2024届高考英语专题复习：读后续写语篇训练 第三节 人与自然（语篇演练）课件

语篇演练：阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld”—thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes,thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws(爪子).Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter(相遇),Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes,butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar(吼叫),thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为150左右；2.至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3.续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4.续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.

Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.

Step1读懂大意，理清脉络1.ReadforinformationWhoWhenWhereWhatWhyI,Elli,thepolarbearOnenightinthefallAresearchcampoutsidethetownofChurchillinManitoba,CanadaConflictarousedwithahungrypolarbearElliandIwantedtotakepicturesofpolarbears.Thebearwasattractedbygarlicbread.Step1读懂大意，理清脉络1.ReadforinformationParagraphHowPara.1&2Para.3,4&5Para.6&7ElliandIwantedtotakepicturesofpolarbears,butitwasdangerous.Wetriedourbesttorepelthebearattractedbyfood,butinvain.Weturnedtothecampmanager,whoinstructedustousepepperspraytorepelthebearuntilhelparrived.Step1读懂大意，理清脉络2.ReadforplotsA.Thebearcamebackangrilyandtheyhadtotrynewideas.B.ThecouplewenttoatowninCanadatotakephotosofpolarbears.C.Thehelicopterarrivedtotheirrescue.D.Frightened,thecoupletriedallthemeansofdefensetheyknewbutnoneofthemworked.E.Abearcameunexpectedlywhilethecouplewascookingdinner.①BeginningPlot:

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Step2细读首句，构思框架第一段首句译文：几分钟后，北极熊回到了我们的营地。第二段首句译文：就在这时，直升机到了。1.读懂两段首句第一段框架：“我”和Elli想尽办法驱赶北极熊。第二段框架：“我”和Elli最终被直升机救起并再次拍照。Step2细读首句，构思框架第一段首句后的衔接句：Roaringevenmoreangrilythistime,hesmashedhispawscrazilyagainstthewirefence,tryingtostabuswithhissharpclaws.2.写好三个衔接句第一段尾句（须与第二段首句衔接）：Thebearviolentlydashedagainstthewoodenpostswhichwereevidentlyonthevergeofcollapsing!第二段首句后的衔接句：Thegustingwindfromthehoveringvehiclesweptawayourfearimmediately.Step2细读首句，构思框架第二段的尾句，即结尾句，可以是体现故事圆满的句子，也可以是故事给我们的启示的句子：Atthisonce-in-a-lifetimemoment,Ireachedintomybackpackandpulledoutthecamera,photographingthatimpressivescene.3.写好一个升华句Step3增加细节，开始写作第一段：熊的动作描写（这次他咆哮得更凶了，疯狂地用爪子撞铁丝栅栏，想用他锋利的爪子抓“我们”）→“我们”的情感和动作描写（Elli和“我”惊慌失措，扯着嗓子尖叫，向他挥舞着拳头，试图吓跑他）→“我们”的情感描写（因徒劳无功而感到失望）→熊的动作描写（熊猛烈地撞向木桩，木桩显然快要倒了）。第二段：“我们”的情感描写（从悬停的飞机出来的阵阵大风立刻驱散了“我们”的恐惧）→飞行员的动作描写（从直升机上放下一根绳子把“我们”拉上来）→“我们”的情感和动作描写（“我们”既兴奋又松了一口气，抓住绳子，安全到达直升机上）→“我”的情感动作描写（当“我”从高处看着这只粗壮的熊时，“我”惊讶地发现这个固执的家伙已经打破了围栏，朝“我们”的营地走去，要吃诱人的食物）→“我”的动作描写（在这个千载难逢的时刻，“我”拿出相机，拍下了这一幕）。Step4检查优化，整洁誊写Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Roaringevenmoreangrilythistime,hesmashedhispawscrazilyagainstthewirefence,tryingtostabuswithhissharpclaws.Panickedaswewere,ElliandIscreamedatthetopofourlungs,andwavedourfistsathiminanattempttoscarehimaway.Toourdisappointment,alltheseeffortswereinvain.Thebearviolentlydashedagainstthewoodenpostswhichwereevidentlyonthevergeofcollapsing!Step4检查优化，整洁誊写Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Thegustingwindfromthehoveringvehiclesweptawayourfearimmediately.Outofthehelicopterdescendedaropetopullusup.Thrilledyetrelieved,wegrabbedtheropeandeventuallylandedonthehelicoptersafeandsound.While