2024届高考英语专题复习2022年全国新高考Ⅰ卷 读后续写真题-David的赛跑 讲义素材

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2022年全国新高考Ⅰ卷Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingthe

route

(路线)throughthickevergreenforest.

IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.

Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!

Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmy

frustration

(懊恼).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.

Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeotherchildren,butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.ThatwaswhynoneofthechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.Itjusttookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice,andalthoughhealwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren,hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecialeducationteacherattheschool,IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwasproudofhisstrongdetermination.注意：

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2、请按如下格式作答。

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

本文讲述战胜自我的故事。文章中的David是一名小学生，他患有脑部疾病，无法以正常的姿态走路和跑步，因为害怕被其他学校的学生嘲笑而在越野比赛前临阵退缩了。作为该学校的一名特殊教育老师，在得知David的情况后，作者感到很懊恼，因为David从未缺席过越野比赛的训练，也从未中途放弃过，是个身残志坚之人。故事背景一般包括时间、地点、天气和环境等，这些背景信息有助于我们更好地了解事件的经过和发展，而随着故事的展开，我们开始掌握了文章的情节设定。故事的冲突在于虽然身患残疾，但一直以来都意志坚定的David却在越野比赛前临阵退缩了，原因是David特殊的走路和跑步姿势可能会引起不熟悉他的人对他的嘲笑，他怕受到伤害。了解了故事冲突和问题所在可以帮助我们更好地进行续写：通过解决问题，化解冲突，可以使续写情节自然流畅，与原文的融合度更高。搭建写作支架，通过“点→线→面”的方式构思文章结构。为了构建一个写作框架，我们可以关注两条主线：情节线（明线）和情感线（明线—暗线）。情节线属于明线，可以从文本中获得这些信息。情感线则是由明到暗，对故事情节的发展需要进行合理的推测。接下来我们需要搭建内容和语言框架，在内容动态变化中、丰富语境中使内容表达与语言使用同步发生；最后从两个段首句开始写作，并有层次地设置问题，挖掘出文本的内涵。具体分析详见下图：点评高分范文，点拨关键技巧。

Wesatdownnexttoeachother,butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.Frustrated,hestruggledtotellmehisdecision,“Iwillnotrun.”Whilerubbinghisheadtoofferatouchofcomfort,Isaid,“David,someunfairprejudicemaycomefromsomepeople.Buttherearedefinitelyotherswhowillholdadifferentopinion.Theywillbeproudofyou.”Afterkeepingsilentforamoment,Davideventuallygaveanodofunderstanding.Then,wearinghisusualtoothysmile,heparticipatedinthematch.

IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

Asthegunshotrangout,alltheplayers,exceptDavid,dashedforward.Davidswunghisfeetforwardslowlywithhissmallbodyrockingsidetoside,butnobodylaughedathim.TheyseeminglyunderstoodhowtoughitwasforDavidtorunandhowdeterminedhewastoaccomplishtherun.Withthestrongwill,Davideventuallymadeit!OnlythendidIfullyrealizethatitwasstrongdeterminationthatcouldconquerwhateverdifficulty.本篇习作情节设计合理且有创新，语言表达准确且丰富，内容描述生动具体，语句衔接连贯顺畅，思想主题明确且得到了升华。续写部分把握了以下几个关键点：

准确把握角色特征：文中David是个十岁左右的小学生，“我”是他的老师。在言行举止上，本篇习作都符合各自的人设，如老师对学生的教导，展现了真实的人物特征。

正确掌控情节方向：根据第二段首句中的Davidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners可知，续写第一段应主要围绕作者成功说服David重新参赛的内容展开。第二段则以David参加比赛的过程及结果为重点，本篇习作在故事情节设定方面与原文衔接紧密。

具体细化人物行为：续写部分中对David的行为描述，如wearinghisusualtoothysmile、Davidswunghisfeetforwardslowlywithhissmallbodyrockingsidetoside等，语言描写“Iwillnotrun.”