段首句出现了一个超标词miracle(奇迹)，这对中差生不友好。2.

第二段首句madeapromise(作出承诺)，很多同学不知道是什么承诺。此外，学生普遍反映：似乎没有什么话可写。

如果觉得无话可写时，破解的办法是“多回扣前文”，即尽量多地使用前文的单词、词块或句子。回扣前文是一种很好的续写手段和技巧，这样写出的“续写”，不仅与前文的吻合度高，而且语言的质量高，错误相对比较少。需注意的是：不能整段整段去抄前文。

下水作文(注意：有5处回扣前文)：Thenamiracle

(奇迹)

occurred.

Theboy’scorebodytemperaturewasraised

(回扣前文).

Hislipsbegantoturnred.Ialsoobservedthegentlemovementofhischestashebreathed.

Ifinallybreathedasighofreliefthat

we

broughtbackthislittleboy

(回扣前文).

Afteraboutanhour,withhiseyesclosed,theboysaidtohimself,

“Mom,

Iknowhowmuchyouloveme,soI’mnotgoingtodie.

(回扣前文)”

Theboy’smotherheldhishandfirmly,

tearsrunningdownhercheeks

(回扣前文).(77words)Watchingthescene,Imadeapromisetomyselfthatnight.

Isworethat

I’dlovemysonmorethanever,

huggingmysonbeforeleavingforwork

(回扣前文).Iknewwhatmysonneededwasalotofloveandaffection.Onlyinanenvironmentofdeepmotherlylove

couldmysongrowupmorehealthily.He’dbesomeonewithagreatloveoflife.He’dbesomeonewiththeconfidencehehadgainedfromhavingawarmandlovingfamily.

I’dcherish

thepresentmoment!Whoknew

whichwouldarrivefirst,tomorrowortheaccident?(明天和意外谁会先到呢？)

(87words)[164words]

官方范文：Thenamiracle

(奇迹)

occurred.

Thelittleboy’sheartbegantobeat.Slowlyatfirstandthenmoresteadily.Intenminutes,hiscolorturnedabeautifulshadeofpinkandhispupilsbecamereactive.Alldoctorsandnursespresentwerewildwithdelight.Andreliefsweptovermybodyandtearsstreameddownmyface.IwasinaweknowingIhadreceivedaveryspecialinvitationtowitnessamiracle.WhenItoldthegoodnewstohisparents,theywerechokedwithtearsandcouldn’twaittoseetheirson.(88words)Watchingthescene,Imadeapromisetomyselfthatnight.

ApromisetoneveragainletadaygobywhenIdidn’thugmysonandtellhimthatIlovedhim.HewouldneverleavethisEarthwithoutknowinghowmuchIlovedhim.Itnolongermatteredifhereturnedmyloveorifhepushedmeaway.Ijustwantedhimtobehealthyandgrowupinanenvironmentsurroundedbylove.Inthemonthsandyearsthatfollowed,Ikeptmypromise.Hehasdoneverywellandistodayaveryhappy,lovinglittleboy.(92words)[180words]默写版：Thenamiracle

(奇迹)

occurred.

Thelittleboy’sheartbegantobeat._______________________________开始慢慢地，然后更稳定。______________________________________________________________________________十分钟后，他的颜色变成了美丽的粉红色，他的瞳孔变得反应迟钝。Alldoctorsandnursespresentwerewildwithdelight._____________________________________我如释重负，泪流满面。IwasinaweknowingIhadreceivedaveryspecialinvitationtowitnessamiracle.______________________________________________________________________________________当我把这个好消息告诉他的父母时，他们泪流满面，迫不及待地想见到他们的儿子。(88words)Watchingthescene,Imadeapromisetomyselfthatnight.

______________________________________________________________承诺再也不会让我不拥抱儿子并告诉他我爱他的那一天过去.HewouldneverleavethisEarthwithoutknowinghowmuchIlovedhim._____________________________________