高三英语读后续写人和动物类+The+pet+lamb+讲义

01文章原文

THEPETLAMB

Almostallthepossessionshadbeensoldtobuyfoodandclothingforthefamily.Atlast,nothingwasleftbutthe

pet

lamb.Atthethoughtofpartingwiththelittlecreature,Mrs.Grant

feltsadbecausethechildren

loved

itverymuch.Havingstruggledhard,shehadtomakeuphermindtosellthelamb.Butshecouldnotaskanychildtogoforthe

butcher.Finally,shewentherselfwithaheavyheart,draggingherleadenfeetandbargainedwiththebutcherforthesaleofDaisy.

Whilethechildrenwereall

playing

withthelamb,thebutcherandhisboycametothedoor.“YouseeIamhereforthelamb.”Saidthebutcherinaloudvoice.Hearingthis,onechildrantohermother’sside,andaskedwhatwashappeninginalarm.Mrs.Grant

gently

pushedthechildaside,bentdownandwasabouttotellthetruth.

"That'smylambnow,Charlie!"saidthebutcher'sboy,inaplayfultone,goinguptoDaisywitharopeinhishand."No,itisnotyourlamb.Itisourlamb!"saidCharlie,placinghimselfinfront

ofit.Buttheboy,pushinghimaside,threwaroperoundDaisy'sneck,andbegantodragthelittlecreatureaway.Thepoorlambbleatedverysadly.Thecryofgriefwhichfelluponthemother'searswastoomuchforher,andherheartsankwithinher.Inamoment,beggingwith

tearful

eyes,the

children

wereallaroundtheirmotherwithvoices

choking

withsobsfortheirlittlepet.“Praytellyourboytostopamoment,"shesaidinhusky(沙哑的)tonestothebutcher.Theboy,atawordfromthebutcher,stoppeddraggingthelamb,andthelittlecreaturestoppeditsbleating.Inatremblingvoice,Mrs.Grantexplainedtothemhowbadlyofftheywereaftertheirfatherdied.Shealsoaddedthatthekindbutcherhadgiventhe

money

forDaisy.Withthismoney,shecould

buy

herchildrenbreadtoeat.注意：1.所续写短文的次数应为150词左右；2.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；Paragraph1Butthemoresheexplained,thestrongerherchildrenbeggedforDaisy.Paragraph2Thebutcher,whohadbeenwatchingall,wastouchedinhisheart.

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文章注意原文情节概述：因家境贫寒，妈妈(Mrs.Grant)不得不打算将孩子们十分珍视的羊(Daisy)卖掉，虽然自己也十分不舍。为了不让孩子们发现，她偷偷去找屠夫(Butcher)，但是在卖羊的过程中遇到孩子们阻挠，孩子们十分伤心，妈妈便跟孩子们解释卖羊需要补贴家用接续部分发展方向P1段首语“妈妈越解释，孩子们越想留下羊羔”；P2段首语“屠夫一切看在眼里，非常感动”；P1接续部分要写出“孩子们恳求妈妈留下羊羔的过程”，这也是“屠夫非常感动”的关键；P2情节发展即为总结部分，结果是美好的，屠夫并没有带走羊羔，呈现温暖和谐的场面（总结），一家人的生计也得到解决（首尾呼应）。03

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原接续部分“No!no!no!”thechildrencried,“wedon'twantyoutosellDaisy!Wewon'thaveourdearlittlelambsold!Itisourlamb,andyoumustnotsellit,mother.Wewillrathergowithoutbreadthanhavethelambsold!”ItwasinvainthatMrs.Granttriedtomakeherchildrenseethatshecouldnothelpsellingthelamb.

Themoreshetalked,thestrongerdidtheypleadforDaisy.

Atlastshehandedbackthesilver,saying,"Icannotsellitjustnow,sir.Waituntilanothertime.Imusttrytokeepupalittlelonger."

Thebutcher,whohadbeenwatchingallthatwenton,wastouchedinhisheart;andwhenMrs.Grantofferedtoreturnthemoney,hesaid,"I'lltakeneitherthelambnorthemoney,Mrs.Grant."ThoughIamabutcher,Ihavenoharderheartthanothermen.I'llnotrobthechildren

oftheirpet.I'llbuyDaisyfromyou,andgiveitbacktothechildren.“Come,Joe,youmustnottakethatlamb.Itshallneverbekilledbyme.”Andashespoke,hisvoiceshook,andhedashedhishandquicklyacrosshiseyes.Daisywasatoncesetfree;andasthechildrengatheredroundandstrokedthepet,theirlittleheartswerefilledwithjoy.Bythekindhelpofsomefriends,thepoormotherneveragainfoundherselfsohardpressedaswhenshetriedtosellthechildren'spetlamb.注意：1.原版文章在各情节表达中语言描写居多，且多为口语词汇；2.因续写部分评定标准仍然在于“表达”层面，所以句式的多样化十分重要，但原版接续部分并未能体现句式多样化；3.可以对原版情节发展做出修改，第一段可添加Daisy的描写，可利用动作、心理、语言多角度重笔墨描写孩子们不舍并恳求妈妈的过程，第二段可添加总结。04续写文章分析—P1“Pleasedon’tsellDaisy,Mom!”thechildrensobbed内容设置：孩子不舍（语言描写：恳求）However,regardlessoftheirconstantpleading,Mrs.Granthadnoalternativebuttosellittosupportherfamily.内容设置：妈妈坚持卖表达设置：核心动词选择havenoalternativebut;

添加介词短语regardlessof;buttosellittosupportherfamily可以选择用介词dueto/withtheintentionof等表达因果/目的逻辑ThejoyfulmomentsDaisyandthechildrenhadspenttogethercrowdedintotheirminds,whichintensifiedtheirsorrow.

内容设置：孩子不舍（心理描写：回忆美好）表达设置：可以利用xxxcrowdedintomind作为心理描写的句式；添加关系代词that引导的定语从句（省略that）；添加which引导的非限制性从句WhileDaisy,

whosestartledgazesshiftedtothebutcher,crouched

quietly

underCharlieasifexpressingtheunwillingnesstoleave.

内容设置：羊的描写（状物）表达设置：在状物的场景中添加whose引导的定语从句是非常不错的选择；添加asifActually,theyalreadyregardedDaisyasamemberoffamily.DespitethereluctancetosellDaisy,Momstillinsistedonthebutcher'stakingthelambaway.内容设置：虽然不舍，但妈妈仍然坚持卖掉Daisy表达设置：insiston后加入动名词形式实现句式多样化；添加despite表达让步概念05

续写文章分析—P2“Iwon’trobthechildrenoftheirbelovedpet.”theButcherdepositedthemoneybackontheMrs.Grant’swrinkledhands.

“Keepthemoney

tobuysomebread!”

内容设置：屠夫没有拿走羊羔并留下钱（语言描写）表达设置：depositv.放置；wrinkledhands皱巴巴的手Confusedand

surprised,

Mrs.

Granthesitatedforamomentbeforeexpressingthedeepgratitudewithtearsflowingdown,“Thanksforyourkindness.”

内容设置：妈妈表达感激表达设置：hesitate更能表达妈妈的困惑和对突如其来的好事儿不知所措；形容词confusedandsurprised作评注性状语表达情绪Thecryofgriefofthechildrengavewaytotheastonishmentanddelight.内容设置：孩子情绪由悲伤转为兴奋表达设置：并没有采取色彩比较浓重的大情绪表达，而是利用抽象名词及核心动词givewayto来表达情绪Theystrokedthelambaffectionatelyandtheysnuggledtightly.内容设置：团聚喜悦表达设置：动作stoke/snuggleWhatreallytouchedthefamilyofMrs.Grantwasthegenerosityandsympathy,onwhichtheemotionalfamilyreuniondepended.内容设置：总结表达设置：介词+which/whom结构；总结表达中比较万能的结构；what引导的主语从句05

参考答案Themoreshetalked,thestrongerdidtheypleadforDaisy.

"Pleasedon'tsellDaisy,Mom!"thechildrensobbed.

However,regardlessoftheirconstantpleading,Mrs.Granthad

noalternativebuttosellittosupportherfamily.ThejoyfulmomentsDaisyandthechildrenhadspenttogether

crowdedintotheirminds,whichintensifiedtheirsorrow.

WhileDaisy,

whosestartledgazesshiftedtothebutcher,crouchedquietlyunderCharlie

asifexpressingtheunwillingnesstoleave.Actually,theyalreadyregardedDaisyasamemberoffamily.

DespitethereluctancetosellDaisy,Momstillinsi