新教材适用2024版高考英语二轮总复习第4部分写作技能升华篇专题2读后续写第2讲微观把握突破读后续写技法5精细打磨续写语言

第四部分专题二第2讲技法五(2023·河北省石家庄市高考一模)Istillrememberthedaywhenwedecoratedthehouse,IwastenanditwastwoweeksbeforeChristmas.Iwaslookingforwardtomypresents.SinceI'mtheyoungestinthefamily,allofthefamilymemberswouldgivemeagiftonewayoranother.Sometimesitwasacookieorahugbutitwasalwaysthere.Iwastheonlycenterofattentionanditwasfeelinggood.MyunclesusuallywouldaskmewhatIwantedbeforeChristmasandthatyearIknewwhatIwanted.ItwasthespaceshipIsawintheads.Iwasdreamingofopeningabiggiftbox,anditwasthere.ButthatyearitcameinawaythatIwasn'texpecting.ItwastwoweeksbeforeChristmas.Justtwoweeks.Shecouldn'twait.Mydearmothertoldmyfatherthatitwastime,andthenwewenttothehospital.Afteranhour,theytoldmethatIhadasisternow.ButIdidn'twantasister.Iwantedaspaceship.Thenextfewdayswentsofast.Noonewascaringaboutme.EveryonewastalkingaboutherandIknewthatmylifeisnevergoingtobethesameeveragain.Iwasn'treadytogrowup,tobeabigbrother.Butitjusthappenedinaninstant.OnthedaybeforeChristmas,everyonewasinourhome,talkingonlyaboutmynewbornsister.Myfamilywasbecominghers.Evenmyunclesdidn'taskmeanythingaboutthegift.ShestoleeverythingI'deverhad,mylifeandmypresents.Thinkingaboutthis,Icriedtosleep.Ihadanightmare(噩梦)andwokeupatthemiddleofthenight.Shadowswereallaroundme,andIwasdefenselessandsoweak.Iranintomyparents'bedroombutcouldn'twakeupmypoorparentswhowerejusttoowornout.Iwasstandingneartheirbed,tryingnottocrywhenIsawher.Shewasawakeandlookingatmewithherbigeyesinhersmallbed.注意：1．续写词数应为150左右；2．请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。Paragraph1：Suddenlyalongshadowcameintothebedroomandshestartedcrying.Paragraph2：Afterhavingcomfortedher,somethingslowlychangedinsideme.【范文】Paragraph1：Suddenlyalongshadowcameintothebedroomandshestartedcrying.Panicatfirst,Ithenrealizedthatitwasjustacarpassingby.Butshefeltuneasy,hermouthwideopening,armswaving,andlegskicking.Ithoughtshemightbescaredtoo,soIheldoutmyhandtoholdhers,pattingheronthebackwiththeother.Ievenmovedabitclosertoherlittlebed,whisperingmyfavoritesongtoherears,justasmymumdidwhenIgotscared.Surprisingly,sheseemedtounderstandmeandstoppedcrying.Lookingintoherbigeyes,Ibreathedasighofrelief.Paragraph2：Afterhavingcomfortedher,somethingslowlychangedinsideme.Thesenseoflonelinesswasreplacedbytheresponsibilityofbeinganelderbrother.Eventhoughherarrivaltookoverthecenterofthewholefamilyinitially,shestartedtobecomethecenterofmyattentiontoo.Withhercuteroundfaceandsparklingeyes,shealsowonmyloveandcareforher.Ilookedaroundandfoundmyparents,awake,smilingatme.Withashadowofahappyfamilycastonthewindow,IfeltmylittlesisterwasthebestgiftI'devergot.※小贴士：读后续写失分点1．时间不够用，无法认真、顺利完成“理解—构思—表达”全过程。2．违背逻辑常识，情节和细节的想象要合理，符合生活常识的同时做到逻辑性强。3．用过多的对话，在续写中使用对话，虽然能够丰富内容和语言、增强语篇的连贯性，但是过多使用对话会显得累赘，冲淡需要突出的主要情节。4．词数不