2024届高考英语读后续写The lost gold piece课件

ContinuationWritingTheLostGoldPieceThekeyelements(要素)ofastoryAstoryalwaysinvolvescharacters’ongoingactionsandfeelingsindifferentsettings.Astory1.Characters(who)2.Actions(what)3.Feelings(how+why)4.Settings(When+Where)MainideaElementsMainideawhowhathowwhywhenwhereClinton,Barton,otherveteransClintonshowedagoldcoin,butitwasmissing.EveryoneagreedtobesearchedexceptBarton.tooproud,self-important,angryafterthe1stWorldWaratareunionpartyMainideaAfterthe1stWorldWar,Bartonwaswoundedandpenniless,buthewastooproudtoaccepthelp.Atareunionparty,Clinton,aself-importantman,showedagoldcoinandthegoldcoinwassoonmissing.EveryoneagreedtobesearchedexceptBarton.ClintonwasangryandBartonbecameadisgracedman.opening开端build-up发展problem/climax高潮solution解决ending结尾Afewyearslater,Clintonmadesomechangesinhishouse.________________________________________________________________________________________________________BartonlookedatClintonblankly(茫然地).________________________________________________________________________________________________________Actions:found/disvovered,hurriedto/rushedto,apologizedtoFeelings:guilty/regretful/confusedSettings:ahumblehouseActions:explained/hugged/heldhishandsFeelings:forgiving/relievedSettings:thetoughtime第五档：21分-25分1.

与所给短文融洽度高，与所提供各段落开头语衔接合理(Reasonableandlogical)；2.

内容丰富，情节合理，有细节描写(动作，情感，环境，对话等)(Actions+Feelings+Settings)；3.

所使用语法结构和词汇丰富，准确，可能有些许错误，但完全不影响意义表达(Goodvocabulary&variedstructures)；4.

巧妙地利用了前文的伏笔，使所续写短文精巧。(Correlatedwiththebeginning).高考评分标准Paragraph1Afewyearslater,Clintonmadesomechangesinhishouse.He

spottedthegoldcoin,buriedindirtunderthewoodfloorinthediningroom.ClintonimmediatelyrealizedthatBartonwasinnocent.HurryingtoBarton'shumblehome,hetoldhimoftheamazingdiscoveryofthecoinandapologizedtohimsincerelyforhavingsuspectedhim.“But,”heaskedwithconfusion,“youknewthatthegoldpiecewasnotonyourperson,butwhydidyourefusetobesearchedthen?”Paragraph2BartonlookedatClintonblankly(茫然地).Themanwhowasshabby,oldbeforehistime,saidbrokenly,“Becausemypocketswerefilledwithsomethingdisgraceful”.Embarrassed,hecontinued,“ForweeksmyfamilyandIhadn'thadenoughtoeat.Mypocketswerefulloffoodthatlhadtakenfromthetabletocarryhometomywifeandhungrychildren.WordsfailedClinton,

holdinghisfriend’shandsfirmly.Inthetoughestanddarkesttime,dignityandhonestymightbetheonlypossessionforthoselittlepeople.Tipsforagoodwriting1.写好两段首尾句;

(逻辑衔接好)2.“问题”与“解决”;

(结构